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Leila.A.Fostier::::::::::::: Facebook friend.

2010-12-09T04:30:00.000-08:00

Favorite Quotations
"I am an excitable person who only understands life lyrically, musically, in whom feelings are much stronger than reason. I am so thirsty for the marvelous that only the marvelous has power over me. Anything I can not transform into something marvelous, I let go. Reality doesn't impress me. I only believe in intoxication, in ecstasy, and when ordinary life shackles me, I escape, one way or another. No more walls." ~Anais Nin"

The woman who needs to create works of art is born with a kind of psychic tension in her which drives her unmercifully to find a way to balance, to make herself whole. Every human being has this need: in the artist it is mandatory." ~May Sarton“

The true harvest of my life is intangible – a little star dust caught, a portion of the rainbow I have clutched” ~Henry David ...Thoreau"

The meeting of two personalities is like the contact of two chemical substances: if there is any reaction, both are transformed." ~Jung"

I am enough of an artist to draw freely upon my imagination. Imagination is more important than knowledge. Knowledge is limited. Imagination encircles the world" ~Albert Einstein "Good poetry makes the universe reveal its secret" ~ Hafiz"

Love and compassion are necessities, notluxuries. Without them humanity cannot survive." ~Dalai Lama"

The poet makes himself a seer by a long, prodigious, and rationaldisordering of all the senses. Every form of love, of suffering, ofmadness; he searches himself, he consumes all the poisons in him, and keeps only their quintessences." ~Rimbaud"

I want to be with those that know secret things, or else alone" ~Rilke"

The only people for me are the mad ones. The ones who are mad to love, mad to talk, mad to be saved; the ones who never yawn or say a commonplace thing, but burn, burn, burn like fabulous yellow Roman candles exploding like spiders across the stars." ~Jack Kerouac"

The great beauty of my life is that I live out what others only dream about, talk about, or analyze. I want to go on living the uncensored dream, the free unconscious" ~Anais Nin"

When a man is wrapped up in himself, he makes a pretty small package" ~John Ruskin"

The role of a writer is not to say what we all can say, but what we are unable to say" ~Anaïs Nin"

Let the woman lose her small, personal fears. Let her dare to offer her creation, and if necessary, suffer the consequences. Every artist has taken that risk" ~Anais Nin“

Those who danced were thought insane by those who couldn’t hear the music” ~Angela Monet

"And there came a time when the risk to remain tight in the bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom" ~Anais Nin"

Ink on paper is as beautiful to me as flowers on the mountains; God composes, why shouldn't we?" ~Audra Foveo-Alba"

The woman who loves always transcends the man she loves, because life is greater than fate. Her devotion wants to be immeasurable; that is her happiness." ~Rilke"

I have great faith in all things not yet spoken" ~Rilke“

Talk about choices does not apply to me~ While intelligence considers options, I am somewhere lost in the wind” ~Rumi"

Those who are burned into the fire of love are buried into the heart of God..." ~Sufi Mystic"

A poet's autobiography is his poetry. Anything else is just a footnote" ~Yevgeny Yevtushenko"

If I could wake completely, I would say without speaking why I'm ashamed of using words" ~Rumi“

He who is born in imagination discovers the latent forces of Nature. . . Besides the stars that are established, there is yet another- Imagination- that begets a new star and a new heaven.” ~Paracelsus"

Faith is an oasis in the heart which will never be reached by the caravan of thinking" ~Gibran"

Let us speak silently like spirits and avoid talkers who use words in vain" ~Rumi“

She loved him so much she concealed his name in many phrases~ the inner meanings known only to her” ~Rumi"

Love possesses not nor would it be possessed; For love is sufficient unto love." ~Gibran"
Mysteries are not to be solved. The eye goes blind when it only wants to see why." ~Rumi"

A lover's food is the love of bread, not the bread. No one who really loves, loves existence. Lovers have nothing to do with existence." ~Rumi"

The job of the artist is always to deepen the mystery" ~Francis Bacon"

The way you make love is the way God will be with you" ~Rumi"

Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." ~Charles Bukowski“

I love you without knowing how, or when, or from where. I love you straightforwardly, without complexity or pride~ I love you because I know no other way” ~Pablo Neruda"

A servant wants to be rewarded for what he does~ A lover wants only to be in love's presence~ The ocean who's depth can never be known" ~Rumi"

I will make my soul an envelope for your soul~ And my heart a residence for your beauty~ And my breast a grave for your sorrows~ I shall love you" ~Gibran‘'

Worry looks around, sorry looks back, Faith looks up.”"From the beginning, the soul of you and I has been one" ~RumiSee More
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Thanks Leila for your sweet message.Whatever you are, I am also on the same wavelength.So lets exchange our poems, writings,stories,etc.My email id::: manoharbhatia2@gmail.com
May God bless you abundantly.
Manohar Bhatia....

F.O.R.M.____ Sestina by Jack Huber.

2010-08-31T01:52:00.000-07:00

Jack Huber
Sestina The sestina is a very structured form of six sestets (six-line stanzas) followed by a triplet (or tercet, a three-line stanza) for a total of 39 lines. What sets it apart, however, is the re-use of the final word in each line of the first stanza in a specific order that is different in each subsequent stanza. All six repeating words appear in the triplet as well.The sestet is usually strictly metered and is commonly written in decasyllables, or lines of ten syllables each, but other formal structures are acceptable. Rhyming is not a requirement of the form, but if the first stanza rhymes (i.e. a-b-c-a-b-c or a-b-a-b-a-b) , the balance will rhyme by default, since the rhyming words are the ones repeated. However, the pattern of rhyme will only follow the sequence of last words for each stanza. In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by “a” only rhyme with other “a” lines, “b” lines only with other “b” lines, and so on.

The notation for the last words is “1” through “6,” for each of the six lines, thus the pattern of use is as follows:
Stanza 1: 1 2 3 4 5 6
Stanza 2: 6 1 5 2 4 3
Stanza 3: 3 6 4 1 2 5
Stanza 4: 5 3 2 6 1 4
Stanza 5: 4 5 1 3 6 2
Stanza 6: 2 4 6 5 3 1
Stanza 7: 6 2, 1 4, 5 3
The final triplet, using all six words in three lines, is a point in the sestet that can vary from form, using a different pattern (i.e. 1 2, 3 4, 5 6), or perhaps a couplet (two-line stanza, i.e. 6 2 1, 4 5 3). A rare format even ends on a haiku or senryu, utilizing the six repeated words in the accepted 5-7-5 syllabic pattern.

So, in the example below, 1=day, 2=cold, 3=place, 4=café, 5=hold and 6=embrace.

Example:A Picturesque Café
Regardless of the time of day,
or if a tempest's rain is cold,
my mind will wander to the place
where first we met, that quaint café,
when both our lives were still on hold;
we hadn't had our first embrace.

The world had left me to embrace
a job I suffered through each day,
no inspiration taking hold,
relentless as a common cold.

But in this picturesque cafe
my life was never out of place.
I hadn't known that in this place
I'd found a reason to embrace
my future and this old café.
I made my mind up on this day

that though the season's turning cold,
the promise of its warmth I'd hold.
A notion started, keeping hold,
that there was something in this place
which bore the brunt of passions cold,
where many felt love's kind embrace,

escaping from their trying day--
I'd someday own this aged café.
The atmosphere of my café,
an ambiance of which would hold the patrons' kindness through the day-
this would be the only place to offer all a warm embrace,
a lively shelter from the cold.

Through summer's drought and winter's cold,
my friends would come to my café
to help each other, love, embrace camaraderie,
while couples hold each other, like no other place
to spend their lives day after day.

I longingly embrace the cold
and greet the day in our cafe,
take hold of this, our perfect place.

Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber7 hours ago ·

Manohar Bhatia Jack,This is a very difficult one, but challenging.What's this life if its not a challenge?I am trying Jack to come up with this one.Will I be able to do it?
Manohar Bhatia.

F.O.R.M.Poetry:::::::::::::: Haiku & Senryu.

2010-08-04T04:36:00.000-07:00

F.O.R.M.- Haiku and Senryu (revisited)
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Aug 03, 2010 9:41 am
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Jack Huber
Haiku and Senryu Haiku is one of the oldest Japanese forms of poetry. Originally written about the seasons of the year, currently nature is also an acceptable theme.Haiku does not rhyme and consists of 17 syllables in three lines in a 5–7–5 format (five syllables in line one, seven in line two, then five again). In classic haiku, there is usually a “cutting word” that turns the thoughts of the reader in an unexpected, sometimes ironic, direction. Although “haiku” has become a catch phrase that includes any and all 5-7-5-formatted poems, there are other poetic forms with that format. Senryu can be thought of as haiku that features human foibles or characteristics of life rather than nature or the seasons. It may or may not have a cutting word.Since they are short, titles of haiku or senryu are often taken from the poem’s first line or are simply numbered, though naming poems is completely up to the author without specific rules.Examples:Spring Harvest (Haiku)Spring harvest begins when revealed petals call out for tiny visits.Autumn Prepares Trees (Haiku)Autumn prepares trees for the brutal cold coming- a sleeping forest. Intensity (Senryu)Loud explosions fuelthe thrill of intensity in a stuntman's heart.Footprints (Senryu)For one brief moment the world can tell I was here, then sands recover. Copyright © 2008 by Jack Huber
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Aug 03, 2010 10:07 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,My haiku type of senryu::::::____Meditation___(senryu)[ In meditationcalmness suddenly resideseven in anger.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Aug 03, 2010 10:15 am
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Jack Huber
A very good senryu, Manohar, and true.Jack
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Aug 03, 2010 11:25 am
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Maya Mahant
Jack, here are my attempts....Mirage (Haiku)Summer's blazing sun,waves of heat or oasis?Mirage in the sands.Mother's Arms (Senryu)Even at fifty,found comfort, in mother's arms,bereft, she is gone.
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Jack Huber
Maya, these also conform to both haiku and senryu, as posted. Good work!Jack
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Aug 03, 2010 3:11 pm
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Pushpa Moorjani
Jack taught me HaikuA new form I learnt todayNo! Now won't forget!:))
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Aug 03, 2010 3:43 pm
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Jack Huber
Cute, Pushpa. You wrote a senryu about haiku...It does conform. Nice one.Jack

Monday Poem::::::::::::: ["Of what Use?"]

2010-08-04T04:18:00.001-07:00

Monday Poem_________ [" Of What Use?"]
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Jul 26, 2010 1:47 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,This poem came to me,when reading an article on Numbers.From this one idea,other similar ideas,situations,problems also came along and I thought why not make it into a sort of poem.Members are free to critique for style,language,logic and improvement______________["Of What Use"]["Of what use is this Number Onewhen One is a lonely numberwithout any friends, associates, family?Of what use is this Black & Whitewhen there is reality in greya reality touching heart,mind,body,soul?Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?of what use is the scientist promising hopewhen a poet shows you a way out of hopelessnessthat can open your mind to total awareness?Of what use are these world of colorswhen painter expertly mixes B & W with greycreating amazing canvas of divine beauty & art?Of what use is this confession before a priestwhen sinner can redeem his life reading biblewhere our Lord God has put his signature?Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?Of what use is this live-in relationshipswhen joys of parenthood are calling usfor traditional rituals,ceremonies,parties,marriages?Of what use are these winnings of a roulettewhen there is sure winner in every merry-go-roundfor an honest,sustained effort,labor,sweat?Of what use are these best selling writerswhen a single Shakespeare has sold the worldin meaningful poems,astounding plays,fascinating lyrics?]_____ The End ______copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.
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Jul 26, 2010 4:39 am
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Khurshid Alam
Hi Manohar,You're right. But should not there be change? As you seem to reject somethings such as live-in relationship etc. We must accpet changes even though if they seem not so good from our pespective and we must let live those who prefer a way of life.
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Jul 26, 2010 6:18 am
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Maya Mahant
Fascinating Manohar, sometime or the other we have had these thoughts. However, would there be progress, if we all sat down and said 'Of What Use?' Though in context of war, I wholeheartedly endorse what you say.We live 'on' hope, if we only thought about the futility of life, we would wither up and die.Maya
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Jul 26, 2010 9:41 am
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Jack Huber
Monohar, you didn't say you were answering any questions, just describing a feeling most of us have from time to time. In this light, you have done well.Jack
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Jul 26, 2010 10:01 am
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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,I don't see the world as black and white, I see the shades of grey, just as you do. I have come to accept change and variety as a part of life, and so have many questions that remain unanswered.Three small notes on word usage:I believe in the line "Of what use is this wordly togetherness" you meant to use "worldly","permanant" should be spelled "permanent",and "reconcilliation" should be "reconciliation".My favorite stanza is:Of what use are these wars fought among nationswhen lyricist pens few peaceful lines of reconcilliationfor a permanant durable peace amongst humanity?~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Note to members, please note that Manohar asked for input or I wouldn't have brought up the notes on word usage!Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jul 26, 2010 12:42 pm
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Diane Stephenson
Manohar:Well-done. I agree to a point with those who think change is necessary, but there are some principles that must remain or society disintegrates. I agree with you that life is not just black and white as many people try to simplify it, but there are many shades of grey that make up our lives. I do believe, however, that without all the colors of the rainbow, life would be rather dull. Black is simply the absence of light and white the absence of color and I like to think of my life as a combination of both with color. An artist may be able to create a fascinating canvas with the simplicity of black and white, but just think of a world full of black and white flowers, for instance. I like the way you have asked the questions and proffered a reason for not accepting the absolutes some put forth. It is a poem of musing on life's issues and causes the reader to think for him/herself rather than accept without question what society tries to dictate, and gives food for thought to come up with an answer to your questions. Diane
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Jul 27, 2010 3:44 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,When William Shakespare wrote_____"What is this life, full of care,we have no time to stand and stare,no time to stand beneath the trees,etc..............."he did not have a rule for everyone to follow.Well,how should I put my thoughts? Let me try......I will put it this way............. Number One is the dream of everyone, but when one gets there, he/she still feels 'something' is missing and it is this 'missing' aspect that I want to convey through this poem.People get bored with all good things of life and feel unhappy,thinking of the next step to follow.I have written this poem from that particular angle.As Jack says, a poet has a veto license to take the meaning to a different level....I have done this in this poem,but limited by reason.To sum up,I will conclude that in every triplicate,that is composed,I have my own rason,which I want the character to experience himself/herself.Jack:::::::I endorse that you have understood my poem.Khurshid:::When one is living in a society, one has to follow certain rules/traditions and these are called 'truths'. However,I agree with you that for people wanting to live their own way of life.Diane.T::::Thank you and thank again for spelling corrections....[wordly],[permanent],[reconcilliation]stand corrected.Diane.S.:::I agree that black & white flowers will not look good,but here in the poem I want to convey also about the underdog things.Many people have forgotten to see beauty elswhere.e.g. in B & W.You are nearer to Jack's & my philosophy and thanks for your valuable comments.Maya:::::::When I gave the title to the poem::["Of What Use"],I had a mellow type of reasoning and there is nothing more to it than this.Thanks Maya for your comments.Manohar Bhatia
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Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,As is usual with you this poem too is a debating piece asking for taxing one`s mind to find the answer.These questions have relevance,because these help us to understand the life in totality.They are like speed breakers keeping us cautiously going.Ayub
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Manohar Bhatia
Ayub,Thanks for understanding my poem.When I ask a question, that question is not mine only, but for everyone to ponder over and seek an answer.Manohar Bhatia
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Pushpa Moorjani
Nice poem Manohar and the comments are also enlighteningGreat pals here…“Of what use is this wordly togethernesswhen the poetry of life is alonenessan aloneness,that is pure,joy,bliss,meditation?”I think the repetition of the word ‘aloneness' is not necessaryand may also I addOf what use is the poetry if it doesn’t stir the soulThe disturbing thoughts, while peeled off layer by layerFind newer meanings when it is shared:)
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Manohar Bhatia
Pushpa,Thanks for your comments.Regarding the word,'aloneness',I think we both are right.This word can be deleted and if you read again, you might feel it is laying emphasis of what beauty lies in aloneness.I may add here, that your last stanza is very impressive for me to read.Thanks again.Manohar Bhatia

F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::::"Rictameter"

2010-06-09T21:30:00.000-07:00

.O.R.M.- The Rictameter Views: 59
Jun 01, 2010 8:43 am F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #

Jack Huber
The Rictameter

There seems to be no end to syllabic-based formats. The rictameter was invented by two cousins, Jason D. Wilkins and Richard W. Lunsford, Jr., who had started their own poetry club. The “Brotherhood of the Amarantos Mystery” was inspired in 1989 by the dark but stirring movie, “Dead Poets Society,” starring Robin Williams. In their weekly “Brotherhood” meetings, Jason and Richard held private poetry contests and experimented with new poetic formats, eventually coming up with the “rictameter,” which Jason apparently named after Richard. Since then, the rictameter has gained in popularity, with several websites now dedicated to or highlighting this form.

