Monday Poem_________ [" Of What Use?"]
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Jul 26, 2010 1:47 am
Monday Poem_________ [" Of What Use?"]
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,This poem came to me,when reading an article on Numbers.From this one idea,other similar ideas,situations,problems also came along and I thought why not make it into a sort of poem.Members are free to critique for style,language,logic and improvement______________["Of What Use"]["Of what use is this Number Onewhen One is a lonely numberwithout any friends, associates, family?Of what use is this Black & Whitewhen there is reality in greya reality touching heart,mind,body,soul?Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?of what use is the scientist promising hopewhen a poet shows you a way out of hopelessnessthat can open your mind to total awareness?Of what use are these world of colorswhen painter expertly mixes B & W with greycreating amazing canvas of divine beauty & art?Of what use is this confession before a priestwhen sinner can redeem his life reading biblewhere our Lord God has put his signature?Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?Of what use is this live-in relationshipswhen joys of parenthood are calling usfor traditional rituals,ceremonies,parties,marriages?Of what use are these winnings of a roulettewhen there is sure winner in every merry-go-roundfor an honest,sustained effort,labor,sweat?Of what use are these best selling writerswhen a single Shakespeare has sold the worldin meaningful poems,astounding plays,fascinating lyrics?]_____ The End ______copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.
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Jul 26, 2010 4:39 am
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Khurshid Alam
Hi Manohar,You're right. But should not there be change? As you seem to reject somethings such as live-in relationship etc. We must accpet changes even though if they seem not so good from our pespective and we must let live those who prefer a way of life.
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Jul 26, 2010 6:18 am
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Maya Mahant
Fascinating Manohar, sometime or the other we have had these thoughts. However, would there be progress, if we all sat down and said 'Of What Use?' Though in context of war, I wholeheartedly endorse what you say.We live 'on' hope, if we only thought about the futility of life, we would wither up and die.Maya
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Jul 26, 2010 9:41 am
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Jack Huber
Monohar, you didn't say you were answering any questions, just describing a feeling most of us have from time to time. In this light, you have done well.Jack
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Jul 26, 2010 10:01 am
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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,I don't see the world as black and white, I see the shades of grey, just as you do. I have come to accept change and variety as a part of life, and so have many questions that remain unanswered.Three small notes on word usage:I believe in the line "Of what use is this wordly togetherness" you meant to use "worldly","permanant" should be spelled "permanent",and "reconcilliation" should be "reconciliation".My favorite stanza is:Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Note to members, please note that Manohar asked for input or I wouldn't have brought up the notes on word usage!Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jul 26, 2010 12:42 pm
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Diane Stephenson
Manohar:Well-done. I agree to a point with those who think change is necessary, but there are some principles that must remain or society disintegrates. I agree with you that life is not just black and white as many people try to simplify it, but there are many shades of grey that make up our lives. I do believe, however, that without all the colors of the rainbow, life would be rather dull. Black is simply the absence of light and white the absence of color and I like to think of my life as a combination of both with color. An artist may be able to create a fascinating canvas with the simplicity of black and white, but just think of a world full of black and white flowers, for instance. I like the way you have asked the questions and proffered a reason for not accepting the absolutes some put forth. It is a poem of musing on life's issues and causes the reader to think for him/herself rather than accept without question what society tries to dictate, and gives food for thought to come up with an answer to your questions. Diane
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Jul 27, 2010 3:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,When William Shakespare wrote_____"What is this life, full of care,we have no time to stand and stare,no time to stand beneath the trees,etc..............."he did not have a rule for everyone to follow.Well,how should I put my thoughts? Let me try......I will put it this way............. Number One is the dream of everyone, but when one gets there, he/she still feels 'something' is missing and it is this 'missing' aspect that I want to convey through this poem.People get bored with all good things of life and feel unhappy,thinking of the next step to follow.I have written this poem from that particular angle.As Jack says, a poet has a veto license to take the meaning to a different level....I have done this in this poem,but limited by reason.To sum up,I will conclude that in every triplicate,that is composed,I have my own rason,which I want the character to experience himself/herself.Jack:::::::I endorse that you have understood my poem.Khurshid:::When one is living in a society, one has to follow certain rules/traditions and these are called 'truths'. However,I agree with you that for people wanting to live their own way of life.Diane.T::::Thank you and thank again for spelling corrections....[wordly],[permanent],[reconcilliation]stand corrected.Diane.S.:::I agree that black & white flowers will not look good,but here in the poem I want to convey also about the underdog things.Many people have forgotten to see beauty elswhere.e.g. in B & W.You are nearer to Jack's & my philosophy and thanks for your valuable comments.Maya:::::::When I gave the title to the poem::["Of What Use"],I had a mellow type of reasoning and there is nothing more to it than this.Thanks Maya for your comments.Manohar Bhatia
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Aug 01, 2010 11:43 am
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Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,As is usual with you this poem too is a debating piece asking for taxing one`s mind to find the answer.These questions have relevance,because these help us to understand the life in totality.They are like speed breakers keeping us cautiously going.Ayub
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Aug 02, 2010 9:39 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Ayub,Thanks for understanding my poem.When I ask a question, that question is not mine only, but for everyone to ponder over and seek an answer.Manohar Bhatia
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Aug 02, 2010 1:37 pm
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Pushpa Moorjani
Nice poem Manohar and the comments are also enlighteningGreat pals here…“Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?”I think the repetition of the word ‘aloneness' is not necessaryand may also I addOf what use is the poetry if it doesn’t stir the soulThe disturbing thoughts, while peeled off layer by layerFind newer meanings when it is shared:)
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Aug 03, 2010 9:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Pushpa,Thanks for your comments.Regarding the word,'aloneness',I think we both are right.This word can be deleted and if you read again, you might feel it is laying emphasis of what beauty lies in aloneness.I may add here, that your last stanza is very impressive for me to read.Thanks again.Manohar Bhatia
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Wednesday, August 4, 2010
Tuesday, June 1, 2010
Monday Poem:::::::::::::: "Change"
am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
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All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
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May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
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All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
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May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Tuesday, May 4, 2010
Monday Poem::::: "I P L Confetti"
"I P L Confetti."::::::::::::: A Poem.
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" Views: 38
Apr 26, 2010 8:20 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia "IPL Confetti"
IPL is a cricket game
for the common spectator
controlled by uncommon interests.
A $4.00 billion extravaganza
is a gentleman's game
where kickbacks, betting is the name.
IPL has an emotional quotient
where crowds cry,laugh,clap,
in sadness,happiness,victory.
IPL has a happiness factor
where corporate czars are pumping $
for players,officials,go-getters,others.
IPL has a sadness factor
for those where a last ball
turns victory into a defeat.
IPL has a glamour factor
for its doors open stunningly
with cheer girls,bollywood shows,
ending with night-sky fire-works display.
Now, there is real danger to IPL
mistrusts,allegations,skull-duggery
poses a challenge to this noble game
Because,all the horses,
all the King's men cannot put
magnificient IPL on its thrown again!
--The End--
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Apr 26, 2010 8:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Tegarden Dear Manohar,
thank you for informing us of the fate of this "game of kings", I hope it works out, for the sake of its fans.
In the last stanza, I think you meant "throne" (the seat of kings) not "thrown" (to pitch a ball).
Respectfully,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Apr 26, 2010 8:52 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Di,
Thanks for your valuable comments.In the last stanza, there is typo error...it is "throne"(the seat of Kings).
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 26, 2010 9:19 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Your poem is so topical, all newspapers, television channels, headlining that and just that. With its scandal, puts a Bollywood movie in a shadow.
I would say,
Lalit Modi sat on a IPL Wall
Lalit Modi had a great fall
All Sharad Pawar's machinations
Couldn't put Lalit together again
Good one Manohar
Maya
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Apr 26, 2010 11:31 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Since I don't know anything about cricket I cannot understand the implications but can nonetheless enjoy your poem.
Diane
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Apr 26, 2010 11:36 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
This IPL has brought shame to this game of cricket.Right from the start it has looked something other than cricket.How shamelessly they befool the world.
Cricket has suffered many jolts in the recent past and this IPL has been the latest insult.
Ayub
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Apr 27, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Teresa Mahieu This did bring the nursery rhyme of Humpty Dumpty to mind. Not understanding the game or ramifications I still enjoy your poem greatly.
Tess
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Apr 28, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Teresa,
Yes, I had the Humpty/Dumpty duo in my mind for the last stanza.Thanks maam for reading and enjoying the poem.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" Views: 38
Apr 26, 2010 8:20 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia "IPL Confetti"
IPL is a cricket game
for the common spectator
controlled by uncommon interests.
A $4.00 billion extravaganza
is a gentleman's game
where kickbacks, betting is the name.
IPL has an emotional quotient
where crowds cry,laugh,clap,
in sadness,happiness,victory.
IPL has a happiness factor
where corporate czars are pumping $
for players,officials,go-getters,others.
IPL has a sadness factor
for those where a last ball
turns victory into a defeat.
IPL has a glamour factor
for its doors open stunningly
with cheer girls,bollywood shows,
ending with night-sky fire-works display.
Now, there is real danger to IPL
mistrusts,allegations,skull-duggery
poses a challenge to this noble game
Because,all the horses,
all the King's men cannot put
magnificient IPL on its thrown again!
--The End--
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All rights reserved.
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Apr 26, 2010 8:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Tegarden Dear Manohar,
thank you for informing us of the fate of this "game of kings", I hope it works out, for the sake of its fans.
In the last stanza, I think you meant "throne" (the seat of kings) not "thrown" (to pitch a ball).
Respectfully,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Apr 26, 2010 8:52 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Di,
Thanks for your valuable comments.In the last stanza, there is typo error...it is "throne"(the seat of Kings).
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 26, 2010 9:19 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Your poem is so topical, all newspapers, television channels, headlining that and just that. With its scandal, puts a Bollywood movie in a shadow.
I would say,
Lalit Modi sat on a IPL Wall
Lalit Modi had a great fall
All Sharad Pawar's machinations
Couldn't put Lalit together again
Good one Manohar
Maya
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Apr 26, 2010 11:31 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Since I don't know anything about cricket I cannot understand the implications but can nonetheless enjoy your poem.
Diane
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Apr 26, 2010 11:36 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
This IPL has brought shame to this game of cricket.Right from the start it has looked something other than cricket.How shamelessly they befool the world.
Cricket has suffered many jolts in the recent past and this IPL has been the latest insult.
Ayub
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Apr 27, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Teresa Mahieu This did bring the nursery rhyme of Humpty Dumpty to mind. Not understanding the game or ramifications I still enjoy your poem greatly.
Tess
Private Reply to Teresa Mahieu
Apr 28, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Teresa,
Yes, I had the Humpty/Dumpty duo in my mind for the last stanza.Thanks maam for reading and enjoying the poem.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: __________ "Change"________
__________"Change"________
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May 03, 2010 6:35 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" Views: 20
May 03, 2010 6:35 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
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May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Tuesday, April 20, 2010
Monday Poem::::::: "What Is This Life.............?"
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Apr 19, 2010 3:24 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia What is this life full of trouble
all the time for a rumble
but no time for a quiet grumble?
What is this life full of tension
all the time for an apprehension
but no time for an introspection?
What is this life full of discussion
all the time for a confrontation
but no time for an innovation?
What is life full of cocophony
all the time for blasphemy
but no time for hegemony?
What is life full of sadness
all the time for total madness
but no time for little goodness?
What is life full of doomsday
all the time for a death-day
but no time for an eventful day?
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
-----The End----
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Apr 19, 2010 9:03 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
good questions! Who knows why we become bitter and loose our playfulness.....sometimes life can just wear you down.
To a brighter day,
Diane
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Apr 19, 2010 9:30 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Jack Huber Manohar,
You are fulfilling your job as a poet in asking these poignant questions. Well done. I look forward to your future poem that tries to answer them.
