"Whence Gonneth Those Days?" ***********A Poem

"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 Views: 39
Sep 07, 2009 3:38 am "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 #

Manohar Bhatia This poem is my real experience when I was in my teens.Feedback and editing wanted by Jack,Diane and others.Thanks.


"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"............A Poem
When we were young,energetic,full of life,
On Sunday mornings,we were at Colaba,
At our granny's house,with uncles,aunts,nieces,
Stretching ourselves at the secluded beaches,
Swimming in the backbay waters,
Eating mangoes,basking in the sun,
Playing with shells,pebbles,gun,
Sometimes burying ourselves in the sand,
Remaining there for a long time,
With only our heads popping out for fun!

Noontime,there were afternoon siestas,
Dead tired after watching on telly some fiestas,
Now, when clock strikes 5.00 p.m.
We have hot cups of tea,
With spicy cutlets,crispy nuggets,
To pamper our villianous pallets.

By evenings,we get ready
To trot to Eros Theatre steady,
Screening Marx Bros,Laurel&Hardy,
Or slapstick comedy of Dean Martin & Jerry Lewis,
A laugh riot of our lives,
Till tear fall off our eyes!

At nightfalls,we had wooden cots,
Laid out under pipal trees,flower pots,
With the cool evening breeze blowing,
Hearing fairy tales from Granny at bedtime,
And falling asleep like a log!

Oh! Those were the days,
Waking up one fine morning,
From a soft bed into luminious sunlight,
Feeling warm,well fed,well loved,
well cared for a longing
peace,silence,stillness, bliss!
Will those days ever commeth?

____ The End_____




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Sep 07, 2009 8:25 am re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A Poem Saturday, September 5, 2009 #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
this delightful poem is sweet and rife with good memories, great description and feeling to it. I felt like I was there with you, basking in the joy of a wonderful childhood.

The only way those days will return is when you provide the same wondrous experiences for your children!

Blessed Be my friend,
Diane T. and furfamily


Only two suggestions on word use...perhaps you could title it "Whence Went Those Days?" as gonneth isn't a proper word and the word pallet is a wooden bed and many other things, but a palate is the word used to convey the sense of taste!

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Sep 08, 2009 12:09 am re: re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A Poem Saturday, September 5, 20 #

Manohar Bhatia Diane,
Thanks for your feedback;of course I feel delighted you liked the poem,because,as I explained earlier,it is real.Yes,the word 'pallets' is not what I meant;its an oversight,the word should be 'palate' and 'Gonneth'does not sound as good as 'went'
Cheers Diane for being good in your help.

Manohar Manohar.


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Sep 08, 2009 5:08 pm re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 #

Teresa Mahieu Ahhhh, so despriptive and such a vivid picture this painted. Well done!!

Happy Writing,
Teresa aka Tess



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Sep 10, 2009 2:49 am re: re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 200 #

Manohar Bhatia Dear Theresa,

Thanks sweet madam for reading the poem and enjoying it;I am happy for it.
Manohar Bhatia


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Sep 11, 2009 9:29 am re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 #

Sarah Rahman You have expressed your story impressively in a poetic way.

Keep it up!

And yes, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

Take care and be blessed.


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Sep 12, 2009 8:04 am re: re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 200 #

Manohar Bhatia Dear Sarah,
Thanks for reading the poem and enjoining it;it makes me happy.

Manohar Bhatia


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