The syllable counts are specific in the rictameter. A single stanza begins and ends with the same two-syllable word, and in between the syllable count rises, then falls, by two syllables per line, with line five being the center and longest line. Thus the lines have the syllable count, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2, for a total of 50 syllables.

As with most other fixed-syllable forms, there is no meter nor rhyming required, and no limitation as to subject matter. Rictameter variations do exist, such as multiple stanzas, allowing for storytelling, and relaxing the strict number of syllables required in each line by plus or minus one.

Example:

Idyllic

Quiet
shouts idyllic
in this pastoral scene-
though blackbirds pierce the perfect calm
with echoed intermissions, forgiven.
Am I awake, I ask the mare
as she feeds, or am I
hungering for
quiet?

Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber

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Jun 01, 2010 10:31 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #

Diane Tegarden Jack,
your poem reminds me of "Alice in Wonderland" although I can't imagine why. There aren't horses or blackbirds in that story, but the sense of "fantasy" came to me while reading the poem when you were speaking to the mare.

Thank you for this new form, I shall attempt to write one later in the week.

Merry Meet and Merry Part and Merry Meet Again,
Diane T. and tree family

Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Jun 01, 2010 2:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Maya Mahant The Changeling

The brook
twinkle toed, sparkling
with sprinkled stardust, flirting
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook?

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Jun 01, 2010 6:53 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Rampyari Walia

Nice poem Maya, reminded me of Tennyson´s poem

Another interesting form and poem from you Jack, Here is my attempt. (You know I never practiced form (other than quatrains unitl I joined htis forum). So thanks for teaching us

Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile

Rampyari Walia

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Jun 01, 2010 9:07 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Jack Huber Thanks for posting your very nice poems, Maya and Rampyari.

The rictameter should have the syllable counts, 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 (each corresponding with a line), for a total of 50 syllables.

Maya's is close, just lines 2 and 3 are off. They are 5 and 7 syllables, respectively. Also, I think I would change the last two or three lines so that "the brook?" isn't a question at the end. Make "the brook" simply the end of your sentence.

Ramyari, it appears you have used word counts instead of syllable counts, and your poem doesn't begin and end with the same 2 syllables. There are some forms in which the writer can use either word or syllable counts to conform, but unfortunately this isn't one of those.

Hope this helps.

Jack

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Jun 02, 2010 12:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Maya Mahant Rampyari, you with your poem had me introspect, whether it is nature you write about or human emotions your poems enchant, thank you.

And thank you for liking what I wrote, you are indeed very kind.

Jack, do you ever think I will get is right? I am indebted to you. Thank you ever so much.

Changeling

The brook
twinkle toed, sparkled
with sprinkled stardust, flirted
coquettishly with the blue skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging crashing
down the ravine,
the brook.

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Jun 02, 2010 10:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Jack Huber Maya,

Lines 2 and 3 are still one syllable too long. Here's a suggestion:

The brook, (2)
twinkle-toed, charged (4)
with light stardust, flirted (6)
coquettishly with azure skies. (8)

Jack

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Jun 02, 2010 11:43 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Rampyari Walia Thanks for your feedback Jack,

I goofed this time, totally forgot the syllable requirement and used word count instead of syllable. Will try and redo it. But was still fun to write a little poem early Tues morning.Thanks for your patience

rampyari

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Jun 02, 2010 1:44 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - The Changeling #

Maya Mahant Jack your version is perfect. Thank you for sending me the last three lines in PM

The Brook

The brook,
twinkle-toed, charged
with light stardust, flirted
coquettishly with azure skies.
Effervescent exulting, misty spume
tangos with boulders dark handsome,
before plunging into
the deep gorge and
the brook.

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Jun 02, 2010 3:00 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Rampyari #

Jack Huber No worries, Rampyari. I thought something like was the case. Your poem is still a worthwhile one; it just isn't a rictameter. Perhaps it a Rampyarial Stanza...

Jack

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Jun 02, 2010 3:02 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #

Jack Huber Thanks for the mention, Maya, but your original wasn't far off the mark. Very well done.

Jack

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Jun 02, 2010 7:33 pm F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #

Stanley Shiel Maya, I like your Changeling...

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Jun 03, 2010 12:06 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter - Maya #

Rampyari Walia Inspired by Maya´s efforts and the wonderful Rictameter, I thought of coreecting my attempt to conform to the form.

Hwever as I started ont eh message board my thoughts started wandering far from the rictameter into a different dimension and here is what emerged(defintiely not a rictameter). Do I make any sense?

Random Thoughts

Love
This feeling
Yearning of all beings
So beautiful in experience, but fleeting
It rejuvenates, uplifts, gives new meaning to living
Yet how many of us have truly experienced the delight
Of love that ever gives, expecting no returns
Unconditional love, that will linger on
Enrapturing senses and soul
Making existence
Worthwhile

Worthwhile
Is lliving
When life has purpose
Reaching out in thoughts, actions fulfilling
Hopes of many, needs of needy, dreams of a few
When life is spent giving freely, knowledge , love
Enriching many others, yet feeling enriched
Being learned , yet yearning,
Ever seeking,
More…

More,
Actions create,
Ever new re-actions
Setting in motion, with helpful constellations
This law Universal, karmic reactions shaping destiny
Leading to destinations beyond imagination, so we envision, beyond vision
And sometimes, seek to unravel those mystical mysteries
Which take us beyond duality into reality
Liberating us and awakening
Lasting peace
Eternally…

Rampyari Walia

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Jun 03, 2010 12:56 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Rictameter #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
This one I like it.Here is my attempt::::::::::::

FILMS.

Bollywood
or the Hollywood
its pure entertainment
where talented actors perform
in exciting locales on mysterious
storylines,humor,tragedy,
of the bravely made films
for the audience
clappings!

Manohar Bhatia

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Maya Mahant Rampyari,

In 'Random Thoughts' the flow of thoughts from Love as it progresses and culminating in peace Eternally is just awesome.

Maya

Monday Poem:::::::::::::: "Change"

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am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________

Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!

Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!

Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!

Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!

Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!

Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!

Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!

Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!

Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!

Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!

Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!

Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!

Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!

Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!

---The End---
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All rights are reserved.

Manohar Bhatia

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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.

You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.

Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.

Jack

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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

An innovative way to think about change.

Diane

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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Maya Mahant Manohar,

Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.

Maya

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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,

I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)

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May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.

Ayub

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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia

Poetry F.O.R.M.:::::::::::: "Fibonacci"

2010-06-01T21:54:00.001-07:00

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May 10, 2010 9:33 pm F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber Fibonacci (aka Fib Poetry)

The Fib, or Fibonacci poetry, is based upon a numerical sequence named for a twelfth century mathematician, Leonardo Fibonacci. Though Fibonacci did not invent the sequence, he made it popular in his book, “Liber Abaci” (“Book of Abacus” or “Book of Calculation”), published in 1202. The sequence begins with 0 and 1, and each subsequent number in the sequence is the sum of the previous two. Thus, the first few members of the list are 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, 13, 21, 34, 55, 89 and so on. For example, to figure the next number in the sequence after 5, you would add 5 and the previous number, 3, to get 8. Then, 8 and 5 is the next number, 13.

Poets throughout history have utilized interesting sequences in their poetic forms, and for centuries they have used the Fibonacci sequence as a guide for haiku-like poems. The numeric values typically represent either the number of syllables or words and usually is limited to just the first six members of the sequence beginning with 1.

Like Fibonacci, who made the sequence well-known but was not its inventor, poet and screenwriter Gregory K. Pincus made the “Fib” popular in 2006 by posting in his blog an explanation and an invitation to his blog fans to write and post them online. The Fib was briefly a web phenomenon and even today there are several websites dedicated to it.

As mentioned, the each line in a Fibonacci poem corresponds to its place in the Fibonacci sequence (without counting the initial 0), the quantity of which determines the number of syllables or words in that line. Most Fibs, however, are just six lines and utilize syllable counts, in the succession 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8 . Like most syllable-based formats, there are no rhyme or meter requirements

Examples:

Spring Orchid

Wild,
spring
orchid,
eccentric
in its choice of bed,
seems content in its arrangement.

Before the Mast

Sail,
wind,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.

Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber

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May 10, 2010 10:03 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Diane Tegarden Interesting, and I ain't lyin'!

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May 11, 2010 12:03 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Rampyari Walia Very itnerestign gorm Jack, thanks for teaching us so patiently. Here is my attempt , does it qualify?

Morning Glory

Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze

Rampyari Walia

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May 11, 2010 3:41 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Pushpa Moorjani Loud
Noise
Around
Deafening!
Disturbs the silence
Limits concentration of mind
Kindly could you return my solitude back to me?

(c)Pushpee

Thank you so much Jack :))

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May 11, 2010 3:58 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Rampyari Walia Hi Jack,

here si my revised version, I tried putting linesin bold font

Morning Glory

Lillies
Jasmine,
Fragrant, White
Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright
Roses, Camellias, California poppies,
white daisies and marigolds
Lit by the rays of the morning sun,
my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds
Hummingbirds, and butterflies,
chirping birds hovering on trees,
warm my heart and I wish to dance,
in the refreshing morning breeze
Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves,
As sunrbeams dance on rippling waves,,
attuned to the throbbing universe,
I dream on forgetting my existence,
beholding through some invisible telescope,
a myriad enchanting rainbows

Rampyari Walia

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May 11, 2010 9:30 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber Rampyari, at first I though that your syllable counts were off, until I realized that you are using words to correlate to the sequence rather than syllables, which is perfectly acceptible. Because of the longer lines, I might be tempted to add blank lines in between your sequenced lines:

Lillies

Jasmine,

Fragrant, White

Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright

Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds

Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds

Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance in the refreshing morning breeze

But, it's not a requirement. Nicely written,

Jack

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May 11, 2010 9:32 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber A very nice Fib, Pushpa. I like it.

Jack

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May 11, 2010 9:37 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber You word counts appear correct. Again, I think I would add blank lines:

Lillies

Jasmine,

Fragrant, White

Chrysanthemums, in colors so bright

Roses, Camellias, California poppies, white daisies and marigolds

Lit by the rays of the morning sun, my garden a kaleidoscope unfolds

Hummingbirds, and butterflies, chirping birds hovering on trees, warm my heart and I wish to dance, in the refreshing morning breeze

Dancing in tune to the rustle of leaves, as sunrbeams dance on rippling waves, attuned to the throbbing universe, I dream on forgetting my existence, beholding through some invisible telescope, a myriad enchanting rainbows

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May 11, 2010 10:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Rampyari Walia Thanks so much jack,

This was quite a fun form and a v good learnign excercise. I ahve realized once more learngn is so much fun, forge tteh outcome

rampyari

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May 12, 2010 12:51 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
I always love these shorter F.O.R.M.s and Fibonacci has caught my eye.Well Jack, I am attempting it, but you are the Master at correction::::::::::;;;

["SUCCESS"]

[Hard
Work
Daily
Leads always
to smashing success
For a highly ambitious man!]

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May 12, 2010 5:49 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Maya Mahant Bubble Bath

Hot

tired

grimy

bone weary.

Shower's warm needles

soothing between shoulder blades.

Water drums music against glass, drains fatigue away.

Scented foam of soapy bubbles amongst floating rose petals cleanses 'n rejuvenates.

Sarong wrapped in pristine-white-cloud-soft towel, new being steps out into her boudoir, soft satin and silk, straight into her lover's arms.

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May 12, 2010 6:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

dalip daswani
Hot!
Hot!
Melting
Sweltering
Heat! Global Warming!
Icy, my sweet popsicle!

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May 12, 2010 9:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber Manohar, Maya and Dalip,

All are excellent Fibs. They make you feel like you are solving a puzzle, don't they?

My second example was missing a line, I just noticed. Here is the correct version:

Sail,
wind,
planing,
first dogwatch,
then, before the mast,
we let ourselves be cast away.

In this one, each line has a nautical term.

Thanks,

Jack

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May 12, 2010 9:51 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Mari Laura Skjelvik
Sweet
Choc'
Cacao,
Applesauce
Dribbling down the cone,
Perfectly tasting summer's day.
Mondanely repelling as the frequent sound of rain.
Remembering with love and fondness such sweet sweet unforgettable holiday dreams.

MariLaura

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May 13, 2010 1:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments on my and also on others' fibs.
Jack, I was just getting this idea..........can a fib be written on a photo?My current project of photo-album, which is at hand,I am talking about.

Manohar Bhatia

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May 17, 2010 2:36 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Stanley Shiel Fractals?

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May 17, 2010 2:53 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber No, just exponential (sort of). The actual equation for the Sequence is very long and somewhat beyond my math skills... Those 12th century mathematicians really were brilliant.

Jack

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May 20, 2010 9:11 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Susan Graves Oh I am a little behind

Pocono Seasons

Snow
melts
Whitewater
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon

Susan Graves 2010

Susan
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May 20, 2010 9:44 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Fibonacci #

Jack Huber Susan, the only glitch I see is in line 3, which should be only 2 syllables. A whole year wrapped into just six lines, interesting theme.

Jack

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Susan Graves Thanks Jack I don;t count syllables very well

Pocono Seasons

Snow
melts
River
paddling time
Nascar fans return
Fall colors; snowflakes arrive soon

Susan Graves 2010

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How to write Haiku Poem?:::::::::::::An essay.

2010-05-08T04:46:00.000-07:00

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The lasting haiku of Masaoka Shiki at Horyu-ji

A haiku is a non-rhymed verse genre.There are 5 syllables in the first sentence, 7 in the second and 5 again in the last sentence.

Steps1Understand the way haiku is made. Haiku in Japanese is written in a single vertical line with seventeen sound units or mora (not strictly the same as syllables) in a rhythm of five, seven, and five. In English (a stressed language), the ideas can be expressed with a short line, a long line, and another short line. Sometimes, haiku can turn out very bad and cheesy. Pick a good topic.
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2Choose a season. Many haiku seem to focus on nature, but what they are really focusing on is a seasonal reference (not all of which are necessarily about nature). Japanese poets use a "saijiki" or season word almanac to check the seasonal association for key words that they might use in a haiku (thus the haiku is a seasonal poem, and thus often about nature, but does not have to be about nature if the seasonal reference is about a human activity). The season is important for coming up with words to use in a haiku. Because the poem has so few words, simple phrases such as "cherry blossoms" or "falling leaves" can create lush scenes, yet still reflect the feeling of the verse. Moreover, season words also invoke other poems that use the same season word, making the poem part of a rich historical tapestry through allusive variation. In Japanese, the "kigo" or season word was generally understood; "autumn breeze" might be known to express loneliness and the coming of the dark winter season
Winter usually makes us think of burden, cold, sadness, hunger, tranquility or peace. Ideas about winter can be invited with words like "snow," "ice," "dead tree," "leafless," etc.
Summer brings about feelings of warmth, vibrancy, love, anger, and many others. General summer phrases include references to the sky, beaches, heat, and romance.
Autumn brings to mind a very wide range of ideas: decay, belief in the supernatural, jealousy, saying goodbye, loss, regret, and mystery to name a few. Falling leaves, shadows, and autumn colors are common implementations.
Spring, like summer, can make one think of love, but it is usually more a sense of infatuation. Also common are themes like innocence, youth, passion, and fickleness. Blossoms, new plants, or warm rains can imply spring. For more information on seasons, go to the link listed below.

Seasonal references can also include human activities, and Japanese saijikis contain many such listings. Be aware that some references to human activities, such as Christmas, are effective season words, but require a geographical limitation; while Christmas is a winter season word in the northern hemisphere, it's a summer reference in the southern hemisphere.

3Add a contrast or comparison. Reading most haiku, you'll notice they either present one idea for the first two lines and then switch quickly to something else or do the same with the first line and last two. A Japanese haiku achieves this shift with what is called a "kireji" or cutting word, which cuts the poem into two parts. In English, it is essential for nearly every haiku to have this two-part juxtapositional structure. The idea is to create a leap between the two parts, and to create an intuitive realization from what has been called an "internal comparison." These two parts sometimes create a contrast, sometime a comparison. Creating this two-part structure effectively can be the hardest part of writing a haiku, because it can be very difficult to avoid too obvious a connection between the two parts, yet also avoid too great a distance between them that becomes obscure and unclear. The haiku poet wants to come up with the perfect words to spark the emotions (not ideas) they wish to communicate. It doesn't have to be extremely severe; it can be anything from one color to another. In English, punctuation between the two lines can create that contrast, although this is not necessary provided that the grammar clearly indicates that a shift has occurred.
4Use primarily objective sensory description. Haiku are based on the five senses. They are about things you can experience, not your interpretation or analysis of those things. To do this effectively, it is good to rely on sensory description, and to use mostly objective rather than subjective words.