Jack
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Apr 19, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
you have got a peculiar style of writing poetry.
This poem is in the nature of a debate putting some valid questions.It takes a whole life to answer such questions.i enjoyed the following lines especially:-
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
Ayub
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Apr 19, 2010 1:23 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have asked some very poignant questions that most people don't even think about let alone ask themselves. Perhaps if they did, your questions would not have to be asked? Your poem is very thought-provoking.
Diane
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Apr 20, 2010 12:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
I concur with Ayub, you have a very distinctive style which has become your signature. Very thought provoking questions you have asked, I wish we had the right answers!
Maya
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Apr 20, 2010 1:51 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Di::::I am an issue-based person and my mind always ticks on how to bring harmony in the world.Thanks for reading.
Jack::Yes,definitely I will try for some answers in my future poems.
Ayub::Yes,I do have my own style of writing poetry.Good that you enjoyed the last triplet.
Diane:Its very nice to read your response on the poem.
Maya::Your kind words are wholly appreciated.
Manohar Bhatia
Apr 19, 2010 3:24 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia What is this life full of trouble
all the time for a rumble
but no time for a quiet grumble?
What is this life full of tension
all the time for an apprehension
but no time for an introspection?
What is this life full of discussion
all the time for a confrontation
but no time for an innovation?
What is life full of cocophony
all the time for blasphemy
but no time for hegemony?
What is life full of sadness
all the time for total madness
but no time for little goodness?
What is life full of doomsday
all the time for a death-day
but no time for an eventful day?
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
-----The End----
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Apr 19, 2010 9:03 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
good questions! Who knows why we become bitter and loose our playfulness.....sometimes life can just wear you down.
To a brighter day,
Diane
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Apr 19, 2010 9:30 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Jack Huber Manohar,
You are fulfilling your job as a poet in asking these poignant questions. Well done. I look forward to your future poem that tries to answer them.
Jack
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Apr 19, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
you have got a peculiar style of writing poetry.
This poem is in the nature of a debate putting some valid questions.It takes a whole life to answer such questions.i enjoyed the following lines especially:-
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
Ayub
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Apr 19, 2010 1:23 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have asked some very poignant questions that most people don't even think about let alone ask themselves. Perhaps if they did, your questions would not have to be asked? Your poem is very thought-provoking.
Diane
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Apr 20, 2010 12:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
I concur with Ayub, you have a very distinctive style which has become your signature. Very thought provoking questions you have asked, I wish we had the right answers!
Maya
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Apr 20, 2010 1:51 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Di::::I am an issue-based person and my mind always ticks on how to bring harmony in the world.Thanks for reading.
Jack::Yes,definitely I will try for some answers in my future poems.
Ayub::Yes,I do have my own style of writing poetry.Good that you enjoyed the last triplet.
Diane:Its very nice to read your response on the poem.
Maya::Your kind words are wholly appreciated.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::: "The City In Seige."
::::::::::: "The City In Siege." Views: 24
Apr 12, 2010 8:14 am Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
I just saw a photo of this city and this poem came to me::::::::::
"The City In Siege."
This city in the range
is as dangerous a place
as a badge on his shirt
the Sheriff is doing his duty
to wipe out out-laws from ghost town.
Mid-night calm is
as sinister as a dawn
all looking quiet
except the barks of dogs.
High noon on the near-by river
looks suicidal in a summer
for youngsters wanting to swim
invited by the river grim.
A spring evening
looks full of promise
honey-bees collect pollens
buzzing to ferilize in stems.
In the bar after office-hours
the suspence is scary
No soul in sight
only a bartender for a cigarette
to light for a brave soul.
The dusty road
is nostalgic for me
where me and my beloved
were sick with passionate love.
Dons in this fearsome city
are happy-go-lucky
as a child of innocense
giving an endearing smile.
Alas! The Sheriff looks helpless!
--The End--
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Apr 12, 2010 8:41 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
now that you know how to post a picture, maybe you can let us see the accompanying image? Your words tell of us a dusty and desperate little place, I'm imagining somewhere in the US' Old West.
Many a cowboy movie was filmed in such a town,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Apr 12, 2010 3:29 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Jack Huber Manohar, you are full of similes and metaphors today... An interesting look at a wild west town- thanks for sharing it.
Jack
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Apr 13, 2010 5:23 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Di & Jack,
Actually,lots of old cowboys movies had the same setting of an old town in the mid-fifties,where constant raidng by the out-laws was the order of the day.The gun battle between out-laws and the Sheriff was an every day affair.I also remember of a beautiful horse-carriage driven by a faithful bearded old man,important passengers being a stunningly pretty rich lady and his escort and maybe laoded with a trunk of gold!
This one is from the movie::::"Gun Fight At The O.K. Corral" ...I think It was Burt Lancaster and......other famous actor..I think Clint Eastwood.
I have a photo and I try to post it.Thanks for your comments on my silly poem.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 13, 2010 8:19 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
A very imaginative poem,you have captured many images and painted them skilfully.
Ayub
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Apr 13, 2010 11:08 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have created a picturesque word painting describing the place and the people. Good job!
Diane
Apr 12, 2010 8:14 am Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
I just saw a photo of this city and this poem came to me::::::::::
"The City In Siege."
This city in the range
is as dangerous a place
as a badge on his shirt
the Sheriff is doing his duty
to wipe out out-laws from ghost town.
Mid-night calm is
as sinister as a dawn
all looking quiet
except the barks of dogs.
High noon on the near-by river
looks suicidal in a summer
for youngsters wanting to swim
invited by the river grim.
A spring evening
looks full of promise
honey-bees collect pollens
buzzing to ferilize in stems.
In the bar after office-hours
the suspence is scary
No soul in sight
only a bartender for a cigarette
to light for a brave soul.
The dusty road
is nostalgic for me
where me and my beloved
were sick with passionate love.
Dons in this fearsome city
are happy-go-lucky
as a child of innocense
giving an endearing smile.
Alas! The Sheriff looks helpless!
--The End--
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All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 12, 2010 8:41 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
now that you know how to post a picture, maybe you can let us see the accompanying image? Your words tell of us a dusty and desperate little place, I'm imagining somewhere in the US' Old West.
Many a cowboy movie was filmed in such a town,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Apr 12, 2010 3:29 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Jack Huber Manohar, you are full of similes and metaphors today... An interesting look at a wild west town- thanks for sharing it.
Jack
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Apr 13, 2010 5:23 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Di & Jack,
Actually,lots of old cowboys movies had the same setting of an old town in the mid-fifties,where constant raidng by the out-laws was the order of the day.The gun battle between out-laws and the Sheriff was an every day affair.I also remember of a beautiful horse-carriage driven by a faithful bearded old man,important passengers being a stunningly pretty rich lady and his escort and maybe laoded with a trunk of gold!
This one is from the movie::::"Gun Fight At The O.K. Corral" ...I think It was Burt Lancaster and......other famous actor..I think Clint Eastwood.
I have a photo and I try to post it.Thanks for your comments on my silly poem.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 13, 2010 8:19 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
A very imaginative poem,you have captured many images and painted them skilfully.
Ayub
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Apr 13, 2010 11:08 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have created a picturesque word painting describing the place and the people. Good job!
Diane
Monday, April 5, 2010
Monday Poem::::::::"Why Switch Off Lights?"
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Mar 29, 2010 6:57 am Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
Since it was an Earth Hour on 26th March,2010,requesting everyone to switch off power from 7.30p.m to 8.30p.m.I thought I will try out a poem::::::::::::::
"Why Switch Off Lights?"
Why switch off lights today?
beacause greed for 'power'is growing
to cater to man's unsatiable thirst
for progress in building new apartments
but succeeding in only in creating unbalanced society
where poor,downtrodden,suffer to eat food
left by noveau rich,celebs,others
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights lights to-day?
So that all gambling dens close
that may lead to rape,murder,extortion,
where the honest get caught
in cross-fire between 'A'& 'B' company
to be accidently bumped off in this encounter
for their kith & kin to mourns their deaths
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that drinking bars have a dry day
alerting regular drinkers to face a test
and compulsive drinkers a forced rest
Also,lady tipplers a moment to ponder
to set their houses & children in order
and release them from this deadly habit
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that we save enough power
for the have nots to see a ray of light
in their dwellings not seen for decades
and make them to feel humans too
to seek their trust,blessings,smiles,
which they have never experienced before.
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that peace prevails in one hour
for everyone to enjoy some unforgetful moments
of hearing birds humming in the trees,
honey-bees merrily buzzing amongst flowers,
the pleasant sound of cool wind whistling,
allowing tiny waves splash delecately on beach front,
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
--The End--
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Mar 29, 2010 9:08 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
your poem tells us how we have become a society that wastes more than we need, and how the "haves" take so much away from the "have nots" until we are blind to our over consumption. A good moral tale.
Thank you for making us stop and think about how we live,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Mar 29, 2010 11:17 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manoha,
of couse, we should switch off lights to remind ourselves that we have many human responsibilities as emphatically counted by you.Global warming is a horror but many other things keep the globe boiling.
Ayub
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Mar 29, 2010 12:45 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar, your poem is an apt reminder, a timely wake up call. Nature had enough for everyones needs but not their greed.
Maya
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Mar 29, 2010 5:12 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have aptly brought out a strong message that people everywhere need to not only hear but also heed.
Diane
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Mar 30, 2010 5:40 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Susan Graves Manohar
Thanks you just gave me an idea for this Thursdays Green Grove Post
Susan
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Mar 31, 2010 6:12 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di,Ayub,Maya,Diane & Susan::::::::::::::Thank you to each of you for your comments,which I always treasure.
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 29, 2010 6:57 am Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
Since it was an Earth Hour on 26th March,2010,requesting everyone to switch off power from 7.30p.m to 8.30p.m.I thought I will try out a poem::::::::::::::
"Why Switch Off Lights?"
Why switch off lights today?
beacause greed for 'power'is growing
to cater to man's unsatiable thirst
for progress in building new apartments
but succeeding in only in creating unbalanced society
where poor,downtrodden,suffer to eat food
left by noveau rich,celebs,others
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights lights to-day?
So that all gambling dens close
that may lead to rape,murder,extortion,
where the honest get caught
in cross-fire between 'A'& 'B' company
to be accidently bumped off in this encounter
for their kith & kin to mourns their deaths
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that drinking bars have a dry day
alerting regular drinkers to face a test
and compulsive drinkers a forced rest
Also,lady tipplers a moment to ponder
to set their houses & children in order
and release them from this deadly habit
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that we save enough power
for the have nots to see a ray of light
in their dwellings not seen for decades
and make them to feel humans too
to seek their trust,blessings,smiles,
which they have never experienced before.
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that peace prevails in one hour
for everyone to enjoy some unforgetful moments
of hearing birds humming in the trees,
honey-bees merrily buzzing amongst flowers,
the pleasant sound of cool wind whistling,
allowing tiny waves splash delecately on beach front,
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
--The End--
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Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 29, 2010 9:08 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
your poem tells us how we have become a society that wastes more than we need, and how the "haves" take so much away from the "have nots" until we are blind to our over consumption. A good moral tale.
Thank you for making us stop and think about how we live,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Mar 29, 2010 11:17 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manoha,
of couse, we should switch off lights to remind ourselves that we have many human responsibilities as emphatically counted by you.Global warming is a horror but many other things keep the globe boiling.
Ayub
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Mar 29, 2010 12:45 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar, your poem is an apt reminder, a timely wake up call. Nature had enough for everyones needs but not their greed.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Mar 29, 2010 5:12 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have aptly brought out a strong message that people everywhere need to not only hear but also heed.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Mar 30, 2010 5:40 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Susan Graves Manohar
Thanks you just gave me an idea for this Thursdays Green Grove Post
Susan
Private Reply to Susan Graves
Mar 31, 2010 6:12 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di,Ayub,Maya,Diane & Susan::::::::::::::Thank you to each of you for your comments,which I always treasure.
