Favorite Quotations
"I am an excitable person who only understands life lyrically, musically, in whom feelings are much stronger than reason. I am so thirsty for the marvelous that only the marvelous has power over me. Anything I can not transform into something marvelous, I let go. Reality doesn't impress me. I only believe in intoxication, in ecstasy, and when ordinary life shackles me, I escape, one way or another. No more walls." ~Anais Nin"
The woman who needs to create works of art is born with a kind of psychic tension in her which drives her unmercifully to find a way to balance, to make herself whole. Every human being has this need: in the artist it is mandatory." ~May Sarton“
The true harvest of my life is intangible – a little star dust caught, a portion of the rainbow I have clutched” ~Henry David ...Thoreau"
The meeting of two personalities is like the contact of two chemical substances: if there is any reaction, both are transformed." ~Jung"
I am enough of an artist to draw freely upon my imagination. Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited. Imagination encircles the world" ~Albert Einstein "Good poetry makes the universe reveal its secret" ~ Hafiz"
Love and compassion are necessities, notluxuries. Without them humanity cannot survive." ~Dalai Lama"
The poet makes himself a seer by a long, prodigious, and rationaldisordering of all the senses. Every form of love, of suffering, ofmadness; he searches himself, he consumes all the poisons in him, and keeps only their quintessences." ~Rimbaud"
I want to be with those that know secret things, or else alone" ~Rilke"
The only people for me are the mad ones. The ones who are mad to love, mad to talk, mad to be saved; the ones who never yawn or say a commonplace thing, but burn, burn, burn like fabulous yellow Roman candles exploding like spiders across the stars." ~Jack Kerouac"
The great beauty of my life is that I live out what others only dream about, talk about, or analyze. I want to go on living the uncensored dream, the free unconscious" ~Anais Nin"
When a man is wrapped up in himself, he makes a pretty small package" ~John Ruskin"
The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say" ~Anaïs Nin"
Let the woman lose her small, personal fears. Let her dare to offer her creation, and if necessary, suffer the consequences. Every artist has taken that risk" ~Anais Nin“
Those who danced were thought insane by those who couldn’t hear the music” ~Angela Monet
"And there came a time when the risk to remain tight in the bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom" ~Anais Nin"
Ink on paper is as beautiful to me as flowers on the mountains; God composes, why shouldn't we?" ~Audra Foveo-Alba"
The woman who loves always transcends the man she loves, because life is greater than fate. Her devotion wants to be immeasurable; that is her happiness." ~Rilke"
I have great faith in all things not yet spoken" ~Rilke“
Talk about choices does not apply to me~ While intelligence considers options, I am somewhere lost in the wind” ~Rumi"
Those who are burned into the fire of love are buried into the heart of God..." ~Sufi Mystic"
A poet's autobiography is his poetry. Anything else is just a footnote" ~Yevgeny Yevtushenko"
If I could wake completely, I would say without speaking why I'm ashamed of using words" ~Rumi“
He who is born in imagination discovers the latent forces of Nature. . . Besides the stars that are established, there is yet another- Imagination- that begets a new star and a new heaven.” ~Paracelsus"
Faith is an oasis in the heart which will never be reached by the caravan of thinking" ~Gibran"
Let us speak silently like spirits and avoid talkers who use words in vain" ~Rumi“
She loved him so much she concealed his name in many phrases~ the inner meanings known only to her” ~Rumi"
Love possesses not nor would it be possessed; For love is sufficient unto love." ~Gibran"
Mysteries are not to be solved. The eye goes blind when it only wants to see why." ~Rumi"
A lover's food is the love of bread, not the bread. No one who really loves, loves existence. Lovers have nothing to do with existence." ~Rumi"
The job of the artist is always to deepen the mystery" ~Francis Bacon"
The way you make love is the way God will be with you" ~Rumi"
Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." ~Charles Bukowski“
I love you without knowing how, or when, or from where. I love you straightforwardly, without complexity or pride~ I love you because I know no other way” ~Pablo Neruda"
A servant wants to be rewarded for what he does~ A lover wants only to be in love's presence~ The ocean who's depth can never be known" ~Rumi"
I will make my soul an envelope for your soul~ And my heart a residence for your beauty~ And my breast a grave for your sorrows~ I shall love you" ~Gibran‘'
Worry looks around, sorry looks back, Faith looks up.”"From the beginning, the soul of you and I has been one" ~RumiSee More
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Thursday, December 9, 2010
Tuesday, August 31, 2010
F.O.R.M.____ Sestina by Jack Huber.
Jack Huber
Sestina The sestina is a very structured form of six sestets (six-line stanzas) followed by a triplet (or tercet, a three-line stanza) for a total of 39 lines. What sets it apart, however, is the re-use of the final word in each line of the first stanza in a specific order that is different in each subsequent stanza. All six repeating words appear in the triplet as well.The sestet is usually strictly metered and is commonly written in decasyllables, or lines of ten syllables each, but other formal structures are acceptable. Rhyming is not a requirement of the form, but if the first stanza rhymes (i.e. a-b-c-a-b-c or a-b-a-b-a-b) , the balance will rhyme by default, since the rhyming words are the ones repeated. However, the pattern of rhyme will only follow the sequence of last words for each stanza. In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by “a” only rhyme with other “a” lines, “b” lines only with other “b” lines, and so on.
The notation for the last words is “1” through “6,” for each of the six lines, thus the pattern of use is as follows:
Stanza 1: 1 2 3 4 5 6
Stanza 2: 6 1 5 2 4 3
Stanza 3: 3 6 4 1 2 5
Stanza 4: 5 3 2 6 1 4
Stanza 5: 4 5 1 3 6 2
Stanza 6: 2 4 6 5 3 1
Stanza 7: 6 2, 1 4, 5 3
The final triplet, using all six words in three lines, is a point in the sestet that can vary from form, using a different pattern (i.e. 1 2, 3 4, 5 6), or perhaps a couplet (two-line stanza, i.e. 6 2 1, 4 5 3). A rare format even ends on a haiku or senryu, utilizing the six repeated words in the accepted 5-7-5 syllabic pattern.
So, in the example below, 1=day, 2=cold, 3=place, 4=café, 5=hold and 6=embrace.
Example:A Picturesque Café
Regardless of the time of day,
or if a tempest's rain is cold,
my mind will wander to the place
where first we met, that quaint café,
when both our lives were still on hold;
we hadn't had our first embrace.
The world had left me to embrace
a job I suffered through each day,
no inspiration taking hold,
relentless as a common cold.
But in this picturesque cafe
my life was never out of place.
I hadn't known that in this place
I'd found a reason to embrace
my future and this old café.
I made my mind up on this day
that though the season's turning cold,
the promise of its warmth I'd hold.
A notion started, keeping hold,
that there was something in this place
which bore the brunt of passions cold,
where many felt love's kind embrace,
escaping from their trying day--
I'd someday own this aged café.
The atmosphere of my café,
an ambiance of which would hold the patrons' kindness through the day-
this would be the only place to offer all a warm embrace,
a lively shelter from the cold.
Through summer's drought and winter's cold,
my friends would come to my café
to help each other, love, embrace camaraderie,
while couples hold each other, like no other place
to spend their lives day after day.
I longingly embrace the cold
and greet the day in our cafe,
take hold of this, our perfect place.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber7 hours ago ·
Manohar Bhatia Jack,This is a very difficult one, but challenging.What's this life if its not a challenge?I am trying Jack to come up with this one.Will I be able to do it?
Manohar Bhatia.
Sestina The sestina is a very structured form of six sestets (six-line stanzas) followed by a triplet (or tercet, a three-line stanza) for a total of 39 lines. What sets it apart, however, is the re-use of the final word in each line of the first stanza in a specific order that is different in each subsequent stanza. All six repeating words appear in the triplet as well.The sestet is usually strictly metered and is commonly written in decasyllables, or lines of ten syllables each, but other formal structures are acceptable. Rhyming is not a requirement of the form, but if the first stanza rhymes (i.e. a-b-c-a-b-c or a-b-a-b-a-b) , the balance will rhyme by default, since the rhyming words are the ones repeated. However, the pattern of rhyme will only follow the sequence of last words for each stanza. In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by “a” only rhyme with other “a” lines, “b” lines only with other “b” lines, and so on.
The notation for the last words is “1” through “6,” for each of the six lines, thus the pattern of use is as follows:
Stanza 1: 1 2 3 4 5 6
Stanza 2: 6 1 5 2 4 3
Stanza 3: 3 6 4 1 2 5
Stanza 4: 5 3 2 6 1 4
Stanza 5: 4 5 1 3 6 2
Stanza 6: 2 4 6 5 3 1
Stanza 7: 6 2, 1 4, 5 3
The final triplet, using all six words in three lines, is a point in the sestet that can vary from form, using a different pattern (i.e. 1 2, 3 4, 5 6), or perhaps a couplet (two-line stanza, i.e. 6 2 1, 4 5 3). A rare format even ends on a haiku or senryu, utilizing the six repeated words in the accepted 5-7-5 syllabic pattern.
So, in the example below, 1=day, 2=cold, 3=place, 4=café, 5=hold and 6=embrace.
Example:A Picturesque Café
Regardless of the time of day,
or if a tempest's rain is cold,
my mind will wander to the place
where first we met, that quaint café,
when both our lives were still on hold;
we hadn't had our first embrace.
The world had left me to embrace
a job I suffered through each day,
no inspiration taking hold,
relentless as a common cold.
But in this picturesque cafe
my life was never out of place.
I hadn't known that in this place
I'd found a reason to embrace
my future and this old café.
I made my mind up on this day
that though the season's turning cold,
the promise of its warmth I'd hold.
A notion started, keeping hold,
that there was something in this place
which bore the brunt of passions cold,
where many felt love's kind embrace,
escaping from their trying day--
I'd someday own this aged café.
The atmosphere of my café,
an ambiance of which would hold the patrons' kindness through the day-
this would be the only place to offer all a warm embrace,
a lively shelter from the cold.
Through summer's drought and winter's cold,
my friends would come to my café
to help each other, love, embrace camaraderie,
while couples hold each other, like no other place
to spend their lives day after day.
I longingly embrace the cold
and greet the day in our cafe,
take hold of this, our perfect place.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber7 hours ago ·
Manohar Bhatia Jack,This is a very difficult one, but challenging.What's this life if its not a challenge?I am trying Jack to come up with this one.Will I be able to do it?
Manohar Bhatia.
Wednesday, August 4, 2010
F.O.R.M.Poetry:::::::::::::: Haiku & Senryu.