5Like any other art, haiku takes practice. Basho said that each haiku should be a thousand times on the tongue. It is also important to read good haiku, and not just translations from the Japanese but the best literary haiku being written in English. To learn haiku properly, it is important to take it beyond the superficial or even sometimes incorrect ways it has been taught in most grade schools. It is important to distinguish between pseudo-haiku that says whatever it wants in a 5-7-5 syllable pattern and literary haiku that adheres to the use of season words, a two-part juxtapositional structure, and primarily objective sensory imagery.
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Monday Poem::::: "I P L Confetti"

2010-05-04T22:11:00.001-07:00

"I P L Confetti."::::::::::::: A Poem.

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Apr 26, 2010 8:20 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Manohar Bhatia "IPL Confetti"

IPL is a cricket game
for the common spectator
controlled by uncommon interests.

A $4.00 billion extravaganza
is a gentleman's game
where kickbacks, betting is the name.

IPL has an emotional quotient
where crowds cry,laugh,clap,
in sadness,happiness,victory.

IPL has a happiness factor
where corporate czars are pumping $
for players,officials,go-getters,others.

IPL has a sadness factor
for those where a last ball
turns victory into a defeat.

IPL has a glamour factor
for its doors open stunningly
with cheer girls,bollywood shows,
ending with night-sky fire-works display.

Now, there is real danger to IPL
mistrusts,allegations,skull-duggery
poses a challenge to this noble game

Because,all the horses,
all the King's men cannot put
magnificient IPL on its thrown again!

--The End--
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Apr 26, 2010 8:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Diane Tegarden Dear Manohar,
thank you for informing us of the fate of this "game of kings", I hope it works out, for the sake of its fans.

In the last stanza, I think you meant "throne" (the seat of kings) not "thrown" (to pitch a ball).

Respectfully,
Diane T.

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"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
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Apr 26, 2010 8:52 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Manohar Bhatia Di,
Thanks for your valuable comments.In the last stanza, there is typo error...it is "throne"(the seat of Kings).
Manohar Bhatia

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Apr 26, 2010 9:19 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Maya Mahant Manohar,

Your poem is so topical, all newspapers, television channels, headlining that and just that. With its scandal, puts a Bollywood movie in a shadow.

I would say,

Lalit Modi sat on a IPL Wall
Lalit Modi had a great fall
All Sharad Pawar's machinations
Couldn't put Lalit together again

Good one Manohar

Maya

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Apr 26, 2010 11:31 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Since I don't know anything about cricket I cannot understand the implications but can nonetheless enjoy your poem.

Diane

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Apr 26, 2010 11:36 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
This IPL has brought shame to this game of cricket.Right from the start it has looked something other than cricket.How shamelessly they befool the world.
Cricket has suffered many jolts in the recent past and this IPL has been the latest insult.

Ayub

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Apr 27, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Teresa Mahieu This did bring the nursery rhyme of Humpty Dumpty to mind. Not understanding the game or ramifications I still enjoy your poem greatly.
Tess

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Apr 28, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: " I P L Confetti" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Teresa,
Yes, I had the Humpty/Dumpty duo in my mind for the last stanza.Thanks maam for reading and enjoying the poem.
Manohar Bhatia

Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: __ "Change"

2010-05-04T22:08:00.000-07:00

__________"Change"________

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May 03, 2010 6:35 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Manohar Bhatia ________ "Change"_________

Change is the change
of identity on facebook,
where you are only on cookbook!

Change is the difference
of doing business in East than West
where crony capitalism is best!

Change is the currency
of notes,bills, coins,
where human capital also joins!

Change is the attitude
of people towards sexuality
where love can be a casuality!

Change is a human nature
for man & woman in relationship
where each struggles for partnership!

Change is the transformation
of parties in hues of politics
where power of money is game of ethics!

Change is the merging
a town of two border states
where upmanship was at stake!

Change is the struggle
for freedom from orthodoxy
where man is buried in methodology!

Change is a change of rule
from one nation to another
where greed and power gather!

Change is a shift
in climate from hot or cold
where Mother Nature acts bold!

Change is a plan
for IPL team for surprise win
where everyone will grin!

Change is a twist
of story in fiction novel
where readers would marvel!

Change is in the thinking
of person from poverty to affluence
where discomfort & comfort confluence!

Change is a change
from one change to another change
where only change is name of change!

---The End---
copyright@ManoharBhatia
All rights are reserved.

Manohar Bhatia

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May 03, 2010 8:36 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
changes are sometimes good and sometimes unwelcome, but are all an integral part of life, as you have pointed out.

You have given us much to ponder,
Diane T.

Energetically, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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May 03, 2010 12:51 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Jack Huber This is a little different use of the word, "change," Manohar, but with good results.

Jack

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May 03, 2010 9:13 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

An innovative way to think about change.

Diane

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May 04, 2010 1:08 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Maya Mahant Manohar,

Change is Manohar personified.... yet it has your signature.

Maya

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May 04, 2010 3:37 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar,

I loved the way you used the theme change and explained it so poetically. :0)

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May 04, 2010 11:32 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
Change is the only thing that does not change.
A poem written in your own typical style which is full of concern,ideas,realism,as always,asking the reader to look at the things from a different(changed)angle.

Ayub

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May 05, 2010 12:43 am re: re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::::::::::: "Change" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
I want to thank each of.....Diane.T.,Jack, Diane.S., Maya, Deb, and Ayub for yor valuable comments.
Manohar Bhatia

Monday Poem::::::: "What Is This Life.............?"

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Apr 19, 2010 3:24 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Manohar Bhatia What is this life full of trouble
all the time for a rumble
but no time for a quiet grumble?

What is this life full of tension
all the time for an apprehension
but no time for an introspection?

What is this life full of discussion
all the time for a confrontation
but no time for an innovation?

What is life full of cocophony
all the time for blasphemy
but no time for hegemony?

What is life full of sadness
all the time for total madness
but no time for little goodness?

What is life full of doomsday
all the time for a death-day
but no time for an eventful day?

What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?
-----The End----
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Apr 19, 2010 9:03 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
good questions! Who knows why we become bitter and loose our playfulness.....sometimes life can just wear you down.

To a brighter day,
Diane

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Apr 19, 2010 9:30 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Jack Huber Manohar,

You are fulfilling your job as a poet in asking these poignant questions. Well done. I look forward to your future poem that tries to answer them.

Jack

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Apr 19, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
you have got a peculiar style of writing poetry.
This poem is in the nature of a debate putting some valid questions.It takes a whole life to answer such questions.i enjoyed the following lines especially:-

What is this life full of richness
all the time for deadly bitchiness
but no time for lovable playfullness?

Ayub

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Apr 19, 2010 1:23 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

You have asked some very poignant questions that most people don't even think about let alone ask themselves. Perhaps if they did, your questions would not have to be asked? Your poem is very thought-provoking.

Diane

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Apr 20, 2010 12:49 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Maya Mahant Manohar,

I concur with Ayub, you have a very distinctive style which has become your signature. Very thought provoking questions you have asked, I wish we had the right answers!

Maya

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Apr 20, 2010 1:51 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::::: "What Is this Life..............?" #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Di::::I am an issue-based person and my mind always ticks on how to bring harmony in the world.Thanks for reading.
Jack::Yes,definitely I will try for some answers in my future poems.
Ayub::Yes,I do have my own style of writing poetry.Good that you enjoyed the last triplet.
Diane:Its very nice to read your response on the poem.
Maya::Your kind words are wholly appreciated.

Manohar Bhatia

Monday Poem:::::: "The City In Seige."

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Apr 12, 2010 8:14 am Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #

Manohar Bhatia Members,
I just saw a photo of this city and this poem came to me::::::::::

"The City In Siege."

This city in the range
is as dangerous a place
as a badge on his shirt
the Sheriff is doing his duty
to wipe out out-laws from ghost town.

Mid-night calm is
as sinister as a dawn
all looking quiet
except the barks of dogs.

High noon on the near-by river
looks suicidal in a summer
for youngsters wanting to swim
invited by the river grim.

A spring evening
looks full of promise
honey-bees collect pollens
buzzing to ferilize in stems.

In the bar after office-hours
the suspence is scary
No soul in sight
only a bartender for a cigarette
to light for a brave soul.

The dusty road
is nostalgic for me
where me and my beloved
were sick with passionate love.

Dons in this fearsome city
are happy-go-lucky
as a child of innocense
giving an endearing smile.

Alas! The Sheriff looks helpless!

--The End--
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Apr 12, 2010 8:41 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
now that you know how to post a picture, maybe you can let us see the accompanying image? Your words tell of us a dusty and desperate little place, I'm imagining somewhere in the US' Old West.

Many a cowboy movie was filmed in such a town,
Diane T.

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Apr 12, 2010 3:29 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #

Jack Huber Manohar, you are full of similes and metaphors today... An interesting look at a wild west town- thanks for sharing it.

Jack

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Apr 13, 2010 5:23 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #

Manohar Bhatia Di & Jack,
Actually,lots of old cowboys movies had the same setting of an old town in the mid-fifties,where constant raidng by the out-laws was the order of the day.The gun battle between out-laws and the Sheriff was an every day affair.I also remember of a beautiful horse-carriage driven by a faithful bearded old man,important passengers being a stunningly pretty rich lady and his escort and maybe laoded with a trunk of gold!
This one is from the movie::::"Gun Fight At The O.K. Corral" ...I think It was Burt Lancaster and......other famous actor..I think Clint Eastwood.
I have a photo and I try to post it.Thanks for your comments on my silly poem.

Manohar Bhatia

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Apr 13, 2010 8:19 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
A very imaginative poem,you have captured many images and painted them skilfully.

Ayub

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Apr 13, 2010 11:08 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::: "The City In Siege." #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

You have created a picturesque word painting describing the place and the people. Good job!

Diane

Monday Poem::::::::"Why Switch Off Lights?"

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Mar 29, 2010 6:57 am Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Manohar Bhatia Members,
Since it was an Earth Hour on 26th March,2010,requesting everyone to switch off power from 7.30p.m to 8.30p.m.I thought I will try out a poem::::::::::::::

"Why Switch Off Lights?"

Why switch off lights today?
beacause greed for 'power'is growing
to cater to man's unsatiable thirst
for progress in building new apartments
but succeeding in only in creating unbalanced society
where poor,downtrodden,suffer to eat food
left by noveau rich,celebs,others
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!

Why switch off lights lights to-day?
So that all gambling dens close
that may lead to rape,murder,extortion,
where the honest get caught
in cross-fire between 'A'& 'B' company
to be accidently bumped off in this encounter
for their kith & kin to mourns their deaths
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!

Why switch off lights to-day?
so that drinking bars have a dry day
alerting regular drinkers to face a test
and compulsive drinkers a forced rest
Also,lady tipplers a moment to ponder
to set their houses & children in order
and release them from this deadly habit
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!

Why switch off lights to-day?
so that we save enough power
for the have nots to see a ray of light
in their dwellings not seen for decades
and make them to feel humans too
to seek their trust,blessings,smiles,
which they have never experienced before.
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!

Why switch off lights to-day?
so that peace prevails in one hour
for everyone to enjoy some unforgetful moments
of hearing birds humming in the trees,
honey-bees merrily buzzing amongst flowers,
the pleasant sound of cool wind whistling,
allowing tiny waves splash delecately on beach front,
Remember,its an Earth Hour to-day!

--The End--

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Mar 29, 2010 9:08 am re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
your poem tells us how we have become a society that wastes more than we need, and how the "haves" take so much away from the "have nots" until we are blind to our over consumption. A good moral tale.

Thank you for making us stop and think about how we live,
Diane T. and furfamily

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Mar 29, 2010 11:17 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Ayub Bangroo
Manoha,
of couse, we should switch off lights to remind ourselves that we have many human responsibilities as emphatically counted by you.Global warming is a horror but many other things keep the globe boiling.

Ayub

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Mar 29, 2010 12:45 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Maya Mahant Manohar, your poem is an apt reminder, a timely wake up call. Nature had enough for everyones needs but not their greed.
Maya

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Mar 29, 2010 5:12 pm re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

You have aptly brought out a strong message that people everywhere need to not only hear but also heed.

Diane

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Mar 30, 2010 5:40 am re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Susan Graves Manohar

Thanks you just gave me an idea for this Thursdays Green Grove Post

Susan

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Mar 31, 2010 6:12 am re: re: re: Monday Poem::::::::::::::::::: "Why Switch Off Lights?" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di,Ayub,Maya,Diane & Susan::::::::::::::Thank you to each of you for your comments,which I always treasure.

Manohar Bhatia

F.O.R.M. Poem::::::: Crapsey Cinquain.

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Mar 30, 2010 8:17 pm F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

Jack Huber Crapsey Cinquain

A cinquain can refer to any five-line poem with a set pattern or syllable count. Adelaide Crapsey, however, made the cinquain her own. Born in Brooklyn, NY, in 1878, at the turn of the century she was class poet at Vassar College in Poughkeepsie. Before her death of tuberculosis, her interest in haiku and tanka led her to develop her own cinquain patterns, as well as a new form of "doublet," a couplet that utilized two rhyming lines of ten syllables each. Much of Adelaide's work was published posthumously and it was Carl Sandburg's poem, "Adelaide Crapsey," that re-established her and her art form in popular culture.

Without rhyming, the Crapsey cinquain was most often written in iambic meter ("duh-DUM") and had a set syllable pattern. Its 22 syllables were arranged in lines of 2,4,6,8 and 2 syllables, respectively, for lines one through five.

Crapsey cinquains are the most popular but variations do exist. A “reverse cinquain” has a syllable pattern of 2-8-6-4-2 and a “mirror cinquain” pairs the Crapsey or standard cinquain with the reverse. Combining the two "mirror cinquain" stanzas and eliminating one of the two-syllable lines in the middle creates a nine-line “butterfly cinquain.” Link five stanzas and you have a “crown cinquain.” There seems to be no shortage of variations.

Examples:

Lightning

Its flash,
a brilliant test
of nighttime's secrecy,
exposes for an instant, then
escapes.

Cardinal

Red bird,
your glorious
plumage is radiant,
as your male ego is displayed
for her.

Copyright © 2010 by Jack Huber

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Mar 31, 2010 6:35 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I am trying out this Crapsey Cinquain::::::

Pink Necked Flamingoes.

Pink necks (2)
are eye-catching (4)
to watch in amazement (6)
especially picking fish from (8)
mud flats. (2)

I hope to be corrected.Thanks Jack for teaching me this easy new F.O.R.M.

Manohar Bhatia

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Mar 31, 2010 7:05 am re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

dalip daswani
HEN

ruffle
your tail no more
your shimmering colors
no longer fascinate cocky
peacock

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Mar 31, 2010 9:01 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

Maya Mahant Hard Rock

Three 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck,
carat, colour, clarity; a
diamond

Hard Rock
(Butterfly)

Four 'C's
of shining stone
costing a million buck
carat, cut, colour, clarity
hard rock.
Brilliant in gold or platinum
love's circlet forever;
girl's best friend, a
diamond.

Jack I am not sure of the syllable count of line 4 of both the poems.. carat (2), colour (2) clarity (3) cut (1)....?

Maya

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Mar 31, 2010 11:25 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

Jack Huber Manohar, Dalip and Maya, all are splendid examples of Crapsey cinquains, which now make you Crapsey poets...

Maya, your syllable counts are correct, but you might want to change "buck" to "bucks" (a million bucks).

Good job!

Jack

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Mar 31, 2010 11:31 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

Maya Mahant Thanks Jack, I will. Happened with copy paste, missed the typo.

Maya

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Apr 01, 2010 7:38 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- The Crapsey Cinquain #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Hip,hip,hurrays.........3 cheers to our very dear Jack,for teaching us this new F.O.R.M.God bless everyone in your family.

Manohar Bhatia

"Music That 'Cures' Deafness"_______ABNA Reviews

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What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?

This writer has a curious style – at once childish and yet descriptive. Since it is coming from another culture, I came to appreciate the choppiness of the prose after a few paragraphs. The allegories were fun.

What aspect needs the most work?

Overall, I found the language to be perhaps a bit TOO simple and childish, and feel the author needs to revisit their story for some editing and tightening up of the story without losing any of the essential English-as-a-second-language flavor.

What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?

I found myself surprised that I liked it and found the story engaging. The author writes in a kind of pidgin English that is easy to understand and also very charming.

ABNA Expert Reviewer

What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?

The story takes place in an unfamiliar environment, the most impoverished province in India (Uttar Pradesh). This draws the reader in, because the reader will be interested in strange cultural practices and strange traditions.

What aspect needs the most work?

The narrative reads: "Brahmin food is pure vegetarian and varied. There is Dal(pulses), Kadhi,(a kind of soup) Chappatis,(Bread)" I recommend that each of these foods be expanded to an entire paragraph. The writer could desribe the fragrance and color and method of preparation (boiling for three hours, baking for ten minutes) for each of these foods. By not pausing to describe the foods, the author has missed an opportunity for providing interesting writing. Also, when we read the character "Suryanavshi," I suggest that the author devote a sentence or two describing how to pronounce this name, and to describe alternate pronunciations, and to describing similar names in India. By not pausing to focus on this name, or on the origin of this name, the author has lost an opportunity for providing some interesting writing.

