F.O.R.M.- Haiku and Senryu (revisited)
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Aug 03, 2010 9:41 am
F.O.R.M.- Haiku and Senryu (revisited)
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Jack Huber
Haiku and Senryu Haiku is one of the oldest Japanese forms of poetry. Originally written about the seasons of the year, currently nature is also an acceptable theme.Haiku does not rhyme and consists of 17 syllables in three lines in a 5–7–5 format (five syllables in line one, seven in line two, then five again). In classic haiku, there is usually a “cutting word” that turns the thoughts of the reader in an unexpected, sometimes ironic, direction. Although “haiku” has become a catch phrase that includes any and all 5-7-5-formatted poems, there are other poetic forms with that format. Senryu can be thought of as haiku that features human foibles or characteristics of life rather than nature or the seasons. It may or may not have a cutting word.Since they are short, titles of haiku or senryu are often taken from the poem’s first line or are simply numbered, though naming poems is completely up to the author without specific rules.Examples:Spring Harvest (Haiku)Spring harvest begins when revealed petals call out for tiny visits.Autumn Prepares Trees (Haiku)Autumn prepares trees for the brutal cold coming- a sleeping forest. Intensity (Senryu)Loud explosions fuelthe thrill of intensity in a stuntman's heart.Footprints (Senryu)For one brief moment the world can tell I was here, then sands recover. Copyright © 2008 by Jack Huber
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Aug 03, 2010 10:07 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,My haiku type of senryu::::::____Meditation___(senryu)[ In meditationcalmness suddenly resideseven in anger.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Aug 03, 2010 10:15 am
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Jack Huber
A very good senryu, Manohar, and true.Jack
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Aug 03, 2010 11:25 am
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Maya Mahant
Jack, here are my attempts....Mirage (Haiku)Summer's blazing sun,waves of heat or oasis?Mirage in the sands.Mother's Arms (Senryu)Even at fifty,found comfort, in mother's arms,bereft, she is gone.
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Jack Huber
Maya, these also conform to both haiku and senryu, as posted. Good work!Jack
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Aug 03, 2010 3:11 pm
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Pushpa Moorjani
Jack taught me HaikuA new form I learnt todayNo! Now won't forget!:))
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Aug 03, 2010 3:43 pm
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Jack Huber
Cute, Pushpa. You wrote a senryu about haiku...It does conform. Nice one.Jack
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F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::::"Rictameter"
.O.R.M.- The Rictameter Views: 59
Jun 01, 2010 8:43 am F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Jack Huber
The Rictameter
There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.
The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.
As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.
Example:
Idyllic
Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Jun 01, 2010 10:31 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.
Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.
Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jun 01, 2010 2:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant The Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?
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Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia
Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem
Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.
The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.
Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.
Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.
Hope this helps.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.
And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.
Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.
Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.
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Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Maya,
Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:
The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,
I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience
rampyari
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Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM
The Brook
The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #
Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...
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Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.
Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?
Random Thoughts
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…
More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::
FILMS.
Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!
Manohar Bhatia
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
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Jun 03, 2010 3:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Maya Mahant Rampyari,
In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.
Maya
Jun 01, 2010 8:43 am F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Jack Huber
The Rictameter
There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.
The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.
As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.
Example:
Idyllic
Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Jun 01, 2010 10:31 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.
Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.
Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jun 01, 2010 2:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant The Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?
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Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia
Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem
Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.
The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.
Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.
Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.
Hope this helps.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.
And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.
Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.
Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.
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Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Maya,
Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:
The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,
I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience
rampyari
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Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM
The Brook
The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #
Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...
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Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.
Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?
Random Thoughts
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…
More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::
FILMS.
Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!
Manohar Bhatia
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
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Jun 03, 2010 3:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Maya Mahant Rampyari,
In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.
Maya
Tuesday, June 1, 2010
Poetry F.O.R.M.:::::::::::: "Fibonacci"
F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci Views: 112
May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)
The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.
Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.
Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.
As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements
Examples:
Spring Orchid
Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.
Before the Mast
Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Diane Tegarden Interesting, and I ain't lyin'!
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?
(c)Pushpee
Thank you so much Jack :))
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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,
here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows
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May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,
This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome
rampyari
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May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;
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Work
Daily
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For a highly ambitious man!]
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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Maya Mahant Bubble Bath
Hot
tired
grimy
bone weary.
Shower's warm needles
soothing between shoulder blades.
Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.
Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.
Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.
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May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!
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May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,
All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?
My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:
Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
In this one, each line has a nautical term.
Thanks,
Jack
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May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.
MariLaura
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May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Stanley Shiel Fractals?
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May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
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May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 10:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)
The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.
Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.
Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.
As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements
Examples:
Spring Orchid
Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.
Before the Mast
Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Diane Tegarden Interesting, and I ain't lyin'!
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?
(c)Pushpee
Thank you so much Jack :))
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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,
here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows
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May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,
This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome
rampyari
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May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;
["SUCCESS"]
[Hard
Work
Daily
Leads always
to smashing success
For a highly ambitious man!]
copyright@ManoharBhatia.
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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Maya Mahant Bubble Bath
Hot
tired
grimy
bone weary.
Shower's warm needles
soothing between shoulder blades.
Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.
Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.
Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!
Private Reply to dalip daswani
May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,
All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?
My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:
Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
In this one, each line has a nautical term.
Thanks,
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.
MariLaura
Private Reply to Mari Laura Skjelvik
May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Stanley Shiel Fractals?
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May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
Private Reply to Susan Graves
May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 10:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
Monday, April 5, 2010
F.O.R.M. Poem::::::: Crapsey Cinquain.