Manohar Bhatia
Friday, March 19, 2010
A short poem:::::::: "Its My Choice........."
Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." Views: 41
Mar 15, 2010 9:32 am Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
This is again a small poem,that struck to my mind on the one word:::; 'choice'
Here it goes::::
"Its My Choice......"
I like it bad,I like it good,
its my choice to think of food!
I like it high,I like it low
its my choice for the show!
I like it black,I like it white
its my choice to adjust my sight!
I like it left,I like it right
its my choice about my kite!
I like it forward,I like it backward
its me choice about my ward!
I like it fast,I like it slow
its my choice how I flow!
I like the silence,I like the noise
its my choice about the voice!
I like the bumpy,I like the dumpy
its my choice,if I become grumpy!
I like being lost,I like being found
its my choice of being dumbfound!
I like the drumstick,I like the drummer
its my choice if I play with a murmur!
Well Folks! I like it because I like it!
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Mar 15, 2010 11:31 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
your choice is always different,choice of words,choice of thought,choice of topic,all witty.It seems your prime choice to keep the readers in good humour.
Ayub
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Mar 15, 2010 12:04 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Maya Mahant Manohar, The wit is not to be missed. The couplets lend a rhythm, sort of a marching song. I think Ayub has summed it up correctly.... to keep us smiling and in good humour.
Maya
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Mar 15, 2010 10:32 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Unique! I agree with Ayub and Maya about your sense of humor. It's good to be upbeat and see the humorous side of life.
Diane
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Mar 16, 2010 10:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Jack Huber It's nice to play with words and phrases, isn't it? This one is cute, but you might experiment with adding a middle line to each of the couplets to add a little oomph to each thought. Since your couplet already rhymes, the added line would not have to.
In any case, I like it.
Jack
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Mar 17, 2010 7:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks for the hint;here is my revised poem::::::
"Its My Choice...."
I like it bad,I like it good
watch your protruding tummy
its my choice to think of food!
I like it high,I like it low
are you afraid of height?
its my choice for the show!
I like it black,I like it white
its day now,its night later
its my choice to adjust my sight!
I like it left,I like it right
to keep my talent right
its my choice about my kite!
I like it forward,I like it backward
to drive my vehicle in
its my choice about my ward!
I like it fast,I like it slow
to let my feet dance in abundance
its my choice how I flow!
I like the silence,I like the noise
to play my musical instrument
its my choice of the voice!
I like the bumpy,I like the dumpy
of the ride on my bike
its my choice,if I become grumpy!
I like being lost,I like being found
in the fair around the market-place
its my choice of being dumbfound!
I like the drumstick,I like the drummer
who always plays hard & loud music
its my choice,if I play with a murmur!
Well Folks!I like it,because I like it!
--The End--
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Mar 17, 2010 10:22 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Jack Huber I do like the triplets better. We'll have to see what others think, and how YOU feel about them...
Well done,
Jack
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Mar 17, 2010 3:53 pm re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Maya Mahant Manohar, it reads better, though I am foxed in certain places... however it can be put to artistic leeway.
Maya
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Mar 18, 2010 8:03 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks.....I do feel not so good about it...its my first attempt and done in a hurry.....will like to revamp this poem finally.Regards,
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 15, 2010 9:32 am Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
This is again a small poem,that struck to my mind on the one word:::; 'choice'
Here it goes::::
"Its My Choice......"
I like it bad,I like it good,
its my choice to think of food!
I like it high,I like it low
its my choice for the show!
I like it black,I like it white
its my choice to adjust my sight!
I like it left,I like it right
its my choice about my kite!
I like it forward,I like it backward
its me choice about my ward!
I like it fast,I like it slow
its my choice how I flow!
I like the silence,I like the noise
its my choice about the voice!
I like the bumpy,I like the dumpy
its my choice,if I become grumpy!
I like being lost,I like being found
its my choice of being dumbfound!
I like the drumstick,I like the drummer
its my choice if I play with a murmur!
Well Folks! I like it because I like it!
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Mar 15, 2010 11:31 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
your choice is always different,choice of words,choice of thought,choice of topic,all witty.It seems your prime choice to keep the readers in good humour.
Ayub
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Mar 15, 2010 12:04 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Maya Mahant Manohar, The wit is not to be missed. The couplets lend a rhythm, sort of a marching song. I think Ayub has summed it up correctly.... to keep us smiling and in good humour.
Maya
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Mar 15, 2010 10:32 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Unique! I agree with Ayub and Maya about your sense of humor. It's good to be upbeat and see the humorous side of life.
Diane
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Mar 16, 2010 10:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Jack Huber It's nice to play with words and phrases, isn't it? This one is cute, but you might experiment with adding a middle line to each of the couplets to add a little oomph to each thought. Since your couplet already rhymes, the added line would not have to.
In any case, I like it.
Jack
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Mar 17, 2010 7:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks for the hint;here is my revised poem::::::
"Its My Choice...."
I like it bad,I like it good
watch your protruding tummy
its my choice to think of food!
I like it high,I like it low
are you afraid of height?
its my choice for the show!
I like it black,I like it white
its day now,its night later
its my choice to adjust my sight!
I like it left,I like it right
to keep my talent right
its my choice about my kite!
I like it forward,I like it backward
to drive my vehicle in
its my choice about my ward!
I like it fast,I like it slow
to let my feet dance in abundance
its my choice how I flow!
I like the silence,I like the noise
to play my musical instrument
its my choice of the voice!
I like the bumpy,I like the dumpy
of the ride on my bike
its my choice,if I become grumpy!
I like being lost,I like being found
in the fair around the market-place
its my choice of being dumbfound!
I like the drumstick,I like the drummer
who always plays hard & loud music
its my choice,if I play with a murmur!
Well Folks!I like it,because I like it!
--The End--
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Mar 17, 2010 10:22 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Jack Huber I do like the triplets better. We'll have to see what others think, and how YOU feel about them...
Well done,
Jack
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Mar 17, 2010 3:53 pm re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Maya Mahant Manohar, it reads better, though I am foxed in certain places... however it can be put to artistic leeway.
Maya
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Mar 18, 2010 8:03 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks.....I do feel not so good about it...its my first attempt and done in a hurry.....will like to revamp this poem finally.Regards,
Manohar Bhatia
Sunday, March 14, 2010
Monday Poem:::::::::::::: " I Went to..................."
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Mar 08, 2010 12:37 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
As I have mentioned before,the poems I write are inspired from observations,travels,reading newspapers,autobiographies,TV etc....The current is inspired from reading an autobiography of a living legend,who likes to travel a lot in his life.It occured to me that what If I can also travel to various places and come up with something amusing to relate......well,this is all fiction.
Monday Poem::::::: "I Went to..........."
I went to the kitchen to cook my meal
But came back with a broken tin seal
Of what use is this broken tin seal
when I cannot make a deal!
I went to college to do my study
but came back only with lost buddy
of what use is this lost buddy
when I cannot make him study!
I went to cricket field fearing for blob
but came back scoring a century
of what use is this century
when my team lost match of century!
I went to a jungle to shoot a chimera
but came back only with broken camera
Now,of what use is this broken camera
when I didn't click photo of chimera!
I went to climb the Great Wall Of China
but came back with diagnosied hernia
what use is this hernia to me
when my hospitalized expenses are everone to see!
I went to holiday for a complete rest
but came for a real test
now,what can I test when piles of files
are staring me on my desk!
I went for a stroll to Picadally Circus
but landed in nearby real circus
I saw tigers,elephant,clowns,
mimicking many with thier funny frowns!
I went for a ride in a roller-coaster
but came back with my body a roster
I tried all medicines to cure this roaster
but fell flat in the doctor's toaster!
I went to a friend's house for a chat
but came back wearing only my hat
now,what should I do with this hat
except to fling it on the mat!
I went to a party to have a gala time
but came back only with a broken dime
what to do with this broken dime
except to display as collector's shine!
I went to library to read some books
but came back only with its hooks
what use are these hooks to me
but to hang the shirts of thee!
I went to the beach for a good swim
only to come out with a face grim
Oh!,why the grimming face?
only to look in mirror for body charcoal case!
--The End--
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Mar 08, 2010 7:02 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
This poem is so quintessential Manohar! Always certain to bring a smile, the tongue in cheek humour is sure way to keep the reader amused.
Maya
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Mar 08, 2010 10:17 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Jack Huber You are fortunate to have a vivid imagination, Manohar. That will always help you as a writer. It's good to keep stretching those muscles...
Jack
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Mar 08, 2010 10:25 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
I especially liked this stanza...
"I went to a jungle to shoot a chimera
but came back only with broken camera
Now,of what use is this broken camera
when I didn't click photo of chimera!"
I enjoyed the witty play on words of chimera and camera,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Mar 08, 2010 5:38 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Your sense of humor comes through loud and clear. And it shows that often what we consider in the beginning to be really important ends up being next to useless in our lives. Perhaps we all chase this 'chimera' at some point in our lives but will never catch it on our broken cameras. Things seldom turn out the way we expect in life but that doesn't necessarily mean that's bad. Sometimes we get something even better - we throw away the broken camera and buy a better one!
Diane
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Mar 09, 2010 12:23 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
Very humorous poem,you have a very good knack for writing this sort of witty poetry.
Ayub
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Mar 10, 2010 12:13 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Manohar Bhatia Maya,Jack,Di,Diane,Ayub::::::thank you all for reading the poem and your precious comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 08, 2010 12:37 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
As I have mentioned before,the poems I write are inspired from observations,travels,reading newspapers,autobiographies,TV etc....The current is inspired from reading an autobiography of a living legend,who likes to travel a lot in his life.It occured to me that what If I can also travel to various places and come up with something amusing to relate......well,this is all fiction.
Monday Poem::::::: "I Went to..........."
I went to the kitchen to cook my meal
But came back with a broken tin seal
Of what use is this broken tin seal
when I cannot make a deal!
I went to college to do my study
but came back only with lost buddy
of what use is this lost buddy
when I cannot make him study!
I went to cricket field fearing for blob
but came back scoring a century
of what use is this century
when my team lost match of century!
I went to a jungle to shoot a chimera
but came back only with broken camera
Now,of what use is this broken camera
when I didn't click photo of chimera!
I went to climb the Great Wall Of China
but came back with diagnosied hernia
what use is this hernia to me
when my hospitalized expenses are everone to see!
I went to holiday for a complete rest
but came for a real test
now,what can I test when piles of files
are staring me on my desk!
I went for a stroll to Picadally Circus
but landed in nearby real circus
I saw tigers,elephant,clowns,
mimicking many with thier funny frowns!
I went for a ride in a roller-coaster
but came back with my body a roster
I tried all medicines to cure this roaster
but fell flat in the doctor's toaster!
I went to a friend's house for a chat
but came back wearing only my hat
now,what should I do with this hat
except to fling it on the mat!
I went to a party to have a gala time
but came back only with a broken dime
what to do with this broken dime
except to display as collector's shine!
I went to library to read some books
but came back only with its hooks
what use are these hooks to me
but to hang the shirts of thee!
I went to the beach for a good swim
only to come out with a face grim
Oh!,why the grimming face?
only to look in mirror for body charcoal case!
--The End--
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Mar 08, 2010 7:02 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
This poem is so quintessential Manohar! Always certain to bring a smile, the tongue in cheek humour is sure way to keep the reader amused.
Maya
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Mar 08, 2010 10:17 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Jack Huber You are fortunate to have a vivid imagination, Manohar. That will always help you as a writer. It's good to keep stretching those muscles...
Jack
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Mar 08, 2010 10:25 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
I especially liked this stanza...
"I went to a jungle to shoot a chimera
but came back only with broken camera
Now,of what use is this broken camera
when I didn't click photo of chimera!"
