Jack Huber
Sestina The sestina is a very structured form of six sestets (six-line stanzas) followed by a triplet (or tercet, a three-line stanza) for a total of 39 lines. What sets it apart, however, is the re-use of the final word in each line of the first stanza in a specific order that is different in each subsequent stanza. All six repeating words appear in the triplet as well.The sestet is usually strictly metered and is commonly written in decasyllables, or lines of ten syllables each, but other formal structures are acceptable. Rhyming is not a requirement of the form, but if the first stanza rhymes (i.e. a-b-c-a-b-c or a-b-a-b-a-b) , the balance will rhyme by default, since the rhyming words are the ones repeated. However, the pattern of rhyme will only follow the sequence of last words for each stanza. In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by “a” only rhyme with other “a” lines, “b” lines only with other “b” lines, and so on.
The notation for the last words is “1” through “6,” for each of the six lines, thus the pattern of use is as follows:
Stanza 1: 1 2 3 4 5 6
Stanza 2: 6 1 5 2 4 3
Stanza 3: 3 6 4 1 2 5
Stanza 4: 5 3 2 6 1 4
Stanza 5: 4 5 1 3 6 2
Stanza 6: 2 4 6 5 3 1
Stanza 7: 6 2, 1 4, 5 3
The final triplet, using all six words in three lines, is a point in the sestet that can vary from form, using a different pattern (i.e. 1 2, 3 4, 5 6), or perhaps a couplet (two-line stanza, i.e. 6 2 1, 4 5 3). A rare format even ends on a haiku or senryu, utilizing the six repeated words in the accepted 5-7-5 syllabic pattern.
So, in the example below, 1=day, 2=cold, 3=place, 4=café, 5=hold and 6=embrace.
Example:A Picturesque Café
Regardless of the time of day,
or if a tempest's rain is cold,
my mind will wander to the place
where first we met, that quaint café,
when both our lives were still on hold;
we hadn't had our first embrace.
The world had left me to embrace
a job I suffered through each day,
no inspiration taking hold,
relentless as a common cold.
But in this picturesque cafe
my life was never out of place.
I hadn't known that in this place
I'd found a reason to embrace
my future and this old café.
I made my mind up on this day
that though the season's turning cold,
the promise of its warmth I'd hold.
A notion started, keeping hold,
that there was something in this place
which bore the brunt of passions cold,
where many felt love's kind embrace,
escaping from their trying day--
I'd someday own this aged café.
The atmosphere of my café,
an ambiance of which would hold the patrons' kindness through the day-
this would be the only place to offer all a warm embrace,
a lively shelter from the cold.
Through summer's drought and winter's cold,
my friends would come to my café
to help each other, love, embrace camaraderie,
while couples hold each other, like no other place
to spend their lives day after day.
I longingly embrace the cold
and greet the day in our cafe,
take hold of this, our perfect place.
Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber7 hours ago ·
Manohar Bhatia Jack,This is a very difficult one, but challenging.What's this life if its not a challenge?I am trying Jack to come up with this one.Will I be able to do it?
Manohar Bhatia.
Tuesday, August 31, 2010
Wednesday, August 4, 2010
F.O.R.M.Poetry:::::::::::::: Haiku & Senryu.
F.O.R.M.- Haiku and Senryu (revisited)
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Haiku and Senryu Haiku is one of the oldest Japanese forms of poetry. Originally written about the seasons of the year, currently nature is also an acceptable theme.Haiku does not rhyme and consists of 17 syllables in three lines in a 5–7–5 format (five syllables in line one, seven in line two, then five again). In classic haiku, there is usually a “cutting word” that turns the thoughts of the reader in an unexpected, sometimes ironic, direction. Although “haiku” has become a catch phrase that includes any and all 5-7-5-formatted poems, there are other poetic forms with that format. Senryu can be thought of as haiku that features human foibles or characteristics of life rather than nature or the seasons. It may or may not have a cutting word.Since they are short, titles of haiku or senryu are often taken from the poem’s first line or are simply numbered, though naming poems is completely up to the author without specific rules.Examples:Spring Harvest (Haiku)Spring harvest begins when revealed petals call out for tiny visits.Autumn Prepares Trees (Haiku)Autumn prepares trees for the brutal cold coming- a sleeping forest. Intensity (Senryu)Loud explosions fuelthe thrill of intensity in a stuntman's heart.Footprints (Senryu)For one brief moment the world can tell I was here, then sands recover. Copyright © 2008 by Jack Huber
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Jack,My haiku type of senryu::::::____Meditation___(senryu)[ In meditationcalmness suddenly resideseven in anger.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Jack Huber
A very good senryu, Manohar, and true.Jack
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Maya Mahant
Jack, here are my attempts....Mirage (Haiku)Summer's blazing sun,waves of heat or oasis?Mirage in the sands.Mother's Arms (Senryu)Even at fifty,found comfort, in mother's arms,bereft, she is gone.