F.O.R.M.- Haiku and Senryu (revisited)
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Jack Huber
Haiku and Senryu Haiku is one of the oldest Japanese forms of poetry. Originally written about the seasons of the year, currently nature is also an acceptable theme.Haiku does not rhyme and consists of 17 syllables in three lines in a 5–7–5 format (five syllables in line one, seven in line two, then five again). In classic haiku, there is usually a “cutting word” that turns the thoughts of the reader in an unexpected, sometimes ironic, direction. Although “haiku” has become a catch phrase that includes any and all 5-7-5-formatted poems, there are other poetic forms with that format. Senryu can be thought of as haiku that features human foibles or characteristics of life rather than nature or the seasons. It may or may not have a cutting word.Since they are short, titles of haiku or senryu are often taken from the poem’s first line or are simply numbered, though naming poems is completely up to the author without specific rules.Examples:Spring Harvest (Haiku)Spring harvest begins when revealed petals call out for tiny visits.Autumn Prepares Trees (Haiku)Autumn prepares trees for the brutal cold coming- a sleeping forest. Intensity (Senryu)Loud explosions fuelthe thrill of intensity in a stuntman's heart.Footprints (Senryu)For one brief moment the world can tell I was here, then sands recover. Copyright © 2008 by Jack Huber
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Aug 03, 2010 10:07 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,My haiku type of senryu::::::____Meditation___(senryu)[ In meditationcalmness suddenly resideseven in anger.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Jack Huber
A very good senryu, Manohar, and true.Jack
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Maya Mahant
Jack, here are my attempts....Mirage (Haiku)Summer's blazing sun,waves of heat or oasis?Mirage in the sands.Mother's Arms (Senryu)Even at fifty,found comfort, in mother's arms,bereft, she is gone.
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Aug 03, 2010 2:09 pm
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Jack Huber
Maya, these also conform to both haiku and senryu, as posted. Good work!Jack
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Aug 03, 2010 3:11 pm
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Pushpa Moorjani
Jack taught me HaikuA new form I learnt todayNo! Now won't forget!:))
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Aug 03, 2010 3:43 pm
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Jack Huber
Cute, Pushpa. You wrote a senryu about haiku...It does conform. Nice one.Jack
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F.O.R.M.- Haiku and Senryu (revisited)
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Jack Huber
Haiku and Senryu Haiku is one of the oldest Japanese forms of poetry. Originally written about the seasons of the year, currently nature is also an acceptable theme.Haiku does not rhyme and consists of 17 syllables in three lines in a 5–7–5 format (five syllables in line one, seven in line two, then five again). In classic haiku, there is usually a “cutting word” that turns the thoughts of the reader in an unexpected, sometimes ironic, direction. Although “haiku” has become a catch phrase that includes any and all 5-7-5-formatted poems, there are other poetic forms with that format. Senryu can be thought of as haiku that features human foibles or characteristics of life rather than nature or the seasons. It may or may not have a cutting word.Since they are short, titles of haiku or senryu are often taken from the poem’s first line or are simply numbered, though naming poems is completely up to the author without specific rules.Examples:Spring Harvest (Haiku)Spring harvest begins when revealed petals call out for tiny visits.Autumn Prepares Trees (Haiku)Autumn prepares trees for the brutal cold coming- a sleeping forest. Intensity (Senryu)Loud explosions fuelthe thrill of intensity in a stuntman's heart.Footprints (Senryu)For one brief moment the world can tell I was here, then sands recover. Copyright © 2008 by Jack Huber
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,My haiku type of senryu::::::____Meditation___(senryu)[ In meditationcalmness suddenly resideseven in anger.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Jack Huber
A very good senryu, Manohar, and true.Jack
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Maya Mahant
Jack, here are my attempts....Mirage (Haiku)Summer's blazing sun,waves of heat or oasis?Mirage in the sands.Mother's Arms (Senryu)Even at fifty,found comfort, in mother's arms,bereft, she is gone.
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Jack Huber
Maya, these also conform to both haiku and senryu, as posted. Good work!Jack
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Pushpa Moorjani
Jack taught me HaikuA new form I learnt todayNo! Now won't forget!:))
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Jack Huber
Cute, Pushpa. You wrote a senryu about haiku...It does conform. Nice one.Jack
Monday Poem::::::::::::: ["Of what Use?"]
Monday Poem_________ [" Of What Use?"]
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,This poem came to me,when reading an article on Numbers.From this one idea,other similar ideas,situations,problems also came along and I thought why not make it into a sort of poem.Members are free to critique for style,language,logic and improvement______________["Of What Use"]["Of what use is this Number Onewhen One is a lonely numberwithout any friends, associates, family?Of what use is this Black & Whitewhen there is reality in greya reality touching heart,mind,body,soul?Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?of what use is the scientist promising hopewhen a poet shows you a way out of hopelessnessthat can open your mind to total awareness?Of what use are these world of colorswhen painter expertly mixes B & W with greycreating amazing canvas of divine beauty & art?Of what use is this confession before a priestwhen sinner can redeem his life reading biblewhere our Lord God has put his signature?Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?Of what use is this live-in relationshipswhen joys of parenthood are calling usfor traditional rituals,ceremonies,parties,marriages?Of what use are these winnings of a roulettewhen there is sure winner in every merry-go-roundfor an honest,sustained effort,labor,sweat?Of what use are these best selling writerswhen a single Shakespeare has sold the worldin meaningful poems,astounding plays,fascinating lyrics?]_____ The End ______copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.
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Khurshid Alam
Hi Manohar,You're right. But should not there be change? As you seem to reject somethings such as live-in relationship etc. We must accpet changes even though if they seem not so good from our pespective and we must let live those who prefer a way of life.
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Jul 26, 2010 6:18 am
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Maya Mahant
Fascinating Manohar, sometime or the other we have had these thoughts. However, would there be progress, if we all sat down and said 'Of What Use?' Though in context of war, I wholeheartedly endorse what you say.We live 'on' hope, if we only thought about the futility of life, we would wither up and die.Maya
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Jack Huber
Monohar, you didn't say you were answering any questions, just describing a feeling most of us have from time to time. In this light, you have done well.Jack
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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,I don't see the world as black and white, I see the shades of grey, just as you do. I have come to accept change and variety as a part of life, and so have many questions that remain unanswered.Three small notes on word usage:I believe in the line "Of what use is this wordly togetherness" you meant to use "worldly","permanant" should be spelled "permanent",and "reconcilliation" should be "reconciliation".My favorite stanza is:Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Note to members, please note that Manohar asked for input or I wouldn't have brought up the notes on word usage!Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jul 26, 2010 12:42 pm
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Diane Stephenson
Manohar:Well-done. I agree to a point with those who think change is necessary, but there are some principles that must remain or society disintegrates. I agree with you that life is not just black and white as many people try to simplify it, but there are many shades of grey that make up our lives. I do believe, however, that without all the colors of the rainbow, life would be rather dull. Black is simply the absence of light and white the absence of color and I like to think of my life as a combination of both with color. An artist may be able to create a fascinating canvas with the simplicity of black and white, but just think of a world full of black and white flowers, for instance. I like the way you have asked the questions and proffered a reason for not accepting the absolutes some put forth. It is a poem of musing on life's issues and causes the reader to think for him/herself rather than accept without question what society tries to dictate, and gives food for thought to come up with an answer to your questions. Diane
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Jul 27, 2010 3:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,When William Shakespare wrote_____"What is this life, full of care,we have no time to stand and stare,no time to stand beneath the trees,etc..............."he did not have a rule for everyone to follow.Well,how should I put my thoughts? Let me try......I will put it this way............. Number One is the dream of everyone, but when one gets there, he/she still feels 'something' is missing and it is this 'missing' aspect that I want to convey through this poem.People get bored with all good things of life and feel unhappy,thinking of the next step to follow.I have written this poem from that particular angle.As Jack says, a poet has a veto license to take the meaning to a different level....I have done this in this poem,but limited by reason.To sum up,I will conclude that in every triplicate,that is composed,I have my own rason,which I want the character to experience himself/herself.Jack:::::::I endorse that you have understood my poem.Khurshid:::When one is living in a society, one has to follow certain rules/traditions and these are called 'truths'. However,I agree with you that for people wanting to live their own way of life.Diane.T::::Thank you and thank again for spelling corrections....[wordly],[permanent],[reconcilliation]stand corrected.Diane.S.:::I agree that black & white flowers will not look good,but here in the poem I want to convey also about the underdog things.Many people have forgotten to see beauty elswhere.e.g. in B & W.You are nearer to Jack's & my philosophy and thanks for your valuable comments.Maya:::::::When I gave the title to the poem::["Of What Use"],I had a mellow type of reasoning and there is nothing more to it than this.Thanks Maya for your comments.Manohar Bhatia
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Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,As is usual with you this poem too is a debating piece asking for taxing one`s mind to find the answer.These questions have relevance,because these help us to understand the life in totality.They are like speed breakers keeping us cautiously going.Ayub
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Manohar Bhatia
Ayub,Thanks for understanding my poem.When I ask a question, that question is not mine only, but for everyone to ponder over and seek an answer.Manohar Bhatia
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Pushpa Moorjani
Nice poem Manohar and the comments are also enlighteningGreat pals here…“Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?”I think the repetition of the word ‘aloneness' is not necessaryand may also I addOf what use is the poetry if it doesn’t stir the soulThe disturbing thoughts, while peeled off layer by layerFind newer meanings when it is shared:)
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Manohar Bhatia
Pushpa,Thanks for your comments.Regarding the word,'aloneness',I think we both are right.This word can be deleted and if you read again, you might feel it is laying emphasis of what beauty lies in aloneness.I may add here, that your last stanza is very impressive for me to read.Thanks again.Manohar Bhatia
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,This poem came to me,when reading an article on Numbers.From this one idea,other similar ideas,situations,problems also came along and I thought why not make it into a sort of poem.Members are free to critique for style,language,logic and improvement______________["Of What Use"]["Of what use is this Number Onewhen One is a lonely numberwithout any friends, associates, family?Of what use is this Black & Whitewhen there is reality in greya reality touching heart,mind,body,soul?Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?of what use is the scientist promising hopewhen a poet shows you a way out of hopelessnessthat can open your mind to total awareness?Of what use are these world of colorswhen painter expertly mixes B & W with greycreating amazing canvas of divine beauty & art?Of what use is this confession before a priestwhen sinner can redeem his life reading biblewhere our Lord God has put his signature?Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?Of what use is this live-in relationshipswhen joys of parenthood are calling usfor traditional rituals,ceremonies,parties,marriages?Of what use are these winnings of a roulettewhen there is sure winner in every merry-go-roundfor an honest,sustained effort,labor,sweat?Of what use are these best selling writerswhen a single Shakespeare has sold the worldin meaningful poems,astounding plays,fascinating lyrics?]_____ The End ______copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.