I enjoyed the witty play on words of chimera and camera,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Mar 08, 2010 5:38 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Your sense of humor comes through loud and clear. And it shows that often what we consider in the beginning to be really important ends up being next to useless in our lives. Perhaps we all chase this 'chimera' at some point in our lives but will never catch it on our broken cameras. Things seldom turn out the way we expect in life but that doesn't necessarily mean that's bad. Sometimes we get something even better - we throw away the broken camera and buy a better one!
Diane
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Mar 09, 2010 12:23 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
Very humorous poem,you have a very good knack for writing this sort of witty poetry.
Ayub
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Mar 10, 2010 12:13 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #
Manohar Bhatia Maya,Jack,Di,Diane,Ayub::::::thank you all for reading the poem and your precious comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Wednesday, March 3, 2010
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "Fedora"
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Feb 08, 2010 12:53 am Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Manohar Bhatia
I saw this man on a horse-back
wearing a fedora and heavily
clothed in leather with a thick
belt and his two guns ready for
action...guess the name(Cowboy hat)
I saw this mexican man singing
in the streets and playing a guitar
with a vagabond look about him and torn
shirt,a stubble on his face,tight jeans
and wearing a fedora...guess the name
(Panama hat)
I saw this man in an English movie
"Harry Black & The Tiger" wearing a
safari suit,with a rifle in his hand
searchingly roaming the jungle for a
tiger.He too was wearing a fedora...guess
the name(Oval school-master's hat)
I saw this man near the minara masjid
with millions of others,wearing a kurta
pyjama,a steel kada on his hand,a gold chain
round his neck,kneeling and offering his
Friday namaz and wearing a fedora...guess
the name(skullcap)
I saw this man offering a purple
fedora to one of the bright crickters
for scoring the fastest century....guess
the name(sports cap)
I saw this clown in a circus,
face fully painted in various colours
jumping,mimicking,making the crowd
laugh with his head covered with
a fedora...guess the name(clown cap)
I saw this half-naked man with
a million followers and a stick in
his right hand,walking with a determined
look for abolition of tax on salt and
wearing the greatest fedora of all
time....guess the name(Gandhi Cap!)
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Friends:I do not know whether this is a poem,but these thoughts came to me about 'Hats' and I wrote them down.
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Feb 08, 2010 4:29 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
Very interesting, loved the idea of translating the different types of headgear into a poem with descriptions.
Just for information and interest,
Fedora is a felt hat that is creased lengthwise down the crown and pinched in the front on both sides. The brim goes all the way around, and often there will be a hat band as well.
Also called
Cowboy Hat : Stetson
Panama : Sombrero
School Master's : Bowler or maybe a Tribly
Skull cap Muslims : Taqiyah
Sports cap : Baseball cap
Clown cap : Dunce cap
Gandhi cap : Gandhi topi
Maya
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Feb 08, 2010 6:20 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
LC Like Maya says--Interesting!
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Feb 08, 2010 9:36 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Maya) #
Diane Tegarden
Maya,
I think the clown cap would be called a jester's hat, the multi-colored one with bells on the ends.
(A dunce cap is the big tall hat shaped like a cone that people have to put on when they say something dumb.)
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 08, 2010 9:46 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Maya) #
Maya Mahant Hiya Diane,
Thanks, I need the Dunce cap!
Smiles and grins
Maya
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Feb 08, 2010 9:47 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Manohar) #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I love the way hats can express the culture of different people, as you have shown in this very clever poem.
The only thing I would change is to replace the word "fedora" with the more generic "hat", because as Maya pointed out, the fedora is a certain type of hat that doesn't fit the individual descriptions in your stanzas.
It wouldn't take anything away from the poem and it would be less confusing to the readers who actually know what "fedora" means!
A fun start to our WPWU week,
Diane T. and the whole hairy clan
PS. You could re-title the poem "The Hat Trick", subtitled "Can you guess the name of the hat?"
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 08, 2010 10:54 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Manohar) #
Jack Huber I ditto Diane's comments. Very inventive!
It might be interesting to leave "Fedora" the title, even if it wasn't included in the clues and descriptions.
Jack
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Feb 08, 2010 12:00 pm re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Very imaginative and colorful way to describe the different hats various people wear. Diane's suggestion of the title change is a good one.
Diane
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Feb 09, 2010 8:12 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di:::I knew 'fedora'would be a new word for hats.But it has been deliberately put to create some sort of mystery in the poem.I think,the title 'The Hat Trick' is very suitable,but it would not be my title,but yours?
Diane:::Thanks,you enjoyed the poem.
Maya:::While I knew some names like,Sombrero,Taqyiah,Gandhi topi,other names will add to my vocabulory.A great info Maya.
Jack::Your observation falls in line with mine.'Fedora'has been put there to create suspence.
LC::Kudos to you for reading the poem.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 09, 2010 12:22 pm re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
You have created a very imaginative poem.Simple things are usually difficult to define but you have done it well.
For the last two three days i had to use caps of different form compatible to the rains and snow here.So your poem is very timely to me.
Ayub
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Feb 09, 2010 10:25 pm re: re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Ayub,
Good for you,friend,my poem has helped you in some way.Keep smiling always,even in pain,rain,drain.
Manohar Bhatia
Feb 08, 2010 12:53 am Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Manohar Bhatia
I saw this man on a horse-back
wearing a fedora and heavily
clothed in leather with a thick
belt and his two guns ready for
action...guess the name(Cowboy hat)
I saw this mexican man singing
in the streets and playing a guitar
with a vagabond look about him and torn
shirt,a stubble on his face,tight jeans
and wearing a fedora...guess the name
(Panama hat)
I saw this man in an English movie
"Harry Black & The Tiger" wearing a
safari suit,with a rifle in his hand
searchingly roaming the jungle for a
tiger.He too was wearing a fedora...guess
the name(Oval school-master's hat)
I saw this man near the minara masjid
with millions of others,wearing a kurta
pyjama,a steel kada on his hand,a gold chain
round his neck,kneeling and offering his
Friday namaz and wearing a fedora...guess
the name(skullcap)
I saw this man offering a purple
fedora to one of the bright crickters
for scoring the fastest century....guess
the name(sports cap)
I saw this clown in a circus,
face fully painted in various colours
jumping,mimicking,making the crowd
laugh with his head covered with
a fedora...guess the name(clown cap)
I saw this half-naked man with
a million followers and a stick in
his right hand,walking with a determined
look for abolition of tax on salt and
wearing the greatest fedora of all
time....guess the name(Gandhi Cap!)
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All right reserved.
Friends:I do not know whether this is a poem,but these thoughts came to me about 'Hats' and I wrote them down.
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Feb 08, 2010 4:29 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
Very interesting, loved the idea of translating the different types of headgear into a poem with descriptions.
Just for information and interest,
Fedora is a felt hat that is creased lengthwise down the crown and pinched in the front on both sides. The brim goes all the way around, and often there will be a hat band as well.
Also called
Cowboy Hat : Stetson
Panama : Sombrero
School Master's : Bowler or maybe a Tribly
Skull cap Muslims : Taqiyah
Sports cap : Baseball cap
Clown cap : Dunce cap
Gandhi cap : Gandhi topi
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 08, 2010 6:20 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
LC Like Maya says--Interesting!
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Feb 08, 2010 9:36 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Maya) #
Diane Tegarden
Maya,
I think the clown cap would be called a jester's hat, the multi-colored one with bells on the ends.
(A dunce cap is the big tall hat shaped like a cone that people have to put on when they say something dumb.)
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 08, 2010 9:46 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Maya) #
Maya Mahant Hiya Diane,
Thanks, I need the Dunce cap!
Smiles and grins
Maya
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Feb 08, 2010 9:47 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Manohar) #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I love the way hats can express the culture of different people, as you have shown in this very clever poem.
The only thing I would change is to replace the word "fedora" with the more generic "hat", because as Maya pointed out, the fedora is a certain type of hat that doesn't fit the individual descriptions in your stanzas.
It wouldn't take anything away from the poem and it would be less confusing to the readers who actually know what "fedora" means!
A fun start to our WPWU week,
Diane T. and the whole hairy clan
PS. You could re-title the poem "The Hat Trick", subtitled "Can you guess the name of the hat?"
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Feb 08, 2010 10:54 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Manohar) #
Jack Huber I ditto Diane's comments. Very inventive!
It might be interesting to leave "Fedora" the title, even if it wasn't included in the clues and descriptions.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 08, 2010 12:00 pm re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Very imaginative and colorful way to describe the different hats various people wear. Diane's suggestion of the title change is a good one.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Feb 09, 2010 8:12 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di:::I knew 'fedora'would be a new word for hats.But it has been deliberately put to create some sort of mystery in the poem.I think,the title 'The Hat Trick' is very suitable,but it would not be my title,but yours?
Diane:::Thanks,you enjoyed the poem.
Maya:::While I knew some names like,Sombrero,Taqyiah,Gandhi topi,other names will add to my vocabulory.A great info Maya.
Jack::Your observation falls in line with mine.'Fedora'has been put there to create suspence.
LC::Kudos to you for reading the poem.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 09, 2010 12:22 pm re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
You have created a very imaginative poem.Simple things are usually difficult to define but you have done it well.
For the last two three days i had to use caps of different form compatible to the rains and snow here.So your poem is very timely to me.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 09, 2010 10:25 pm re: re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Ayub,
Good for you,friend,my poem has helped you in some way.Keep smiling always,even in pain,rain,drain.
Manohar Bhatia
"Oh! My Poor Little Head !" ..............Monday Poem
Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " Views: 53
Feb 22, 2010 4:21 am Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Manohar Bhatia
What a marvellous struture
on top of our bodies!
It can think,store,innovate
countless thoughts,data,inventions.
Oh!my poor little head!
It can act better than
a computer,because its alive,
kicking,breathing as always.
Oh!my poor little head!
Man treats this head
with disdain,exploitation,extortion,
How many operations odered?
a thousand,a million,a billion,a trillion
Think before it gives way,
Oh!my poor little head!
Strike two heads,not for war,
but for cordial meeting
to discuss,argue,contemplate
for a better to-marrow.
Oh!my poor little head!
Make your head a friend,
loving,nourishing,messaging,resting,
every Sunday,during the week,
Then watch its performance.
Oh!my poor litle head!
Lose your hat,but
never lose your head.
Go East or West,
Human head is the best.
Oh!my poor littel head!
---The End---
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Feb 22, 2010 8:23 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
this is the funniest poem you've written yet! Here's my contribution.....
When I read too much
my eyes hurt, my head's sore
I can't stuff in another word, sentence or phrase,
not one more.
Oh! my poor little head!
;>
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 22, 2010 10:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Jack Huber As usual, you've found a neat line to use as your refrain. Keep up the creative writing!
Jack
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Feb 22, 2010 11:07 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Very inventive! I too like the way you have repeated the title throughout the poem bringing it all together. Good work.
Diane
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Feb 23, 2010 2:18 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Very funny, add on to yours and Diane's
My nose is red and runny
my ears all clogged and funny
an infernal cold is the cause
makes me in my chores pause,
my brain is going fuzzy buzzy
Oh!my poor little head.
Wordmeisters, I think Manohar here has us started on something really hilarious, like a friendship quilt, we can keep building on this one.
Maya
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Feb 23, 2010 12:15 pm re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
If the head of a family,of a state,of a nation or of a country remains in order,everything would be right.
Your poem tells a truth though in a funny way.
Ayub
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Feb 23, 2010 11:56 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Manohar Bhatia Hi members,
Di::::Thank you for waking me up;when I wrote,I did not know that this will be my funiest poem---although I admit I am a little naughty fella.Here's an incident which might make you laugh....
"I must have been in standard IV in ANZA High School located at Byculla.Ous Maths teacher was Sir.Fernendes and was quite a character.So,whenever he used to enter our class.students will wisper into each other's ears that 'Draculla' has entered,because that was how he was nicknamed.I was quite a prank and I had this nasty habit of bottom pinching the girls.After the usual formalities of wishing good mornings was over,our Sir looked at the students with a stern face and as we stood up,I bottom pitched the girl standing in front of me.But,our 'Draculla' Sir caught me in the act and punished me by making me kneel down in front of the whole class for the entire period.I was quite embarassed......"