F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain Views: 39
Mar 30, 2010 8:17 pm F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Crapsey Cinquain
A cinquain can refer to any five-line poem with a set pattern or syllable count. Adelaide Crapsey, however, made the cinquain her own. Born in Brooklyn, NY, in 1878, at the turn of the century she was class poet at Vassar College in Poughkeepsie. Before her death of tuberculosis, her interest in haiku and tanka led her to develop her own cinquain patterns, as well as a new form of "doublet," a couplet that utilized two rhyming lines of ten syllables each. Much of Adelaide's work was published posthumously and it was Carl Sandburg's poem, "Adelaide Crapsey," that re-established her and her art form in popular culture.
Without rhyming, the Crapsey cinquain was most often written in iambic meter ("duh-DUM") and had a set syllable pattern. Its 22 syllables were arranged in lines of 2,4,6,8 and 2 syllables, respectively, for lines one through five.
Crapsey cinquains are the most popular but variations do exist. A “reverse cinquain” has a syllable pattern of 2-8-6-4-2 and a “mirror cinquain” pairs the Crapsey or standard cinquain with the reverse. Combining the two "mirror cinquain" stanzas and eliminating one of the two-syllable lines in the middle creates a nine-line “butterfly cinquain.” Link five stanzas and you have a “crown cinquain.” There seems to be no shortage of variations.
Examples:
Lightning
Its flash,
a brilliant test
of nighttime's secrecy,
exposes for an instant, then
escapes.
Cardinal
Red bird,
your glorious
plumage is radiant,
as your male ego is displayed
for her.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Mar 31, 2010 6:35 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I am trying out this Crapsey Cinquain::::::
Pink Necked Flamingoes.
Pink necks (2)
are eye-catching (4)
to watch in amazement (6)
especially picking fish from (8)
mud flats. (2)
I hope to be corrected.Thanks Jack for teaching me this easy new F.O.R.M.
Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 31, 2010 7:05 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
dalip daswani
HEN
ruffle
your tail no more
your shimmering colors
no longer fascinate cocky
peacock
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Mar 31, 2010 9:01 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Hard Rock
Three 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck,
carat, colour, clarity; a
diamond
Hard Rock
(Butterfly)
Four 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck
carat, cut, colour, clarity
hard rock.
Brilliant in gold or platinum
love's circlet forever;
girl's best friend, a
diamond.
Jack I am not sure of the syllable count of line 4 of both the poems.. carat (2), colour (2) clarity (3) cut (1)....?
Maya
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Mar 31, 2010 11:25 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Manohar, Dalip and Maya, all are splendid examples of Crapsey cinquains, which now make you Crapsey poets...
Maya, your syllable counts are correct, but you might want to change "buck" to "bucks" (a million bucks).
Good job!
Jack
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Mar 31, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Thanks Jack, I will. Happened with copy paste, missed the typo.
Maya
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Apr 01, 2010 7:38 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Hip,hip,hurrays.........3 cheers to our very dear Jack,for teaching us this new F.O.R.M.God bless everyone in your family.
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 30, 2010 8:17 pm F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Crapsey Cinquain
A cinquain can refer to any five-line poem with a set pattern or syllable count. Adelaide Crapsey, however, made the cinquain her own. Born in Brooklyn, NY, in 1878, at the turn of the century she was class poet at Vassar College in Poughkeepsie. Before her death of tuberculosis, her interest in haiku and tanka led her to develop her own cinquain patterns, as well as a new form of "doublet," a couplet that utilized two rhyming lines of ten syllables each. Much of Adelaide's work was published posthumously and it was Carl Sandburg's poem, "Adelaide Crapsey," that re-established her and her art form in popular culture.
Without rhyming, the Crapsey cinquain was most often written in iambic meter ("duh-DUM") and had a set syllable pattern. Its 22 syllables were arranged in lines of 2,4,6,8 and 2 syllables, respectively, for lines one through five.
Crapsey cinquains are the most popular but variations do exist. A “reverse cinquain” has a syllable pattern of 2-8-6-4-2 and a “mirror cinquain” pairs the Crapsey or standard cinquain with the reverse. Combining the two "mirror cinquain" stanzas and eliminating one of the two-syllable lines in the middle creates a nine-line “butterfly cinquain.” Link five stanzas and you have a “crown cinquain.” There seems to be no shortage of variations.
Examples:
Lightning
Its flash,
a brilliant test
of nighttime's secrecy,
exposes for an instant, then
escapes.
Cardinal
Red bird,
your glorious
plumage is radiant,
as your male ego is displayed
for her.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Mar 31, 2010 6:35 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I am trying out this Crapsey Cinquain::::::
Pink Necked Flamingoes.
Pink necks (2)
are eye-catching (4)
to watch in amazement (6)
especially picking fish from (8)
mud flats. (2)
I hope to be corrected.Thanks Jack for teaching me this easy new F.O.R.M.
Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 31, 2010 7:05 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
dalip daswani
HEN
ruffle
your tail no more
your shimmering colors
no longer fascinate cocky
peacock
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Mar 31, 2010 9:01 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Hard Rock
Three 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck,
carat, colour, clarity; a
diamond
Hard Rock
(Butterfly)
Four 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck
carat, cut, colour, clarity
hard rock.
Brilliant in gold or platinum
love's circlet forever;
girl's best friend, a
diamond.
Jack I am not sure of the syllable count of line 4 of both the poems.. carat (2), colour (2) clarity (3) cut (1)....?
Maya
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Mar 31, 2010 11:25 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Manohar, Dalip and Maya, all are splendid examples of Crapsey cinquains, which now make you Crapsey poets...
Maya, your syllable counts are correct, but you might want to change "buck" to "bucks" (a million bucks).
Good job!
Jack
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Mar 31, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Thanks Jack, I will. Happened with copy paste, missed the typo.
Maya
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Apr 01, 2010 7:38 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Hip,hip,hurrays.........3 cheers to our very dear Jack,for teaching us this new F.O.R.M.God bless everyone in your family.
Manohar Bhatia
Wednesday, March 3, 2010
F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::::::::::::::::::: "Blitz".
O.R.M.- Blitz Views: 99
Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.
The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.
There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.
At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.