What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?

This story is refreshing among most of the samples provided by Amazon.com, in that it is easy to understand what is going on, despite the unfamiliar environment of the present story (a remote province in India). In other words, in most of the stories provided by Amazon.com, the authors clutter up the narratives of ordinary, prosaic events, by plunging into details about the weather, or about exaggerated emotions, or about irrelevant things, like traffic. But the present story, about India, does NOT suffer from these problems. Although the prose does seem to be written by an amateur-author, the author writes clearly and it is easy for the reader to see that a genuine story is being developed. I would have liked the author to have added more bizarre customs from India, for example (this is my own made-up example), animal sacrifice. I know, for example, that 150 years ago in India they had human sacrifice in a practice called, "Satti." Therefore, I would expect some bizarre practices to still be in practice in India, and I would have liked to have seen them integrated into this story///////////////////(End of Review)

Manohar Bhatia comments on the reviews:::::;

I do appreciate ABNA reviewers.The first reviewer said that he is surprised at my childish writing and yet likes reading my excerpt.He is impressed by the overall opinion of the excerpt and found the story engaging......I found I have scored here.Although I write pidgin English, but still he found it very charming.

The second reviewer says that although the story is set in the most improvished province of India(Uttar Pradesh),still this reviewer feels will draw the reader in ,so that he can know strange cultural practices and traditions.Overall,he found the story refreshing among other samples sent on amazon.com

Shall we be friends?:::::::::::e-mail addresses.

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Jun 12, 2009 4:31 pm let's be friends, shall we??? #

Diane Tegarden A new member (RDJ) gave me a great idea...

in order to be listed as a friend here on Ryze we need each other's email addy, so here's mine, feel free to add me as a friend!

rosefirewalker@aol.com

Please list your email on this thread so the other members can also add you as a friend. It's an easy way to remember their birthday, because Ryze will alert you when their birthday is coming up and you can pop in and wish them well!

huggles and buggles,
Diane

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Aditya Prasad mine is aditya_prasad_online@yahoo.com

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Jun 12, 2009 7:03 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

RD Jentsch Diane;

I'm glad you had such a great idea. Here is my email so we can all network.

RD
bekjents@gmail.com

Feel free to check out my page and email me directly if you need any help. :)

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Jun 12, 2009 8:04 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Diane Tegarden you got it RD and Aditya, we're friends now!!

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Jun 13, 2009 1:38 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Jack Huber Mine's easy- jack@jackhuber.com.

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Jun 13, 2009 1:52 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

dalip daswani just joined... a couple days ago, from Pune, India

my email id: ddalip@gmail.com

Diane, if I may suggest: could we also use this thread to `re-invent' or `re-visit' ourselves by sharing a short introduction - something different to what's already on our ryze page? (Or perhaps start a new thread for this - titled maybe "a visit to myself" or something like that?)

cheers, have a great weekend all, and happy to be here!

dalip daswani

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Jun 13, 2009 7:28 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Marsha Walker emybaker@yahoo.com

Writers are the geniuses that force us to step outside the box of the ordinary.
Marsha Dean Walker

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Jun 13, 2009 8:41 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Dalip) #

Diane Tegarden Dalip,
sounds like a good idea, please feel free to write a short introduction on the new thread, entitled "A little bit about me..."!

To The Dance of Life,
Diane

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Jun 13, 2009 10:07 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Dalip) #

Manohar Bhatia Hi all,

My e-mail id: fizz_buzz2006@yahoo.co.in

Thanks and take care!

Manohar Bhatia

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Jun 15, 2009 9:33 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Hiyaa Aashish Israni A warm hello to all and a warmer welcome to all new members!

My email ID is sandhyasuri@gmail.com

My maiden name is Sandhya Suri

My name is Hiyaa Aashish Israni

My nickname is Sandy

Cheers
Hiyaa

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Deb..... Always SMILING! Hello everybody,

Now don't forget to write to me and join me on chat here is my email id:

ndebra@gmail.com

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Jun 15, 2009 3:39 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Gazelle Simmons Mine is help@admnsrvcs.com and I will definitely have to establish some more connections. Take care and God bless.
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Glen Hamilton Sounds like great fun, count me in. my email is:

POBachs@aol.com

Please add me to your friends list.

Glen

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Jun 19, 2009 4:38 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Arvind Hi, I am here after a long time. Great idea RDJ.

Mine is : arvy.india@gmail.com

Arvind

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Jun 19, 2009 4:50 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

TIMOTHY MCAULIFFE tmcauliff656@hotmail I am in Brooklyn NY USA

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Jun 19, 2009 8:18 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we???(Tim) #

Diane Tegarden Tim, without the .com at the end of your email, the address doesn't work!

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Ashis Dutta mine is ashisdutta@gmail.com

Love
Ashis

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RVIyengar
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Jun 25, 2009 12:19 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Shanks Pandiath hi there

my contact add is spandiath3@dataone.in

my social network adds are available at

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cheers

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Jun 29, 2009 7:18 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Sarah Rahman You can always add me on:

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Looking forward to get connected.

Cheers!

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Jul 01, 2009 6:48 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Ayub Bangroo
Mine is ayoubaz@rediffmail.com

Hope to ryze together.

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Jul 12, 2009 12:01 pm re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Lynn McMonigal My email address is lynnmcwriter@gmail.com

Lynn McMonigal

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Jul 25, 2009 9:17 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Claudia Suzanne Great idea, especially since I'm new on Ryze. I'm at claudiasuzanne@gmail.com

Claudia Suzanne

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Sep 09, 2009 5:16 am re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

sangeetha giri

Hi everyone,

My e-mail address is shrutigs06@yahoo.co.in

Sangeetha Giri

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Yasamin Alttahir yasamin.alttahir@gmail.com

blog http://tcherrytree.blogspot.com/

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Sep 30, 2009 8:44 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Diane Stephenson I'm new here and my e-mail is dianestephenson.stemtechbiz@gmail.com.

When I get a little more time I'll post something about myself on the appropriate thread.

Diane
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Sep 30, 2009 9:06 am let's be friends, shall we??? Added 6 friends today! #

Diane Tegarden
Ayub, Lynn, Claudia, Sangeetha Girl, Yasamin and Diane,
I have added you all as friends...expect a birthday wish on your birthdays!!

May You Never Thirst...for knowledge, for love...for water!
Diane T. and furfamily

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Sep 30, 2009 9:24 am re: let's be friends, shall we??? Added 6 friends today! #

Diane Stephenson Thank you, Diane.

Diane

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Maya Mahant my email id is mayamahant@hotmail.com

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Vincent Narayanan And mine is naravincent@yahoo.co.in. I sure would love to be your friend.

Peace and Regards
Narayanan Vincent

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Nov 10, 2009 7:50 am let's be friends, shall we??? (Maya and Vincent) #

Diane Tegarden
Maya and Vincent, you've been added to my friends list, for sure!

Have an adventure today!
Diane T. and furfamily

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Nov 11, 2009 12:11 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Tim Smith Hi Diane and all,
My e-mail addy is timsjs@yahoo.com. I write a weekly post on my blog about interviews I do with people using alternative energy. I'm looking forward to learning how to better express myself by reading your words.

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Nov 11, 2009 12:34 pm re: let's be friends, shall we??? #

Marsha Walker Hi everyone,

School is done and I now have a masters in human services as well as being a board certified human services professional. Of course I am very pleased to announce that I did it with a 3.97 GPA. I am in the process of getting my radio shows set us and then I will rejoin you as before.

I have had some changes in my life and as they say when one door closes another one opens and in my case there was very handsome guy with the most incredible blue eyes standing in that door.

SpeciaL thanks to Lady Diane for all the love and support.

I hope things are good in your worlds and anyone who is interested in contacting me please feel free to do so at

emybaker@yahoo.com

Take care and see you soon!
Marsha

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Nov 11, 2009 2:37 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Tim) #

Diane Tegarden
Tim,
please let us all know the URL of your blog so we can go and learn more on the positive effects of Renewable Energy on the environment! And don't forget to post the blog (or at least some part of it) every Thursday on Susan Graves' Green Grove Thursday thread. (Thanks for bringing Tim on board Susan!)

I'm excited about our upcoming Skype interview and will contact you shortly to get the time, day and date so I can let everyone know when we'll be "on the air"!

A hearty welcome from the gang here at WPWU,
Diane T. and furfamily

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Nov 11, 2009 2:45 pm re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #

Diane Tegarden
Dearest Lady M,
I'm just busting at the seams I'm so proud of your fantastic accomplishments, despite your personal injury (both to heart and back).

You are such a talented and truly magnificent woman, I'm so lucky to be considered among your friends. (Wish we lived closer so we could rage around the town together a bit!) What o what would they do with the two of us loose?
;>

Congratulations on your graduation and your grades, now you can come back to the fold....heh heh heh...oh my devious mind is aswirl...

Let me know when you plan to launch your new radio show and we can have a ball, busting myths about writing, and woes.

BTW, I may need some help setting up MY new BTR show, so when you get a minute next week, let's talk.

Yours in friendship and folly,
Diane T. and furfamily

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Mar 26, 2010 12:31 am re: re: re: let's be friends, shall we??? (Marsha) You're Baaaaack!! #

Tom Gillispie writer/editor nc3022@yahoo.com

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A short poem:::::::: "Its My Choice........."

2010-03-19T04:41:00.000-07:00

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Mar 15, 2010 9:32 am Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
This is again a small poem,that struck to my mind on the one word:::; 'choice'
Here it goes::::

"Its My Choice......"
I like it bad,I like it good,
its my choice to think of food!

I like it high,I like it low
its my choice for the show!

I like it black,I like it white
its my choice to adjust my sight!

I like it left,I like it right
its my choice about my kite!

I like it forward,I like it backward
its me choice about my ward!

I like it fast,I like it slow
its my choice how I flow!

I like the silence,I like the noise
its my choice about the voice!

I like the bumpy,I like the dumpy
its my choice,if I become grumpy!

I like being lost,I like being found
its my choice of being dumbfound!

I like the drumstick,I like the drummer
its my choice if I play with a murmur!

Well Folks! I like it because I like it!

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Mar 15, 2010 11:31 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
your choice is always different,choice of words,choice of thought,choice of topic,all witty.It seems your prime choice to keep the readers in good humour.

Ayub

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Mar 15, 2010 12:04 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Maya Mahant Manohar, The wit is not to be missed. The couplets lend a rhythm, sort of a marching song. I think Ayub has summed it up correctly.... to keep us smiling and in good humour.

Maya

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Mar 15, 2010 10:32 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Unique! I agree with Ayub and Maya about your sense of humor. It's good to be upbeat and see the humorous side of life.

Diane

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Mar 16, 2010 10:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Jack Huber It's nice to play with words and phrases, isn't it? This one is cute, but you might experiment with adding a middle line to each of the couplets to add a little oomph to each thought. Since your couplet already rhymes, the added line would not have to.

In any case, I like it.

Jack

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Mar 17, 2010 7:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks for the hint;here is my revised poem::::::

"Its My Choice...."

I like it bad,I like it good
watch your protruding tummy
its my choice to think of food!

I like it high,I like it low
are you afraid of height?
its my choice for the show!

I like it black,I like it white
its day now,its night later
its my choice to adjust my sight!

I like it left,I like it right
to keep my talent right
its my choice about my kite!

I like it forward,I like it backward
to drive my vehicle in
its my choice about my ward!

I like it fast,I like it slow
to let my feet dance in abundance
its my choice how I flow!

I like the silence,I like the noise
to play my musical instrument
its my choice of the voice!

I like the bumpy,I like the dumpy
of the ride on my bike
its my choice,if I become grumpy!

I like being lost,I like being found
in the fair around the market-place
its my choice of being dumbfound!

I like the drumstick,I like the drummer
who always plays hard & loud music
its my choice,if I play with a murmur!

Well Folks!I like it,because I like it!

--The End--
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Mar 17, 2010 10:22 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Jack Huber I do like the triplets better. We'll have to see what others think, and how YOU feel about them...

Well done,

Jack

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Mar 17, 2010 3:53 pm re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Maya Mahant Manohar, it reads better, though I am foxed in certain places... however it can be put to artistic leeway.

Maya

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Mar 18, 2010 8:03 am re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::: "Its My Choice........." #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks.....I do feel not so good about it...its my first attempt and done in a hurry.....will like to revamp this poem finally.Regards,
Manohar Bhatia

Monday Poem:::::::::::::: " I Went to..................."

2010-03-14T01:17:00.000-08:00

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Mar 08, 2010 12:37 am Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
As I have mentioned before,the poems I write are inspired from observations,travels,reading newspapers,autobiographies,TV etc....The current is inspired from reading an autobiography of a living legend,who likes to travel a lot in his life.It occured to me that what If I can also travel to various places and come up with something amusing to relate......well,this is all fiction.

Monday Poem::::::: "I Went to..........."

I went to the kitchen to cook my meal
But came back with a broken tin seal
Of what use is this broken tin seal
when I cannot make a deal!

I went to college to do my study
but came back only with lost buddy
of what use is this lost buddy
when I cannot make him study!

I went to cricket field fearing for blob
but came back scoring a century
of what use is this century
when my team lost match of century!

I went to a jungle to shoot a chimera
but came back only with broken camera
Now,of what use is this broken camera
when I didn't click photo of chimera!

I went to climb the Great Wall Of China
but came back with diagnosied hernia
what use is this hernia to me
when my hospitalized expenses are everone to see!

I went to holiday for a complete rest
but came for a real test
now,what can I test when piles of files
are staring me on my desk!

I went for a stroll to Picadally Circus
but landed in nearby real circus
I saw tigers,elephant,clowns,
mimicking many with thier funny frowns!

I went for a ride in a roller-coaster
but came back with my body a roster
I tried all medicines to cure this roaster
but fell flat in the doctor's toaster!

I went to a friend's house for a chat
but came back wearing only my hat
now,what should I do with this hat
except to fling it on the mat!

I went to a party to have a gala time
but came back only with a broken dime
what to do with this broken dime
except to display as collector's shine!

I went to library to read some books
but came back only with its hooks
what use are these hooks to me
but to hang the shirts of thee!

I went to the beach for a good swim
only to come out with a face grim
Oh!,why the grimming face?
only to look in mirror for body charcoal case!

--The End--
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Mar 08, 2010 7:02 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,

This poem is so quintessential Manohar! Always certain to bring a smile, the tongue in cheek humour is sure way to keep the reader amused.

Maya

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Mar 08, 2010 10:17 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Jack Huber You are fortunate to have a vivid imagination, Manohar. That will always help you as a writer. It's good to keep stretching those muscles...

Jack

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Mar 08, 2010 10:25 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
I especially liked this stanza...

"I went to a jungle to shoot a chimera
but came back only with broken camera
Now,of what use is this broken camera
when I didn't click photo of chimera!"

I enjoyed the witty play on words of chimera and camera,
Diane T.

Energetically, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Mar 08, 2010 5:38 pm re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Your sense of humor comes through loud and clear. And it shows that often what we consider in the beginning to be really important ends up being next to useless in our lives. Perhaps we all chase this 'chimera' at some point in our lives but will never catch it on our broken cameras. Things seldom turn out the way we expect in life but that doesn't necessarily mean that's bad. Sometimes we get something even better - we throw away the broken camera and buy a better one!

Diane

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Mar 09, 2010 12:23 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,

Very humorous poem,you have a very good knack for writing this sort of witty poetry.

Ayub

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Mar 10, 2010 12:13 am re: Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "I Went to...................................." #

Manohar Bhatia Maya,Jack,Di,Diane,Ayub::::::thank you all for reading the poem and your precious comments.

Manohar Bhatia

F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::::::::::::::::::: "Blitz".

2010-03-03T03:44:00.000-08:00

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Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.

The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.

There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.

At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.

The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.

Three White Birds

Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...

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Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.

Manohar Bhatia

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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.

Jack

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Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine

Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....

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Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!

Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!

;>
the ever hungry Diane T.

PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!

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Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!

Jack

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Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.

Ayub

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Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.

Maya

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Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..

Trip To Hell

Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...

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Jack,I don't know what I have written;please come to my help.Thanks.

Manohar Bhatia

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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber Manohar,

I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?

Jack

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Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,

Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.

Maya

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Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,

I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.

Maya

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Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.

regards
Ayub

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Feb 05, 2010 12:27 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.

DYING ANCHAR LAKE

Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.

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Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.

Manohar Bhatia

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Feb 05, 2010 5:51 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Ayub,

You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.

Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.

Maya

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Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #

Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.

You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?

I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.

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Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #

Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.

Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.