Jack:::As usual,thanks for the complenments.
Diane::So sweet of you to read the poem.
Ayub::I forgot that our 'head' can be looked up our "HEAD"
of a family;thanks for reminding.
A bouquet of thanks for all others.
Manohar Bhatia
Feb 22, 2010 4:21 am Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Manohar Bhatia
What a marvellous struture
on top of our bodies!
It can think,store,innovate
countless thoughts,data,inventions.
Oh!my poor little head!
It can act better than
a computer,because its alive,
kicking,breathing as always.
Oh!my poor little head!
Man treats this head
with disdain,exploitation,extortion,
How many operations odered?
a thousand,a million,a billion,a trillion
Think before it gives way,
Oh!my poor little head!
Strike two heads,not for war,
but for cordial meeting
to discuss,argue,contemplate
for a better to-marrow.
Oh!my poor little head!
Make your head a friend,
loving,nourishing,messaging,resting,
every Sunday,during the week,
Then watch its performance.
Oh!my poor litle head!
Lose your hat,but
never lose your head.
Go East or West,
Human head is the best.
Oh!my poor littel head!
---The End---
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All rights are reserved.
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Feb 22, 2010 8:23 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
this is the funniest poem you've written yet! Here's my contribution.....
When I read too much
my eyes hurt, my head's sore
I can't stuff in another word, sentence or phrase,
not one more.
Oh! my poor little head!
;>
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 22, 2010 10:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Jack Huber As usual, you've found a neat line to use as your refrain. Keep up the creative writing!
Jack
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Feb 22, 2010 11:07 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Very inventive! I too like the way you have repeated the title throughout the poem bringing it all together. Good work.
Diane
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Feb 23, 2010 2:18 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Very funny, add on to yours and Diane's
My nose is red and runny
my ears all clogged and funny
an infernal cold is the cause
makes me in my chores pause,
my brain is going fuzzy buzzy
Oh!my poor little head.
Wordmeisters, I think Manohar here has us started on something really hilarious, like a friendship quilt, we can keep building on this one.
Maya
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Feb 23, 2010 12:15 pm re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
If the head of a family,of a state,of a nation or of a country remains in order,everything would be right.
Your poem tells a truth though in a funny way.
Ayub
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Feb 23, 2010 11:56 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #
Manohar Bhatia Hi members,
Di::::Thank you for waking me up;when I wrote,I did not know that this will be my funiest poem---although I admit I am a little naughty fella.Here's an incident which might make you laugh....
"I must have been in standard IV in ANZA High School located at Byculla.Ous Maths teacher was Sir.Fernendes and was quite a character.So,whenever he used to enter our class.students will wisper into each other's ears that 'Draculla' has entered,because that was how he was nicknamed.I was quite a prank and I had this nasty habit of bottom pinching the girls.After the usual formalities of wishing good mornings was over,our Sir looked at the students with a stern face and as we stood up,I bottom pitched the girl standing in front of me.But,our 'Draculla' Sir caught me in the act and punished me by making me kneel down in front of the whole class for the entire period.I was quite embarassed......"
Jack:::As usual,thanks for the complenments.
Diane::So sweet of you to read the poem.
Ayub::I forgot that our 'head' can be looked up our "HEAD"
of a family;thanks for reminding.
A bouquet of thanks for all others.
Manohar Bhatia
"Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"........Monday Poem
Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. Views: 36
Mar 01, 2010 3:35 am "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia
I am lying on a bench
under a shade of trees
with the gentle wind
blowing lazily around my knees
Is this my Garden of Heaven?
I see birds,one,two,three
hearing their chirpings for free
crows hastily are making nests
to lay their eggs for their pets
Is this my garden of heaven?
Honey-bees buzzing
around colourful flowers
to pick up pollen grains
and fertilize in their stems
Is this my Garden of Heaven?
Vultures are seen in sky
and flying very high
to catch through sharp eye
anything gives out a sigh!
Is this my Garden of Heaven?
Now, all is quiet
a deafning silence,
real,peaceful,exciting,vibrant,
Where is the Garden of Heaven?
Oh,Man,it always resides within YOU!
--The End--
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Mar 01, 2010 5:41 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Your 'Garden Of Heaven' has beautiful and the ugly. Your poem reflects duality, the honey bees pollinating to create new flowers...life and vultures the flesh eating scavengers being the metaphor for death. Good and the bad coexist, in your mind. But then that is the fact of life.
Maya
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Mar 01, 2010 9:16 am re: re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
You have created some beautiful imagery from the real life and the ending this heaven lies within you is so apt.The style you have adopted for this poem has a class of its own.
Ayub
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Mar 01, 2010 9:54 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I love your poems about nature and its wonders, and I appreciate your conclusion is that "the garden is always within YOU!"
Well spoken,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Mar 01, 2010 10:35 am re: re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Jack Huber Ditto, Diane. Nature is a favorite theme for many people, I think even more than love. Love poetry just gets the press...
A nice read, Manohar, as always.
Jack
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Mar 01, 2010 2:48 pm re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Good visual and good conclusion. By repeating the question "Is this my Garden of Heaven" you have paved the way for your final and truthful statement. Well done.
Diane
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Mar 01, 2010 7:07 pm re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Marsha Walker Another great poem that brightens the winter gloom.
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Mar 02, 2010 7:16 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Maya,Ayub,Di,Diane,Jack,& Marsha..........I feel humbled by your reactions,because it surprises me that I can write poetry.....maybe I have learnt all this in your company?
Thank you,my friends.
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 01, 2010 3:35 am "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia
I am lying on a bench
under a shade of trees
with the gentle wind
blowing lazily around my knees
Is this my Garden of Heaven?
I see birds,one,two,three
hearing their chirpings for free
crows hastily are making nests
to lay their eggs for their pets
Is this my garden of heaven?
Honey-bees buzzing
around colourful flowers
to pick up pollen grains
and fertilize in their stems
Is this my Garden of Heaven?
Vultures are seen in sky
and flying very high
to catch through sharp eye
anything gives out a sigh!
Is this my Garden of Heaven?
Now, all is quiet
a deafning silence,
real,peaceful,exciting,vibrant,
Where is the Garden of Heaven?
Oh,Man,it always resides within YOU!
--The End--
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Mar 01, 2010 5:41 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Your 'Garden Of Heaven' has beautiful and the ugly. Your poem reflects duality, the honey bees pollinating to create new flowers...life and vultures the flesh eating scavengers being the metaphor for death. Good and the bad coexist, in your mind. But then that is the fact of life.
Maya
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Mar 01, 2010 9:16 am re: re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
You have created some beautiful imagery from the real life and the ending this heaven lies within you is so apt.The style you have adopted for this poem has a class of its own.
Ayub
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Mar 01, 2010 9:54 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I love your poems about nature and its wonders, and I appreciate your conclusion is that "the garden is always within YOU!"
Well spoken,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Mar 01, 2010 10:35 am re: re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Jack Huber Ditto, Diane. Nature is a favorite theme for many people, I think even more than love. Love poetry just gets the press...
A nice read, Manohar, as always.
Jack
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Mar 01, 2010 2:48 pm re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Good visual and good conclusion. By repeating the question "Is this my Garden of Heaven" you have paved the way for your final and truthful statement. Well done.
Diane
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Mar 01, 2010 7:07 pm re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Marsha Walker Another great poem that brightens the winter gloom.
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Mar 02, 2010 7:16 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Maya,Ayub,Di,Diane,Jack,& Marsha..........I feel humbled by your reactions,because it surprises me that I can write poetry.....maybe I have learnt all this in your company?
Thank you,my friends.
Manohar Bhatia
Wednesday, February 3, 2010
"The Concrete Jungle":::::: 2 complementary sonnets.
The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. Views: 44
Jan 18, 2010 5:04 am "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
These are 2 complimentary sonnets that came in my mind and I wrote it down.The uniqueness of these sonnets is that each sonnet is dependant on the other to get the message.If you read only one sonnet,it has no meaning.
I do not know about this new way of poetry;perhaps Jack,Di,will be able to help me.
Well, here goes:::::::::::::
Sonnet No.I.
Far,far away in the horizon
I see an ugly concrete jungle,
cluster of skycrapers,high rises,towers,
each trying to compete and bungle,
laying waste all goodness
which Nature provided mankind,
The vanishing green cover,
of mangroves,salt-pans,lakes,ponds,rivulets,
providing protection against fierce storms,
devastating floods,hurricanes,tornados,earthquakes,
where environment takes a back-seat,
resulting in climate change to calamity
for melting mammoth glaciers,disappearance
of beautiful people,culture,tribes,art.
Sonnet No.II.
That day is not far off,
when sea-levels will rise,
people will be trapped in ivory towers,
when sunlight will be blocked,
When battle will be fought on WATER,
And WATER will be sold like gold,
When plastic will bring pain,
When TV will bring sickness,
When our gadgets will make us tired,
When rivers will flow backwards,
causing havoc,misery,to cattle,crops,afterwards,
When man will eat man,
And love flying out of the window,
over cuckoo's nest towards the rainbow!
---The End---
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Jan 18, 2010 5:25 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
LC Very stark in message and imagery..makes one stop and think... Thanks for the read.
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Jan 18, 2010 9:25 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I couldn't agree more with your future vision. In my sci-fi novel "Anti-Vigilante and the Rips in Time" the last of the world wars are called the World Water Wars. Armed conflict is now being conducted in many countries around the world about this vanishing and precious natural resource!
As for writing sonnets, we'll have to wait for our resident gentleman poet (Jack) to weigh in on the matter.
To the Dance of Life (while we still can)!!!
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 18, 2010 10:47 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; analysis as requested #
Jack Huber Since I've been asked to weigh in, remember that the following comments have no bearing on the quality of your poems, Manohar.
They are not sonnets in the true sense, even though they each have fourteen lines; they do not follow any classic meter or rhyming pattern and the last couplet on each stanza is not a poignant statement or summation of the previous dozen lines. It is because of their final couplet that most sonnets do stand on their own, even if written in series. (This is not always the case, however, and you'll find individual sonnets by Shakespeare, for example, that do depend on other sonnets in their series to truly be recognized.)
I don't think I would label them as two sonnets, just as I wouldn't label a 21-syllable poem haiku, but you do have a remarkable two-stanza complete poem. You may even want to add other stanza breaks as well.
All-in-all, an exclellent piece, Manohar.
Jack
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Jan 18, 2010 3:46 pm re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Diane Stephenson Filled with a lot of food for thought. On the surface it seems rather negative, but when you contemplate the state the world is in, it is in fact very accurate. Thanks for sharing.
Diane
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Jan 19, 2010 6:41 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
So very dark, but so very true. Night seems so long and dawn so far away. Maybe the Kali Yug will have to end for the Satya Yug to begin!
Maya
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Jan 19, 2010 7:36 am re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
LC::::: Thanks for your comments.
Di::::: We share a common view.
Jack::: Actually,when I wrote this poem,it was a 28 line poem.Then,I thought why not to break into a 14 line poem and this is when this sonnet concept struck me.I am still learning to write poetry;perhaps I should have concentrated more on meter to get a right sonnet.Thanks Jack,for a few tips.Yes,I can add another 14 line stanza.With regards.
Maya:::: Maya,this is what I feel and I have written so.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 19, 2010 8:06 pm re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Jack Huber Manohar, I wasn't suggesting your write another stanza. I meant that you could place another stanza break or two in your present 28 lines. They don't have to be equal in length for this type of poetry.
