"Tango & Tonga"................A Poem

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Oct 30, 2009 9:02 am "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,

This poem was inspired from an indian classic film shot in 1960 named: "Naya Daur"It had a living legendary star Dilip Kumar and a vivacious beautiful actress,Vijayantimala as the lead stars.One day,both of them go to a temple to pray in a Tonga(A single horse carriage),owned by the hero of the film.Then,whilst returning,a beautiful Hindi song is picturized on the two in this Tonga.At this point, the poem hit me and I immediately wrote it down.
When Dilip Kumar asks his lady love,what did she ask God,the actress breaks into this classic song......"Mang ke saat tumara,mene, mang liya sansar.........etc" i.e "If I have your support,I will have the world......etc"(Translated).Feedback wanted by Diane,Jack,others.

Tango And Tonga.........A Poem.

It takes two to Tango
Ultimately becoming one for bingo!
A beautiful dance taking poetic form
Where grace & style are the norm.

Tango was born in working city halls,
by passionate dancers,Carlos Gardel
in alive cities of Buenos Aires,Montivideo
in South American city of Argentina.

Tango can accelerate your well-being
Bringing elixir of life to a new high
of excitement,health,joy,happiness,
for you to experience again and again.

Dance steps are hectic,fast,furious
leaving the onlookers in a rush
of emotions,romantic passions,faster heart-beats
in an excitment movements of their bodies.

Tango is a single dance form
where two dancers move to horn,
Man and Woman,merging,fusing,melting
into a Tonga-driven single horse-carriage!

---- The End--------

Manohar Bhatia


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Nov 02, 2009 8:14 am re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
your poem creates image of movement and spice, just like the dance you're writing about.
Thanks for sharing your inspirations with us,
Diane

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com


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Nov 02, 2009 12:51 pm re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Jack Huber Thanks for the prologue, it helped interpret your poem. I ditto what Diane says, it faintly echos the movement of the dance your are describing.

Jack


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Nov 02, 2009 11:08 pm re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Di,Jack,
To be frank with you,I was pretty nervous,when I conceived this sort of poem.There was no reaction from either of you and I thought I had written something weird sort of a poem.My senses came back to me when I read your comments;thank God for small mercies and thanks to both of you too!
As an addentum,I can assure you that I always write from my heart,but sometimes................?

Manohar Bhatia


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Nov 03, 2009 8:23 am re: "Tango And Tonga"........ a response about - responses! ;> #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
being on a worldwide network means that people will respond as well as time allows, it is certainly no reflection of your art!

If that were so, I'd have to go around with my head hung low all the time, unfortunately (as a network leader) my posts are the ones most often ignored, and if I took it personally I'd be in a blue funk all the time!

Take heart, sometimes life throws a lot at the thread leaders and we can't always get back to you right away, it doesn't mean we think any less of your poetry, it simply means that life can be extremely busy at times.

I appreciate all you do for the network, have faith in yourself and know we are doing the best we can in the time we have,

Big Smiles and Hugs,
Diane T. and furfamily

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com


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Nov 03, 2009 9:30 am re: re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Jack Huber I'll add to what Diane said...

Even if I didn't like it (which is not the case), I would have hoped that it would not affect you so negatively.

When I first started writing poetry in earnest a little over two years ago, I experimented with all kinds of meter and rhyming schemes, some of which was awful. I can hardly stand to look at some of my oldest work. But I posted them in poetry forums so that I could get better, sometimes getting some horrendous feedback in the process, and I did get better. I set about learning classic forms and meter and learned the "rules" so that I knew how to break them wisely. And I wrote a LOT, about 250 poems since then. I'm still experimenting and learning new forms, and still writing poems that aren't always the greatest pieces. They don't have to be.

I've said this before- you are the world's foremost authority on what you like. If you like something you wrote, you like it and that's that.

Hope this helps. Keep writing!

Jack


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Nov 03, 2009 11:04 am re: re: re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Ayub Bangroo
ManoharG,
Old hindi songs are evergreen.So many mixtures have come in between which had a timely attraction and then disappeared.Your effort to translate the one which struck you deep is genuine and indeed right from the heart.
of course some complimentary words from the ones around does help.This is just human.
Regards
Ayub


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Nov 03, 2009 10:58 pm re: re: "Tango And Tonga"........ a response about - responses! ;> #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Di,Jack,Ayoob,
Every human being is an emotional fool(pun!)and I am one of the many.Praise,if it is genuine,lifts a person to a new high;ridicule befalls him to a new low!
But,ladies & gentlemen,frankly,people are afraid,hesitant,for praise;whilst for critisism,they come with all their weapons.
What could be the reasons?...........I don't know.

Manohar Bhatia


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Nov 04, 2009 5:19 pm re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

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Nov 11, 2009 7:13 am re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I was impressed by your words::::::::"it faintly echoes the movement of the dance you are describing...."
Yes Jack,its true,because this poem..."Tango" and the single horse carraige.."Tonga" have a connection in my poem,althouggh this connection has come unconciously.Just as the horse in the song is making musical sound of its hooves....tuk,tuk,tuk,tuk..... and to me has a dance form,so also in the "Tango" dance,Man & Woman make love,music,movement and so definitely,this inspired poem has come from this prologue.Regards,

Manohar Bhatia


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