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Jack Huber
Maya, these also conform to both haiku and senryu, as posted. Good work!Jack
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Pushpa Moorjani
Jack taught me HaikuA new form I learnt todayNo! Now won't forget!:))
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Jack Huber
Cute, Pushpa. You wrote a senryu about haiku...It does conform. Nice one.Jack
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Jack Huber
Haiku and Senryu Haiku is one of the oldest Japanese forms of poetry. Originally written about the seasons of the year, currently nature is also an acceptable theme.Haiku does not rhyme and consists of 17 syllables in three lines in a 5–7–5 format (five syllables in line one, seven in line two, then five again). In classic haiku, there is usually a “cutting word” that turns the thoughts of the reader in an unexpected, sometimes ironic, direction. Although “haiku” has become a catch phrase that includes any and all 5-7-5-formatted poems, there are other poetic forms with that format. Senryu can be thought of as haiku that features human foibles or characteristics of life rather than nature or the seasons. It may or may not have a cutting word.Since they are short, titles of haiku or senryu are often taken from the poem’s first line or are simply numbered, though naming poems is completely up to the author without specific rules.Examples:Spring Harvest (Haiku)Spring harvest begins when revealed petals call out for tiny visits.Autumn Prepares Trees (Haiku)Autumn prepares trees for the brutal cold coming- a sleeping forest. Intensity (Senryu)Loud explosions fuelthe thrill of intensity in a stuntman's heart.Footprints (Senryu)For one brief moment the world can tell I was here, then sands recover. Copyright © 2008 by Jack Huber
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,My haiku type of senryu::::::____Meditation___(senryu)[ In meditationcalmness suddenly resideseven in anger.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Jack Huber
A very good senryu, Manohar, and true.Jack
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Maya Mahant
Jack, here are my attempts....Mirage (Haiku)Summer's blazing sun,waves of heat or oasis?Mirage in the sands.Mother's Arms (Senryu)Even at fifty,found comfort, in mother's arms,bereft, she is gone.
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Maya, these also conform to both haiku and senryu, as posted. Good work!Jack
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Pushpa Moorjani
Jack taught me HaikuA new form I learnt todayNo! Now won't forget!:))
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Jack Huber
Cute, Pushpa. You wrote a senryu about haiku...It does conform. Nice one.Jack
Monday Poem::::::::::::: ["Of what Use?"]
Monday Poem_________ [" Of What Use?"]
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,This poem came to me,when reading an article on Numbers.From this one idea,other similar ideas,situations,problems also came along and I thought why not make it into a sort of poem.Members are free to critique for style,language,logic and improvement______________["Of What Use"]["Of what use is this Number Onewhen One is a lonely numberwithout any friends, associates, family?Of what use is this Black & Whitewhen there is reality in greya reality touching heart,mind,body,soul?Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?of what use is the scientist promising hopewhen a poet shows you a way out of hopelessnessthat can open your mind to total awareness?Of what use are these world of colorswhen painter expertly mixes B & W with greycreating amazing canvas of divine beauty & art?Of what use is this confession before a priestwhen sinner can redeem his life reading biblewhere our Lord God has put his signature?Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?Of what use is this live-in relationshipswhen joys of parenthood are calling usfor traditional rituals,ceremonies,parties,marriages?Of what use are these winnings of a roulettewhen there is sure winner in every merry-go-roundfor an honest,sustained effort,labor,sweat?Of what use are these best selling writerswhen a single Shakespeare has sold the worldin meaningful poems,astounding plays,fascinating lyrics?]_____ The End ______copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.
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Khurshid Alam
Hi Manohar,You're right. But should not there be change? As you seem to reject somethings such as live-in relationship etc. We must accpet changes even though if they seem not so good from our pespective and we must let live those who prefer a way of life.