The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.
Three White Birds
Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...
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Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.
Jack
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Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine
Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....
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Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!
Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!
;>
the ever hungry Diane T.
PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..
Trip To Hell
Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...
copyright@Manoharbhatia
all rights reserved.
Jack,I don't know what I have written;please come to my help.Thanks.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Manohar,
I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.
regards
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 05, 2010 12:27 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.
DYING ANCHAR LAKE
Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 05, 2010 5:51 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Ayub,
You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.
Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.
You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?
I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.
Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.
Regards
Ayub
Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.
The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.
There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.
At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.
The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.
Three White Birds
Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber-
All rights reserved.
For a larger view, click here.
My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.
Jack
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Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine
Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!
Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!
;>
the ever hungry Diane T.
PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..
Trip To Hell
Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...
copyright@Manoharbhatia
all rights reserved.
Jack,I don't know what I have written;please come to my help.Thanks.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Manohar,
I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.
regards
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 05, 2010 12:27 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.
DYING ANCHAR LAKE
Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 05, 2010 5:51 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Ayub,
You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.
Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.
You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?
I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.
Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.
Regards
Ayub
Saturday, February 6, 2010
F.O.R.M.:::::::: "Blitz"
F.O.R.M.- Blitz Views: 96
Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.
The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.
There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.
At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.
The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.
Three White Birds
Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber-
All rights reserved.
For a larger view, click here.
My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine
Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!
Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!
;>
the ever hungry Diane T.
PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..
Trip To Hell
Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...
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all rights reserved.
Jack,I don't know what I have written;please come to my help.Thanks.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Manohar,
I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?
Jack
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Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.
Maya
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Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.
Maya
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Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.
regards
Ayub
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Feb 05, 2010 12:27 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.
DYING ANCHAR LAKE
Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.
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Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 05, 2010 5:51 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Ayub,
You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.
Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.
Maya
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Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.
You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?
I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.
Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.
Regards
Ayub
Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.
The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.
There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.
At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.
The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.
Three White Birds
Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...
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Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.
Jack
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Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine
Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....
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Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!
Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!
;>
the ever hungry Diane T.
PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!
Jack
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Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.
Ayub
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Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.
Maya
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Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..
Trip To Hell
Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...
copyright@Manoharbhatia
all rights reserved.
Jack,I don't know what I have written;please come to my help.Thanks.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Manohar,
I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?
Jack
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Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.
Maya
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Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.
Maya
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Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.
regards
Ayub
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Feb 05, 2010 12:27 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.
DYING ANCHAR LAKE
Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 05, 2010 5:51 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Ayub,
You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.
Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.
Maya
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Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.
You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?
I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.
Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.
Regards
Ayub
Wednesday, February 3, 2010
F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::
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Jan 18, 2010 9:45 pm F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Poetry for your taste buds
The Epulaeryu is a short poem that describes or features culinary delights. Author Joseph Spence, who invented and named the form, put the Latin word “Epulae,” translated “feast,” with an Asian term, ”Ryu,” which means “form” or “style.” Accordingly, “Epulaeryu” would come to mean a poem about a feast or other culinary art with which the poet is especially fond.
The form typically describes various courses of a feast or meal, and ends in a singular interjection and an exclamation point, portraying the author’s excitement in the cuisine and its presentation. From the description in total, the reader should have a good sense (and taste) of the main course.
The Epulaeryu is a seven line poem consisting of thirty-three syllables, arranged in the following manner: 7-5-7-5-5-3-1 and “!” (seven syllables in line 1, five in line 2, and so on).
As with many other short forms, there is no rhyme or meter. The title is at the poet’s discretion.
Example:
¡Ole!
Guacamole on warm chips,
spicy Spanish rice
and refried pintos served hot,
corn shucks discarded
to reveal piquant
tamales,
¡Oh!
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Jan 19, 2010 8:00 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Tegarden ummmmmmm, now I'm hungry for Mexican food!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 19, 2010 10:13 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Thanks, Diane. Care to share a feast with us?
Jack
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Jan 19, 2010 3:54 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Pushpa Moorjani Breakfast
Mom made breakfast just for me
Omelets, eggs in ghee
Ate bread butter, drank some tea
Crushed roasted almonds
Mixed with some peanuts
Served nicely
Burp!
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Jan 19, 2010 8:02 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Nice one, Pushpa. Almonds AND peanuts on your omlet?
Jack
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Jan 19, 2010 8:12 pm F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Diane Tegarden
Comfort Food
Cheese casserole, comfort food
sautéed onion bits
melt, mouthwatering delight
sour cream drizzled in
inhale aromas
heaven sent.
Sigh!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 20, 2010 4:14 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Vincent Narayanan Hi Jack,
I have been having tremendous problems with Ryze. The site sometimes coughs and sputters so much. Its taken me two days to write and send out this post.
It's amazing to see the many F.O.R.M.s you have introduced to all of us on Wordmeisters. I in particular have not only been intrigued by the existence of all these F.O.R.M.s but also quite overwhelmed. And just as I thought I had seen and read the last of the F.O.R.M.s, in come two more. The Quatern and the Epliaeryu.
1. How do you manage to remember so many F.O.R.M.s when you write your poems?
2. Do you decide on a particular F.O.R.M. before you start writing a poem or after you've started writing? Or is just spontaneous?
Though I went to one of the best Convent schools and among the best Jesuit colleges in India, I am quite puzzled at the fact that the authorities in both institutions did not teach us any of these F.O.R.M.s. Or may be my memory fails me.
For me poetry was always rhymes. Nothing more. Nothing less. Till now. Till Wordmeisters. Till Jack Huber. Thank you for the enlightenment.
P&R
n v
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Jan 20, 2010 6:54 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Pushpa Moorjani almonds and peanuts....after taste...liked this form of poetry and enjoyed it..thankx
Pushpee
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Jan 20, 2010 9:21 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Jack Huber Excellent, Diane. I knew you'd put together a feast of some kind...
