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Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.
The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.
There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.
At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.
The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.
Three White Birds
Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...
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Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.
Jack
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Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine
Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....
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Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!
Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!
;>
the ever hungry Diane T.
PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!
Jack
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Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.
Ayub
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Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.
Maya
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Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..
Trip To Hell
Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...
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Jack,I don't know what I have written;please come to my help.Thanks.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Jack Huber Manohar,
I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?
Jack
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Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,
Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.
Maya
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Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,
I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.
Maya
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Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.
regards
Ayub
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Feb 05, 2010 12:27 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.
DYING ANCHAR LAKE
Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.
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Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.
Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 05, 2010 5:51 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #
Maya Mahant Ayub,
You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.
Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.
Maya
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Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.
You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?
I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #
Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.
Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.
Regards
Ayub
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