Jack
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Jan 20, 2010 5:29 am re: re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks Jack,I have understood your suggestion.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 20, 2010 11:33 am re: re: re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
What ever you say is completely agreeable,unfortunately.We are fast losing our nature,in fact we are losing ourselves.Take the case of india the population has increased three times since 1940`s but the per capita availability of fresh water has come down six time!That is where we stand and many odd things look in offing.
Ayub
Jan 18, 2010 5:04 am "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
These are 2 complimentary sonnets that came in my mind and I wrote it down.The uniqueness of these sonnets is that each sonnet is dependant on the other to get the message.If you read only one sonnet,it has no meaning.
I do not know about this new way of poetry;perhaps Jack,Di,will be able to help me.
Well, here goes:::::::::::::
Sonnet No.I.
Far,far away in the horizon
I see an ugly concrete jungle,
cluster of skycrapers,high rises,towers,
each trying to compete and bungle,
laying waste all goodness
which Nature provided mankind,
The vanishing green cover,
of mangroves,salt-pans,lakes,ponds,rivulets,
providing protection against fierce storms,
devastating floods,hurricanes,tornados,earthquakes,
where environment takes a back-seat,
resulting in climate change to calamity
for melting mammoth glaciers,disappearance
of beautiful people,culture,tribes,art.
Sonnet No.II.
That day is not far off,
when sea-levels will rise,
people will be trapped in ivory towers,
when sunlight will be blocked,
When battle will be fought on WATER,
And WATER will be sold like gold,
When plastic will bring pain,
When TV will bring sickness,
When our gadgets will make us tired,
When rivers will flow backwards,
causing havoc,misery,to cattle,crops,afterwards,
When man will eat man,
And love flying out of the window,
over cuckoo's nest towards the rainbow!
---The End---
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Jan 18, 2010 5:25 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
LC Very stark in message and imagery..makes one stop and think... Thanks for the read.
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Jan 18, 2010 9:25 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I couldn't agree more with your future vision. In my sci-fi novel "Anti-Vigilante and the Rips in Time" the last of the world wars are called the World Water Wars. Armed conflict is now being conducted in many countries around the world about this vanishing and precious natural resource!
As for writing sonnets, we'll have to wait for our resident gentleman poet (Jack) to weigh in on the matter.
To the Dance of Life (while we still can)!!!
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 18, 2010 10:47 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; analysis as requested #
Jack Huber Since I've been asked to weigh in, remember that the following comments have no bearing on the quality of your poems, Manohar.
They are not sonnets in the true sense, even though they each have fourteen lines; they do not follow any classic meter or rhyming pattern and the last couplet on each stanza is not a poignant statement or summation of the previous dozen lines. It is because of their final couplet that most sonnets do stand on their own, even if written in series. (This is not always the case, however, and you'll find individual sonnets by Shakespeare, for example, that do depend on other sonnets in their series to truly be recognized.)
I don't think I would label them as two sonnets, just as I wouldn't label a 21-syllable poem haiku, but you do have a remarkable two-stanza complete poem. You may even want to add other stanza breaks as well.
All-in-all, an exclellent piece, Manohar.
Jack
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Jan 18, 2010 3:46 pm re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Diane Stephenson Filled with a lot of food for thought. On the surface it seems rather negative, but when you contemplate the state the world is in, it is in fact very accurate. Thanks for sharing.
Diane
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Jan 19, 2010 6:41 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
So very dark, but so very true. Night seems so long and dawn so far away. Maybe the Kali Yug will have to end for the Satya Yug to begin!
Maya
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Jan 19, 2010 7:36 am re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
LC::::: Thanks for your comments.
Di::::: We share a common view.
Jack::: Actually,when I wrote this poem,it was a 28 line poem.Then,I thought why not to break into a 14 line poem and this is when this sonnet concept struck me.I am still learning to write poetry;perhaps I should have concentrated more on meter to get a right sonnet.Thanks Jack,for a few tips.Yes,I can add another 14 line stanza.With regards.
Maya:::: Maya,this is what I feel and I have written so.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 19, 2010 8:06 pm re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Jack Huber Manohar, I wasn't suggesting your write another stanza. I meant that you could place another stanza break or two in your present 28 lines. They don't have to be equal in length for this type of poetry.
Jack
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Jan 20, 2010 5:29 am re: re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks Jack,I have understood your suggestion.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 20, 2010 11:33 am re: re: re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #
Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
What ever you say is completely agreeable,unfortunately.We are fast losing our nature,in fact we are losing ourselves.Take the case of india the population has increased three times since 1940`s but the per capita availability of fresh water has come down six time!That is where we stand and many odd things look in offing.
Ayub
Monday's Poem::::: "SMS"
Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" Views: 38
Feb 01, 2010 6:02 am Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Manohar Bhatia
What is SMS?
Is it short messaging service reminder
or a small memory system rejoinder?
Where "are you" becomes 'r', 'u'
or "homework" converts into 'hw'
where English Language
takes a short beating
for a bigger assault
in terms of grammar,pronounciation.
punctuation,poetry,prose!
Ouch! that hearts my heart.
Is SMS a boon for man
or a bane for the brain?
where its overactive radio
waves may harm our wonderful
cells,causing cancer,unknown
diseases,to permenantly paralyse
men into submission,dependency,helplessness,
by this monster toy,unfortunately nicknamed 'cell'
Is SMS a bust for a driver
or a boost for him to make
an accident on the way?
injuring himself and its
many occupants in his car,
apart from twisting his
car beyond repairs to be
towed away to scrap-yard!
Is SMS a booty
for a carnival of operators
where they keep sending you
a marketting package of
filthy grabage of hello tunes,
for you to accidently press a button
to charge a sum you are
never aware of or interested in?
Is SMS a short cut to everything
putting the famous hare/tortoise story
into oblivion for ever?
when hare will win the race
and tortoise will follow
in his footsteps to shame!
Beware the SMS!
it may twist your language
it may harm your health
it may lighten your wallet
it may quicken your death.
Handle your cell adroitly
to keep all dangers at bay
and come out a winner!
---The End---
copyright@Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.
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Feb 01, 2010 9:27 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Diane Stephenson Very unique way to describe a cell phone. I've never had one so don't know much about them. But I do know that this kind of thing is ruining the English (and I expect just about every other) language. And the dangers of using them while driving is extreme. Every time I see some driver turning a corner one-handed with a cell phone in the other glued to his ear I cringe. You have given a very good "discourse" on the dangers and offered good advice at the end.
Diane
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Feb 01, 2010 9:44 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I agree that texting while driving is extremely dangerous, in fact, in California the law has required drivers to install a hands free system to use with their cell phones so it is now against the law to hold a cell phone while driving. Unfortunately I have seen so many drivers ignoring the law that there are still plenty of serious accidents involving a driver who was either talking or texting on their phones.
I still think that the main point of driving should be to get from point A to point B, but I'd probably be considered a Neanderthal for thinking so. Are people so important that they have to be in touch 100% of the time, even when driving, eating or on vacation?
Maybe I'm just jealous because I don't have people constantly hounding me on my cell phone!
What is the world coming to when people can talk to strangers all day and ignore their family/loved ones all night?
Sigh.
BRB, someone is "blowing up" my celly!
;>
demonstrably devilish Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 01, 2010 11:18 am re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
It is true that our phobia of and obsession with cell phones has many dangers apart from what happens to the languages used in so short forms.You have mentioned A to Z OF all these evils in an emphatic way.But,how many care?
Ayub
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Feb 01, 2010 11:43 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Karishma Sundaram The 'filthy operators' really struck a chord, since I've been charged ridiculous fees for services both unrequested and unwanted.
SMS language is really a blight and, considering some exam boards are now allowing students to use that language for tests, it is something to be feared indeed!
I really enjoyed your quirky poem - thank you for sharing.
Warm regards,
Karishma
Private Reply to Karishma Sundaram
Feb 01, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Diane Stephenson Diane:
I guess I'm your sister Neanderthal! It really irks me when I see people walking down the aisle in the grocery store with a phone to their ear and to see people in the middle of a church service texting someone. Before cell phones it used to drive me nuts to see so many people walking down the street with a walkman plugged into their ears and now its iPods and MP3 players or cell phones. Don't people ever take a few minutes to be quiet and think? Or is it possibly that they simply can't stand their own thoughts?
I think I like Neanderthal. It suits me much better.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Feb 01, 2010 12:35 pm re: re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Jack Huber It wasn't that long ago that when you were away from your house or office, you were out of reach. Cell phones provide us a double-edged sword. Convenience gives way to constant virtual contact, especially with the youth of today, and gone are in-person interactions. My grandkids text their parents (and they reply!) even when they are in the same room. Perhaps vocal chords will go the way of the tailbone and appendix...
btw- Manohar, very well done on your descriptions of the SMS world.
jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 7:18 am re: re: re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Diane:::Thank you for our shared view on English.
Di::::::Your comments are appreciated.
Ayub::::you have taken your valuable time to read the poem;thanks.
Jack::::While I don't intend to be negative totally on the mobile revolution,but I do find some helpful moments in this miracle toy tucked away in your pocket!
Manohar Bhatia
Feb 01, 2010 6:02 am Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Manohar Bhatia
What is SMS?
Is it short messaging service reminder
or a small memory system rejoinder?
Where "are you" becomes 'r', 'u'
or "homework" converts into 'hw'
where English Language
takes a short beating
for a bigger assault
in terms of grammar,pronounciation.
punctuation,poetry,prose!
Ouch! that hearts my heart.
Is SMS a boon for man
or a bane for the brain?
where its overactive radio
waves may harm our wonderful
cells,causing cancer,unknown
diseases,to permenantly paralyse
men into submission,dependency,helplessness,
by this monster toy,unfortunately nicknamed 'cell'
Is SMS a bust for a driver
or a boost for him to make
an accident on the way?
injuring himself and its
many occupants in his car,
apart from twisting his
car beyond repairs to be
towed away to scrap-yard!
Is SMS a booty
for a carnival of operators
where they keep sending you
a marketting package of
filthy grabage of hello tunes,
for you to accidently press a button
to charge a sum you are
never aware of or interested in?
Is SMS a short cut to everything
putting the famous hare/tortoise story
into oblivion for ever?
when hare will win the race
and tortoise will follow
in his footsteps to shame!
Beware the SMS!
it may twist your language
it may harm your health
it may lighten your wallet
it may quicken your death.
Handle your cell adroitly
to keep all dangers at bay
and come out a winner!
---The End---
copyright@Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.
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Feb 01, 2010 9:27 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Diane Stephenson Very unique way to describe a cell phone. I've never had one so don't know much about them. But I do know that this kind of thing is ruining the English (and I expect just about every other) language. And the dangers of using them while driving is extreme. Every time I see some driver turning a corner one-handed with a cell phone in the other glued to his ear I cringe. You have given a very good "discourse" on the dangers and offered good advice at the end.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Feb 01, 2010 9:44 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I agree that texting while driving is extremely dangerous, in fact, in California the law has required drivers to install a hands free system to use with their cell phones so it is now against the law to hold a cell phone while driving. Unfortunately I have seen so many drivers ignoring the law that there are still plenty of serious accidents involving a driver who was either talking or texting on their phones.
I still think that the main point of driving should be to get from point A to point B, but I'd probably be considered a Neanderthal for thinking so. Are people so important that they have to be in touch 100% of the time, even when driving, eating or on vacation?
Maybe I'm just jealous because I don't have people constantly hounding me on my cell phone!
What is the world coming to when people can talk to strangers all day and ignore their family/loved ones all night?
Sigh.
BRB, someone is "blowing up" my celly!
;>
demonstrably devilish Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 01, 2010 11:18 am re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
It is true that our phobia of and obsession with cell phones has many dangers apart from what happens to the languages used in so short forms.You have mentioned A to Z OF all these evils in an emphatic way.But,how many care?
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 01, 2010 11:43 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Karishma Sundaram The 'filthy operators' really struck a chord, since I've been charged ridiculous fees for services both unrequested and unwanted.