Jack
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Jan 20, 2010 9:43 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Jack Huber Vincent,
It's a shame if your schools didn't teach at least the classic forms and meters, but I'm finding this on a widespread basis. Perhaps it's because the mass interest is now open verse and prose. One of my favorite sayings is from Robert Frost, who said, "Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down."
To answer your questions, first, I cheat, meaning I have a cheat sheet on my desktop with all the various formats and rhyming schemes. If I am away from my desktop, like at work, I go to my AC articles (http://www.associatedcontent.com/user/202741/jack_huber.html).
Second, I have no set method of choosing a form. It's a combination of things, from looking over forms to see what I haven't done for a while or might feel like writing now, to being inspired and choosing a form that matches the inspiration. Some forms lend themselves more to drama, some tend to be poignant, some whimsical. Only by trying them all out can you really make that kind of decision.
Like you, I really like rhyming verse, but without a set meter, rhymes can be a distraction. So, classic meters are hugely important to me. I went through a period a couple of years ago when I experimented with my own meter patterns (i.e. an iamb foot and two anapestic feet), but I eventually found that the classic meters are still the best.
Thanks for the comments and questions, Vince. I hope this answers them.
Jack
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Jan 21, 2010 7:32 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Maya Mahant Spicy Feast
Fragrant chicken biryani
with palak paneer,
and tomato cuchumber.
chilled nimbupani,
creamy kheer,
¡Yum!
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Jan 21, 2010 8:30 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Tegarden
Maya,
I loooooooove Indian food and now want to go to one of our many Indian restaurants here in town,,,,as soon as it stops pouring rain from the skies!
Originally I was going to try and write one about Persian or Indian food but the words wouldn't come, so I wrote a simple one on the meal I made that day and it worked out ok.
Hugs and more hugs,
drenched Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 21, 2010 10:32 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Sounds delicious, Maya. Well done (or was that medium-well...)
Quick note, I used the upside-down exclamation point on my example piece because it was a Mexican feast. In Spanish, the "¡" can used before an exclamation along with "!" after. Usually, just the standard "!" is needed.
Jack
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Jan 21, 2010 9:40 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Stephenson Here goes! Not very exotic, but nevertheless good - and nutritious.
Salmon fillet steamed with rice,
Baked sweet potato,
Carrots, parsnips, broccoli,
Homemade biscuits hot
Dripping with butter-
Taste delight.
Yes!
Diane
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Jan 22, 2010 1:42 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Thanks for the correction, as a wannabe poet, make that well-rare.
To those unfamiliar with the Indian cuisine, here is the translation.
Chicken Biryani
Spiced chicken cooked with fragrant long grained basmati rice,flavoured with saffron, garnished with deep fried onions.
Palak Paneer
Spinach with freshly made cottage cheese.
Tomato Cachumber
Finely chopped tomatoes, onions, coriander leaves, green chillies, with sour lime dressing.
Chilled Nimbupani
Accompanying drink made from sour lime juice, seasoned with a pinch of salt and sugar, this effectively neutralizes the heat from the spiced food.
Sweet Kheer
Clarified butter roasted vermicelli, cooked with double cream and milk and raisins, flavored with cardamom, garnished with silvers of almonds.
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Jan 22, 2010 4:11 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Watch this one.....its a culture of people from Sindh(Pakistan)and their favorite food::::::::::::::;
Sindhi food contains spice,sweet
to mesmerize buds
with aloo ticky curry
and a dash of rice
with hot chappatis
to relish
Oh!
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 22, 2010 8:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Pushpa Moorjani Indian food so delightful
Roti aloo dum
Add some spice, and butter, rum
Lay back and have fun
With some lassi churned
From that urn
Yum!!
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Jan 22, 2010 9:19 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Stephenson Hey, you guys! Stop it! I'll be starving by the time you're through. :-) Love that Indian food!
Diane
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Jan 22, 2010 9:22 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...here's my recipe for the casserole #
Diane Tegarden Howdeeeeeeeeeeee,
here's my recipe for the cheese casserole, in case any of you'd like to try it!
Boil water for egg noodles.
While the water is coming to a boil, mince red onion and grate the cheese (whatever type you prefer). Sauté onion in a bit of olive oil and set aside.
Add noodles to boiling water and cook for 13-15 minutes.
Drain noodles, add to an oiled casserole baking dish, add in onion, cheese, sour cream to taste, mix well. (You can also add a can of tuna or cooked chicken chunks, if you want meat in it.)
Bake at 350* for 15-20 minutes or until the cheese melts.
Devour!
Dangit, I just made myself hungry again ;>
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 22, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Jack Huber These are all great. Good job, Wordmeisters!
Jack
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Jan 23, 2010 5:39 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Vincent Narayanan Good Lord! Pushpa, Maya, Diane.S, and Manohar... you folks are having a 'feast' on Wordmeisters. Wonderful stuff. I didn't know a seemingly mystical word such as 'Epulaeryu' could create such 'well-versed' responses. I had lots of fun reading them though.
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Jan 23, 2010 6:41 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Maya Mahant It was fun writing this form, and Vincent, your are absolutely bang on target, what feasts have been cooked up.
Jack's Mexican Mania had me leafing through the recently launched, TOI's Goa food guide!
Pushpa's peanuts and almonds with breakfast and rum with aloo dum was truly a treat. Loved the combo, the fusion feast.
Manohar's spicy Sindhi menu had me drooling for their famous Sindhi khadi.
With Diane T's recipe for a cheese casserole, our Sunday lunch has already been decided.
Salmon and home baked biscuits with butter, wow, my long planned diet has been shelved, indefinitely, Diane S.
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Jan 23, 2010 7:07 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Pushpa Moorjani oooooops! I made too much of spicy aloo dum...please someone come over and help me finish these....almond n peanuts finished though...:)
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Jan 23, 2010 8:25 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu (Diane S.) #
Diane Tegarden
Diane S.,
this not only sounds delicious, it sounds like lots of work put into it too! I'd eat dinner at your home any day!