Regards
Ayub

Monday Poem:::::::::::::::: "Fedora"

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Feb 08, 2010 12:53 am Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

Manohar Bhatia
I saw this man on a horse-back
wearing a fedora and heavily
clothed in leather with a thick
belt and his two guns ready for
action...guess the name(Cowboy hat)

I saw this mexican man singing
in the streets and playing a guitar
with a vagabond look about him and torn
shirt,a stubble on his face,tight jeans
and wearing a fedora...guess the name
(Panama hat)

I saw this man in an English movie
"Harry Black & The Tiger" wearing a
safari suit,with a rifle in his hand
searchingly roaming the jungle for a
tiger.He too was wearing a fedora...guess
the name(Oval school-master's hat)

I saw this man near the minara masjid
with millions of others,wearing a kurta
pyjama,a steel kada on his hand,a gold chain
round his neck,kneeling and offering his
Friday namaz and wearing a fedora...guess
the name(skullcap)

I saw this man offering a purple
fedora to one of the bright crickters
for scoring the fastest century....guess
the name(sports cap)

I saw this clown in a circus,
face fully painted in various colours
jumping,mimicking,making the crowd
laugh with his head covered with
a fedora...guess the name(clown cap)

I saw this half-naked man with
a million followers and a stick in
his right hand,walking with a determined
look for abolition of tax on salt and
wearing the greatest fedora of all
time....guess the name(Gandhi Cap!)

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Friends:I do not know whether this is a poem,but these thoughts came to me about 'Hats' and I wrote them down.

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Feb 08, 2010 4:29 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,

Very interesting, loved the idea of translating the different types of headgear into a poem with descriptions.

Just for information and interest,

Fedora is a felt hat that is creased lengthwise down the crown and pinched in the front on both sides. The brim goes all the way around, and often there will be a hat band as well.

Also called

Cowboy Hat : Stetson
Panama : Sombrero
School Master's : Bowler or maybe a Tribly
Skull cap Muslims : Taqiyah
Sports cap : Baseball cap
Clown cap : Dunce cap
Gandhi cap : Gandhi topi

Maya

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Feb 08, 2010 6:20 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

LC Like Maya says--Interesting!

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Feb 08, 2010 9:36 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Maya) #

Diane Tegarden
Maya,
I think the clown cap would be called a jester's hat, the multi-colored one with bells on the ends.

(A dunce cap is the big tall hat shaped like a cone that people have to put on when they say something dumb.)

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Feb 08, 2010 9:46 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Maya) #

Maya Mahant Hiya Diane,

Thanks, I need the Dunce cap!

Smiles and grins
Maya

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Feb 08, 2010 9:47 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Manohar) #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I love the way hats can express the culture of different people, as you have shown in this very clever poem.

The only thing I would change is to replace the word "fedora" with the more generic "hat", because as Maya pointed out, the fedora is a certain type of hat that doesn't fit the individual descriptions in your stanzas.

It wouldn't take anything away from the poem and it would be less confusing to the readers who actually know what "fedora" means!

A fun start to our WPWU week,
Diane T. and the whole hairy clan

PS. You could re-title the poem "The Hat Trick", subtitled "Can you guess the name of the hat?"

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Feb 08, 2010 10:54 am re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" (Manohar) #

Jack Huber I ditto Diane's comments. Very inventive!

It might be interesting to leave "Fedora" the title, even if it wasn't included in the clues and descriptions.

Jack

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Feb 08, 2010 12:00 pm re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Very imaginative and colorful way to describe the different hats various people wear. Diane's suggestion of the title change is a good one.

Diane

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Feb 09, 2010 8:12 am re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Di:::I knew 'fedora'would be a new word for hats.But it has been deliberately put to create some sort of mystery in the poem.I think,the title 'The Hat Trick' is very suitable,but it would not be my title,but yours?
Diane:::Thanks,you enjoyed the poem.
Maya:::While I knew some names like,Sombrero,Taqyiah,Gandhi topi,other names will add to my vocabulory.A great info Maya.
Jack::Your observation falls in line with mine.'Fedora'has been put there to create suspence.
LC::Kudos to you for reading the poem.

Manohar Bhatia

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Feb 09, 2010 12:22 pm re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar,
You have created a very imaginative poem.Simple things are usually difficult to define but you have done it well.
For the last two three days i had to use caps of different form compatible to the rains and snow here.So your poem is very timely to me.

Ayub

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Feb 09, 2010 10:25 pm re: re: re: Monday's Poem::::::: "Fedora" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Ayub,
Good for you,friend,my poem has helped you in some way.Keep smiling always,even in pain,rain,drain.
Manohar Bhatia

"Oh! My Poor Little Head !" ..............Monday Poem

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Feb 22, 2010 4:21 am Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Manohar Bhatia
What a marvellous struture
on top of our bodies!
It can think,store,innovate
countless thoughts,data,inventions.
Oh!my poor little head!

It can act better than
a computer,because its alive,
kicking,breathing as always.
Oh!my poor little head!

Man treats this head
with disdain,exploitation,extortion,
How many operations odered?
a thousand,a million,a billion,a trillion
Think before it gives way,
Oh!my poor little head!

Strike two heads,not for war,
but for cordial meeting
to discuss,argue,contemplate
for a better to-marrow.
Oh!my poor little head!

Make your head a friend,
loving,nourishing,messaging,resting,
every Sunday,during the week,
Then watch its performance.
Oh!my poor litle head!

Lose your hat,but
never lose your head.
Go East or West,
Human head is the best.
Oh!my poor littel head!

---The End---

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Feb 22, 2010 8:23 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
this is the funniest poem you've written yet! Here's my contribution.....

When I read too much
my eyes hurt, my head's sore
I can't stuff in another word, sentence or phrase,
not one more.
Oh! my poor little head!

;>
Diane T. and furfamily

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Feb 22, 2010 10:01 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Jack Huber As usual, you've found a neat line to use as your refrain. Keep up the creative writing!

Jack

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Feb 22, 2010 11:07 am re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Very inventive! I too like the way you have repeated the title throughout the poem bringing it all together. Good work.

Diane

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Feb 23, 2010 2:18 am re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Maya Mahant Manohar,

Very funny, add on to yours and Diane's

My nose is red and runny
my ears all clogged and funny
an infernal cold is the cause
makes me in my chores pause,
my brain is going fuzzy buzzy
Oh!my poor little head.

Wordmeisters, I think Manohar here has us started on something really hilarious, like a friendship quilt, we can keep building on this one.

Maya

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Feb 23, 2010 12:15 pm re: re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
If the head of a family,of a state,of a nation or of a country remains in order,everything would be right.
Your poem tells a truth though in a funny way.

Ayub

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Feb 23, 2010 11:56 pm re: re: Monday Poem:::::: "Oh, my poor little head ! " #

Manohar Bhatia Hi members,
Di::::Thank you for waking me up;when I wrote,I did not know that this will be my funiest poem---although I admit I am a little naughty fella.Here's an incident which might make you laugh....
"I must have been in standard IV in ANZA High School located at Byculla.Ous Maths teacher was Sir.Fernendes and was quite a character.So,whenever he used to enter our class.students will wisper into each other's ears that 'Draculla' has entered,because that was how he was nicknamed.I was quite a prank and I had this nasty habit of bottom pinching the girls.After the usual formalities of wishing good mornings was over,our Sir looked at the students with a stern face and as we stood up,I bottom pitched the girl standing in front of me.But,our 'Draculla' Sir caught me in the act and punished me by making me kneel down in front of the whole class for the entire period.I was quite embarassed......"
Jack:::As usual,thanks for the complenments.
Diane::So sweet of you to read the poem.
Ayub::I forgot that our 'head' can be looked up our "HEAD"
of a family;thanks for reminding.
A bouquet of thanks for all others.

Manohar Bhatia

"Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"........Monday Poem

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Manohar Bhatia
I am lying on a bench
under a shade of trees
with the gentle wind
blowing lazily around my knees
Is this my Garden of Heaven?

I see birds,one,two,three
hearing their chirpings for free
crows hastily are making nests
to lay their eggs for their pets
Is this my garden of heaven?

Honey-bees buzzing
around colourful flowers
to pick up pollen grains
and fertilize in their stems
Is this my Garden of Heaven?

Vultures are seen in sky
and flying very high
to catch through sharp eye
anything gives out a sigh!
Is this my Garden of Heaven?

Now, all is quiet
a deafning silence,
real,peaceful,exciting,vibrant,
Where is the Garden of Heaven?
Oh,Man,it always resides within YOU!

--The End--
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Maya Mahant Manohar,

Your 'Garden Of Heaven' has beautiful and the ugly. Your poem reflects duality, the honey bees pollinating to create new flowers...life and vultures the flesh eating scavengers being the metaphor for death. Good and the bad coexist, in your mind. But then that is the fact of life.

Maya

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Ayub Bangroo
Wonderful poem Manohar,
You have created some beautiful imagery from the real life and the ending this heaven lies within you is so apt.The style you have adopted for this poem has a class of its own.

Ayub

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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I love your poems about nature and its wonders, and I appreciate your conclusion is that "the garden is always within YOU!"

Well spoken,
Diane T.

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Mar 01, 2010 10:35 am re: re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #

Jack Huber Ditto, Diane. Nature is a favorite theme for many people, I think even more than love. Love poetry just gets the press...

A nice read, Manohar, as always.

Jack

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Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Good visual and good conclusion. By repeating the question "Is this my Garden of Heaven" you have paved the way for your final and truthful statement. Well done.

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Mar 01, 2010 7:07 pm re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #

Marsha Walker Another great poem that brightens the winter gloom.

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Mar 02, 2010 7:16 am re: "Is This My Garden Of Heaven?"::::::::::::::::::::::::Monday Poem. #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Maya,Ayub,Di,Diane,Jack,& Marsha..........I feel humbled by your reactions,because it surprises me that I can write poetry.....maybe I have learnt all this in your company?
Thank you,my friends.

Manohar Bhatia

F.O.R.M.:::::::: "Blitz"

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Feb 01, 2010 9:22 pm F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber Blitz
The “Blitz” poem is well-named, as fifty short lines are read in rapid-fire fashion. This form was invented by poet Robert Keim in 2008.

The format is unique- twenty-four couplets, each line beginning with the last word of the previous couplet, ending with two single word lines, the last word of lines 48 and 47, respectively. The lines are short and fast, but consist of at least two words (other than the last two lines), and most are common or recognizable phrases. The blitz lends itself well to being read aloud.

There is no meter or rhyme used in a blitz. Though fast-paced, the concept that the poet wants to convey will be revealed slowly throughout the piece, as less meaningful phrases give way to those more relevant when taken in total. Continuous repetition through the poem keeps the reader (or listener) interested and allows for a quick cadence. The end is a poignant comment on the concept.

At first glance, it appears to be an easy form to use, but upon first trial, you’ll find it challenging. The first line is a short phrase, perhaps a cliché, and the second line repeats the first word of the first one. The last word of line two is the first word of lines three and four, the last word of line four is the first word of lines five and six, and so on until the last two lines. Line 49 is simply the last word of line 48, and line 50 is the last word of line 47.

The title should be exactly three words, joining the first word of line 3 with the word in line 47 with a conjunction or preposition, but I preferred to repeat one of the lines as the title in my example.

Three White Birds

Mother nature
mother country
country 'tis of thee
country road
road apples
road leading home
home to roost
home at three
three white birds
three dog night
night owls
night vision
vision of paradise
vision of the future
future probabilities
future is now
now and forever
now we can see
see how they fail
see to it tomorrow
tomorrow never knows
tomorrow isn't soon enough
enough waste
enough time has past
past experience
past tense
tense muscles
tense times
times like these
times are changing
changing doctrines
changing minds
minds will follow
minds made up
up the canyon walls
up in the air
air your dirty laundry
air raid
raid the environment
raid the piggy bank
bank on it
bank of the great river
river of waste
river runs wild
wild oats
wild and fancy free
free to fly
free as birds
birds...
fly...

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Feb 02, 2010 7:34 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Blitz is like a storm....fast and furious.Please await my form of Blitz;I am still thinking.

Manohar Bhatia

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Feb 02, 2010 9:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber Indeed, we will wait with bated breath.

Jack

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Feb 02, 2010 10:12 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Varied Indian Cuisine

Chicken korma
chicken rogan-josh
josh for the soul
josh for the palate
palate of the nation
palate so varied
varied in every state
varied by region
region in the North
region in the South
South,Kerala and Karnatak
South predominant rice
rice in idli
rice in dosa
dosa with sambar
dosa with chutney
chutney made with coconut
chutney made with mango
mango, the king of fruit
mango,fruit for the king
King of Hyderabad
King the Nizam
Nizam famous for this jewels
Nizam for his cuisine
cuisine with secrets
cuisine with recipes
recipes years old
recipes from Lucknow
Lucknow influenced by Mughuls
Lucknow cuisine for the royals
Royals from Kashmir
Royals from Rajastan
Rajastan and Chauki Dhani
Rajastan and its Lal Maas
Maas, tender and melting
Maas, scumptious, delicious.
Delicious food
delicious drink
Drink from sugarcane
drink from toddy palm
Palm trees of dates
palm tress of coconut
coconuts lining the coast
coconuts in fish curries
curries God's own country
curries from Kerala
Kerala...
Country....

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Feb 02, 2010 10:50 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Diane Tegarden WOW Maya, that was fast!

Now I'm hankering for curry and rice, darn ya!

;>
the ever hungry Diane T.

PS. the word hankering came from Dutch!

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Feb 02, 2010 11:06 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber I don't really know much Indian cuisine, but this sounds scrumptious... very well done, Maya!

Jack

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Feb 02, 2010 11:57 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Ayub Bangroo
This is a very interesting form.While the three white birds of Jack have been flying since long i am amazed how Maya prepared so many dishes in so little time.Congrats.

Ayub

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Feb 03, 2010 1:24 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant I shall not hijack, Jack's thread. But to all of you a quick thank you. Cooked up a 'blitz', cooking being a part of my profession and also my passion. Wordmeisters have a standing invitation to come to Goa, and it will be my pleasure to initiate the uninitiated into the pleasures of Indian Cuisine.

Maya

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Feb 03, 2010 7:45 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Here's my F.O.R.M.:::::: Blitz..

Trip To Hell

Trip in giant wheel
trip of death
death personified
death visited
visited by many
visited by daring
daring youngsters
daring children
children thrilled
children excited
excited going to hell
excited to get killed
killed a bird on way
killed the ego
ego is dangerous
ego is bad
bad is good
bad is infectious
infectious influences
infectious for everything
everything is going right
everything is for everyone
everyone is shouting
everyone is red-faced
red-faced monkey
red-faced owl
owl flied in air
owl gets caught in tree
caught in the net
caught in the act
act and go
act and blow
blow in wind
blow in seat
seat of power
seat of individuality
individuality dangerous
indiviuality also supreme
supreme moments
supreme feelings
feelings of death
feelings of fear
fear of fall
fear of sadness
sadness moving in
sadness hits hell
hell and earth
hell to heaven
heaven.....
earth...

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Feb 03, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Jack Huber Manohar,

I'd say you've written a blitz that is very dark. The format was good and the emotional turmoil came through loud and clear. Interesting how these can turn out, isn't it?

Jack

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Feb 04, 2010 7:02 am re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,

Your Blitz took me on a nature ride through day and night, on earth and in the sky, looking at fur and feathered friends, all this in a blink of an eye. My head is reeling at the speed the pictures move.

Maya

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Feb 04, 2010 7:05 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,

I ditto Jack's comment, it was like watching the trailer of the movie 2010. Very effective.

Maya

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Feb 04, 2010 9:07 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Ayub Bangroo Hi Manohar,
This poem again shows your command on ideas and emotions.You have done it so quick .Trip to hell is no body`s wish though poetically it can be made convenient.

regards
Ayub

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Ayub Bangroo Anchar lake is one of the many ignored and dying lakes in this part of the world.

DYING ANCHAR LAKE

Not far away
Not unknown
Unknown to logic
Unknown to morality
Morality shows
Morality dictates
Dictates of piety
Dictates of purity
Purity scarce
Purity dying
Dying Anchar lake
Dying Srinagar city
City once neat and clean
City once full of streams
Streams carried men and matter
Streams with clean water
Water polluted now in lake
Water smelling foul
Foul ways adopted
Foul results getting
Getting out of reach
Getting worst
Worst remedies adopted
Worst than disease
Disease of more wealth
Disease of corruption
Corruption root cause
Corruption everywhere
Everywhere seminars
Every where propaganda
Propaganda to save lake
Propaganda only to fool
Fool too many people
Fool too many times
Times have changed
Times are destructive
Destructive mentality
Destructive designs
Designs of hypocrisy
Designs disguised
Disguised frauds
Disguised probes
Probes in to what?
Probes by whom?
Whom blame for plunder
Whom catch and free
Free all,fairness gone
Free,and forget lake
Lake
Gone.

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Feb 05, 2010 5:15 am re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Blitz #

Manohar Bhatia Ayub dear,
I would say, this Blitz is excellent....why?
Because,you are keeping to the point of the title described in your poem.....about Dying Anchar Lake and the mess it is now....city,water,streams,corruption,politicians have all been dealt a hard invisible blow in this poem.Should I describe it as the best so far?Well done,Ayub.