SMS language is really a blight and, considering some exam boards are now allowing students to use that language for tests, it is something to be feared indeed!
I really enjoyed your quirky poem - thank you for sharing.
Warm regards,
Karishma
Private Reply to Karishma Sundaram
Feb 01, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Diane Stephenson Diane:
I guess I'm your sister Neanderthal! It really irks me when I see people walking down the aisle in the grocery store with a phone to their ear and to see people in the middle of a church service texting someone. Before cell phones it used to drive me nuts to see so many people walking down the street with a walkman plugged into their ears and now its iPods and MP3 players or cell phones. Don't people ever take a few minutes to be quiet and think? Or is it possibly that they simply can't stand their own thoughts?
I think I like Neanderthal. It suits me much better.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Feb 01, 2010 12:35 pm re: re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Jack Huber It wasn't that long ago that when you were away from your house or office, you were out of reach. Cell phones provide us a double-edged sword. Convenience gives way to constant virtual contact, especially with the youth of today, and gone are in-person interactions. My grandkids text their parents (and they reply!) even when they are in the same room. Perhaps vocal chords will go the way of the tailbone and appendix...
btw- Manohar, very well done on your descriptions of the SMS world.
jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 7:18 am re: re: re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Diane:::Thank you for our shared view on English.
Di::::::Your comments are appreciated.
Ayub::::you have taken your valuable time to read the poem;thanks.
Jack::::While I don't intend to be negative totally on the mobile revolution,but I do find some helpful moments in this miracle toy tucked away in your pocket!
Manohar Bhatia
Wednesday, January 6, 2010
"The Touch" :::::::::::::::::::: A short Poem.
"A Touch"........... A Poem. Views: 36
Jan 04, 2010 7:19 am "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia Every time,I touch my child
I am reminded of my wife
of her nostalgic memories......
A touch so loving,mesmerising
to melt a solid rock!
How my headaches
used to vanish forever
whenever she pressed my head!
How my tired body
was ready to rejunevate
upon her simple,delicate
embrace!
How she touched me
in the mornings to
awake me from my sleep
by wispering sweet nothings
into my ever alert ears!
How she encirled me
during a session of ball-room
dancing on the New Year's Eve!
How my telephone-talks
were inspiring during my
office breaks,that
I almost felt her touch!
How her cooked dishes
were decorately displayed
on dining table that
upon tasting them
I could feel the hand
who has made those lovelies!
How sitting on a bike
as a pillion rider,
had an electrifying affect
on my driving that even a
30.m.p.h speed seemed
to bike floating in the air!
How sitting in the car
besides me,made me
think that we both are
driving the vehicle!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
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Jan 04, 2010 8:27 am re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
LC Again, a touching piece...love of a woman embraces like no other
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Jan 04, 2010 9:30 am re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
your tribute to your lovely wife shows the love and care you had for her, how you appreciated her and how she will be sorely missed.
You are a gentleman and a bard,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 04, 2010 12:39 pm re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Your deep love for your wife is so obvious in your poem and the loss you feel because of losing her. But those memories will serve you well to help dispel the grief.
Diane
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http://www.healthycoffee.com/coffeetimegal
http://www.myhealthylivingblog-diane.blogspot.com
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Jan 05, 2010 10:53 am re: re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar G,
You have immortalised all those moments and memories through these lines.
ayub
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Jan 06, 2010 5:25 am re: re: re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
LC,Di,Diane,Ayub::::::I am overwhelmed by your reactions.Its true,I still cry for my wife,because she was a noble soul,never hurting anyone;but always smiling and she had a million $ smile.She had acted also in one Indian religious movie in India.A big thank you to all of you.
Manohar Bhatia
Jan 04, 2010 7:19 am "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia Every time,I touch my child
I am reminded of my wife
of her nostalgic memories......
A touch so loving,mesmerising
to melt a solid rock!
How my headaches
used to vanish forever
whenever she pressed my head!
How my tired body
was ready to rejunevate
upon her simple,delicate
embrace!
How she touched me
in the mornings to
awake me from my sleep
by wispering sweet nothings
into my ever alert ears!
How she encirled me
during a session of ball-room
dancing on the New Year's Eve!
How my telephone-talks
were inspiring during my
office breaks,that
I almost felt her touch!
How her cooked dishes
were decorately displayed
on dining table that
upon tasting them
I could feel the hand
who has made those lovelies!
How sitting on a bike
as a pillion rider,
had an electrifying affect
on my driving that even a
30.m.p.h speed seemed
to bike floating in the air!
How sitting in the car
besides me,made me
think that we both are
driving the vehicle!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
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Jan 04, 2010 8:27 am re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
LC Again, a touching piece...love of a woman embraces like no other
Private Reply to LC
Jan 04, 2010 9:30 am re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
your tribute to your lovely wife shows the love and care you had for her, how you appreciated her and how she will be sorely missed.
You are a gentleman and a bard,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jan 04, 2010 12:39 pm re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Your deep love for your wife is so obvious in your poem and the loss you feel because of losing her. But those memories will serve you well to help dispel the grief.
Diane
http://healthycoffee.com/canada_founders.php
http://www.healthycoffee.com/coffeetimegal
http://www.myhealthylivingblog-diane.blogspot.com
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Jan 05, 2010 10:53 am re: re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar G,
You have immortalised all those moments and memories through these lines.
ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Jan 06, 2010 5:25 am re: re: re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
LC,Di,Diane,Ayub::::::I am overwhelmed by your reactions.Its true,I still cry for my wife,because she was a noble soul,never hurting anyone;but always smiling and she had a million $ smile.She had acted also in one Indian religious movie in India.A big thank you to all of you.
Manohar Bhatia
Saturday, January 2, 2010
Different Type of Poetry:::: F.O.R.M..Pleiades
F.O.R.M.- Pleiades Views: 40
Jul 28, 2009 9:50 am F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Jack Huber Pleiades
Named for the famous star cluster, a Pleiades is a seven-line poem without any set meter or rhyme. The seven brightest stars in the constellation were named for the “Seven Sisters” in Greek mythology, thus the seven lines. This form was invented about a decade ago by Craig Tigerman, an editor for Sol Magazine, an online poetry periodical.
A Pleiades has a one-word title and each of its seven lines begins with the same letter as the first letter in the title.
Example:
Weathermost
When the brilliant burst lights the sky,
We count off the seconds aloud,
Willing the delay longer before thunder
Wields its booming voice, interrupting our
Watch for the storm's next strike. Having
Withdrawn, our attention now returns to the
Window into Nature's electric choreography.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jul 30, 2009 1:43 am re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
How beautiful?How do you pronounce Pleiades?I will come back to this thead after forming my Pleiades.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jul 30, 2009 5:19 am re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
dalip daswani
THISTLE-DOWN
__________________
There is no horizon, no end to tyranny
To myth-making stereotypes and caricature
The spaghetti in a plate is quite streamlined
Till the amorous fork thrusts to entangle
To feed one's hunger and lustful appetite.
T'was you see the mating ball of serpents
That brought Eve and the apple to me.
................
Thanks Jack... looking forward to your feedback
cheers
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Jul 30, 2009 9:23 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Jack Huber It's pronounced "plee-uh-deez." I'm looking forward to seeing your poem.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jul 31, 2009 1:18 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Thanks.Here's my Pleiades:::::::::::::
MISUNDERSTOOD:::::::::
Misunderstanding is the
Most confusing word in the
Mind of many,sadly
Misunderstaood for
Many times over
Mundane things,sometimes taken as
Moonshine in their life.
Jack,I have tried it,I do not know whether it is correct.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jul 31, 2009 9:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Jack Huber Yes, Manohar, you have written a fine Pleiades according to form. Nice piece!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Aug 01, 2009 6:49 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Oh!Jack,I am so thrilled to be acknowledged for writing a Pleiades by a fine poet like on my first attempt.I am going to keep this piece with me as a memento!Thanks for showing me something new!
Manohar Bhatia
Jul 28, 2009 9:50 am F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Jack Huber Pleiades
Named for the famous star cluster, a Pleiades is a seven-line poem without any set meter or rhyme. The seven brightest stars in the constellation were named for the “Seven Sisters” in Greek mythology, thus the seven lines. This form was invented about a decade ago by Craig Tigerman, an editor for Sol Magazine, an online poetry periodical.
A Pleiades has a one-word title and each of its seven lines begins with the same letter as the first letter in the title.
Example:
Weathermost
When the brilliant burst lights the sky,
We count off the seconds aloud,
Willing the delay longer before thunder
Wields its booming voice, interrupting our
Watch for the storm's next strike. Having
Withdrawn, our attention now returns to the
Window into Nature's electric choreography.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jul 30, 2009 1:43 am re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
How beautiful?How do you pronounce Pleiades?I will come back to this thead after forming my Pleiades.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jul 30, 2009 5:19 am re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
dalip daswani
THISTLE-DOWN
__________________
There is no horizon, no end to tyranny
To myth-making stereotypes and caricature
The spaghetti in a plate is quite streamlined
Till the amorous fork thrusts to entangle
To feed one's hunger and lustful appetite.
T'was you see the mating ball of serpents
That brought Eve and the apple to me.
................
Thanks Jack... looking forward to your feedback
cheers
Private Reply to dalip daswani
Jul 30, 2009 9:23 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Jack Huber It's pronounced "plee-uh-deez." I'm looking forward to seeing your poem.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jul 31, 2009 1:18 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Thanks.Here's my Pleiades:::::::::::::
MISUNDERSTOOD:::::::::
Misunderstanding is the
Most confusing word in the
Mind of many,sadly
Misunderstaood for
Many times over
Mundane things,sometimes taken as
Moonshine in their life.
Jack,I have tried it,I do not know whether it is correct.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jul 31, 2009 9:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Jack Huber Yes, Manohar, you have written a fine Pleiades according to form. Nice piece!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Aug 01, 2009 6:49 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Oh!Jack,I am so thrilled to be acknowledged for writing a Pleiades by a fine poet like on my first attempt.I am going to keep this piece with me as a memento!Thanks for showing me something new!
Manohar Bhatia
A Short Poem::::::::: "On Smallest"
Poem: "On Smallest" Views: 35
Aug 17, 2009 9:44 am Poem: "On Smallest" #
Manohar Bhatia
Short Poem::::::::: "On Smallest"
The smallest distance
between two points
is a line;but the
smallest distance between
two persons is only
a line of communication!
The smallest planet in the
universe is not a star
as seen by a naked eye,
but a STAR that cannot be
seen in an ugly planet!
The smallest appreciation
is not the one saying
'thank you'but a smallest
gesture that shows appreciation
without saying anything!
The smallest mistake is
not the one that hurts the
self,but the one that
hurt the other selves!
The smallest truth is not
the one which is real,
but the one that is
a lie fabricated by truth!
The smallest error between
cup and lip is a slip,
And the smallest mistake
between patience and restraint
is slip of the tongue!
The smallest compact disc
is not the one
measured in size,
but is the one
with unlimited storage!
The smallest talk
is not the one spoken
by mouth,but the one
known by telepathy!
The smallest walk
is not of one step,
but a walk-over
in your absence!
The smallest tide
is not measured in height,
but is calculated
in the affairs of men!
The smallest confusion
is not with word 'confusion'
in an English language
but 'confusion' being used
as a metaphor!
The smallest love
is not a kiss planted
on the lips,but a
love camouflaged by lust!
_____ The End ____
copyright@ManoharBhatia
Aug 17, 2009 9:44 am Poem: "On Smallest" #
Manohar Bhatia
Short Poem::::::::: "On Smallest"
The smallest distance
between two points
is a line;but the
smallest distance between
two persons is only
a line of communication!
The smallest planet in the
universe is not a star
as seen by a naked eye,
but a STAR that cannot be
seen in an ugly planet!
The smallest appreciation
is not the one saying
'thank you'but a smallest
gesture that shows appreciation
without saying anything!