Diane T.
PS. My weakness is homemade biscuits dripping with butter, how did you know?
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 23, 2010 8:33 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Diane Tegarden
Pushpa and Manohar,
if ya don't watch out you'll have a mob at your door at the next meal time!
Now that I've been accepted as the Examiner's Pasadena Restaurant Reviewer, I've got a grand excuse to go out at least once a week. My sweet hubby isn't as adventuresome as I am about different foods so for some of them I will have to go it alone, but I don't mind.
Good eatin' is good eatin'!
In a couple of months you'll have to roll me out the door at this rate. ;>
Hugs
Diane T.
PS. Jack, I believe you hit on an all time favorite FORM here.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 23, 2010 9:39 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Diane Stephenson Diane:
It's a good thing we're having a time of prayer and fasting at church (21 days) or I would be rolling in and out the door too!
By the way, it doesn't take very long to prepare my 'epulaeryu' meal. The sweet potato happily cooks in the oven while I do other things and the salmon, rice and veggies all cook in the steamer without any of my attention. Biscuits - well, I've made so many of them over the years, though not lately, that I can do them in a matter of a few minutes too.
Diane
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Jan 24, 2010 12:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Maya Mahant I have only to look, read about food to put on weight, hence I am already rolling, the next thing is to widen the doors!
Congrats Diane, that's great news, you being a food reviewer. Have loads of fun and adventure.
Maya
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Jan 24, 2010 5:38 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Vincent Narayanan Good Lord!!! What food fanatics all of you. I guess Wordmeisters should then become Foodmeisters. Hehehehe...
P&R
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Jan 24, 2010 5:45 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Diane Stephenson Vincent:
That sounds about right. Either that or we had better find a different F.O.R.M. - quick! Before we all get fat.
Diane
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Jan 24, 2010 11:49 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Manohar Bhatia Di,
Oh!I am too delighted to feed people at my home;let's see how many are turning up for my ploy sindhi food?
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 25, 2010 1:48 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Pushpa Moorjani Aw! nobody came to moi house and now all phinissed it...slurp!!.yum!!
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Jan 18, 2010 9:45 pm F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Poetry for your taste buds
The Epulaeryu is a short poem that describes or features culinary delights. Author Joseph Spence, who invented and named the form, put the Latin word “Epulae,” translated “feast,” with an Asian term, ”Ryu,” which means “form” or “style.” Accordingly, “Epulaeryu” would come to mean a poem about a feast or other culinary art with which the poet is especially fond.
The form typically describes various courses of a feast or meal, and ends in a singular interjection and an exclamation point, portraying the author’s excitement in the cuisine and its presentation. From the description in total, the reader should have a good sense (and taste) of the main course.
The Epulaeryu is a seven line poem consisting of thirty-three syllables, arranged in the following manner: 7-5-7-5-5-3-1 and “!” (seven syllables in line 1, five in line 2, and so on).
As with many other short forms, there is no rhyme or meter. The title is at the poet’s discretion.
Example:
¡Ole!
Guacamole on warm chips,
spicy Spanish rice
and refried pintos served hot,
corn shucks discarded
to reveal piquant
tamales,
¡Oh!
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber
My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.
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Jan 19, 2010 8:00 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Tegarden ummmmmmm, now I'm hungry for Mexican food!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Jan 19, 2010 10:13 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Thanks, Diane. Care to share a feast with us?
Jack
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Jan 19, 2010 3:54 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Pushpa Moorjani Breakfast
Mom made breakfast just for me
Omelets, eggs in ghee
Ate bread butter, drank some tea
Crushed roasted almonds
Mixed with some peanuts
Served nicely
Burp!
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Jan 19, 2010 8:02 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Nice one, Pushpa. Almonds AND peanuts on your omlet?
Jack
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Jan 19, 2010 8:12 pm F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Diane Tegarden
Comfort Food
Cheese casserole, comfort food
sautéed onion bits
melt, mouthwatering delight
sour cream drizzled in
inhale aromas
heaven sent.
Sigh!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Jan 20, 2010 4:14 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Vincent Narayanan Hi Jack,
I have been having tremendous problems with Ryze. The site sometimes coughs and sputters so much. Its taken me two days to write and send out this post.
It's amazing to see the many F.O.R.M.s you have introduced to all of us on Wordmeisters. I in particular have not only been intrigued by the existence of all these F.O.R.M.s but also quite overwhelmed. And just as I thought I had seen and read the last of the F.O.R.M.s, in come two more. The Quatern and the Epliaeryu.
1. How do you manage to remember so many F.O.R.M.s when you write your poems?
2. Do you decide on a particular F.O.R.M. before you start writing a poem or after you've started writing? Or is just spontaneous?
Though I went to one of the best Convent schools and among the best Jesuit colleges in India, I am quite puzzled at the fact that the authorities in both institutions did not teach us any of these F.O.R.M.s. Or may be my memory fails me.
For me poetry was always rhymes. Nothing more. Nothing less. Till now. Till Wordmeisters. Till Jack Huber. Thank you for the enlightenment.
P&R
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Jan 20, 2010 6:54 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Pushpa Moorjani almonds and peanuts....after taste...liked this form of poetry and enjoyed it..thankx
Pushpee
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Jan 20, 2010 9:21 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Jack Huber Excellent, Diane. I knew you'd put together a feast of some kind...
Jack
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Jan 20, 2010 9:43 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #
Jack Huber Vincent,
It's a shame if your schools didn't teach at least the classic forms and meters, but I'm finding this on a widespread basis. Perhaps it's because the mass interest is now open verse and prose. One of my favorite sayings is from Robert Frost, who said, "Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down."
To answer your questions, first, I cheat, meaning I have a cheat sheet on my desktop with all the various formats and rhyming schemes. If I am away from my desktop, like at work, I go to my AC articles (http://www.associatedcontent.com/user/202741/jack_huber.html).