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Maya Mahant
Fascinating Manohar, sometime or the other we have had these thoughts. However, would there be progress, if we all sat down and said 'Of What Use?' Though in context of war, I wholeheartedly endorse what you say.We live 'on' hope, if we only thought about the futility of life, we would wither up and die.Maya
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Jack Huber
Monohar, you didn't say you were answering any questions, just describing a feeling most of us have from time to time. In this light, you have done well.Jack
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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,I don't see the world as black and white, I see the shades of grey, just as you do. I have come to accept change and variety as a part of life, and so have many questions that remain unanswered.Three small notes on word usage:I believe in the line "Of what use is this wordly togetherness" you meant to use "worldly","permanant" should be spelled "permanent",and "reconcilliation" should be "reconciliation".My favorite stanza is:Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Note to members, please note that Manohar asked for input or I wouldn't have brought up the notes on word usage!Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Diane Stephenson
Manohar:Well-done. I agree to a point with those who think change is necessary, but there are some principles that must remain or society disintegrates. I agree with you that life is not just black and white as many people try to simplify it, but there are many shades of grey that make up our lives. I do believe, however, that without all the colors of the rainbow, life would be rather dull. Black is simply the absence of light and white the absence of color and I like to think of my life as a combination of both with color. An artist may be able to create a fascinating canvas with the simplicity of black and white, but just think of a world full of black and white flowers, for instance. I like the way you have asked the questions and proffered a reason for not accepting the absolutes some put forth. It is a poem of musing on life's issues and causes the reader to think for him/herself rather than accept without question what society tries to dictate, and gives food for thought to come up with an answer to your questions. Diane
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Jul 27, 2010 3:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,When William Shakespare wrote_____"What is this life, full of care,we have no time to stand and stare,no time to stand beneath the trees,etc..............."he did not have a rule for everyone to follow.Well,how should I put my thoughts? Let me try......I will put it this way............. Number One is the dream of everyone, but when one gets there, he/she still feels 'something' is missing and it is this 'missing' aspect that I want to convey through this poem.People get bored with all good things of life and feel unhappy,thinking of the next step to follow.I have written this poem from that particular angle.As Jack says, a poet has a veto license to take the meaning to a different level....I have done this in this poem,but limited by reason.To sum up,I will conclude that in every triplicate,that is composed,I have my own rason,which I want the character to experience himself/herself.Jack:::::::I endorse that you have understood my poem.Khurshid:::When one is living in a society, one has to follow certain rules/traditions and these are called 'truths'. However,I agree with you that for people wanting to live their own way of life.Diane.T::::Thank you and thank again for spelling corrections....[wordly],[permanent],[reconcilliation]stand corrected.Diane.S.:::I agree that black & white flowers will not look good,but here in the poem I want to convey also about the underdog things.Many people have forgotten to see beauty elswhere.e.g. in B & W.You are nearer to Jack's & my philosophy and thanks for your valuable comments.Maya:::::::When I gave the title to the poem::["Of What Use"],I had a mellow type of reasoning and there is nothing more to it than this.Thanks Maya for your comments.Manohar Bhatia
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Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,As is usual with you this poem too is a debating piece asking for taxing one`s mind to find the answer.These questions have relevance,because these help us to understand the life in totality.They are like speed breakers keeping us cautiously going.Ayub
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Ayub,Thanks for understanding my poem.When I ask a question, that question is not mine only, but for everyone to ponder over and seek an answer.Manohar Bhatia
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Nice poem Manohar and the comments are also enlighteningGreat pals here…“Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?”I think the repetition of the word ‘aloneness' is not necessaryand may also I addOf what use is the poetry if it doesn’t stir the soulThe disturbing thoughts, while peeled off layer by layerFind newer meanings when it is shared:)
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Pushpa,Thanks for your comments.Regarding the word,'aloneness',I think we both are right.This word can be deleted and if you read again, you might feel it is laying emphasis of what beauty lies in aloneness.I may add here, that your last stanza is very impressive for me to read.Thanks again.Manohar Bhatia
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,This poem came to me,when reading an article on Numbers.From this one idea,other similar ideas,situations,problems also came along and I thought why not make it into a sort of poem.Members are free to critique for style,language,logic and improvement______________["Of What Use"]["Of what use is this Number Onewhen One is a lonely numberwithout any friends, associates, family?Of what use is this Black & Whitewhen there is reality in greya reality touching heart,mind,body,soul?Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?of what use is the scientist promising hopewhen a poet shows you a way out of hopelessnessthat can open your mind to total awareness?Of what use are these world of colorswhen painter expertly mixes B & W with greycreating amazing canvas of divine beauty & art?Of what use is this confession before a priestwhen sinner can redeem his life reading biblewhere our Lord God has put his signature?Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?Of what use is this live-in relationshipswhen joys of parenthood are calling usfor traditional rituals,ceremonies,parties,marriages?Of what use are these winnings of a roulettewhen there is sure winner in every merry-go-roundfor an honest,sustained effort,labor,sweat?Of what use are these best selling writerswhen a single Shakespeare has sold the worldin meaningful poems,astounding plays,fascinating lyrics?]_____ The End ______copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.