Manohar Bhatia

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Maya Mahant Ayub,

You cannot give up, you cannot let go. Till you have hope, the lake will have too. For every thousand negatives, your one positive will be the redemption.

Please heed my fervent plea, dear friend.

Maya

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Feb 05, 2010 8:29 am re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #

Diane Tegarden
Ayub,
this is an excellent political statement, easily understandable although I've never seen the lake you describe. I can easily see the mess that's been created of a once pristine water source.

You're an environmentalist at heart, aren't you?

I applaud your poem because it seems to flow naturally, stays on topic and is an important message at the same time,
Diane T.

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Feb 05, 2010 9:23 am re: re:F.O.R.M.- Blitz(Ayub) #

Ayub Bangroo Manohar,many thanks for your compliments.
Anchar lake is just three kms from my residence,a picturesque area,where nature is in abundance .Over the years it has got denigrated to a kind of cesspool fighting for the life.One can not but feel frustrated on seeing its conition.
Maya,Anchar is just one case.This is the problem with all the lakes and water bodies here.World famous Dal lake was 24 skms just 40 years back and today it is only 16 skms.And even these 16 kms are in bad shape.Not only the catchment area has come down a big way but also qualitatively these lakes degraded a long way.Just two years back the CM of j&k Mr G.N.Azad publicly confessed that he could not do anything to save the Dal lake.There once were times when the kings of Kashmir would start from Dal lake in their house boats move towards the Anchar lake which is five kms from Dal and connected by wide streams,from here they would go to another lake called Mansbal,20 kms from here and again connected,and their final destination used to be Wullar lake,Asia`s biggest fresh water lake,20 kmms from Mansbal lake and also connected by free flowing canals.Those canals and streams are now either water less or non existent and these lakes fast going the same way.It is not that money is not spent on their preservation but the results are poor for the obvious reason.We can hope a miracle to happen to restore their pristine glory,and of course miracles do happen,though rarely.

Diane,thanks for appreciating the poem.Yes,i am an environmentalist at heart and an accidental banker.Not less than 70% of what i have written so far pertains to nature and environmentI am somewhat natural on writing about nature.
Well,Maya,Manohar and Diane,your compliments please me but Anchar makes me sad.
Many thanks to Jack for introducing this form to us and giving us a chance to try.

Regards
Ayub

"The Concrete Jungle":::::: 2 complementary sonnets.

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Manohar Bhatia Hi,
These are 2 complimentary sonnets that came in my mind and I wrote it down.The uniqueness of these sonnets is that each sonnet is dependant on the other to get the message.If you read only one sonnet,it has no meaning.
I do not know about this new way of poetry;perhaps Jack,Di,will be able to help me.

Well, here goes:::::::::::::

Sonnet No.I.

Far,far away in the horizon
I see an ugly concrete jungle,
cluster of skycrapers,high rises,towers,
each trying to compete and bungle,
laying waste all goodness
which Nature provided mankind,
The vanishing green cover,
of mangroves,salt-pans,lakes,ponds,rivulets,
providing protection against fierce storms,
devastating floods,hurricanes,tornados,earthquakes,
where environment takes a back-seat,
resulting in climate change to calamity
for melting mammoth glaciers,disappearance
of beautiful people,culture,tribes,art.

Sonnet No.II.

That day is not far off,
when sea-levels will rise,
people will be trapped in ivory towers,
when sunlight will be blocked,
When battle will be fought on WATER,
And WATER will be sold like gold,
When plastic will bring pain,
When TV will bring sickness,
When our gadgets will make us tired,
When rivers will flow backwards,
causing havoc,misery,to cattle,crops,afterwards,
When man will eat man,
And love flying out of the window,
over cuckoo's nest towards the rainbow!

---The End---
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Jan 18, 2010 5:25 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

LC Very stark in message and imagery..makes one stop and think... Thanks for the read.

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Jan 18, 2010 9:25 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I couldn't agree more with your future vision. In my sci-fi novel "Anti-Vigilante and the Rips in Time" the last of the world wars are called the World Water Wars. Armed conflict is now being conducted in many countries around the world about this vanishing and precious natural resource!

As for writing sonnets, we'll have to wait for our resident gentleman poet (Jack) to weigh in on the matter.

To the Dance of Life (while we still can)!!!
Diane T.

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Jan 18, 2010 10:47 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; analysis as requested #

Jack Huber Since I've been asked to weigh in, remember that the following comments have no bearing on the quality of your poems, Manohar.

They are not sonnets in the true sense, even though they each have fourteen lines; they do not follow any classic meter or rhyming pattern and the last couplet on each stanza is not a poignant statement or summation of the previous dozen lines. It is because of their final couplet that most sonnets do stand on their own, even if written in series. (This is not always the case, however, and you'll find individual sonnets by Shakespeare, for example, that do depend on other sonnets in their series to truly be recognized.)

I don't think I would label them as two sonnets, just as I wouldn't label a 21-syllable poem haiku, but you do have a remarkable two-stanza complete poem. You may even want to add other stanza breaks as well.

All-in-all, an exclellent piece, Manohar.

Jack

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Jan 18, 2010 3:46 pm re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

Diane Stephenson Filled with a lot of food for thought. On the surface it seems rather negative, but when you contemplate the state the world is in, it is in fact very accurate. Thanks for sharing.

Diane

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Jan 19, 2010 6:41 am re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

Maya Mahant Hiya Manohar,

So very dark, but so very true. Night seems so long and dawn so far away. Maybe the Kali Yug will have to end for the Satya Yug to begin!

Maya

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Jan 19, 2010 7:36 am re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
LC::::: Thanks for your comments.
Di::::: We share a common view.
Jack::: Actually,when I wrote this poem,it was a 28 line poem.Then,I thought why not to break into a 14 line poem and this is when this sonnet concept struck me.I am still learning to write poetry;perhaps I should have concentrated more on meter to get a right sonnet.Thanks Jack,for a few tips.Yes,I can add another 14 line stanza.With regards.
Maya:::: Maya,this is what I feel and I have written so.

Manohar Bhatia

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Jan 19, 2010 8:06 pm re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

Jack Huber Manohar, I wasn't suggesting your write another stanza. I meant that you could place another stanza break or two in your present 28 lines. They don't have to be equal in length for this type of poetry.

Jack

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Jan 20, 2010 5:29 am re: re: re: re: "The Concrete Jungle"::::::::::::::; 2 complimentary Sonnets. #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
Thanks Jack,I have understood your suggestion.
Manohar Bhatia

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Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
What ever you say is completely agreeable,unfortunately.We are fast losing our nature,in fact we are losing ourselves.Take the case of india the population has increased three times since 1940`s but the per capita availability of fresh water has come down six time!That is where we stand and many odd things look in offing.
Ayub

F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::

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Jan 18, 2010 9:45 pm F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Jack Huber Poetry for your taste buds
The Epulaeryu is a short poem that describes or features culinary delights. Author Joseph Spence, who invented and named the form, put the Latin word “Epulae,” translated “feast,” with an Asian term, ”Ryu,” which means “form” or “style.” Accordingly, “Epulaeryu” would come to mean a poem about a feast or other culinary art with which the poet is especially fond.

The form typically describes various courses of a feast or meal, and ends in a singular interjection and an exclamation point, portraying the author’s excitement in the cuisine and its presentation. From the description in total, the reader should have a good sense (and taste) of the main course.

The Epulaeryu is a seven line poem consisting of thirty-three syllables, arranged in the following manner: 7-5-7-5-5-3-1 and “!” (seven syllables in line 1, five in line 2, and so on).

As with many other short forms, there is no rhyme or meter. The title is at the poet’s discretion.

Example:

¡Ole!

Guacamole on warm chips,
spicy Spanish rice
and refried pintos served hot,
corn shucks discarded
to reveal piquant
tamales,
¡Oh!

Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber

My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.

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Jan 19, 2010 8:00 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Diane Tegarden ummmmmmm, now I'm hungry for Mexican food!

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Jan 19, 2010 10:13 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Jack Huber Thanks, Diane. Care to share a feast with us?

Jack

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Jan 19, 2010 3:54 pm re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Pushpa Moorjani Breakfast

Mom made breakfast just for me
Omelets, eggs in ghee
Ate bread butter, drank some tea
Crushed roasted almonds
Mixed with some peanuts
Served nicely
Burp!

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Jan 19, 2010 8:02 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Jack Huber Nice one, Pushpa. Almonds AND peanuts on your omlet?

Jack

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Jan 19, 2010 8:12 pm F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #

Diane Tegarden
Comfort Food

Cheese casserole, comfort food
sautéed onion bits
melt, mouthwatering delight
sour cream drizzled in
inhale aromas
heaven sent.

Sigh!

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Jan 20, 2010 4:14 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #

Vincent Narayanan Hi Jack,

I have been having tremendous problems with Ryze. The site sometimes coughs and sputters so much. Its taken me two days to write and send out this post.

It's amazing to see the many F.O.R.M.s you have introduced to all of us on Wordmeisters. I in particular have not only been intrigued by the existence of all these F.O.R.M.s but also quite overwhelmed. And just as I thought I had seen and read the last of the F.O.R.M.s, in come two more. The Quatern and the Epliaeryu.

1. How do you manage to remember so many F.O.R.M.s when you write your poems?
2. Do you decide on a particular F.O.R.M. before you start writing a poem or after you've started writing? Or is just spontaneous?

Though I went to one of the best Convent schools and among the best Jesuit colleges in India, I am quite puzzled at the fact that the authorities in both institutions did not teach us any of these F.O.R.M.s. Or may be my memory fails me.

For me poetry was always rhymes. Nothing more. Nothing less. Till now. Till Wordmeisters. Till Jack Huber. Thank you for the enlightenment.

P&R
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Jan 20, 2010 6:54 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #

Pushpa Moorjani almonds and peanuts....after taste...liked this form of poetry and enjoyed it..thankx
Pushpee

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Jan 20, 2010 9:21 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #

Jack Huber Excellent, Diane. I knew you'd put together a feast of some kind...

Jack

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Jan 20, 2010 9:43 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...comfort food #

Jack Huber Vincent,
It's a shame if your schools didn't teach at least the classic forms and meters, but I'm finding this on a widespread basis. Perhaps it's because the mass interest is now open verse and prose. One of my favorite sayings is from Robert Frost, who said, "Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down."

To answer your questions, first, I cheat, meaning I have a cheat sheet on my desktop with all the various formats and rhyming schemes. If I am away from my desktop, like at work, I go to my AC articles (http://www.associatedcontent.com/user/202741/jack_huber.html).

Second, I have no set method of choosing a form. It's a combination of things, from looking over forms to see what I haven't done for a while or might feel like writing now, to being inspired and choosing a form that matches the inspiration. Some forms lend themselves more to drama, some tend to be poignant, some whimsical. Only by trying them all out can you really make that kind of decision.

Like you, I really like rhyming verse, but without a set meter, rhymes can be a distraction. So, classic meters are hugely important to me. I went through a period a couple of years ago when I experimented with my own meter patterns (i.e. an iamb foot and two anapestic feet), but I eventually found that the classic meters are still the best.

Thanks for the comments and questions, Vince. I hope this answers them.

Jack

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Jan 21, 2010 7:32 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Maya Mahant Spicy Feast

Fragrant chicken biryani
with palak paneer,
and tomato cuchumber.
chilled nimbupani,
creamy kheer,
¡Yum!

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Jan 21, 2010 8:30 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Diane Tegarden
Maya,
I loooooooove Indian food and now want to go to one of our many Indian restaurants here in town,,,,as soon as it stops pouring rain from the skies!

Originally I was going to try and write one about Persian or Indian food but the words wouldn't come, so I wrote a simple one on the meal I made that day and it worked out ok.

Hugs and more hugs,
drenched Diane

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Jan 21, 2010 10:32 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Jack Huber Sounds delicious, Maya. Well done (or was that medium-well...)

Quick note, I used the upside-down exclamation point on my example piece because it was a Mexican feast. In Spanish, the "¡" can used before an exclamation along with "!" after. Usually, just the standard "!" is needed.

Jack

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Jan 21, 2010 9:40 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Diane Stephenson Here goes! Not very exotic, but nevertheless good - and nutritious.

Salmon fillet steamed with rice,
Baked sweet potato,
Carrots, parsnips, broccoli,
Homemade biscuits hot
Dripping with butter-
Taste delight.
Yes!

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Jan 22, 2010 1:42 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Maya Mahant Hiya Jack,

Thanks for the correction, as a wannabe poet, make that well-rare.

To those unfamiliar with the Indian cuisine, here is the translation.

Chicken Biryani
Spiced chicken cooked with fragrant long grained basmati rice,flavoured with saffron, garnished with deep fried onions.

Palak Paneer
Spinach with freshly made cottage cheese.

Tomato Cachumber
Finely chopped tomatoes, onions, coriander leaves, green chillies, with sour lime dressing.

Chilled Nimbupani
Accompanying drink made from sour lime juice, seasoned with a pinch of salt and sugar, this effectively neutralizes the heat from the spiced food.

Sweet Kheer
Clarified butter roasted vermicelli, cooked with double cream and milk and raisins, flavored with cardamom, garnished with silvers of almonds.

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Jan 22, 2010 4:11 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Watch this one.....its a culture of people from Sindh(Pakistan)and their favorite food::::::::::::::;

Sindhi food contains spice,sweet
to mesmerize buds
with aloo ticky curry
and a dash of rice
with hot chappatis
to relish
Oh!

Manohar Bhatia

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Jan 22, 2010 8:35 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Pushpa Moorjani Indian food so delightful
Roti aloo dum
Add some spice, and butter, rum
Lay back and have fun
With some lassi churned
From that urn
Yum!!

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Jan 22, 2010 9:19 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu #

Diane Stephenson Hey, you guys! Stop it! I'll be starving by the time you're through. :-) Love that Indian food!

Diane

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Jan 22, 2010 9:22 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...here's my recipe for the casserole #

Diane Tegarden Howdeeeeeeeeeeee,
here's my recipe for the cheese casserole, in case any of you'd like to try it!

Boil water for egg noodles.

While the water is coming to a boil, mince red onion and grate the cheese (whatever type you prefer). Sauté onion in a bit of olive oil and set aside.

Add noodles to boiling water and cook for 13-15 minutes.

Drain noodles, add to an oiled casserole baking dish, add in onion, cheese, sour cream to taste, mix well. (You can also add a can of tuna or cooked chicken chunks, if you want meat in it.)

Bake at 350* for 15-20 minutes or until the cheese melts.
Devour!

Dangit, I just made myself hungry again ;>

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Jan 22, 2010 9:47 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #

Jack Huber These are all great. Good job, Wordmeisters!

Jack

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Jan 23, 2010 5:39 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #

Vincent Narayanan Good Lord! Pushpa, Maya, Diane.S, and Manohar... you folks are having a 'feast' on Wordmeisters. Wonderful stuff. I didn't know a seemingly mystical word such as 'Epulaeryu' could create such 'well-versed' responses. I had lots of fun reading them though.

P&R
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Jan 23, 2010 6:41 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #

Maya Mahant It was fun writing this form, and Vincent, your are absolutely bang on target, what feasts have been cooked up.

Jack's Mexican Mania had me leafing through the recently launched, TOI's Goa food guide!

Pushpa's peanuts and almonds with breakfast and rum with aloo dum was truly a treat. Loved the combo, the fusion feast.

Manohar's spicy Sindhi menu had me drooling for their famous Sindhi khadi.

With Diane T's recipe for a cheese casserole, our Sunday lunch has already been decided.

Salmon and home baked biscuits with butter, wow, my long planned diet has been shelved, indefinitely, Diane S.

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Jan 23, 2010 7:07 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...Nice work! #

Pushpa Moorjani oooooops! I made too much of spicy aloo dum...please someone come over and help me finish these....almond n peanuts finished though...:)

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Jan 23, 2010 8:25 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu (Diane S.) #

Diane Tegarden
Diane S.,
this not only sounds delicious, it sounds like lots of work put into it too! I'd eat dinner at your home any day!

Diane T.

PS. My weakness is homemade biscuits dripping with butter, how did you know?

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Jan 23, 2010 8:33 am re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Diane Tegarden
Pushpa and Manohar,
if ya don't watch out you'll have a mob at your door at the next meal time!

Now that I've been accepted as the Examiner's Pasadena Restaurant Reviewer, I've got a grand excuse to go out at least once a week. My sweet hubby isn't as adventuresome as I am about different foods so for some of them I will have to go it alone, but I don't mind.

Good eatin' is good eatin'!

In a couple of months you'll have to roll me out the door at this rate. ;>

Hugs
Diane T.

PS. Jack, I believe you hit on an all time favorite FORM here.

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Jan 23, 2010 9:39 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Diane Stephenson Diane:

It's a good thing we're having a time of prayer and fasting at church (21 days) or I would be rolling in and out the door too!