Second, I have no set method of choosing a form. It's a combination of things, from looking over forms to see what I haven't done for a while or might feel like writing now, to being inspired and choosing a form that matches the inspiration. Some forms lend themselves more to drama, some tend to be poignant, some whimsical. Only by trying them all out can you really make that kind of decision.
Like you, I really like rhyming verse, but without a set meter, rhymes can be a distraction. So, classic meters are hugely important to me. I went through a period a couple of years ago when I experimented with my own meter patterns (i.e. an iamb foot and two anapestic feet), but I eventually found that the classic meters are still the best.
Thanks for the comments and questions, Vince. I hope this answers them.
Jack
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Jan 21, 2010 7:32 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Maya Mahant Spicy Feast
Fragrant chicken biryani
with palak paneer,
and tomato cuchumber.
chilled nimbupani,
creamy kheer,
¡Yum!
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Jan 21, 2010 8:30 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Tegarden
Maya,
I loooooooove Indian food and now want to go to one of our many Indian restaurants here in town,,,,as soon as it stops pouring rain from the skies!
Originally I was going to try and write one about Persian or Indian food but the words wouldn't come, so I wrote a simple one on the meal I made that day and it worked out ok.
Hugs and more hugs,
drenched Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Jan 21, 2010 10:32 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Jack Huber Sounds delicious, Maya. Well done (or was that medium-well...)
Quick note, I used the upside-down exclamation point on my example piece because it was a Mexican feast. In Spanish, the "¡" can used before an exclamation along with "!" after. Usually, just the standard "!" is needed.
Jack
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Jan 21, 2010 9:40 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Stephenson Here goes! Not very exotic, but nevertheless good - and nutritious.
Salmon fillet steamed with rice,
Baked sweet potato,
Carrots, parsnips, broccoli,
Homemade biscuits hot
Dripping with butter-
Taste delight.
Yes!
Diane
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Jan 22, 2010 1:42 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Thanks for the correction, as a wannabe poet, make that well-rare.
To those unfamiliar with the Indian cuisine, here is the translation.
Chicken Biryani
Spiced chicken cooked with fragrant long grained basmati rice,flavoured with saffron, garnished with deep fried onions.
Palak Paneer
Spinach with freshly made cottage cheese.
Tomato Cachumber
Finely chopped tomatoes, onions, coriander leaves, green chillies, with sour lime dressing.
Chilled Nimbupani
Accompanying drink made from sour lime juice, seasoned with a pinch of salt and sugar, this effectively neutralizes the heat from the spiced food.
Sweet Kheer
Clarified butter roasted vermicelli, cooked with double cream and milk and raisins, flavored with cardamom, garnished with silvers of almonds.
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Jan 22, 2010 4:11 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Watch this one.....its a culture of people from Sindh(Pakistan)and their favorite food::::::::::::::;
Sindhi food contains spice,sweet
to mesmerize buds
with aloo ticky curry
and a dash of rice
with hot chappatis
to relish
Oh!
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 22, 2010 8:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Pushpa Moorjani Indian food so delightful
Roti aloo dum
Add some spice, and butter, rum
Lay back and have fun
With some lassi churned
From that urn
Yum!!
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Jan 22, 2010 9:19 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #
Diane Stephenson Hey, you guys! Stop it! I'll be starving by the time you're through. :-) Love that Indian food!
Diane
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Jan 22, 2010 9:22 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...here's my recipe for the casserole #
Diane Tegarden Howdeeeeeeeeeeee,
here's my recipe for the cheese casserole, in case any of you'd like to try it!
Boil water for egg noodles.
While the water is coming to a boil, mince red onion and grate the cheese (whatever type you prefer). Sauté onion in a bit of olive oil and set aside.
Add noodles to boiling water and cook for 13-15 minutes.
Drain noodles, add to an oiled casserole baking dish, add in onion, cheese, sour cream to taste, mix well. (You can also add a can of tuna or cooked chicken chunks, if you want meat in it.)
Bake at 350* for 15-20 minutes or until the cheese melts.
Devour!
Dangit, I just made myself hungry again ;>
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 22, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Jack Huber These are all great. Good job, Wordmeisters!
Jack
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Jan 23, 2010 5:39 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Vincent Narayanan Good Lord! Pushpa, Maya, Diane.S, and Manohar... you folks are having a 'feast' on Wordmeisters. Wonderful stuff. I didn't know a seemingly mystical word such as 'Epulaeryu' could create such 'well-versed' responses. I had lots of fun reading them though.
P&R
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Jan 23, 2010 6:41 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Maya Mahant It was fun writing this form, and Vincent, your are absolutely bang on target, what feasts have been cooked up.
Jack's Mexican Mania had me leafing through the recently launched, TOI's Goa food guide!
Pushpa's peanuts and almonds with breakfast and rum with aloo dum was truly a treat. Loved the combo, the fusion feast.
Manohar's spicy Sindhi menu had me drooling for their famous Sindhi khadi.
With Diane T's recipe for a cheese casserole, our Sunday lunch has already been decided.
Salmon and home baked biscuits with butter, wow, my long planned diet has been shelved, indefinitely, Diane S.
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Jan 23, 2010 7:07 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #
Pushpa Moorjani oooooops! I made too much of spicy aloo dum...please someone come over and help me finish these....almond n peanuts finished though...:)
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Jan 23, 2010 8:25 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu (Diane S.) #
Diane Tegarden
Diane S.,
this not only sounds delicious, it sounds like lots of work put into it too! I'd eat dinner at your home any day!
Diane T.
PS. My weakness is homemade biscuits dripping with butter, how did you know?
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 23, 2010 8:33 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Diane Tegarden
Pushpa and Manohar,
if ya don't watch out you'll have a mob at your door at the next meal time!