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Khurshid Alam
Hi Manohar,You're right. But should not there be change? As you seem to reject somethings such as live-in relationship etc. We must accpet changes even though if they seem not so good from our pespective and we must let live those who prefer a way of life.
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Maya Mahant
Fascinating Manohar, sometime or the other we have had these thoughts. However, would there be progress, if we all sat down and said 'Of What Use?' Though in context of war, I wholeheartedly endorse what you say.We live 'on' hope, if we only thought about the futility of life, we would wither up and die.Maya
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Jack Huber
Monohar, you didn't say you were answering any questions, just describing a feeling most of us have from time to time. In this light, you have done well.Jack
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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,I don't see the world as black and white, I see the shades of grey, just as you do. I have come to accept change and variety as a part of life, and so have many questions that remain unanswered.Three small notes on word usage:I believe in the line "Of what use is this wordly togetherness" you meant to use "worldly","permanant" should be spelled "permanent",and "reconcilliation" should be "reconciliation".My favorite stanza is:Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Note to members, please note that Manohar asked for input or I wouldn't have brought up the notes on word usage!Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Manohar:Well-done. I agree to a point with those who think change is necessary, but there are some principles that must remain or society disintegrates. I agree with you that life is not just black and white as many people try to simplify it, but there are many shades of grey that make up our lives. I do believe, however, that without all the colors of the rainbow, life would be rather dull. Black is simply the absence of light and white the absence of color and I like to think of my life as a combination of both with color. An artist may be able to create a fascinating canvas with the simplicity of black and white, but just think of a world full of black and white flowers, for instance. I like the way you have asked the questions and proffered a reason for not accepting the absolutes some put forth. It is a poem of musing on life's issues and causes the reader to think for him/herself rather than accept without question what society tries to dictate, and gives food for thought to come up with an answer to your questions. Diane
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,When William Shakespare wrote_____"What is this life, full of care,we have no time to stand and stare,no time to stand beneath the trees,etc..............."he did not have a rule for everyone to follow.Well,how should I put my thoughts? Let me try......I will put it this way............. Number One is the dream of everyone, but when one gets there, he/she still feels 'something' is missing and it is this 'missing' aspect that I want to convey through this poem.People get bored with all good things of life and feel unhappy,thinking of the next step to follow.I have written this poem from that particular angle.As Jack says, a poet has a veto license to take the meaning to a different level....I have done this in this poem,but limited by reason.To sum up,I will conclude that in every triplicate,that is composed,I have my own rason,which I want the character to experience himself/herself.Jack:::::::I endorse that you have understood my poem.Khurshid:::When one is living in a society, one has to follow certain rules/traditions and these are called 'truths'. However,I agree with you that for people wanting to live their own way of life.Diane.T::::Thank you and thank again for spelling corrections....[wordly],[permanent],[reconcilliation]stand corrected.Diane.S.:::I agree that black & white flowers will not look good,but here in the poem I want to convey also about the underdog things.Many people have forgotten to see beauty elswhere.e.g. in B & W.You are nearer to Jack's & my philosophy and thanks for your valuable comments.Maya:::::::When I gave the title to the poem::["Of What Use"],I had a mellow type of reasoning and there is nothing more to it than this.Thanks Maya for your comments.Manohar Bhatia
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Manohar,As is usual with you this poem too is a debating piece asking for taxing one`s mind to find the answer.These questions have relevance,because these help us to understand the life in totality.They are like speed breakers keeping us cautiously going.Ayub
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Ayub,Thanks for understanding my poem.When I ask a question, that question is not mine only, but for everyone to ponder over and seek an answer.Manohar Bhatia
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Pushpa Moorjani
Nice poem Manohar and the comments are also enlighteningGreat pals here…“Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?”I think the repetition of the word ‘aloneness' is not necessaryand may also I addOf what use is the poetry if it doesn’t stir the soulThe disturbing thoughts, while peeled off layer by layerFind newer meanings when it is shared:)
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Pushpa,Thanks for your comments.Regarding the word,'aloneness',I think we both are right.This word can be deleted and if you read again, you might feel it is laying emphasis of what beauty lies in aloneness.I may add here, that your last stanza is very impressive for me to read.Thanks again.Manohar Bhatia
Wednesday, June 9, 2010
F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::::"Rictameter"
.O.R.M.- The Rictameter Views: 59
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Jack Huber
The Rictameter
There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.