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Khurshid Alam
Hi Manohar,You're right. But should not there be change? As you seem to reject somethings such as live-in relationship etc. We must accpet changes even though if they seem not so good from our pespective and we must let live those who prefer a way of life.
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Jul 26, 2010 6:18 am
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Maya Mahant
Fascinating Manohar, sometime or the other we have had these thoughts. However, would there be progress, if we all sat down and said 'Of What Use?' Though in context of war, I wholeheartedly endorse what you say.We live 'on' hope, if we only thought about the futility of life, we would wither up and die.Maya
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Jul 26, 2010 9:41 am
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Jack Huber
Monohar, you didn't say you were answering any questions, just describing a feeling most of us have from time to time. In this light, you have done well.Jack
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Jul 26, 2010 10:01 am
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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,I don't see the world as black and white, I see the shades of grey, just as you do. I have come to accept change and variety as a part of life, and so have many questions that remain unanswered.Three small notes on word usage:I believe in the line "Of what use is this wordly togetherness" you meant to use "worldly","permanant" should be spelled "permanent",and "reconcilliation" should be "reconciliation".My favorite stanza is:Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Note to members, please note that Manohar asked for input or I wouldn't have brought up the notes on word usage!Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jul 26, 2010 12:42 pm
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Diane Stephenson
Manohar:Well-done. I agree to a point with those who think change is necessary, but there are some principles that must remain or society disintegrates. I agree with you that life is not just black and white as many people try to simplify it, but there are many shades of grey that make up our lives. I do believe, however, that without all the colors of the rainbow, life would be rather dull. Black is simply the absence of light and white the absence of color and I like to think of my life as a combination of both with color. An artist may be able to create a fascinating canvas with the simplicity of black and white, but just think of a world full of black and white flowers, for instance. I like the way you have asked the questions and proffered a reason for not accepting the absolutes some put forth. It is a poem of musing on life's issues and causes the reader to think for him/herself rather than accept without question what society tries to dictate, and gives food for thought to come up with an answer to your questions. Diane
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Jul 27, 2010 3:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,When William Shakespare wrote_____"What is this life, full of care,we have no time to stand and stare,no time to stand beneath the trees,etc..............."he did not have a rule for everyone to follow.Well,how should I put my thoughts? Let me try......I will put it this way............. Number One is the dream of everyone, but when one gets there, he/she still feels 'something' is missing and it is this 'missing' aspect that I want to convey through this poem.People get bored with all good things of life and feel unhappy,thinking of the next step to follow.I have written this poem from that particular angle.As Jack says, a poet has a veto license to take the meaning to a different level....I have done this in this poem,but limited by reason.To sum up,I will conclude that in every triplicate,that is composed,I have my own rason,which I want the character to experience himself/herself.Jack:::::::I endorse that you have understood my poem.Khurshid:::When one is living in a society, one has to follow certain rules/traditions and these are called 'truths'. However,I agree with you that for people wanting to live their own way of life.Diane.T::::Thank you and thank again for spelling corrections....[wordly],[permanent],[reconcilliation]stand corrected.Diane.S.:::I agree that black & white flowers will not look good,but here in the poem I want to convey also about the underdog things.Many people have forgotten to see beauty elswhere.e.g. in B & W.You are nearer to Jack's & my philosophy and thanks for your valuable comments.Maya:::::::When I gave the title to the poem::["Of What Use"],I had a mellow type of reasoning and there is nothing more to it than this.Thanks Maya for your comments.Manohar Bhatia
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Aug 01, 2010 11:43 am
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Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,As is usual with you this poem too is a debating piece asking for taxing one`s mind to find the answer.These questions have relevance,because these help us to understand the life in totality.They are like speed breakers keeping us cautiously going.Ayub
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Manohar Bhatia
Ayub,Thanks for understanding my poem.When I ask a question, that question is not mine only, but for everyone to ponder over and seek an answer.Manohar Bhatia
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Pushpa Moorjani
Nice poem Manohar and the comments are also enlighteningGreat pals here…“Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?”I think the repetition of the word ‘aloneness' is not necessaryand may also I addOf what use is the poetry if it doesn’t stir the soulThe disturbing thoughts, while peeled off layer by layerFind newer meanings when it is shared:)
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Aug 03, 2010 9:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Pushpa,Thanks for your comments.Regarding the word,'aloneness',I think we both are right.This word can be deleted and if you read again, you might feel it is laying emphasis of what beauty lies in aloneness.I may add here, that your last stanza is very impressive for me to read.Thanks again.Manohar Bhatia
Wednesday, June 9, 2010
F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::::"Rictameter"
.O.R.M.- The Rictameter Views: 59
Jun 01, 2010 8:43 am F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Jack Huber
The Rictameter
There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.
The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.
As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.
Example:
Idyllic
Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Jun 01, 2010 10:31 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.
Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.
Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jun 01, 2010 2:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant The Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?
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Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia
Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem
Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.
The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.
Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.
Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.
Hope this helps.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.
And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.
Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.
Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.
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Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Maya,
Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:
The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,
I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience
rampyari
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Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM
The Brook
The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #
Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...
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Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.
Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?
Random Thoughts
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…
More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::
FILMS.
Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!
Manohar Bhatia
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
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Jun 03, 2010 3:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Maya Mahant Rampyari,
In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.
Maya
Jun 01, 2010 8:43 am F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Jack Huber
The Rictameter
There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.
The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.
As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.
Example:
Idyllic
Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Jun 01, 2010 10:31 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.
Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.
Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jun 01, 2010 2:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant The Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia
Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem
Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.
The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.
Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.
Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.
Hope this helps.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.
And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.
Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.
Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.
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Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Maya,
Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:
The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,
I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience
rampyari
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Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM
The Brook
The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #
Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...
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Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.
Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?
Random Thoughts
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…
More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::
FILMS.
Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!
Manohar Bhatia
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
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Jun 03, 2010 3:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Maya Mahant Rampyari,
In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.
Maya
Tuesday, June 1, 2010
Monday Poem:::::::::::::: "Change"
am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
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All rights are reserved.
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Poetry F.O.R.M.:::::::::::: "Fibonacci"
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May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)
The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.
Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.
Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.
As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements
Examples:
Spring Orchid
Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.
Before the Mast
Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Diane Tegarden Interesting, and I ain't lyin'!
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?
(c)Pushpee
Thank you so much Jack :))
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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,
here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows
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May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,
This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome
rampyari
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May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;
["SUCCESS"]
[Hard
Work
Daily
Leads always
to smashing success
For a highly ambitious man!]
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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Maya Mahant Bubble Bath
Hot
tired
grimy
bone weary.
Shower's warm needles
soothing between shoulder blades.
Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.
Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.
Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.
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May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!
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May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,
All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?
My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:
Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
In this one, each line has a nautical term.
Thanks,
Jack
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May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.
MariLaura
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May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Stanley Shiel Fractals?
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May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
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May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 10:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)
The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.
Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.
Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.
As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements
Examples:
Spring Orchid
Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.
Before the Mast
Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Diane Tegarden Interesting, and I ain't lyin'!
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?
(c)Pushpee
Thank you so much Jack :))
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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,
here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,
This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome
rampyari
Private Reply to Rampyari Walia
May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;
["SUCCESS"]
[Hard
Work
Daily
Leads always
to smashing success
For a highly ambitious man!]
copyright@ManoharBhatia.
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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Maya Mahant Bubble Bath
Hot
tired
grimy
bone weary.
Shower's warm needles
soothing between shoulder blades.
Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.
Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.
Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!
Private Reply to dalip daswani
May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,
All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?
My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:
Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
In this one, each line has a nautical term.
Thanks,
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.
MariLaura
Private Reply to Mari Laura Skjelvik
May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Stanley Shiel Fractals?
Private Reply to Stanley Shiel
May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
Private Reply to Susan Graves
May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 10:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
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The lasting haiku of Masaoka Shiki at Horyu-ji
A haiku is a non-rhymed verse genre.There are 5 syllables in the first sentence, 7 in the second and 5 again in the last sentence.
Steps1Understand the way haiku is made. Haiku in Japanese is written in a single vertical line with seventeen sound units or mora (not strictly the same as syllables) in a rhythm of five, seven, and five. In English (a stressed language), the ideas can be expressed with a short line, a long line, and another short line. Sometimes, haiku can turn out very bad and cheesy. Pick a good topic.
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2Choose a season. Many haiku seem to focus on nature, but what they are really focusing on is a seasonal reference (not all of which are necessarily about nature). Japanese poets use a "saijiki" or season word almanac to check the seasonal association for key words that they might use in a haiku (thus the haiku is a seasonal poem, and thus often about nature, but does not have to be about nature if the seasonal reference is about a human activity). The season is important for coming up with words to use in a haiku. Because the poem has so few words, simple phrases such as "cherry blossoms" or "falling leaves" can create lush scenes, yet still reflect the feeling of the verse. Moreover, season words also invoke other poems that use the same season word, making the poem part of a rich historical tapestry through allusive variation. In Japanese, the "kigo" or season word was generally understood; "autumn breeze" might be known to express loneliness and the coming of the dark winter season
Winter usually makes us think of burden, cold, sadness, hunger, tranquility or peace. Ideas about winter can be invited with words like "snow," "ice," "dead tree," "leafless," etc.
Summer brings about feelings of warmth, vibrancy, love, anger, and many others. General summer phrases include references to the sky, beaches, heat, and romance.
Autumn brings to mind a very wide range of ideas: decay, belief in the supernatural, jealousy, saying goodbye, loss, regret, and mystery to name a few. Falling leaves, shadows, and autumn colors are common implementations.
Spring, like summer, can make one think of love, but it is usually more a sense of infatuation. Also common are themes like innocence, youth, passion, and fickleness. Blossoms, new plants, or warm rains can imply spring. For more information on seasons, go to the link listed below.
Seasonal references can also include human activities, and Japanese saijikis contain many such listings. Be aware that some references to human activities, such as Christmas, are effective season words, but require a geographical limitation; while Christmas is a winter season word in the northern hemisphere, it's a summer reference in the southern hemisphere.