Now that I've been accepted as the Examiner's Pasadena Restaurant Reviewer, I've got a grand excuse to go out at least once a week. My sweet hubby isn't as adventuresome as I am about different foods so for some of them I will have to go it alone, but I don't mind.
Good eatin' is good eatin'!
In a couple of months you'll have to roll me out the door at this rate. ;>
Hugs
Diane T.
PS. Jack, I believe you hit on an all time favorite FORM here.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jan 23, 2010 9:39 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Diane Stephenson Diane:
It's a good thing we're having a time of prayer and fasting at church (21 days) or I would be rolling in and out the door too!
By the way, it doesn't take very long to prepare my 'epulaeryu' meal. The sweet potato happily cooks in the oven while I do other things and the salmon, rice and veggies all cook in the steamer without any of my attention. Biscuits - well, I've made so many of them over the years, though not lately, that I can do them in a matter of a few minutes too.
Diane
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Jan 24, 2010 12:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Maya Mahant I have only to look, read about food to put on weight, hence I am already rolling, the next thing is to widen the doors!
Congrats Diane, that's great news, you being a food reviewer. Have loads of fun and adventure.
Maya
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Jan 24, 2010 5:38 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Vincent Narayanan Good Lord!!! What food fanatics all of you. I guess Wordmeisters should then become Foodmeisters. Hehehehe...
P&R
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Jan 24, 2010 5:45 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Diane Stephenson Vincent:
That sounds about right. Either that or we had better find a different F.O.R.M. - quick! Before we all get fat.
Diane
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Jan 24, 2010 11:49 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Manohar Bhatia Di,
Oh!I am too delighted to feed people at my home;let's see how many are turning up for my ploy sindhi food?
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 25, 2010 1:48 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #
Pushpa Moorjani Aw! nobody came to moi house and now all phinissed it...slurp!!.yum!!
Monday, January 11, 2010
F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::"Beyond The mountain Wall"
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F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar Views: 50
Jan 06, 2010 8:39 pm F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Jack Huber Thanks to all who participated in my contest, for which I received some sonnets, a septolet, a Monchielle, a musette, and a diamante.
The scores were all within 5 points of each other on my 40 point system (10 points each for conformity to form, level of difficulty, poignancy, and poetic content.) A very close contest, endeed!
The winner of the Grand Prize (an autographed copy of my latest book, A Splendid Alternative, is Manohar Bhatia with his Monchielle, "Beyond the Mountain Wall". Congratulations for a fine poem, Manohar!
Here's the winning piece:
Beyond the Mountain Wall
Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
is beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!
Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air, so crisp, clean, mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!
Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles buried
on either banks in green!
Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying, singing!
Copyright © by Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.
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Jan 06, 2010 9:17 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Tegarden Congratulations Manohar!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Jan 06, 2010 11:12 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Stephenson Congratulations! Well done, Manohar.
Diane
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Jan 07, 2010 12:08 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Vincent Narayanan Hi Manohar!
Awesome. Congratulations. May more such encomiums come your way.
P&R
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Jan 07, 2010 3:16 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Maya Mahant Congratulations Manohar, well done, lovely poem lyrical and visual.
Maya
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Jan 07, 2010 5:22 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Manohar Bhatia Oh,Jack,
I am humbled and overjoyed to see my name as the winner of this contest.But,I can tell you Jack,that you are the real winner of this type of poetry,because you taught it to me.Sometimes back, a similar poem titled:"Ban On Cigarettes" was also attempted on this thread.
And,thank you Di,Diane,Maya and others for your congratulations;it has made me immensely happy.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 10, 2010 8:34 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Rupa A virtual painting this one Manohar. You truly deserve the crown. Congratulations!
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Jan 11, 2010 1:18 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Manohar Bhatia Rupa,
Thanks a million!
Manohar Bhatia
F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar Views: 50
Jan 06, 2010 8:39 pm F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Jack Huber Thanks to all who participated in my contest, for which I received some sonnets, a septolet, a Monchielle, a musette, and a diamante.
The scores were all within 5 points of each other on my 40 point system (10 points each for conformity to form, level of difficulty, poignancy, and poetic content.) A very close contest, endeed!
The winner of the Grand Prize (an autographed copy of my latest book, A Splendid Alternative, is Manohar Bhatia with his Monchielle, "Beyond the Mountain Wall". Congratulations for a fine poem, Manohar!
Here's the winning piece:
Beyond the Mountain Wall
Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
is beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!
Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air, so crisp, clean, mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!
Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles buried
on either banks in green!
Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying, singing!
Copyright © by Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.
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Jan 06, 2010 9:17 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Tegarden Congratulations Manohar!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jan 06, 2010 11:12 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Stephenson Congratulations! Well done, Manohar.
Diane
http://healthycoffee.com/canada_founders.php
http://www.healthycoffee.com/coffeetimegal
http://www.myhealthylivingblog-diane.blogspot.com
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Jan 07, 2010 12:08 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Vincent Narayanan Hi Manohar!
Awesome. Congratulations. May more such encomiums come your way.
P&R
n v
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Jan 07, 2010 3:16 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Maya Mahant Congratulations Manohar, well done, lovely poem lyrical and visual.
Maya
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Jan 07, 2010 5:22 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Manohar Bhatia Oh,Jack,
I am humbled and overjoyed to see my name as the winner of this contest.But,I can tell you Jack,that you are the real winner of this type of poetry,because you taught it to me.Sometimes back, a similar poem titled:"Ban On Cigarettes" was also attempted on this thread.
And,thank you Di,Diane,Maya and others for your congratulations;it has made me immensely happy.
Manohar Bhatia
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Jan 10, 2010 8:34 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Rupa A virtual painting this one Manohar. You truly deserve the crown. Congratulations!
Private Reply to Rupa
Jan 11, 2010 1:18 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Manohar Bhatia Rupa,
Thanks a million!