The smallest mistake is
not the one that hurts the
self,but the one that
hurt the other selves!
The smallest truth is not
the one which is real,
but the one that is
a lie fabricated by truth!
The smallest error between
cup and lip is a slip,
And the smallest mistake
between patience and restraint
is slip of the tongue!
The smallest compact disc
is not the one
measured in size,
but is the one
with unlimited storage!
The smallest talk
is not the one spoken
by mouth,but the one
known by telepathy!
The smallest walk
is not of one step,
but a walk-over
in your absence!
The smallest tide
is not measured in height,
but is calculated
in the affairs of men!
The smallest confusion
is not with word 'confusion'
in an English language
but 'confusion' being used
as a metaphor!
The smallest love
is not a kiss planted
on the lips,but a
love camouflaged by lust!
_____ The End ____
copyright@ManoharBhatia
"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::: A Poem
"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 Views: 40
Sep 07, 2009 3:38 am "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 #
Manohar Bhatia This poem is my real experience when I was in my teens.Feedback and editing wanted by Jack,Diane and others.Thanks.
"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"............A Poem
When we were young,energetic,full of life,
On Sunday mornings,we were at Colaba,
At our granny's house,with uncles,aunts,nieces,
Stretching ourselves at the secluded beaches,
Swimming in the backbay waters,
Eating mangoes,basking in the sun,
Playing with shells,pebbles,gun,
Sometimes burying ourselves in the sand,
Remaining there for a long time,
With only our heads popping out for fun!
Noontime,there were afternoon siestas,
Dead tired after watching on telly some fiestas,
Now, when clock strikes 5.00 p.m.
We have hot cups of tea,
With spicy cutlets,crispy nuggets,
To pamper our villianous pallets.
By evenings,we get ready
To trot to Eros Theatre steady,
Screening Marx Bros,Laurel&Hardy,
Or slapstick comedy of Dean Martin & Jerry Lewis,
A laugh riot of our lives,
Till tear fall off our eyes!
At nightfalls,we had wooden cots,
Laid out under pipal trees,flower pots,
With the cool evening breeze blowing,
Hearing fairy tales from Granny at bedtime,
And falling asleep like a log!
Oh! Those were the days,
Waking up one fine morning,
From a soft bed into luminious sunlight,
Feeling warm,well fed,well loved,
well cared for a longing
peace,silence,stillness, bliss!
Will those days ever commeth?
____ The End_____
copyright@ManoharBhatia
Sep 07, 2009 3:38 am "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 #
Manohar Bhatia This poem is my real experience when I was in my teens.Feedback and editing wanted by Jack,Diane and others.Thanks.
"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"............A Poem
When we were young,energetic,full of life,
On Sunday mornings,we were at Colaba,
At our granny's house,with uncles,aunts,nieces,
Stretching ourselves at the secluded beaches,
Swimming in the backbay waters,
Eating mangoes,basking in the sun,
Playing with shells,pebbles,gun,
Sometimes burying ourselves in the sand,
Remaining there for a long time,
With only our heads popping out for fun!
Noontime,there were afternoon siestas,
Dead tired after watching on telly some fiestas,
Now, when clock strikes 5.00 p.m.
We have hot cups of tea,
With spicy cutlets,crispy nuggets,
To pamper our villianous pallets.
By evenings,we get ready
To trot to Eros Theatre steady,
Screening Marx Bros,Laurel&Hardy,
Or slapstick comedy of Dean Martin & Jerry Lewis,
A laugh riot of our lives,
Till tear fall off our eyes!
At nightfalls,we had wooden cots,
Laid out under pipal trees,flower pots,
With the cool evening breeze blowing,
Hearing fairy tales from Granny at bedtime,
And falling asleep like a log!
Oh! Those were the days,
Waking up one fine morning,
From a soft bed into luminious sunlight,
Feeling warm,well fed,well loved,
well cared for a longing
peace,silence,stillness, bliss!
Will those days ever commeth?
____ The End_____
copyright@ManoharBhatia
A Poem on::::::: "Rain"
A Poem: "On Rain"Monday, December 29, 2008 Views: 19
Sep 21, 2009 8:29 am A Poem: "On Rain"Monday, December 29, 2008 #
Manohar Bhatia A POEM ON "RAIN"(INSPIRED FROM FILMS LAGAN & GUIDE)
As I sit on the vast field in summer,
AND see people huddled to-gather and murmur,
Once this fertile land,now scorched and crusty,
Waiting for rains to make it cool and misty.
To quench up their thirsts,
Feed those hungry stomachs,
Again allow farmers to plough their fields,
And fill up cracks developed due to heat and then shield.
A noble soul sits in a cave,
Fasting unto death for a village to save,
Praying for the rains,
Noble dies, but his soul survives.
Rain falls in a trickle,
Tiny droplets of water on faces dribble,
Gathering momemtum by the distant tornado,
Building into a mammoth crescendo.
Villagers,rejoicing,dancing,celebrating,
Their faces brimming with happiness, smiles,
Henceforth, this village is transfomed,
Into a Heaven, not seen by man!
----The End---
Note: The above poem was read at--------
Shah's Farm,
Bhivpuri Road,
Karjat (Maharashtra)
Date & Time: 27th July,2008 at 9.00 a.m.onwards.
copyright@ManoharBhatia
Sep 21, 2009 8:29 am A Poem: "On Rain"Monday, December 29, 2008 #
Manohar Bhatia A POEM ON "RAIN"(INSPIRED FROM FILMS LAGAN & GUIDE)
As I sit on the vast field in summer,
AND see people huddled to-gather and murmur,
Once this fertile land,now scorched and crusty,
Waiting for rains to make it cool and misty.
To quench up their thirsts,
Feed those hungry stomachs,
Again allow farmers to plough their fields,
And fill up cracks developed due to heat and then shield.
A noble soul sits in a cave,
Fasting unto death for a village to save,
Praying for the rains,
Noble dies, but his soul survives.
Rain falls in a trickle,
Tiny droplets of water on faces dribble,
Gathering momemtum by the distant tornado,
Building into a mammoth crescendo.
Villagers,rejoicing,dancing,celebrating,
Their faces brimming with happiness, smiles,
Henceforth, this village is transfomed,
Into a Heaven, not seen by man!
----The End---
Note: The above poem was read at--------
Shah's Farm,
Bhivpuri Road,
Karjat (Maharashtra)
Date & Time: 27th July,2008 at 9.00 a.m.onwards.
copyright@ManoharBhatia
"So Long As......................" ******** APoem. Views: 1
Nov 09, 2009 8:51 am "So Long As......................" ******** APoem.
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
I was reading an article in a newspaper,which started as:::::So Long As..... and then this poem came to me.
So long as the Sun,Moon,Stars shine,
So long as This,and This gives light to thine.
So long as,the heart beats everlastingly,
So long This,and This gives us retreat continiously.
So long as Love in the Universe permeates,
So long This,and This helps earthlings to procreate.
So long as Man & Woman love each other
So lond This,and This keeps Family to-gather.
So long as children play games without ashtrays,
So long This,and This keeps them away from cigarettes!
So long as Father & Son with each other are bonded,
So long This,and This will keep them grounded.
So long as the rivers are gently flowing,
So long This,and This helps crops slowly growing.
So long as M-Law & D-Law are united in understanding
So long This,and This will goad them to become M & D notwithstanding.
So long as there is thruthfulness in thought,word,deed,
So long as This, and This is the ideal life we need!
So long as your kite is flying in the air,
So long This,and This is your glider at the Fair!
So long as there are Poets in this world,
So long as This,and This is where Poetry will be created in this world.
So long as Death is at your door-step,
So long This,and This is your moment of truth for your last stop!
Manohar Bhatia
Private Reply to
"Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem Views: 64
Oct 30, 2009 9:02 am "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
This poem was inspired from an indian classic film shot in 1960 named: "Naya Daur"It had a living legendary star Dilip Kumar and a vivacious beautiful actress,Vijayantimala as the lead stars.One day,both of them go to a temple to pray in a Tonga(A single horse carriage),owned by the hero of the film.Then,whilst returning,a beautiful Hindi song is picturized on the two in this Tonga.At this point, the poem hit me and I immediately wrote it down.
When Dilip Kumar asks his lady love,what did she ask God,the actress breaks into this classic song......"Mang ke saat tumara,mene, mang liya sansar.........etc" i.e "If I have your support,I will have the world......etc"(Translated).Feedback wanted by Diane,Jack,others.
Tango And Tonga.........A Poem.
It takes two to Tango
Ultimately becoming one for bingo!
A beautiful dance taking poetic form
Where grace & style are the norm.
Tango was born in working city halls,
by passionate dancers,Carlos Gardel
in alive cities of Buenos Aires,Montivideo
in South American city of Argentina.
Tango can accelerate your well-being
Bringing elixir of life to a new high
of excitement,health,joy,happiness,
for you to experience again and again.
Dance steps are hectic,fast,furious
leaving the onlookers in a rush
of emotions,romantic passions,faster heart-beats
in an excitment movements of their bodies.
Tango is a single dance form
where two dancers move to horn,
Man and Woman,merging,fusing,melting
into a Tonga-driven single horse-carriage!
---- The End--------
Manohar Bhatia
Nov 09, 2009 8:51 am "So Long As......................" ******** APoem.
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
I was reading an article in a newspaper,which started as:::::So Long As..... and then this poem came to me.
So long as the Sun,Moon,Stars shine,
So long as This,and This gives light to thine.
So long as,the heart beats everlastingly,
So long This,and This gives us retreat continiously.
So long as Love in the Universe permeates,
So long This,and This helps earthlings to procreate.
So long as Man & Woman love each other
So lond This,and This keeps Family to-gather.
So long as children play games without ashtrays,
So long This,and This keeps them away from cigarettes!
So long as Father & Son with each other are bonded,
So long This,and This will keep them grounded.
So long as the rivers are gently flowing,
So long This,and This helps crops slowly growing.
So long as M-Law & D-Law are united in understanding
So long This,and This will goad them to become M & D notwithstanding.
So long as there is thruthfulness in thought,word,deed,
So long as This, and This is the ideal life we need!
So long as your kite is flying in the air,
So long This,and This is your glider at the Fair!
So long as there are Poets in this world,
So long as This,and This is where Poetry will be created in this world.
So long as Death is at your door-step,
So long This,and This is your moment of truth for your last stop!
Manohar Bhatia
Private Reply to
"Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem Views: 64
Oct 30, 2009 9:02 am "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
This poem was inspired from an indian classic film shot in 1960 named: "Naya Daur"It had a living legendary star Dilip Kumar and a vivacious beautiful actress,Vijayantimala as the lead stars.One day,both of them go to a temple to pray in a Tonga(A single horse carriage),owned by the hero of the film.Then,whilst returning,a beautiful Hindi song is picturized on the two in this Tonga.At this point, the poem hit me and I immediately wrote it down.
When Dilip Kumar asks his lady love,what did she ask God,the actress breaks into this classic song......"Mang ke saat tumara,mene, mang liya sansar.........etc" i.e "If I have your support,I will have the world......etc"(Translated).Feedback wanted by Diane,Jack,others.
Tango And Tonga.........A Poem.
It takes two to Tango
Ultimately becoming one for bingo!
A beautiful dance taking poetic form
Where grace & style are the norm.
Tango was born in working city halls,
by passionate dancers,Carlos Gardel
in alive cities of Buenos Aires,Montivideo
in South American city of Argentina.
Tango can accelerate your well-being
Bringing elixir of life to a new high
of excitement,health,joy,happiness,
for you to experience again and again.
Dance steps are hectic,fast,furious
leaving the onlookers in a rush
of emotions,romantic passions,faster heart-beats
in an excitment movements of their bodies.
Tango is a single dance form
where two dancers move to horn,
Man and Woman,merging,fusing,melting
into a Tonga-driven single horse-carriage!
---- The End--------
Manohar Bhatia
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