3Add a contrast or comparison. Reading most haiku, you'll notice they either present one idea for the first two lines and then switch quickly to something else or do the same with the first line and last two. A Japanese haiku achieves this shift with what is called a "kireji" or cutting word, which cuts the poem into two parts. In English, it is essential for nearly every haiku to have this two-part juxtapositional structure. The idea is to create a leap between the two parts, and to create an intuitive realization from what has been called an "internal comparison." These two parts sometimes create a contrast, sometime a comparison. Creating this two-part structure effectively can be the hardest part of writing a haiku, because it can be very difficult to avoid too obvious a connection between the two parts, yet also avoid too great a distance between them that becomes obscure and unclear. The haiku poet wants to come up with the perfect words to spark the emotions (not ideas) they wish to communicate. It doesn't have to be extremely severe; it can be anything from one color to another. In English, punctuation between the two lines can create that contrast, although this is not necessary provided that the grammar clearly indicates that a shift has occurred.
4Use primarily objective sensory description. Haiku are based on the five senses. They are about things you can experience, not your interpretation or analysis of those things. To do this effectively, it is good to rely on sensory description, and to use mostly objective rather than subjective words.
5Like any other art, haiku takes practice. Basho said that each haiku should be a thousand times on the tongue. It is also important to read good haiku, and not just translations from the Japanese but the best literary haiku being written in English. To learn haiku properly, it is important to take it beyond the superficial or even sometimes incorrect ways it has been taught in most grade schools. It is important to distinguish between pseudo-haiku that says whatever it wants in a 5-7-5 syllable pattern and literary haiku that adheres to the use of season words, a two-part juxtapositional structure, and primarily objective sensory imagery.
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The lasting haiku of Masaoka Shiki at Horyu-ji
A haiku is a non-rhymed verse genre.There are 5 syllables in the first sentence, 7 in the second and 5 again in the last sentence.
Steps1Understand the way haiku is made. Haiku in Japanese is written in a single vertical line with seventeen sound units or mora (not strictly the same as syllables) in a rhythm of five, seven, and five. In English (a stressed language), the ideas can be expressed with a short line, a long line, and another short line. Sometimes, haiku can turn out very bad and cheesy. Pick a good topic.
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2Choose a season. Many haiku seem to focus on nature, but what they are really focusing on is a seasonal reference (not all of which are necessarily about nature). Japanese poets use a "saijiki" or season word almanac to check the seasonal association for key words that they might use in a haiku (thus the haiku is a seasonal poem, and thus often about nature, but does not have to be about nature if the seasonal reference is about a human activity). The season is important for coming up with words to use in a haiku. Because the poem has so few words, simple phrases such as "cherry blossoms" or "falling leaves" can create lush scenes, yet still reflect the feeling of the verse. Moreover, season words also invoke other poems that use the same season word, making the poem part of a rich historical tapestry through allusive variation. In Japanese, the "kigo" or season word was generally understood; "autumn breeze" might be known to express loneliness and the coming of the dark winter season
Winter usually makes us think of burden, cold, sadness, hunger, tranquility or peace. Ideas about winter can be invited with words like "snow," "ice," "dead tree," "leafless," etc.
Summer brings about feelings of warmth, vibrancy, love, anger, and many others. General summer phrases include references to the sky, beaches, heat, and romance.
Autumn brings to mind a very wide range of ideas: decay, belief in the supernatural, jealousy, saying goodbye, loss, regret, and mystery to name a few. Falling leaves, shadows, and autumn colors are common implementations.
Spring, like summer, can make one think of love, but it is usually more a sense of infatuation. Also common are themes like innocence, youth, passion, and fickleness. Blossoms, new plants, or warm rains can imply spring. For more information on seasons, go to the link listed below.
Seasonal references can also include human activities, and Japanese saijikis contain many such listings. Be aware that some references to human activities, such as Christmas, are effective season words, but require a geographical limitation; while Christmas is a winter season word in the northern hemisphere, it's a summer reference in the southern hemisphere.
3Add a contrast or comparison. Reading most haiku, you'll notice they either present one idea for the first two lines and then switch quickly to something else or do the same with the first line and last two. A Japanese haiku achieves this shift with what is called a "kireji" or cutting word, which cuts the poem into two parts. In English, it is essential for nearly every haiku to have this two-part juxtapositional structure. The idea is to create a leap between the two parts, and to create an intuitive realization from what has been called an "internal comparison." These two parts sometimes create a contrast, sometime a comparison. Creating this two-part structure effectively can be the hardest part of writing a haiku, because it can be very difficult to avoid too obvious a connection between the two parts, yet also avoid too great a distance between them that becomes obscure and unclear. The haiku poet wants to come up with the perfect words to spark the emotions (not ideas) they wish to communicate. It doesn't have to be extremely severe; it can be anything from one color to another. In English, punctuation between the two lines can create that contrast, although this is not necessary provided that the grammar clearly indicates that a shift has occurred.
4Use primarily objective sensory description. Haiku are based on the five senses. They are about things you can experience, not your interpretation or analysis of those things. To do this effectively, it is good to rely on sensory description, and to use mostly objective rather than subjective words.
5Like any other art, haiku takes practice. Basho said that each haiku should be a thousand times on the tongue. It is also important to read good haiku, and not just translations from the Japanese but the best literary haiku being written in English. To learn haiku properly, it is important to take it beyond the superficial or even sometimes incorrect ways it has been taught in most grade schools. It is important to distinguish between pseudo-haiku that says whatever it wants in a 5-7-5 syllable pattern and literary haiku that adheres to the use of season words, a two-part juxtapositional structure, and primarily objective sensory imagery.
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Tuesday, May 4, 2010
Monday Poem::::: "I P L Confetti"
"I P L Confetti."::::::::::::: A Poem.
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" Views: 38
Apr 26, 2010 8:20 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia "IPL Confetti"
IPL is a cricket game
for the common spectator
controlled by uncommon interests.
A $4.00 billion extravaganza
is a gentleman's game
where kickbacks, betting is the name.
IPL has an emotional quotient
where crowds cry,laugh,clap,
in sadness,happiness,victory.
IPL has a happiness factor
where corporate czars are pumping $
for players,officials,go-getters,others.
IPL has a sadness factor
for those where a last ball
turns victory into a defeat.
IPL has a glamour factor
for its doors open stunningly
with cheer girls,bollywood shows,
ending with night-sky fire-works display.
Now, there is real danger to IPL
mistrusts,allegations,skull-duggery
poses a challenge to this noble game
Because,all the horses,
all the King's men cannot put
magnificient IPL on its thrown again!
--The End--
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All rights reserved.
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Apr 26, 2010 8:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Tegarden Dear Manohar,
thank you for informing us of the fate of this "game of kings", I hope it works out, for the sake of its fans.
In the last stanza, I think you meant "throne" (the seat of kings) not "thrown" (to pitch a ball).
Respectfully,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Apr 26, 2010 8:52 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Di,
Thanks for your valuable comments.In the last stanza, there is typo error...it is "throne"(the seat of Kings).
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 26, 2010 9:19 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Your poem is so topical, all newspapers, television channels, headlining that and just that. With its scandal, puts a Bollywood movie in a shadow.
I would say,
Lalit Modi sat on a IPL Wall
Lalit Modi had a great fall
All Sharad Pawar's machinations
Couldn't put Lalit together again
Good one Manohar
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Apr 26, 2010 11:31 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Since I don't know anything about cricket I cannot understand the implications but can nonetheless enjoy your poem.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Apr 26, 2010 11:36 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
This IPL has brought shame to this game of cricket.Right from the start it has looked something other than cricket.How shamelessly they befool the world.
Cricket has suffered many jolts in the recent past and this IPL has been the latest insult.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Apr 27, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Teresa Mahieu This did bring the nursery rhyme of Humpty Dumpty to mind. Not understanding the game or ramifications I still enjoy your poem greatly.
Tess
Private Reply to Teresa Mahieu
Apr 28, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Teresa,
Yes, I had the Humpty/Dumpty duo in my mind for the last stanza.Thanks maam for reading and enjoying the poem.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" Views: 38
Apr 26, 2010 8:20 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia "IPL Confetti"
IPL is a cricket game
for the common spectator
controlled by uncommon interests.
A $4.00 billion extravaganza
is a gentleman's game
where kickbacks, betting is the name.
IPL has an emotional quotient
where crowds cry,laugh,clap,
in sadness,happiness,victory.
IPL has a happiness factor
where corporate czars are pumping $
for players,officials,go-getters,others.
IPL has a sadness factor
for those where a last ball
turns victory into a defeat.
IPL has a glamour factor
for its doors open stunningly
with cheer girls,bollywood shows,
ending with night-sky fire-works display.
Now, there is real danger to IPL
mistrusts,allegations,skull-duggery
poses a challenge to this noble game
Because,all the horses,
all the King's men cannot put
magnificient IPL on its thrown again!
--The End--
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights reserved.
Private Reply to Manohar Bhatia Delete your post
Apr 26, 2010 8:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Tegarden Dear Manohar,
thank you for informing us of the fate of this "game of kings", I hope it works out, for the sake of its fans.
In the last stanza, I think you meant "throne" (the seat of kings) not "thrown" (to pitch a ball).
Respectfully,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Apr 26, 2010 8:52 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Di,
Thanks for your valuable comments.In the last stanza, there is typo error...it is "throne"(the seat of Kings).
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 26, 2010 9:19 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Your poem is so topical, all newspapers, television channels, headlining that and just that. With its scandal, puts a Bollywood movie in a shadow.
I would say,
Lalit Modi sat on a IPL Wall
Lalit Modi had a great fall
All Sharad Pawar's machinations
Couldn't put Lalit together again
Good one Manohar
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Apr 26, 2010 11:31 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
Since I don't know anything about cricket I cannot understand the implications but can nonetheless enjoy your poem.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Apr 26, 2010 11:36 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
This IPL has brought shame to this game of cricket.Right from the start it has looked something other than cricket.How shamelessly they befool the world.
Cricket has suffered many jolts in the recent past and this IPL has been the latest insult.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Apr 27, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Teresa Mahieu This did bring the nursery rhyme of Humpty Dumpty to mind. Not understanding the game or ramifications I still enjoy your poem greatly.
Tess
Private Reply to Teresa Mahieu
Apr 28, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Teresa,
Yes, I had the Humpty/Dumpty duo in my mind for the last stanza.Thanks maam for reading and enjoying the poem.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: __________ "Change"________
__________"Change"________
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" Views: 20
May 03, 2010 6:35 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" Views: 20
May 03, 2010 6:35 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Tuesday, April 20, 2010
Monday Poem::::::: "What Is This Life.............?"
Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is This Life..............?" Views: 23
Apr 19, 2010 3:24 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia What is this life full of trouble
all the time for a rumble
but no time for a quiet grumble?
What is this life full of tension
all the time for an apprehension
but no time for an introspection?