The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.
As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.
Example:
Idyllic
Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.
Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.
Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Maya Mahant The Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia
Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem
Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.
The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.
Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.
Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.
Hope this helps.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.
And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.
Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.
Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Maya,
Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:
The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,
I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience
rampyari
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Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM
The Brook
The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #
Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...
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Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.
Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?
Random Thoughts
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…
More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…
Rampyari Walia
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Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::
FILMS.
Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!
Manohar Bhatia
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
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Jun 03, 2010 3:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Maya Mahant Rampyari,
In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.
Maya
Jun 01, 2010 8:43 am F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Jack Huber
The Rictameter
There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.
The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.
As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.
Example:
Idyllic
Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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Jun 01, 2010 10:31 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.
Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.
Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jun 01, 2010 2:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant The Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia
Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem
Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Rampyari Walia
Private Reply to Rampyari Walia
Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.
The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.
Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.
Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.
Hope this helps.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.
And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.
Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.
Changeling
The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Jack Huber Maya,
Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:
The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,
I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience
rampyari
Private Reply to Rampyari Walia
Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #
Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM
The Brook
The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #
Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.
Jack
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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...
Private Reply to Stanley Shiel
Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.
Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?
Random Thoughts
Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile
Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…
More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…
Rampyari Walia
Private Reply to Rampyari Walia
Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::
FILMS.
Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!
Manohar Bhatia
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
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Jun 03, 2010 3:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #
Maya Mahant Rampyari,
In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.
Maya
Tuesday, June 1, 2010
Monday Poem:::::::::::::: "Change"
am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________
Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!
Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!
Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!
Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!
Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!
Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!
Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!
Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!
Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!
Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!
Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!
Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!
Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!
Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!
---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.
You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.
Jack
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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Diane Stephenson Manohar:
An innovative way to think about change.
Diane
Private Reply to Diane Stephenson
May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Maya Mahant Manohar,
Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.
Maya
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,
I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)
Private Reply to Deb..... Always SMILING!
May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.
Ayub
Private Reply to Ayub Bangroo
May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #
Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia
Poetry F.O.R.M.:::::::::::: "Fibonacci"
F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci Views: 112
May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)
The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.
Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.
Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.
As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements
Examples:
Spring Orchid
Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.
Before the Mast
Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Diane Tegarden Interesting, and I ain't lyin'!
Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?
(c)Pushpee
Thank you so much Jack :))
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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,
here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows
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May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,
This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome
rampyari
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May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;
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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Maya Mahant Bubble Bath
Hot
tired
grimy
bone weary.
Shower's warm needles
soothing between shoulder blades.
Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.
Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.
Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.
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May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!
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May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,
All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?
My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:
Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
In this one, each line has a nautical term.
Thanks,
Jack
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May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.
MariLaura
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May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Stanley Shiel Fractals?
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May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
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May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 10:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)
The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.
Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.
Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.
As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements
Examples:
Spring Orchid
Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.
Before the Mast
Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber
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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?
(c)Pushpee
Thank you so much Jack :))
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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,
here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font
Morning Glory
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows
Rampyari Walia
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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze
But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.
Jack
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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:
Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,
This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome
rampyari
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May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;
["SUCCESS"]
[Hard
Work
Daily
Leads always
to smashing success
For a highly ambitious man!]
copyright@ManoharBhatia.
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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Maya Mahant Bubble Bath
Hot
tired
grimy
bone weary.