By the way, it doesn't take very long to prepare my 'epulaeryu' meal. The sweet potato happily cooks in the oven while I do other things and the salmon, rice and veggies all cook in the steamer without any of my attention. Biscuits - well, I've made so many of them over the years, though not lately, that I can do them in a matter of a few minutes too.

Diane

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Jan 24, 2010 12:19 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Maya Mahant I have only to look, read about food to put on weight, hence I am already rolling, the next thing is to widen the doors!

Congrats Diane, that's great news, you being a food reviewer. Have loads of fun and adventure.

Maya

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Jan 24, 2010 5:38 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Vincent Narayanan Good Lord!!! What food fanatics all of you. I guess Wordmeisters should then become Foodmeisters. Hehehehe...

P&R
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Jan 24, 2010 5:45 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Diane Stephenson Vincent:

That sounds about right. Either that or we had better find a different F.O.R.M. - quick! Before we all get fat.

Diane

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Jan 24, 2010 11:49 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Manohar Bhatia Di,
Oh!I am too delighted to feed people at my home;let's see how many are turning up for my ploy sindhi food?
Manohar Bhatia

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Jan 25, 2010 1:48 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Epulaeryu ...(Pushpa and Manohar) #

Pushpa Moorjani Aw! nobody came to moi house and now all phinissed it...slurp!!.yum!!

Monday's Poem::::: "SMS"

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Feb 01, 2010 6:02 am Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Manohar Bhatia
What is SMS?
Is it short messaging service reminder
or a small memory system rejoinder?
Where "are you" becomes 'r', 'u'
or "homework" converts into 'hw'
where English Language
takes a short beating
for a bigger assault
in terms of grammar,pronounciation.
punctuation,poetry,prose!
Ouch! that hearts my heart.

Is SMS a boon for man
or a bane for the brain?
where its overactive radio
waves may harm our wonderful
cells,causing cancer,unknown
diseases,to permenantly paralyse
men into submission,dependency,helplessness,
by this monster toy,unfortunately nicknamed 'cell'

Is SMS a bust for a driver
or a boost for him to make
an accident on the way?
injuring himself and its
many occupants in his car,
apart from twisting his
car beyond repairs to be
towed away to scrap-yard!

Is SMS a booty
for a carnival of operators
where they keep sending you
a marketting package of
filthy grabage of hello tunes,
for you to accidently press a button
to charge a sum you are
never aware of or interested in?

Is SMS a short cut to everything
putting the famous hare/tortoise story
into oblivion for ever?
when hare will win the race
and tortoise will follow
in his footsteps to shame!

Beware the SMS!
it may twist your language
it may harm your health
it may lighten your wallet
it may quicken your death.
Handle your cell adroitly
to keep all dangers at bay
and come out a winner!

---The End---
copyright@Manohar Bhatia
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Feb 01, 2010 9:27 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Diane Stephenson Very unique way to describe a cell phone. I've never had one so don't know much about them. But I do know that this kind of thing is ruining the English (and I expect just about every other) language. And the dangers of using them while driving is extreme. Every time I see some driver turning a corner one-handed with a cell phone in the other glued to his ear I cringe. You have given a very good "discourse" on the dangers and offered good advice at the end.

Diane

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Feb 01, 2010 9:44 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
I agree that texting while driving is extremely dangerous, in fact, in California the law has required drivers to install a hands free system to use with their cell phones so it is now against the law to hold a cell phone while driving. Unfortunately I have seen so many drivers ignoring the law that there are still plenty of serious accidents involving a driver who was either talking or texting on their phones.

I still think that the main point of driving should be to get from point A to point B, but I'd probably be considered a Neanderthal for thinking so. Are people so important that they have to be in touch 100% of the time, even when driving, eating or on vacation?

Maybe I'm just jealous because I don't have people constantly hounding me on my cell phone!

What is the world coming to when people can talk to strangers all day and ignore their family/loved ones all night?

Sigh.

BRB, someone is "blowing up" my celly!

;>
demonstrably devilish Diane

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Feb 01, 2010 11:18 am re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Ayub Bangroo
Hi Manohar,
It is true that our phobia of and obsession with cell phones has many dangers apart from what happens to the languages used in so short forms.You have mentioned A to Z OF all these evils in an emphatic way.But,how many care?

Ayub

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Feb 01, 2010 11:43 am re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Karishma Sundaram The 'filthy operators' really struck a chord, since I've been charged ridiculous fees for services both unrequested and unwanted.

SMS language is really a blight and, considering some exam boards are now allowing students to use that language for tests, it is something to be feared indeed!

I really enjoyed your quirky poem - thank you for sharing.

Warm regards,
Karishma

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Feb 01, 2010 12:00 pm re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Diane Stephenson Diane:

I guess I'm your sister Neanderthal! It really irks me when I see people walking down the aisle in the grocery store with a phone to their ear and to see people in the middle of a church service texting someone. Before cell phones it used to drive me nuts to see so many people walking down the street with a walkman plugged into their ears and now its iPods and MP3 players or cell phones. Don't people ever take a few minutes to be quiet and think? Or is it possibly that they simply can't stand their own thoughts?

I think I like Neanderthal. It suits me much better.

Diane

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Feb 01, 2010 12:35 pm re: re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Jack Huber It wasn't that long ago that when you were away from your house or office, you were out of reach. Cell phones provide us a double-edged sword. Convenience gives way to constant virtual contact, especially with the youth of today, and gone are in-person interactions. My grandkids text their parents (and they reply!) even when they are in the same room. Perhaps vocal chords will go the way of the tailbone and appendix...

btw- Manohar, very well done on your descriptions of the SMS world.

jack

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Feb 02, 2010 7:18 am re: re: re: re: Monday's Poem:::::::::: "SMS" #

Manohar Bhatia Hi,
Diane:::Thank you for our shared view on English.
Di::::::Your comments are appreciated.
Ayub::::you have taken your valuable time to read the poem;thanks.
Jack::::While I don't intend to be negative totally on the mobile revolution,but I do find some helpful moments in this miracle toy tucked away in your pocket!

Manohar Bhatia

F.O.R.M. Poetry::::::"Beyond The mountain Wall"

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F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar Views: 50
Jan 06, 2010 8:39 pm F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Jack Huber Thanks to all who participated in my contest, for which I received some sonnets, a septolet, a Monchielle, a musette, and a diamante.
The scores were all within 5 points of each other on my 40 point system (10 points each for conformity to form, level of difficulty, poignancy, and poetic content.) A very close contest, endeed!

The winner of the Grand Prize (an autographed copy of my latest book, A Splendid Alternative, is Manohar Bhatia with his Monchielle, "Beyond the Mountain Wall". Congratulations for a fine poem, Manohar!

Here's the winning piece:

Beyond the Mountain Wall

Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
is beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!

Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air, so crisp, clean, mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!

Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles buried
on either banks in green!

Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying, singing!

Copyright © by Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.

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Jan 06, 2010 9:17 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Diane Tegarden Congratulations Manohar!

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Jan 06, 2010 11:12 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Diane Stephenson Congratulations! Well done, Manohar.

Diane
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Jan 07, 2010 12:08 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Vincent Narayanan Hi Manohar!

Awesome. Congratulations. May more such encomiums come your way.

P&R
n v

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Jan 07, 2010 3:16 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Maya Mahant Congratulations Manohar, well done, lovely poem lyrical and visual.

Maya

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Jan 07, 2010 5:22 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Manohar Bhatia Oh,Jack,
I am humbled and overjoyed to see my name as the winner of this contest.But,I can tell you Jack,that you are the real winner of this type of poetry,because you taught it to me.Sometimes back, a similar poem titled:"Ban On Cigarettes" was also attempted on this thread.
And,thank you Di,Diane,Maya and others for your congratulations;it has made me immensely happy.

Manohar Bhatia

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Jan 10, 2010 8:34 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Rupa A virtual painting this one Manohar. You truly deserve the crown. Congratulations!

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Jan 11, 2010 1:18 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Manohar Bhatia Rupa,
Thanks a million!

Manohar Bhatia

Poetry Contest by Poet Jack Hubber.

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F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar Views: 28
Jan 06, 2010 8:39 pm F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Jack Huber Thanks to all who participated in my contest, for which I received some sonnets, a septolet, a Monchielle, a musette, and a diamante.
The scores were all within 5 points of each other on my 40 point system (10 points each for conformity to form, level of difficulty, poignancy, and poetic content.) A very close contest, endeed!

The winner of the Grand Prize (an autographed copy of my latest book, A Splendid Alternative, is Manohar Bhatia with his Monchielle, "Beyond the Mountain Wall". Congratulations for a fine poem, Manohar!

Here's the winning piece:

Beyond the Mountain Wall

Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
is beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!

Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air, so crisp, clean, mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!

Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles buried
on either banks in green!

Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying, singing!

Copyright © by Manohar Bhatia
All rights reserved.

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Jan 06, 2010 9:17 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Diane Tegarden Congratulations Manohar!

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Jan 06, 2010 11:12 pm re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Diane Stephenson Congratulations! Well done, Manohar.

Diane
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http://www.healthycoffee.com/coffeetimegal
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Jan 07, 2010 12:08 am re: re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Vincent Narayanan Hi Manohar!

Awesome. Congratulations. May more such encomiums come your way.

P&R
n v

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Jan 07, 2010 3:16 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Maya Mahant Congratulations Manohar, well done, lovely poem lyrical and visual.

Maya

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Jan 07, 2010 5:22 am re: F.O.R.M. Contest Grand Prize Winner- Manohar #

Manohar Bhatia Oh,Jack,
I am humbled and overjoyed to see my name as the winner of this contest.But,I can tell you Jack,that you are the real winner of this type of poetry,because you taught it to me.Sometimes back, a similar poem titled:"Ban On Cigarettes" was also attempted on this thread.
And,thank you Di,Diane,Maya and others for your congratulations;it has made me immensely happy.

Manohar Bhatia

"The Touch" :::::::::::::::::::: A short Poem.

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"A Touch"........... A Poem. Views: 36
Jan 04, 2010 7:19 am "A Touch"........... A Poem. #

Manohar Bhatia Every time,I touch my child
I am reminded of my wife
of her nostalgic memories......
A touch so loving,mesmerising
to melt a solid rock!

How my headaches
used to vanish forever
whenever she pressed my head!

How my tired body
was ready to rejunevate
upon her simple,delicate
embrace!

How she touched me
in the mornings to
awake me from my sleep
by wispering sweet nothings
into my ever alert ears!

How she encirled me
during a session of ball-room
dancing on the New Year's Eve!

How my telephone-talks
were inspiring during my
office breaks,that
I almost felt her touch!

How her cooked dishes
were decorately displayed
on dining table that
upon tasting them
I could feel the hand
who has made those lovelies!

How sitting on a bike
as a pillion rider,
had an electrifying affect
on my driving that even a
30.m.p.h speed seemed
to bike floating in the air!

How sitting in the car
besides me,made me
think that we both are
driving the vehicle!

---The End---

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Jan 04, 2010 8:27 am re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #

LC Again, a touching piece...love of a woman embraces like no other

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Jan 04, 2010 9:30 am re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
your tribute to your lovely wife shows the love and care you had for her, how you appreciated her and how she will be sorely missed.

You are a gentleman and a bard,
Diane T.

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Jan 04, 2010 12:39 pm re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #

Diane Stephenson Manohar:

Your deep love for your wife is so obvious in your poem and the loss you feel because of losing her. But those memories will serve you well to help dispel the grief.

Diane
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Jan 05, 2010 10:53 am re: re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #

Ayub Bangroo
Manohar G,
You have immortalised all those moments and memories through these lines.
ayub

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Jan 06, 2010 5:25 am re: re: re: "A Touch"........... A Poem. #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
LC,Di,Diane,Ayub::::::I am overwhelmed by your reactions.Its true,I still cry for my wife,because she was a noble soul,never hurting anyone;but always smiling and she had a million $ smile.She had acted also in one Indian religious movie in India.A big thank you to all of you.

Manohar Bhatia

Different Type Of Poetry:::: F.O.R.M....Clerihew

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F.O.R.M.- Clerihew Views: 39
Dec 07, 2009 10:12 pm F.O.R.M.- Clerihew #

Jack Huber
Clerihew

A clerihew is a humorous 4-line poem about a celebrity, named in the first line. Often the celebrityâ€™s name comprises the entire first line. Invented by poet Edmund Clerihew Bentley, a clerihew pokes fun at someone famous or puts them in an absurd light, though is not abusive. It is common for a Clerihew to parody short eulogies.

There is no set meter. In fact, the Clerihew usually contains irregular line lengths. The rhyming scheme of â€œa-a-b-bâ€ can be comically contrived.

In a rhyming pattern, lines ending in a sound designated by â€œaâ€ only rhyme with other â€œaâ€ lines, â€œbâ€ lines only with other â€œbâ€ lines, and so on.

The title of a Clerihew is always the name of its subject.

Examples:

Charlie Sheen

The great Charlie Sheen
is a fan of caffeine,
especially when his head is tender-
recovering from his latest bender.

Tom Hanks

Tom Hanks
must own some banks.
Heâ€™s almost Donald Trump
in the guise of Forrest Gump.

Copyright Â© 2009 by Jack Huber

My FORM articles are now located on AC: www.associatedcontent.com/jackhuber.

Different Type of Poetry:::: F.O.R.M..Pleiades

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F.O.R.M.- Pleiades Views: 40
Jul 28, 2009 9:50 am F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

Jack Huber Pleiades

Named for the famous star cluster, a Pleiades is a seven-line poem without any set meter or rhyme. The seven brightest stars in the constellation were named for the “Seven Sisters” in Greek mythology, thus the seven lines. This form was invented about a decade ago by Craig Tigerman, an editor for Sol Magazine, an online poetry periodical.

A Pleiades has a one-word title and each of its seven lines begins with the same letter as the first letter in the title.

Example:

Weathermost

When the brilliant burst lights the sky,
We count off the seconds aloud,
Willing the delay longer before thunder
Wields its booming voice, interrupting our
Watch for the storm's next strike. Having
Withdrawn, our attention now returns to the
Window into Nature's electric choreography.

Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber

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Jul 30, 2009 1:43 am re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
How beautiful?How do you pronounce Pleiades?I will come back to this thead after forming my Pleiades.
Manohar Bhatia

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Jul 30, 2009 5:19 am re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

dalip daswani
THISTLE-DOWN
__________________

There is no horizon, no end to tyranny
To myth-making stereotypes and caricature
The spaghetti in a plate is quite streamlined
Till the amorous fork thrusts to entangle
To feed one's hunger and lustful appetite.
T'was you see the mating ball of serpents
That brought Eve and the apple to me.

................

Thanks Jack... looking forward to your feedback
cheers

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Jul 30, 2009 9:23 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

Jack Huber It's pronounced "plee-uh-deez." I'm looking forward to seeing your poem.

Jack

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Jul 31, 2009 1:18 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Thanks.Here's my Pleiades:::::::::::::

MISUNDERSTOOD:::::::::

Misunderstanding is the
Most confusing word in the
Mind of many,sadly
Misunderstaood for
Many times over
Mundane things,sometimes taken as
Moonshine in their life.

Jack,I have tried it,I do not know whether it is correct.

Manohar Bhatia

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Jul 31, 2009 9:04 am re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

Jack Huber Yes, Manohar, you have written a fine Pleiades according to form. Nice piece!

Jack

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Aug 01, 2009 6:49 am re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Pleiades #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Oh!Jack,I am so thrilled to be acknowledged for writing a Pleiades by a fine poet like on my first attempt.I am going to keep this piece with me as a memento!Thanks for showing me something new!

Manohar Bhatia

A Short Poem::::::::: "On Smallest"

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Poem: "On Smallest" Views: 35
Aug 17, 2009 9:44 am Poem: "On Smallest" #

Manohar Bhatia
Short Poem::::::::: "On Smallest"
The smallest distance
between two points
is a line;but the
smallest distance between
two persons is only
a line of communication!

The smallest planet in the
universe is not a star
as seen by a naked eye,
but a STAR that cannot be
seen in an ugly planet!

The smallest appreciation
is not the one saying
'thank you'but a smallest
gesture that shows appreciation
without saying anything!

The smallest mistake is
not the one that hurts the
self,but the one that
hurt the other selves!

The smallest truth is not
the one which is real,
but the one that is
a lie fabricated by truth!

The smallest error between
cup and lip is a slip,
And the smallest mistake
between patience and restraint
is slip of the tongue!

The smallest compact disc
is not the one
measured in size,
but is the one
with unlimited storage!

The smallest talk
is not the one spoken
by mouth,but the one
known by telepathy!

The smallest walk
is not of one step,
but a walk-over
in your absence!

The smallest tide
is not measured in height,
but is calculated
in the affairs of men!

The smallest confusion
is not with word 'confusion'
in an English language
but 'confusion' being used
as a metaphor!

The smallest love
is not a kiss planted
on the lips,but a
love camouflaged by lust!