What is this life full of discussion
all the time for a confrontation
but no time for an innovation?
What is life full of cocophony
all the time for blasphemy
but no time for hegemony?
What is life full of sadness
all the time for total madness
but no time for little goodness?
What is life full of doomsday
all the time for a death-day
but no time for an eventful day?
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
-----The End----
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All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 19, 2010 9:03 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
good questions! Who knows why we become bitter and loose our playfulness.....sometimes life can just wear you down.
To a brighter day,
Diane
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Apr 19, 2010 9:30 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Jack Huber Manohar,
You are fulfilling your job as a poet in asking these poignant questions. Well done. I look forward to your future poem that tries to answer them.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Apr 19, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
you have got a peculiar style of writing poetry.
This poem is in the nature of a debate putting some valid questions.It takes a whole life to answer such questions.i enjoyed the following lines especially:-
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Apr 19, 2010 1:23 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have asked some very poignant questions that most people don't even think about let alone ask themselves. Perhaps if they did, your questions would not have to be asked? Your poem is very thought-provoking.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Apr 20, 2010 12:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
I concur with Ayub, you have a very distinctive style which has become your signature. Very thought provoking questions you have asked, I wish we had the right answers!
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Apr 20, 2010 1:51 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Di::::I am an issue-based person and my mind always ticks on how to bring harmony in the world.Thanks for reading.
Jack::Yes,definitely I will try for some answers in my future poems.
Ayub::Yes,I do have my own style of writing poetry.Good that you enjoyed the last triplet.
Diane:Its very nice to read your response on the poem.
Maya::Your kind words are wholly appreciated.
Manohar Bhatia
Apr 19, 2010 3:24 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia What is this life full of trouble
all the time for a rumble
but no time for a quiet grumble?
What is this life full of tension
all the time for an apprehension
but no time for an introspection?
What is this life full of discussion
all the time for a confrontation
but no time for an innovation?
What is life full of cocophony
all the time for blasphemy
but no time for hegemony?
What is life full of sadness
all the time for total madness
but no time for little goodness?
What is life full of doomsday
all the time for a death-day
but no time for an eventful day?
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
-----The End----
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All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 19, 2010 9:03 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
good questions! Who knows why we become bitter and loose our playfulness.....sometimes life can just wear you down.
To a brighter day,
Diane
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Apr 19, 2010 9:30 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Jack Huber Manohar,
You are fulfilling your job as a poet in asking these poignant questions. Well done. I look forward to your future poem that tries to answer them.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Apr 19, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
you have got a peculiar style of writing poetry.
This poem is in the nature of a debate putting some valid questions.It takes a whole life to answer such questions.i enjoyed the following lines especially:-
What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Apr 19, 2010 1:23 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have asked some very poignant questions that most people don't even think about let alone ask themselves. Perhaps if they did, your questions would not have to be asked? Your poem is very thought-provoking.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Apr 20, 2010 12:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
I concur with Ayub, you have a very distinctive style which has become your signature. Very thought provoking questions you have asked, I wish we had the right answers!
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Apr 20, 2010 1:51 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Di::::I am an issue-based person and my mind always ticks on how to bring harmony in the world.Thanks for reading.
Jack::Yes,definitely I will try for some answers in my future poems.
Ayub::Yes,I do have my own style of writing poetry.Good that you enjoyed the last triplet.
Diane:Its very nice to read your response on the poem.
Maya::Your kind words are wholly appreciated.
Manohar Bhatia
Monday Poem:::::: "The City In Seige."
::::::::::: "The City In Siege." Views: 24
Apr 12, 2010 8:14 am Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
I just saw a photo of this city and this poem came to me::::::::::
"The City In Siege."
This city in the range
is as dangerous a place
as a badge on his shirt
the Sheriff is doing his duty
to wipe out out-laws from ghost town.
Mid-night calm is
as sinister as a dawn
all looking quiet
except the barks of dogs.
High noon on the near-by river
looks suicidal in a summer
for youngsters wanting to swim
invited by the river grim.
A spring evening
looks full of promise
honey-bees collect pollens
buzzing to ferilize in stems.
In the bar after office-hours
the suspence is scary
No soul in sight
only a bartender for a cigarette
to light for a brave soul.
The dusty road
is nostalgic for me
where me and my beloved
were sick with passionate love.
Dons in this fearsome city
are happy-go-lucky
as a child of innocense
giving an endearing smile.
Alas! The Sheriff looks helpless!
--The End--
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Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 12, 2010 8:41 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
now that you know how to post a picture, maybe you can let us see the accompanying image? Your words tell of us a dusty and desperate little place, I'm imagining somewhere in the US' Old West.
Many a cowboy movie was filmed in such a town,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Apr 12, 2010 3:29 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Jack Huber Manohar, you are full of similes and metaphors today... An interesting look at a wild west town- thanks for sharing it.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Apr 13, 2010 5:23 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Di & Jack,
Actually,lots of old cowboys movies had the same setting of an old town in the mid-fifties,where constant raidng by the out-laws was the order of the day.The gun battle between out-laws and the Sheriff was an every day affair.I also remember of a beautiful horse-carriage driven by a faithful bearded old man,important passengers being a stunningly pretty rich lady and his escort and maybe laoded with a trunk of gold!
This one is from the movie::::"Gun Fight At The O.K. Corral" ...I think It was Burt Lancaster and......other famous actor..I think Clint Eastwood.
I have a photo and I try to post it.Thanks for your comments on my silly poem.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 13, 2010 8:19 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
A very imaginative poem,you have captured many images and painted them skilfully.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Apr 13, 2010 11:08 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have created a picturesque word painting describing the place and the people. Good job!
Diane
Apr 12, 2010 8:14 am Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
I just saw a photo of this city and this poem came to me::::::::::
"The City In Siege."
This city in the range
is as dangerous a place
as a badge on his shirt
the Sheriff is doing his duty
to wipe out out-laws from ghost town.
Mid-night calm is
as sinister as a dawn
all looking quiet
except the barks of dogs.
High noon on the near-by river
looks suicidal in a summer
for youngsters wanting to swim
invited by the river grim.
A spring evening
looks full of promise
honey-bees collect pollens
buzzing to ferilize in stems.
In the bar after office-hours
the suspence is scary
No soul in sight
only a bartender for a cigarette
to light for a brave soul.
The dusty road
is nostalgic for me
where me and my beloved
were sick with passionate love.
Dons in this fearsome city
are happy-go-lucky
as a child of innocense
giving an endearing smile.
Alas! The Sheriff looks helpless!
--The End--
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 12, 2010 8:41 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
now that you know how to post a picture, maybe you can let us see the accompanying image? Your words tell of us a dusty and desperate little place, I'm imagining somewhere in the US' Old West.
Many a cowboy movie was filmed in such a town,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Apr 12, 2010 3:29 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Jack Huber Manohar, you are full of similes and metaphors today... An interesting look at a wild west town- thanks for sharing it.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Apr 13, 2010 5:23 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Manohar Bhatia Di & Jack,
Actually,lots of old cowboys movies had the same setting of an old town in the mid-fifties,where constant raidng by the out-laws was the order of the day.The gun battle between out-laws and the Sheriff was an every day affair.I also remember of a beautiful horse-carriage driven by a faithful bearded old man,important passengers being a stunningly pretty rich lady and his escort and maybe laoded with a trunk of gold!
This one is from the movie::::"Gun Fight At The O.K. Corral" ...I think It was Burt Lancaster and......other famous actor..I think Clint Eastwood.
I have a photo and I try to post it.Thanks for your comments on my silly poem.
Manohar Bhatia
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Apr 13, 2010 8:19 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
A very imaginative poem,you have captured many images and painted them skilfully.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Apr 13, 2010 11:08 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have created a picturesque word painting describing the place and the people. Good job!
Diane
Monday, April 5, 2010
Monday Poem::::::::"Why Switch Off Lights?"
Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" Views: 35
Mar 29, 2010 6:57 am Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
Since it was an Earth Hour on 26th March,2010,requesting everyone to switch off power from 7.30p.m to 8.30p.m.I thought I will try out a poem::::::::::::::
"Why Switch Off Lights?"
Why switch off lights today?
beacause greed for 'power'is growing
to cater to man's unsatiable thirst
for progress in building new apartments
but succeeding in only in creating unbalanced society
where poor,downtrodden,suffer to eat food
left by noveau rich,celebs,others
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights lights to-day?
So that all gambling dens close
that may lead to rape,murder,extortion,
where the honest get caught
in cross-fire between 'A'& 'B' company
to be accidently bumped off in this encounter
for their kith & kin to mourns their deaths
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that drinking bars have a dry day
alerting regular drinkers to face a test
and compulsive drinkers a forced rest
Also,lady tipplers a moment to ponder
to set their houses & children in order
and release them from this deadly habit
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that we save enough power
for the have nots to see a ray of light
in their dwellings not seen for decades
and make them to feel humans too
to seek their trust,blessings,smiles,
which they have never experienced before.
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that peace prevails in one hour
for everyone to enjoy some unforgetful moments
of hearing birds humming in the trees,
honey-bees merrily buzzing amongst flowers,
the pleasant sound of cool wind whistling,
allowing tiny waves splash delecately on beach front,
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
--The End--
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Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 29, 2010 9:08 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
your poem tells us how we have become a society that wastes more than we need, and how the "haves" take so much away from the "have nots" until we are blind to our over consumption. A good moral tale.
Thank you for making us stop and think about how we live,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Mar 29, 2010 11:17 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manoha,
of couse, we should switch off lights to remind ourselves that we have many human responsibilities as emphatically counted by you.Global warming is a horror but many other things keep the globe boiling.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Mar 29, 2010 12:45 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar, your poem is an apt reminder, a timely wake up call. Nature had enough for everyones needs but not their greed.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Mar 29, 2010 5:12 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have aptly brought out a strong message that people everywhere need to not only hear but also heed.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Mar 30, 2010 5:40 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Susan Graves Manohar
Thanks you just gave me an idea for this Thursdays Green Grove Post
Susan
Private Reply to Susan Graves
Mar 31, 2010 6:12 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di,Ayub,Maya,Diane & Susan::::::::::::::Thank you to each of you for your comments,which I always treasure.
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 29, 2010 6:57 am Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Members,
Since it was an Earth Hour on 26th March,2010,requesting everyone to switch off power from 7.30p.m to 8.30p.m.I thought I will try out a poem::::::::::::::
"Why Switch Off Lights?"