Shower's warm needles
soothing between shoulder blades.
Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.
Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.
Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.
Private Reply to Maya Mahant
May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!
Private Reply to dalip daswani
May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,
All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?
My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:
Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.
In this one, each line has a nautical term.
Thanks,
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.
MariLaura
Private Reply to Mari Laura Skjelvik
May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.
Manohar Bhatia
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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Stanley Shiel Fractals?
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May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.
Jack
Private Reply to Jack Huber
May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
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May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.
Jack
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May 20, 2010 10:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #
Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well
Pocono Seasons
Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon
Susan Graves 2010
Susan
http://www.candlesue.com
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The lasting haiku of Masaoka Shiki at Horyu-ji
A haiku is a non-rhymed verse genre.There are 5 syllables in the first sentence, 7 in the second and 5 again in the last sentence.
Steps1Understand the way haiku is made. Haiku in Japanese is written in a single vertical line with seventeen sound units or mora (not strictly the same as syllables) in a rhythm of five, seven, and five. In English (a stressed language), the ideas can be expressed with a short line, a long line, and another short line. Sometimes, haiku can turn out very bad and cheesy. Pick a good topic.
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2Choose a season. Many haiku seem to focus on nature, but what they are really focusing on is a seasonal reference (not all of which are necessarily about nature). Japanese poets use a "saijiki" or season word almanac to check the seasonal association for key words that they might use in a haiku (thus the haiku is a seasonal poem, and thus often about nature, but does not have to be about nature if the seasonal reference is about a human activity). The season is important for coming up with words to use in a haiku. Because the poem has so few words, simple phrases such as "cherry blossoms" or "falling leaves" can create lush scenes, yet still reflect the feeling of the verse. Moreover, season words also invoke other poems that use the same season word, making the poem part of a rich historical tapestry through allusive variation. In Japanese, the "kigo" or season word was generally understood; "autumn breeze" might be known to express loneliness and the coming of the dark winter season
Winter usually makes us think of burden, cold, sadness, hunger, tranquility or peace. Ideas about winter can be invited with words like "snow," "ice," "dead tree," "leafless," etc.
Summer brings about feelings of warmth, vibrancy, love, anger, and many others. General summer phrases include references to the sky, beaches, heat, and romance.
Autumn brings to mind a very wide range of ideas: decay, belief in the supernatural, jealousy, saying goodbye, loss, regret, and mystery to name a few. Falling leaves, shadows, and autumn colors are common implementations.
Spring, like summer, can make one think of love, but it is usually more a sense of infatuation. Also common are themes like innocence, youth, passion, and fickleness. Blossoms, new plants, or warm rains can imply spring. For more information on seasons, go to the link listed below.
Seasonal references can also include human activities, and Japanese saijikis contain many such listings. Be aware that some references to human activities, such as Christmas, are effective season words, but require a geographical limitation; while Christmas is a winter season word in the northern hemisphere, it's a summer reference in the southern hemisphere.
3Add a contrast or comparison. Reading most haiku, you'll notice they either present one idea for the first two lines and then switch quickly to something else or do the same with the first line and last two. A Japanese haiku achieves this shift with what is called a "kireji" or cutting word, which cuts the poem into two parts. In English, it is essential for nearly every haiku to have this two-part juxtapositional structure. The idea is to create a leap between the two parts, and to create an intuitive realization from what has been called an "internal comparison." These two parts sometimes create a contrast, sometime a comparison. Creating this two-part structure effectively can be the hardest part of writing a haiku, because it can be very difficult to avoid too obvious a connection between the two parts, yet also avoid too great a distance between them that becomes obscure and unclear. The haiku poet wants to come up with the perfect words to spark the emotions (not ideas) they wish to communicate. It doesn't have to be extremely severe; it can be anything from one color to another. In English, punctuation between the two lines can create that contrast, although this is not necessary provided that the grammar clearly indicates that a shift has occurred.
4Use primarily objective sensory description. Haiku are based on the five senses. They are about things you can experience, not your interpretation or analysis of those things. To do this effectively, it is good to rely on sensory description, and to use mostly objective rather than subjective words.