Manohar Bhatia
Friday, January 8, 2010
Poetry Contest by Poet Jack Hubber.
F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar Views: 28
Jan 06, 2010 8:39 pm F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Jack Huber Thanks to all who participated in my contest, for which I received some sonnets, a septolet, a Monchielle, a musette, and a diamante.
The scores were all within 5 points of each other on my 40 point system (10 points each for conformity to form, level of difficulty, poignancy, and poetic content.) A very close contest, endeed!
The winner of the Grand Prize (an autographed copy of my latest book, A Splendid Alternative, is Manohar Bhatia with his Monchielle, "Beyond the Mountain Wall". Congratulations for a fine poem, Manohar!
Here's the winning piece:
Beyond the Mountain Wall
Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
is beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!
Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air, so crisp, clean, mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!
Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles buried
on either banks in green!
Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying, singing!
Copyright © by Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jan 06, 2010 9:17 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Tegarden Congratulations Manohar!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jan 06, 2010 11:12 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Stephenson Congratulations! Well done, Manohar.
Diane
http://healthycoffee.com/canada_founders.php
http://www.healthycoffee.com/coffeetimegal
http://www.myhealthylivingblog-diane.blogspot.com
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Jan 07, 2010 12:08 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Vincent Narayanan Hi Manohar!
Awesome. Congratulations. May more such encomiums come your way.
P&R
n v
Private Reply to Vincent Narayanan
Jan 07, 2010 3:16 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Maya Mahant Congratulations Manohar, well done, lovely poem lyrical and visual.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jan 07, 2010 5:22 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Manohar Bhatia Oh,Jack,
I am humbled and overjoyed to see my name as the winner of this contest.But,I can tell you Jack,that you are the real winner of this type of poetry,because you taught it to me.Sometimes back, a similar poem titled:"Ban On Cigarettes" was also attempted on this thread.
And,thank you Di,Diane,Maya and others for your congratulations;it has made me immensely happy.
Manohar Bhatia
Jan 06, 2010 8:39 pm F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Jack Huber Thanks to all who participated in my contest, for which I received some sonnets, a septolet, a Monchielle, a musette, and a diamante.
The scores were all within 5 points of each other on my 40 point system (10 points each for conformity to form, level of difficulty, poignancy, and poetic content.) A very close contest, endeed!
The winner of the Grand Prize (an autographed copy of my latest book, A Splendid Alternative, is Manohar Bhatia with his Monchielle, "Beyond the Mountain Wall". Congratulations for a fine poem, Manohar!
Here's the winning piece:
Beyond the Mountain Wall
Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
is beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!
Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air, so crisp, clean, mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!
Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles buried
on either banks in green!
Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying, singing!
Copyright © by Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jan 06, 2010 9:17 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Tegarden Congratulations Manohar!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jan 06, 2010 11:12 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Diane Stephenson Congratulations! Well done, Manohar.
Diane
http://healthycoffee.com/canada_founders.php
http://www.healthycoffee.com/coffeetimegal
http://www.myhealthylivingblog-diane.blogspot.com
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Jan 07, 2010 12:08 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Vincent Narayanan Hi Manohar!
Awesome. Congratulations. May more such encomiums come your way.
P&R
n v
Private Reply to Vincent Narayanan
Jan 07, 2010 3:16 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Maya Mahant Congratulations Manohar, well done, lovely poem lyrical and visual.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jan 07, 2010 5:22 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #
Manohar Bhatia Oh,Jack,
I am humbled and overjoyed to see my name as the winner of this contest.But,I can tell you Jack,that you are the real winner of this type of poetry,because you taught it to me.Sometimes back, a similar poem titled:"Ban On Cigarettes" was also attempted on this thread.
And,thank you Di,Diane,Maya and others for your congratulations;it has made me immensely happy.
Manohar Bhatia
Saturday, January 2, 2010
Different Type Of Poetry:::: F.O.R.M....Clerihew
F.O.R.M.- Clerihew Views: 39
Dec 07, 2009 10:12 pm F.O.R.M.- Clerihew #
Jack Huber
Clerihew
A clerihew is a humorous 4-line poem about a celebrity, named in the first line. Often the celebrity’s name comprises the entire first line. Invented by poet Edmund Clerihew Bentley, a clerihew pokes fun at someone famous or puts them in an absurd light, though is not abusive. It is common for a Clerihew to parody short eulogies.
There is no set meter. In fact, the Clerihew usually contains irregular line lengths. The rhyming scheme of “a-a-b-b†can be comically contrived.
In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by “a†only rhyme with other “a†lines, “b†lines only with other “b†lines, and so on.
The title of a Clerihew is always the name of its subject.
Examples:
Charlie Sheen
The great Charlie Sheen
is a fan of caffeine,
especially when his head is tender-
recovering from his latest bender.
Tom Hanks
Tom Hanks
must own some banks.
He’s almost Donald Trump
in the guise of Forrest Gump.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber
My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.
Dec 07, 2009 10:12 pm F.O.R.M.- Clerihew #
Jack Huber
Clerihew
A clerihew is a humorous 4-line poem about a celebrity, named in the first line. Often the celebrity’s name comprises the entire first line. Invented by poet Edmund Clerihew Bentley, a clerihew pokes fun at someone famous or puts them in an absurd light, though is not abusive. It is common for a Clerihew to parody short eulogies.
There is no set meter. In fact, the Clerihew usually contains irregular line lengths. The rhyming scheme of “a-a-b-b†can be comically contrived.
In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by “a†only rhyme with other “a†lines, “b†lines only with other “b†lines, and so on.
The title of a Clerihew is always the name of its subject.
Examples:
Charlie Sheen
The great Charlie Sheen
is a fan of caffeine,
especially when his head is tender-
recovering from his latest bender.
Tom Hanks
Tom Hanks
must own some banks.
He’s almost Donald Trump
in the guise of Forrest Gump.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber
My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.
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