Why switch off lights today?
beacause greed for 'power'is growing
to cater to man's unsatiable thirst
for progress in building new apartments
but succeeding in only in creating unbalanced society
where poor,downtrodden,suffer to eat food
left by noveau rich,celebs,others
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights lights to-day?
So that all gambling dens close
that may lead to rape,murder,extortion,
where the honest get caught
in cross-fire between 'A'& 'B' company
to be accidently bumped off in this encounter
for their kith & kin to mourns their deaths
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that drinking bars have a dry day
alerting regular drinkers to face a test
and compulsive drinkers a forced rest
Also,lady tipplers a moment to ponder
to set their houses & children in order
and release them from this deadly habit
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that we save enough power
for the have nots to see a ray of light
in their dwellings not seen for decades
and make them to feel humans too
to seek their trust,blessings,smiles,
which they have never experienced before.
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
Why switch off lights to-day?
so that peace prevails in one hour
for everyone to enjoy some unforgetful moments
of hearing birds humming in the trees,
honey-bees merrily buzzing amongst flowers,
the pleasant sound of cool wind whistling,
allowing tiny waves splash delecately on beach front,
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!
--The End--
Copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 29, 2010 9:08 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
your poem tells us how we have become a society that wastes more than we need, and how the "haves" take so much away from the "have nots" until we are blind to our over consumption. A good moral tale.
Thank you for making us stop and think about how we live,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Mar 29, 2010 11:17 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manoha,
of couse, we should switch off lights to remind ourselves that we have many human responsibilities as emphatically counted by you.Global warming is a horror but many other things keep the globe boiling.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Mar 29, 2010 12:45 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Maya Mahant Manohar, your poem is an apt reminder, a timely wake up call. Nature had enough for everyones needs but not their greed.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Mar 29, 2010 5:12 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
You have aptly brought out a strong message that people everywhere need to not only hear but also heed.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Mar 30, 2010 5:40 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Susan Graves Manohar
Thanks you just gave me an idea for this Thursdays Green Grove Post
Susan
Private Reply to Susan Graves
Mar 31, 2010 6:12 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di,Ayub,Maya,Diane & Susan::::::::::::::Thank you to each of you for your comments,which I always treasure.
Manohar Bhatia
F.O.R.M. Poem::::::: Crapsey Cinquain.
F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain Views: 39
Mar 30, 2010 8:17 pm F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Crapsey Cinquain
A cinquain can refer to any five-line poem with a set pattern or syllable count. Adelaide Crapsey, however, made the cinquain her own. Born in Brooklyn, NY, in 1878, at the turn of the century she was class poet at Vassar College in Poughkeepsie. Before her death of tuberculosis, her interest in haiku and tanka led her to develop her own cinquain patterns, as well as a new form of "doublet," a couplet that utilized two rhyming lines of ten syllables each. Much of Adelaide's work was published posthumously and it was Carl Sandburg's poem, "Adelaide Crapsey," that re-established her and her art form in popular culture.
Without rhyming, the Crapsey cinquain was most often written in iambic meter ("duh-DUM") and had a set syllable pattern. Its 22 syllables were arranged in lines of 2,4,6,8 and 2 syllables, respectively, for lines one through five.
Crapsey cinquains are the most popular but variations do exist. A “reverse cinquain” has a syllable pattern of 2-8-6-4-2 and a “mirror cinquain” pairs the Crapsey or standard cinquain with the reverse. Combining the two "mirror cinquain" stanzas and eliminating one of the two-syllable lines in the middle creates a nine-line “butterfly cinquain.” Link five stanzas and you have a “crown cinquain.” There seems to be no shortage of variations.
Examples:
Lightning
Its flash,
a brilliant test
of nighttime's secrecy,
exposes for an instant, then
escapes.
Cardinal
Red bird,
your glorious
plumage is radiant,
as your male ego is displayed
for her.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Mar 31, 2010 6:35 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I am trying out this Crapsey Cinquain::::::
Pink Necked Flamingoes.
Pink necks (2)
are eye-catching (4)
to watch in amazement (6)
especially picking fish from (8)
mud flats. (2)
I hope to be corrected.Thanks Jack for teaching me this easy new F.O.R.M.
Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 31, 2010 7:05 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
dalip daswani
HEN
ruffle
your tail no more
your shimmering colors
no longer fascinate cocky
peacock
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Mar 31, 2010 9:01 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Hard Rock
Three 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck,
carat, colour, clarity; a
diamond
Hard Rock
(Butterfly)
Four 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck
carat, cut, colour, clarity
hard rock.
Brilliant in gold or platinum
love's circlet forever;
girl's best friend, a
diamond.
Jack I am not sure of the syllable count of line 4 of both the poems.. carat (2), colour (2) clarity (3) cut (1)....?
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Mar 31, 2010 11:25 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Manohar, Dalip and Maya, all are splendid examples of Crapsey cinquains, which now make you Crapsey poets...
Maya, your syllable counts are correct, but you might want to change "buck" to "bucks" (a million bucks).
Good job!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Mar 31, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Thanks Jack, I will. Happened with copy paste, missed the typo.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Apr 01, 2010 7:38 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Hip,hip,hurrays.........3 cheers to our very dear Jack,for teaching us this new F.O.R.M.God bless everyone in your family.
Manohar Bhatia
Mar 30, 2010 8:17 pm F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Crapsey Cinquain
A cinquain can refer to any five-line poem with a set pattern or syllable count. Adelaide Crapsey, however, made the cinquain her own. Born in Brooklyn, NY, in 1878, at the turn of the century she was class poet at Vassar College in Poughkeepsie. Before her death of tuberculosis, her interest in haiku and tanka led her to develop her own cinquain patterns, as well as a new form of "doublet," a couplet that utilized two rhyming lines of ten syllables each. Much of Adelaide's work was published posthumously and it was Carl Sandburg's poem, "Adelaide Crapsey," that re-established her and her art form in popular culture.
Without rhyming, the Crapsey cinquain was most often written in iambic meter ("duh-DUM") and had a set syllable pattern. Its 22 syllables were arranged in lines of 2,4,6,8 and 2 syllables, respectively, for lines one through five.
Crapsey cinquains are the most popular but variations do exist. A “reverse cinquain” has a syllable pattern of 2-8-6-4-2 and a “mirror cinquain” pairs the Crapsey or standard cinquain with the reverse. Combining the two "mirror cinquain" stanzas and eliminating one of the two-syllable lines in the middle creates a nine-line “butterfly cinquain.” Link five stanzas and you have a “crown cinquain.” There seems to be no shortage of variations.
Examples:
Lightning
Its flash,
a brilliant test
of nighttime's secrecy,
exposes for an instant, then
escapes.
Cardinal
Red bird,
your glorious
plumage is radiant,
as your male ego is displayed
for her.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Mar 31, 2010 6:35 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I am trying out this Crapsey Cinquain::::::
Pink Necked Flamingoes.
Pink necks (2)
are eye-catching (4)
to watch in amazement (6)
especially picking fish from (8)
mud flats. (2)
I hope to be corrected.Thanks Jack for teaching me this easy new F.O.R.M.
Manohar Bhatia
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Mar 31, 2010 7:05 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
dalip daswani
HEN
ruffle
your tail no more
your shimmering colors
no longer fascinate cocky
peacock
Private Reply to dalip daswani
Mar 31, 2010 9:01 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Hard Rock
Three 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck,
carat, colour, clarity; a
diamond
Hard Rock
(Butterfly)
Four 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck
carat, cut, colour, clarity
hard rock.
Brilliant in gold or platinum
love's circlet forever;
girl's best friend, a
diamond.
Jack I am not sure of the syllable count of line 4 of both the poems.. carat (2), colour (2) clarity (3) cut (1)....?
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Mar 31, 2010 11:25 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Jack Huber Manohar, Dalip and Maya, all are splendid examples of Crapsey cinquains, which now make you Crapsey poets...
Maya, your syllable counts are correct, but you might want to change "buck" to "bucks" (a million bucks).
Good job!
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Mar 31, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Maya Mahant Thanks Jack, I will. Happened with copy paste, missed the typo.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Apr 01, 2010 7:38 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Hip,hip,hurrays.........3 cheers to our very dear Jack,for teaching us this new F.O.R.M.God bless everyone in your family.
Manohar Bhatia
Thursday, April 1, 2010
"Music That 'Cures' Deafness"_______ABNA Reviews
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Amazon Breakthrough Novel Award Reviews
ABNA Expert Reviewer
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
This writer has a curious style – at once childish and yet descriptive. Since it is coming from another culture, I came to appreciate the choppiness of the prose after a few paragraphs. The allegories were fun.
What aspect needs the most work?
Overall, I found the language to be perhaps a bit TOO simple and childish, and feel the author needs to revisit their story for some editing and tightening up of the story without losing any of the essential English-as-a-second-language flavor.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
I found myself surprised that I liked it and found the story engaging. The author writes in a kind of pidgin English that is easy to understand and also very charming.
ABNA Expert Reviewer
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
The story takes place in an unfamiliar environment, the most impoverished province in India (Uttar Pradesh). This draws the reader in, because the reader will be interested in strange cultural practices and strange traditions.
What aspect needs the most work?
The narrative reads: "Brahmin food is pure vegetarian and varied. There is Dal(pulses), Kadhi,(a kind of soup) Chappatis,(Bread)" I recommend that each of these foods be expanded to an entire paragraph. The writer could desribe the fragrance and color and method of preparation (boiling for three hours, baking for ten minutes) for each of these foods. By not pausing to describe the foods, the author has missed an opportunity for providing interesting writing. Also, when we read the character "Suryanavshi," I suggest that the author devote a sentence or two describing how to pronounce this name, and to describe alternate pronunciations, and to describing similar names in India. By not pausing to focus on this name, or on the origin of this name, the author has lost an opportunity for providing some interesting writing.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
This story is refreshing among most of the samples provided by Amazon.com, in that it is easy to understand what is going on, despite the unfamiliar environment of the present story (a remote province in India). In other words, in most of the stories provided by Amazon.com, the authors clutter up the narratives of ordinary, prosaic events, by plunging into details about the weather, or about exaggerated emotions, or about irrelevant things, like traffic. But the present story, about India, does NOT suffer from these problems. Although the prose does seem to be written by an amateur-author, the author writes clearly and it is easy for the reader to see that a genuine story is being developed. I would have liked the author to have added more bizarre customs from India, for example (this is my own made-up example), animal sacrifice. I know, for example, that 150 years ago in India they had human sacrifice in a practice called, "Satti." Therefore, I would expect some bizarre practices to still be in practice in India, and I would have liked to have seen them integrated into this story///////////////////(End of Review)
Manohar Bhatia comments on the reviews:::::;
I do appreciate ABNA reviewers.The first reviewer said that he is surprised at my childish writing and yet likes reading my excerpt.He is impressed by the overall opinion of the excerpt and found the story engaging......I found I have scored here.Although I write pidgin English, but still he found it very charming.