5Like any other art, haiku takes practice. Basho said that each haiku should be a thousand times on the tongue. It is also important to read good haiku, and not just translations from the Japanese but the best literary haiku being written in English. To learn haiku properly, it is important to take it beyond the superficial or even sometimes incorrect ways it has been taught in most grade schools. It is important to distinguish between pseudo-haiku that says whatever it wants in a 5-7-5 syllable pattern and literary haiku that adheres to the use of season words, a two-part juxtapositional structure, and primarily objective sensory imagery.
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The lasting haiku of Masaoka Shiki at Horyu-ji
A haiku is a non-rhymed verse genre.There are 5 syllables in the first sentence, 7 in the second and 5 again in the last sentence.
Steps1Understand the way haiku is made. Haiku in Japanese is written in a single vertical line with seventeen sound units or mora (not strictly the same as syllables) in a rhythm of five, seven, and five. In English (a stressed language), the ideas can be expressed with a short line, a long line, and another short line. Sometimes, haiku can turn out very bad and cheesy. Pick a good topic.
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2Choose a season. Many haiku seem to focus on nature, but what they are really focusing on is a seasonal reference (not all of which are necessarily about nature). Japanese poets use a "saijiki" or season word almanac to check the seasonal association for key words that they might use in a haiku (thus the haiku is a seasonal poem, and thus often about nature, but does not have to be about nature if the seasonal reference is about a human activity). The season is important for coming up with words to use in a haiku. Because the poem has so few words, simple phrases such as "cherry blossoms" or "falling leaves" can create lush scenes, yet still reflect the feeling of the verse. Moreover, season words also invoke other poems that use the same season word, making the poem part of a rich historical tapestry through allusive variation. In Japanese, the "kigo" or season word was generally understood; "autumn breeze" might be known to express loneliness and the coming of the dark winter season
Winter usually makes us think of burden, cold, sadness, hunger, tranquility or peace. Ideas about winter can be invited with words like "snow," "ice," "dead tree," "leafless," etc.
Summer brings about feelings of warmth, vibrancy, love, anger, and many others. General summer phrases include references to the sky, beaches, heat, and romance.
Autumn brings to mind a very wide range of ideas: decay, belief in the supernatural, jealousy, saying goodbye, loss, regret, and mystery to name a few. Falling leaves, shadows, and autumn colors are common implementations.
Spring, like summer, can make one think of love, but it is usually more a sense of infatuation. Also common are themes like innocence, youth, passion, and fickleness. Blossoms, new plants, or warm rains can imply spring. For more information on seasons, go to the link listed below.
Seasonal references can also include human activities, and Japanese saijikis contain many such listings. Be aware that some references to human activities, such as Christmas, are effective season words, but require a geographical limitation; while Christmas is a winter season word in the northern hemisphere, it's a summer reference in the southern hemisphere.
3Add a contrast or comparison. Reading most haiku, you'll notice they either present one idea for the first two lines and then switch quickly to something else or do the same with the first line and last two. A Japanese haiku achieves this shift with what is called a "kireji" or cutting word, which cuts the poem into two parts. In English, it is essential for nearly every haiku to have this two-part juxtapositional structure. The idea is to create a leap between the two parts, and to create an intuitive realization from what has been called an "internal comparison." These two parts sometimes create a contrast, sometime a comparison. Creating this two-part structure effectively can be the hardest part of writing a haiku, because it can be very difficult to avoid too obvious a connection between the two parts, yet also avoid too great a distance between them that becomes obscure and unclear. The haiku poet wants to come up with the perfect words to spark the emotions (not ideas) they wish to communicate. It doesn't have to be extremely severe; it can be anything from one color to another. In English, punctuation between the two lines can create that contrast, although this is not necessary provided that the grammar clearly indicates that a shift has occurred.
4Use primarily objective sensory description. Haiku are based on the five senses. They are about things you can experience, not your interpretation or analysis of those things. To do this effectively, it is good to rely on sensory description, and to use mostly objective rather than subjective words.
5Like any other art, haiku takes practice. Basho said that each haiku should be a thousand times on the tongue. It is also important to read good haiku, and not just translations from the Japanese but the best literary haiku being written in English. To learn haiku properly, it is important to take it beyond the superficial or even sometimes incorrect ways it has been taught in most grade schools. It is important to distinguish between pseudo-haiku that says whatever it wants in a 5-7-5 syllable pattern and literary haiku that adheres to the use of season words, a two-part juxtapositional structure, and primarily objective sensory imagery.
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