The second reviewer says that although the story is set in the most improvished province of India(Uttar Pradesh),still this reviewer feels will draw the reader in ,so that he can know strange cultural practices and traditions.Overall,he found the story refreshing among other samples sent on amazon.com
Amazon Breakthrough Novel Award Reviews
ABNA Expert Reviewer
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
This writer has a curious style – at once childish and yet descriptive. Since it is coming from another culture, I came to appreciate the choppiness of the prose after a few paragraphs. The allegories were fun.
What aspect needs the most work?
Overall, I found the language to be perhaps a bit TOO simple and childish, and feel the author needs to revisit their story for some editing and tightening up of the story without losing any of the essential English-as-a-second-language flavor.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
I found myself surprised that I liked it and found the story engaging. The author writes in a kind of pidgin English that is easy to understand and also very charming.
ABNA Expert Reviewer
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
The story takes place in an unfamiliar environment, the most impoverished province in India (Uttar Pradesh). This draws the reader in, because the reader will be interested in strange cultural practices and strange traditions.
What aspect needs the most work?
The narrative reads: "Brahmin food is pure vegetarian and varied. There is Dal(pulses), Kadhi,(a kind of soup) Chappatis,(Bread)" I recommend that each of these foods be expanded to an entire paragraph. The writer could desribe the fragrance and color and method of preparation (boiling for three hours, baking for ten minutes) for each of these foods. By not pausing to describe the foods, the author has missed an opportunity for providing interesting writing. Also, when we read the character "Suryanavshi," I suggest that the author devote a sentence or two describing how to pronounce this name, and to describe alternate pronunciations, and to describing similar names in India. By not pausing to focus on this name, or on the origin of this name, the author has lost an opportunity for providing some interesting writing.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
This story is refreshing among most of the samples provided by Amazon.com, in that it is easy to understand what is going on, despite the unfamiliar environment of the present story (a remote province in India). In other words, in most of the stories provided by Amazon.com, the authors clutter up the narratives of ordinary, prosaic events, by plunging into details about the weather, or about exaggerated emotions, or about irrelevant things, like traffic. But the present story, about India, does NOT suffer from these problems. Although the prose does seem to be written by an amateur-author, the author writes clearly and it is easy for the reader to see that a genuine story is being developed. I would have liked the author to have added more bizarre customs from India, for example (this is my own made-up example), animal sacrifice. I know, for example, that 150 years ago in India they had human sacrifice in a practice called, "Satti." Therefore, I would expect some bizarre practices to still be in practice in India, and I would have liked to have seen them integrated into this story///////////////////(End of Review)
Manohar Bhatia comments on the reviews:::::;
I do appreciate ABNA reviewers.The first reviewer said that he is surprised at my childish writing and yet likes reading my excerpt.He is impressed by the overall opinion of the excerpt and found the story engaging......I found I have scored here.Although I write pidgin English, but still he found it very charming.
The second reviewer says that although the story is set in the most improvished province of India(Uttar Pradesh),still this reviewer feels will draw the reader in ,so that he can know strange cultural practices and traditions.Overall,he found the story refreshing among other samples sent on amazon.com
Thursday, March 25, 2010
Shall we be friends?:::::::::::e-mail addresses.
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let's be friends, shall we??? Views: 280
Jun 12, 2009 4:31 pm let's be friends, shall we??? #
Diane Tegarden A new member (RDJ) gave me a great idea...
in order to be listed as a friend here on Ryze we need each other's email addy, so here's mine, feel free to add me as a friend!
rosefirewalker@aol.com
Please list your email on this thread so the other members can also add you as a friend. It's an easy way to remember their birthday, because Ryze will alert you when their birthday is coming up and you can pop in and wish them well!
huggles and buggles,
Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 12, 2009 5:31 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Aditya Prasad mine is aditya_prasad_online@yahoo.com
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Jun 12, 2009 7:03 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
RD Jentsch Diane;
I'm glad you had such a great idea. Here is my email so we can all network.
RD
bekjents@gmail.com
Feel free to check out my page and email me directly if you need any help. :)
Private Reply to RD Jentsch
Jun 12, 2009 8:04 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Diane Tegarden you got it RD and Aditya, we're friends now!!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 13, 2009 1:38 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Jack Huber Mine's easy- jack@jackhuber.com.
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jun 13, 2009 1:52 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
dalip daswani just joined... a couple days ago, from Pune, India
my email id: ddalip@gmail.com
Diane, if I may suggest: could we also use this thread to `re-invent' or `re-visit' ourselves by sharing a short introduction - something different to what's already on our ryze page? (Or perhaps start a new thread for this - titled maybe "a visit to myself" or something like that?)
cheers, have a great weekend all, and happy to be here!
dalip daswani
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Jun 13, 2009 7:28 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Marsha Walker emybaker@yahoo.com
Writers are the geniuses that force us to step outside the box of the ordinary.
Marsha Dean Walker
www.lambkinwalterslavender.com
Private Reply to Marsha Walker
Jun 13, 2009 8:41 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Dalip) #
Diane Tegarden Dalip,
sounds like a good idea, please feel free to write a short introduction on the new thread, entitled "A little bit about me..."!
To The Dance of Life,
Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 13, 2009 10:07 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Dalip) #
Manohar Bhatia Hi all,
My e-mail id: fizz_buzz2006@yahoo.co.in
Thanks and take care!
Manohar Bhatia
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Jun 15, 2009 9:33 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Hiyaa Aashish Israni A warm hello to all and a warmer welcome to all new members!
My email ID is sandhyasuri@gmail.com
My maiden name is Sandhya Suri
My name is Hiyaa Aashish Israni
My nickname is Sandy
Cheers
Hiyaa
Private Reply to Hiyaa Aashish Israni
Jun 15, 2009 12:53 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Hello everybody,
Now don't forget to write to me and join me on chat here is my email id:
ndebra@gmail.com
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
Jun 15, 2009 3:39 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Gazelle Simmons Mine is help@admnsrvcs.com and I will definitely have to establish some more connections. Take care and God bless.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Gazelle Simmons, Virtual Assistant
Owner of Admin Services, http://www.admnsrvcs.com/
How to become a VA - http://vatools.frugaladnetwork.com/index.php/book-intro
Private Reply to Gazelle Simmons
Jun 17, 2009 1:43 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Glen Hamilton Sounds like great fun, count me in. my email is:
POBachs@aol.com
Please add me to your friends list.
Glen
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Jun 19, 2009 4:38 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Arvind Hi, I am here after a long time. Great idea RDJ.
Mine is : arvy.india@gmail.com
Arvind
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Jun 19, 2009 4:50 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
TIMOTHY MCAULIFFE tmcauliff656@hotmail I am in Brooklyn NY USA
Private Reply to TIMOTHY MCAULIFFE
Jun 19, 2009 8:18 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we???(Tim) #
Diane Tegarden Tim, without the .com at the end of your email, the address doesn't work!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 24, 2009 2:33 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Ashis Dutta mine is ashisdutta@gmail.com
Love
Ashis
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Jun 24, 2009 6:24 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
RVIyengar
iyengarrv@aol.com
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Jun 25, 2009 12:19 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Shanks Pandiath hi there
my contact add is spandiath3@dataone.in
my social network adds are available at
http://www.marketingaffiliater.com/contact.html
cheers
Private Reply to Shanks Pandiath
Jun 29, 2009 7:18 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Sarah Rahman You can always add me on:
ali.sarah7@gmail.com
Looking forward to get connected.
Cheers!
Private Reply to Sarah Rahman
Jul 01, 2009 6:48 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Ayub Bangroo
Mine is ayoubaz@rediffmail.com
Hope to ryze together.
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Jul 12, 2009 12:01 pm re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Lynn McMonigal My email address is lynnmcwriter@gmail.com
Lynn McMonigal
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Jul 25, 2009 9:17 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Claudia Suzanne Great idea, especially since I'm new on Ryze. I'm at claudiasuzanne@gmail.com
Claudia Suzanne
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Sep 09, 2009 5:16 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
sangeetha giri
Hi everyone,
My e-mail address is shrutigs06@yahoo.co.in
Sangeetha Giri
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Sep 29, 2009 10:17 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Yasamin Alttahir yasamin.alttahir@gmail.com
blog http://tcherrytree.blogspot.com/
Private Reply to Yasamin Alttahir
Sep 30, 2009 8:44 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Diane Stephenson I'm new here and my e-mail is dianestephenson.stemtechbiz@gmail.com.
When I get a little more time I'll post something about myself on the appropriate thread.
Diane
http://www.dianestephenson.com
http://bit.ly/VD6UE
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Sep 30, 2009 9:06 am let's be friends, shall we??? Added 6 friends today! #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub, Lynn, Claudia, Sangeetha Girl, Yasamin and Diane,
I have added you all as friends...expect a birthday wish on your birthdays!!
May You Never Thirst...for knowledge, for love...for water!
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Sep 30, 2009 9:24 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? Added 6 friends today! #
Diane Stephenson Thank you, Diane.
Diane
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Nov 09, 2009 1:10 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Maya Mahant my email id is mayamahant@hotmail.com
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Nov 10, 2009 12:50 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Vincent Narayanan And mine is naravincent@yahoo.co.in. I sure would love to be your friend.
Peace and Regards
Narayanan Vincent
Private Reply to Vincent Narayanan
Nov 10, 2009 7:50 am let's be friends, shall we??? (Maya and Vincent) #
Diane Tegarden
Maya and Vincent, you've been added to my friends list, for sure!
Have an adventure today!
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Nov 11, 2009 12:11 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Tim Smith Hi Diane and all,
My e-mail addy is timsjs@yahoo.com. I write a weekly post on my blog about interviews I do with people using alternative energy. I'm looking forward to learning how to better express myself by reading your words.
Private Reply to Tim Smith
Nov 11, 2009 12:34 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Marsha Walker Hi everyone,
School is done and I now have a masters in human services as well as being a board certified human services professional. Of course I am very pleased to announce that I did it with a 3.97 GPA. I am in the process of getting my radio shows set us and then I will rejoin you as before.
I have had some changes in my life and as they say when one door closes another one opens and in my case there was very handsome guy with the most incredible blue eyes standing in that door.
SpeciaL thanks to Lady Diane for all the love and support.
I hope things are good in your worlds and anyone who is interested in contacting me please feel free to do so at
emybaker@yahoo.com
Take care and see you soon!
Marsha
Private Reply to Marsha Walker
Nov 11, 2009 2:37 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Tim) #
Diane Tegarden
Tim,
please let us all know the URL of your blog so we can go and learn more on the positive effects of Renewable Energy on the environment! And don't forget to post the blog (or at least some part of it) every Thursday on Susan Graves' Green Grove Thursday thread. (Thanks for bringing Tim on board Susan!)
I'm excited about our upcoming Skype interview and will contact you shortly to get the time, day and date so I can let everyone know when we'll be "on the air"!
A hearty welcome from the gang here at WPWU,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Nov 11, 2009 2:45 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #
Diane Tegarden
Dearest Lady M,
I'm just busting at the seams I'm so proud of your fantastic accomplishments, despite your personal injury (both to heart and back).
You are such a talented and truly magnificent woman, I'm so lucky to be considered among your friends. (Wish we lived closer so we could rage around the town together a bit!) What o what would they do with the two of us loose?
;>
Congratulations on your graduation and your grades, now you can come back to the fold....heh heh heh...oh my devious mind is aswirl...
Let me know when you plan to launch your new radio show and we can have a ball, busting myths about writing, and woes.
BTW, I may need some help setting up MY new BTR show, so when you get a minute next week, let's talk.
Yours in friendship and folly,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Mar 26, 2010 12:31 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #
Tom Gillispie writer/editor nc3022@yahoo.com
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Mar 26, 2010 12:44 am re: re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #
priya shah priyashah012@gmail.com
let's be friends, shall we??? Views: 280
Jun 12, 2009 4:31 pm let's be friends, shall we??? #
Diane Tegarden A new member (RDJ) gave me a great idea...
in order to be listed as a friend here on Ryze we need each other's email addy, so here's mine, feel free to add me as a friend!
rosefirewalker@aol.com
Please list your email on this thread so the other members can also add you as a friend. It's an easy way to remember their birthday, because Ryze will alert you when their birthday is coming up and you can pop in and wish them well!
huggles and buggles,
Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 12, 2009 5:31 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Aditya Prasad mine is aditya_prasad_online@yahoo.com
Private Reply to Aditya Prasad
Jun 12, 2009 7:03 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
RD Jentsch Diane;
I'm glad you had such a great idea. Here is my email so we can all network.
RD
bekjents@gmail.com
Feel free to check out my page and email me directly if you need any help. :)
Private Reply to RD Jentsch
Jun 12, 2009 8:04 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Diane Tegarden you got it RD and Aditya, we're friends now!!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 13, 2009 1:38 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Jack Huber Mine's easy- jack@jackhuber.com.
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jun 13, 2009 1:52 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
dalip daswani just joined... a couple days ago, from Pune, India
my email id: ddalip@gmail.com
Diane, if I may suggest: could we also use this thread to `re-invent' or `re-visit' ourselves by sharing a short introduction - something different to what's already on our ryze page? (Or perhaps start a new thread for this - titled maybe "a visit to myself" or something like that?)
cheers, have a great weekend all, and happy to be here!
dalip daswani
Private Reply to dalip daswani
Jun 13, 2009 7:28 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Marsha Walker emybaker@yahoo.com
Writers are the geniuses that force us to step outside the box of the ordinary.
Marsha Dean Walker
www.lambkinwalterslavender.com
Private Reply to Marsha Walker
Jun 13, 2009 8:41 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Dalip) #
Diane Tegarden Dalip,
sounds like a good idea, please feel free to write a short introduction on the new thread, entitled "A little bit about me..."!
To The Dance of Life,
Diane
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 13, 2009 10:07 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Dalip) #
Manohar Bhatia Hi all,
My e-mail id: fizz_buzz2006@yahoo.co.in
Thanks and take care!
Manohar Bhatia
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Jun 15, 2009 9:33 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Hiyaa Aashish Israni A warm hello to all and a warmer welcome to all new members!
My email ID is sandhyasuri@gmail.com
My maiden name is Sandhya Suri
My name is Hiyaa Aashish Israni
My nickname is Sandy
Cheers
Hiyaa
Private Reply to Hiyaa Aashish Israni
Jun 15, 2009 12:53 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Hello everybody,
Now don't forget to write to me and join me on chat here is my email id:
ndebra@gmail.com
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
Jun 15, 2009 3:39 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Gazelle Simmons Mine is help@admnsrvcs.com and I will definitely have to establish some more connections. Take care and God bless.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Gazelle Simmons, Virtual Assistant
Owner of Admin Services, http://www.admnsrvcs.com/
How to become a VA - http://vatools.frugaladnetwork.com/index.php/book-intro
Private Reply to Gazelle Simmons
Jun 17, 2009 1:43 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Glen Hamilton Sounds like great fun, count me in. my email is:
POBachs@aol.com
Please add me to your friends list.
Glen
Private Reply to Glen Hamilton
Jun 19, 2009 4:38 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Arvind Hi, I am here after a long time. Great idea RDJ.
Mine is : arvy.india@gmail.com
Arvind
Private Reply to Arvind
Jun 19, 2009 4:50 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
TIMOTHY MCAULIFFE tmcauliff656@hotmail I am in Brooklyn NY USA
Private Reply to TIMOTHY MCAULIFFE
Jun 19, 2009 8:18 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we???(Tim) #
Diane Tegarden Tim, without the .com at the end of your email, the address doesn't work!
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- are available at http://www.firewalkerpublications.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Jun 24, 2009 2:33 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Ashis Dutta mine is ashisdutta@gmail.com
Love
Ashis
Private Reply to Ashis Dutta
Jun 24, 2009 6:24 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
RVIyengar
iyengarrv@aol.com
Private Reply to RVIyengar
Jun 25, 2009 12:19 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Shanks Pandiath hi there
my contact add is spandiath3@dataone.in
my social network adds are available at
http://www.marketingaffiliater.com/contact.html
cheers
Private Reply to Shanks Pandiath
Jun 29, 2009 7:18 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Sarah Rahman You can always add me on:
ali.sarah7@gmail.com
Looking forward to get connected.
Cheers!
Private Reply to Sarah Rahman
Jul 01, 2009 6:48 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Ayub Bangroo
Mine is ayoubaz@rediffmail.com
Hope to ryze together.
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
Jul 12, 2009 12:01 pm re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Lynn McMonigal My email address is lynnmcwriter@gmail.com
Lynn McMonigal
Private Reply to Lynn McMonigal
Jul 25, 2009 9:17 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Claudia Suzanne Great idea, especially since I'm new on Ryze. I'm at claudiasuzanne@gmail.com
Claudia Suzanne
Private Reply to Claudia Suzanne
Sep 09, 2009 5:16 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
sangeetha giri
Hi everyone,
My e-mail address is shrutigs06@yahoo.co.in
Sangeetha Giri
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Sep 29, 2009 10:17 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Yasamin Alttahir yasamin.alttahir@gmail.com
blog http://tcherrytree.blogspot.com/
Private Reply to Yasamin Alttahir
Sep 30, 2009 8:44 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Diane Stephenson I'm new here and my e-mail is dianestephenson.stemtechbiz@gmail.com.
When I get a little more time I'll post something about myself on the appropriate thread.
Diane
http://www.dianestephenson.com
http://bit.ly/VD6UE
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Sep 30, 2009 9:06 am let's be friends, shall we??? Added 6 friends today! #
Diane Tegarden
Ayub, Lynn, Claudia, Sangeetha Girl, Yasamin and Diane,
I have added you all as friends...expect a birthday wish on your birthdays!!
May You Never Thirst...for knowledge, for love...for water!
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Sep 30, 2009 9:24 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? Added 6 friends today! #
Diane Stephenson Thank you, Diane.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
Nov 09, 2009 1:10 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Maya Mahant my email id is mayamahant@hotmail.com
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Nov 10, 2009 12:50 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Vincent Narayanan And mine is naravincent@yahoo.co.in. I sure would love to be your friend.
Peace and Regards
Narayanan Vincent
Private Reply to Vincent Narayanan
Nov 10, 2009 7:50 am let's be friends, shall we??? (Maya and Vincent) #
Diane Tegarden
Maya and Vincent, you've been added to my friends list, for sure!
Have an adventure today!
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Nov 11, 2009 12:11 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Tim Smith Hi Diane and all,
My e-mail addy is timsjs@yahoo.com. I write a weekly post on my blog about interviews I do with people using alternative energy. I'm looking forward to learning how to better express myself by reading your words.
Private Reply to Tim Smith
Nov 11, 2009 12:34 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #
Marsha Walker Hi everyone,
School is done and I now have a masters in human services as well as being a board certified human services professional. Of course I am very pleased to announce that I did it with a 3.97 GPA. I am in the process of getting my radio shows set us and then I will rejoin you as before.
I have had some changes in my life and as they say when one door closes another one opens and in my case there was very handsome guy with the most incredible blue eyes standing in that door.
SpeciaL thanks to Lady Diane for all the love and support.
I hope things are good in your worlds and anyone who is interested in contacting me please feel free to do so at
emybaker@yahoo.com
Take care and see you soon!
Marsha
Private Reply to Marsha Walker
Nov 11, 2009 2:37 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Tim) #
Diane Tegarden
Tim,
please let us all know the URL of your blog so we can go and learn more on the positive effects of Renewable Energy on the environment! And don't forget to post the blog (or at least some part of it) every Thursday on Susan Graves' Green Grove Thursday thread. (Thanks for bringing Tim on board Susan!)
I'm excited about our upcoming Skype interview and will contact you shortly to get the time, day and date so I can let everyone know when we'll be "on the air"!
A hearty welcome from the gang here at WPWU,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Nov 11, 2009 2:45 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #
Diane Tegarden
Dearest Lady M,
I'm just busting at the seams I'm so proud of your fantastic accomplishments, despite your personal injury (both to heart and back).
You are such a talented and truly magnificent woman, I'm so lucky to be considered among your friends. (Wish we lived closer so we could rage around the town together a bit!) What o what would they do with the two of us loose?
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Congratulations on your graduation and your grades, now you can come back to the fold....heh heh heh...oh my devious mind is aswirl...
Let me know when you plan to launch your new radio show and we can have a ball, busting myths about writing, and woes.
BTW, I may need some help setting up MY new BTR show, so when you get a minute next week, let's talk.
Yours in friendship and folly,
Diane T. and furfamily
Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
Private Reply to Diane Tegarden
Mar 26, 2010 12:31 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #
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Mar 26, 2010 12:44 am re: re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #
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