_____ The End ____

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"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::: A Poem

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"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 Views: 40
Sep 07, 2009 3:38 am "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 2009 #

Manohar Bhatia This poem is my real experience when I was in my teens.Feedback and editing wanted by Jack,Diane and others.Thanks.

"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"............A Poem
When we were young,energetic,full of life,
On Sunday mornings,we were at Colaba,
At our granny's house,with uncles,aunts,nieces,
Stretching ourselves at the secluded beaches,
Swimming in the backbay waters,
Eating mangoes,basking in the sun,
Playing with shells,pebbles,gun,
Sometimes burying ourselves in the sand,
Remaining there for a long time,
With only our heads popping out for fun!

Noontime,there were afternoon siestas,
Dead tired after watching on telly some fiestas,
Now, when clock strikes 5.00 p.m.
We have hot cups of tea,
With spicy cutlets,crispy nuggets,
To pamper our villianous pallets.

By evenings,we get ready
To trot to Eros Theatre steady,
Screening Marx Bros,Laurel&Hardy,
Or slapstick comedy of Dean Martin & Jerry Lewis,
A laugh riot of our lives,
Till tear fall off our eyes!

At nightfalls,we had wooden cots,
Laid out under pipal trees,flower pots,
With the cool evening breeze blowing,
Hearing fairy tales from Granny at bedtime,
And falling asleep like a log!

Oh! Those were the days,
Waking up one fine morning,
From a soft bed into luminious sunlight,
Feeling warm,well fed,well loved,
well cared for a longing
peace,silence,stillness, bliss!
Will those days ever commeth?

____ The End_____

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A Poem on::::::: "Rain"

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A Poem: "On Rain"Monday, December 29, 2008 Views: 19
Sep 21, 2009 8:29 am A Poem: "On Rain"Monday, December 29, 2008 #

Manohar Bhatia A POEM ON "RAIN"(INSPIRED FROM FILMS LAGAN & GUIDE)

As I sit on the vast field in summer,
AND see people huddled to-gather and murmur,
Once this fertile land,now scorched and crusty,
Waiting for rains to make it cool and misty.

To quench up their thirsts,
Feed those hungry stomachs,
Again allow farmers to plough their fields,
And fill up cracks developed due to heat and then shield.

A noble soul sits in a cave,
Fasting unto death for a village to save,
Praying for the rains,
Noble dies, but his soul survives.

Rain falls in a trickle,
Tiny droplets of water on faces dribble,
Gathering momemtum by the distant tornado,
Building into a mammoth crescendo.

Villagers,rejoicing,dancing,celebrating,
Their faces brimming with happiness, smiles,
Henceforth, this village is transfomed,
Into a Heaven, not seen by man!

----The End---

Note: The above poem was read at--------

Shah's Farm,
Bhivpuri Road,
Karjat (Maharashtra)
Date & Time: 27th July,2008 at 9.00 a.m.onwards.

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"So Long As......................" ******** APoem. Views: 1

Nov 09, 2009 8:51 am "So Long As......................" ******** APoem.

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
I was reading an article in a newspaper,which started as:::::So Long As..... and then this poem came to me.

So long as the Sun,Moon,Stars shine,
So long as This,and This gives light to thine.

So long as,the heart beats everlastingly,
So long This,and This gives us retreat continiously.

So long as Love in the Universe permeates,
So long This,and This helps earthlings to procreate.

So long as Man & Woman love each other
So lond This,and This keeps Family to-gather.

So long as children play games without ashtrays,
So long This,and This keeps them away from cigarettes!

So long as Father & Son with each other are bonded,
So long This,and This will keep them grounded.

So long as the rivers are gently flowing,
So long This,and This helps crops slowly growing.

So long as M-Law & D-Law are united in understanding
So long This,and This will goad them to become M & D notwithstanding.

So long as there is thruthfulness in thought,word,deed,
So long as This, and This is the ideal life we need!

So long as your kite is flying in the air,
So long This,and This is your glider at the Fair!

So long as there are Poets in this world,
So long as This,and This is where Poetry will be created in this world.

So long as Death is at your door-step,
So long This,and This is your moment of truth for your last stop!

Manohar Bhatia

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"Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem Views: 64
Oct 30, 2009 9:02 am "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,

This poem was inspired from an indian classic film shot in 1960 named: "Naya Daur"It had a living legendary star Dilip Kumar and a vivacious beautiful actress,Vijayantimala as the lead stars.One day,both of them go to a temple to pray in a Tonga(A single horse carriage),owned by the hero of the film.Then,whilst returning,a beautiful Hindi song is picturized on the two in this Tonga.At this point, the poem hit me and I immediately wrote it down.
When Dilip Kumar asks his lady love,what did she ask God,the actress breaks into this classic song......"Mang ke saat tumara,mene, mang liya sansar.........etc" i.e "If I have your support,I will have the world......etc"(Translated).Feedback wanted by Diane,Jack,others.

Tango And Tonga.........A Poem.

It takes two to Tango
Ultimately becoming one for bingo!
A beautiful dance taking poetic form
Where grace & style are the norm.

Tango was born in working city halls,
by passionate dancers,Carlos Gardel
in alive cities of Buenos Aires,Montivideo
in South American city of Argentina.

Tango can accelerate your well-being
Bringing elixir of life to a new high
of excitement,health,joy,happiness,
for you to experience again and again.

Dance steps are hectic,fast,furious
leaving the onlookers in a rush
of emotions,romantic passions,faster heart-beats
in an excitment movements of their bodies.

Tango is a single dance form
where two dancers move to horn,
Man and Woman,merging,fusing,melting
into a Tonga-driven single horse-carriage!

---- The End--------

Manohar Bhatia

"Tick, Tick, Tick"::::::::::::::::::::: A Poem

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A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." Views: 33
Nov 16, 2009 7:49 am A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
This fictional poem was written a long time back,when my late wife was alive,but I thought it was time to share it with my members.
For those of you,who might be interested in knowing my wife,Shoba Bhatia,please click on my friends'list on Shoba Bhatia and read her profile.She was a former member of ryze for some years.Thanks.

I see my clock on the wall
Saying tick,tick,tick,
You talk or don't talk,
My clock is ticking,
Tick, Tick, Tick.

Far, far, away,
In the deep oceans,
There are mighty tides,
Just as a small tide,
in my affairs.

My clock has no emotions,
but gives powerful message
of time we spent to-gather
in pursuit of love,friendships
courtships,events,happenings.

I know I have done wrong,
whence your anger knows no bounds,
only tell me the reason
of your hounding,bypassing,ignoring,
and not talking to me.

Oh! my beloved,
we can always sit calmly,
and talk things over,
to forgive,forget, and
turnover new life,of trust,love,care.

Life is far too short
to brood over,sulk,sink,
into mental turmoil,pain,depression,
'cause,my clock is ticking,
tick, tick, tick!

I kneel before you,cautioning,
You, me, everything
will be consumed
by the sound of
tick, tick, tick!

Only my clock,
will remain on the wall,
Deaf,dumb,muted,and balanced
but, still warning, sounding,
Tick! Tick! Tick!

---The End----

Manohar Bhatia

"Ban On Cigarettes":::::::::::::::::::: A Poem

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"Ban On Cigarettes."::::::::::::: A Poem Views: 1

Dec 21, 2009 6:38 am "Ban On Cigarettes."::::::::::::: A Poem

Manohar Bhatia Members,
This time's poetry is an attempt on::
F.O.R.M. Monchielle
Courtesy: Jack Huber.

When I wnet to buy pack
I was lost in a maze
I asked them to let me soke
to be told to look
at hording banning smoke!

When I went to buy pack
I saw people running
I asked what's happening
in the city of Mumbai
Its cops chasing men puffing!

When I went to buy pack
from vendor selling cigs
he saw me up and down
to study my face
and questioned about my go-down!

When I went to buy pack
I saw driver zooming
with cigar in his mouth
smoking away to glory
not looking at his jaw down south!

----The End----
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"Colours Of Vibgyor":::::::::::::::::A Poem

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"Colours Of Vibgyor.":::::::::::::: A poetic thought. Views: 39
Dec 01, 2009 12:58 am "Colours Of Vibgyor.":::::::::::::: A poetic thought. #

Manohar Bhatia
"Colours Of Vibgyor."::::A Poetic Thought.

[If I win a Lottery
V [I will paint my wash-room voilet
[so as to enter a marked toilet.

[If I win a Lottery
I [I will paint my canvas indigo
[so that my painting has a go!

[If I win a Lottery
B [I will colour my bike blue
[so that I pick up a clue!

[If I win a Lotery
G [I will paint Nature green
[so it reflects everywhere its sheen.

[If I win a Lottery
Y [I would paint Bollywood yellow
[to show that it is hollow.

[If I win a Lottery
O [I will dye my wife's maxi orange
[so that she has maximum range.

[If I win a Lottery
R [I will paint the town red
[to call people out of their bed!

----The End---

Manohar Bhatia

A Poem on::::::::::::: "What is this..............."

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A Poem On::::::::: "What Is This....................." Views: 24
Dec 14, 2009 3:26 am A Poem On::::::::: "What Is This....................." #

Manohar Bhatia My poem for this Monday::::::::::

What is this meeting for
When you do not
give me your time
for a quiet sitting?
You come,you go!

What are these tears for
on your beloveod's cheeks
which do not remind you
of her mental pain,agony?
You are no true lover!

What is this friendship for
which looks fake
or does not come
in need at difficult times?
You are no true friend!

What is this song for
although well-composed
that does not
melt the hardest heart?
Your song is not a song!

What is that author for
who does not write
a book which goes on
to become a best-seller?
This author is one of many!

What is that singer for
who doesn't mesmerize
and who does not melt
the hardest rock asunder?
That singer can only be Tansen!

What is this food for
which does not give
you bodily,mental,spiritual
strength for your well-being?
This food is junk food!

What is this acting for
that knows only imitation
and does not touch
your heart for laughs,tears,emotions?
This acting is only for yourself!

What is your death for
that has not understood
that game of life & death
are 2 faces of same coin?
Celebrate your death as glorified life!

-----The End----

copyright@Manohar Bhatia

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Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar

"India,My Country"::::::::::::::::::::: A Poem

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Manohar Bhatia India.....My Country:::::::::: A Poem.

India is a country
where everything happens.

Where heroes are worshipped
with rose garland one day
and garlanded with
footwear next day!

Where sometimes man
encircles the space one day
and struggles to reach his(space)
house safely another day!

Where a Slumdog becomes
a millionaire one day
and a millionaire becomes
a pauper next day!

Where there is joy in
every sunrise one day
and sadness in
every sunset next day!

Where fiendships are
made every minute
and enmity are
planned every second!

Where bombs go off
without warning at
some places
and fire-crackers are
set off for mundane
celebrations at other places!

Where commercial love
is found in sex dens,sea-fronts,
pubs,malls one day
And a love wired by thoughts
is born on net next day!

Where persons are talking
for sake of talking,one day
and deaf & dumb exchange
mutual hand igns,next day!

Where logic & reason
turn into confusion one day
and a mess is solved
by a wizard,next day!

Where dogs ar taken
by a car ride one day
and killed and kicked
about another day!

Where an outstaion train
reaches station on time,one day
only to be told that it
was yesterday's train next day!

Where music is lous & lewd
one day,
and soft & spiritual
next day!

Is India a mad country
to-day?
And a sound country
to-marrow?

You answer!

----The End----

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F.O.R.M.---Plaeides************* A Form Of Poem.

2009-11-24T09:15:00.000-08:00

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Jack Huber Pleiades

Named for the famous star cluster, a Pleiades is a seven-line poem without any set meter or rhyme. The seven brightest stars in the constellation were named for the “Seven Sisters” in Greek mythology, thus the seven lines. This form was invented about a decade ago by Craig Tigerman, an editor for Sol Magazine, an online poetry periodical.

A Pleiades has a one-word title and each of its seven lines begins with the same letter as the first letter in the title.

Example:

Weathermost

When the brilliant burst lights the sky,
We count off the seconds aloud,
Willing the delay longer before thunder
Wields its booming voice, interrupting our
Watch for the storm's next strike. Having
Withdrawn, our attention now returns to the
Window into Nature's electric choreography.

Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber

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Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
How beautiful?How do you pronounce Pleiades?I will come back to this thead after forming my Pleiades.
Manohar Bhatia

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dalip daswani
THISTLE-DOWN
__________________

There is no horizon, no end to tyranny
To myth-making stereotypes and caricature
The spaghetti in a plate is quite streamlined
Till the amorous fork thrusts to entangle
To feed one's hunger and lustful appetite.
T'was you see the mating ball of serpents
That brought Eve and the apple to me.

................

Thanks Jack... looking forward to your feedback
cheers

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Jack Huber It's pronounced "plee-uh-deez." I'm looking forward to seeing your poem.

Jack

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Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Thanks.Here's my Pleiades:::::::::::::

MISUNDERSTOOD:::::::::

Misunderstanding is the
Most confusing word in the
Mind of many,sadly
Misunderstaood for
Many times over
Mundane things,sometimes taken as
Moonshine in their life.

Jack,I have tried it,I do not know whether it is correct.

Manohar Bhatia

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Jack Huber Yes, Manohar, you have written a fine Pleiades according to form. Nice piece!

Jack

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Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
Oh!Jack,I am so thrilled to be acknowledged for writing a Pleiades by a fine poet like on my first attempt.I am going to keep this piece with me as a memento!Thanks for showing me something new!

Manohar Bhatia

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A Poem*************** "On Smallest"

2009-11-24T09:11:00.000-08:00

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Manohar Bhatia
Short Poem::::::::: "On Smallest"
The smallest distance
between two points
is a line;but the
smallest distance between
two persons is only
a line of communication!

The smallest planet in the
universe is not a star
as seen by a naked eye,
but a STAR that cannot be
seen in an ugly planet!

The smallest appreciation
is not the one saying
'thank you'but a smallest
gesture that shows appreciation
without saying anything!

The smallest mistake is
not the one that hurts the
self,but the one that
hurt the other selves!

The smallest truth is not
the one which is real,
but the one that is
a lie fabricated by truth!

The smallest error between
cup and lip is a slip,
And the smallest mistake
between patience and restraint
is slip of the tongue!

The smallest compact disc
is not the one
measured in size,
but is the one
with unlimited storage!

The smallest talk
is not the one spoken
by mouth,but the one
known by telepathy!

The smallest walk
is not of one step,
but a walk-over
in your absence!

The smallest tide
is not measured in height,
but is calculated
in the affairs of men!

The smallest confusion
is not with word 'confusion'
in an English language
but 'confusion' being used
as a metaphor!

The smallest love
is not a kiss planted
on the lips,but a
love camouflaged by lust!

_____ The End ____

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Diane Tegarden
Hi Manohar,

this is my favorite stanza of your poem:

"The smallest appreciation
is not the one saying
'thank you' but a smallest
gesture that shows appreciation
without saying anything!"

I can relate.

Thanks for leading off our poetry thread this morning,
Diane

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
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Jack Huber I can tell a lot of thought went into this poem. A nice read.

Jack

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Manohar Bhatia Hello,

Diane:Thank you for reading and liking a stanza
Jack: Your sweetness shows in your comments.

Manohar Bhatia

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Deb..... Always SMILING! Manohar simply beautiful, I loved every stanza in this poem! Chuckled on the last one though.

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Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Deb,little baby,thank you for enjoying.
Manohar Bhatia

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"Whence Gonneth Those Days?" ***********A Poem

2009-11-24T09:06:00.000-08:00

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Manohar Bhatia This poem is my real experience when I was in my teens.Feedback and editing wanted by Jack,Diane and others.Thanks.

"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"............A Poem
When we were young,energetic,full of life,
On Sunday mornings,we were at Colaba,
At our granny's house,with uncles,aunts,nieces,
Stretching ourselves at the secluded beaches,
Swimming in the backbay waters,
Eating mangoes,basking in the sun,
Playing with shells,pebbles,gun,
Sometimes burying ourselves in the sand,
Remaining there for a long time,
With only our heads popping out for fun!

Noontime,there were afternoon siestas,
Dead tired after watching on telly some fiestas,
Now, when clock strikes 5.00 p.m.
We have hot cups of tea,
With spicy cutlets,crispy nuggets,
To pamper our villianous pallets.

By evenings,we get ready
To trot to Eros Theatre steady,
Screening Marx Bros,Laurel&Hardy,
Or slapstick comedy of Dean Martin & Jerry Lewis,
A laugh riot of our lives,
Till tear fall off our eyes!

At nightfalls,we had wooden cots,
Laid out under pipal trees,flower pots,
With the cool evening breeze blowing,
Hearing fairy tales from Granny at bedtime,
And falling asleep like a log!

Oh! Those were the days,
Waking up one fine morning,
From a soft bed into luminious sunlight,
Feeling warm,well fed,well loved,
well cared for a longing
peace,silence,stillness, bliss!
Will those days ever commeth?

____ The End_____

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Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
this delightful poem is sweet and rife with good memories, great description and feeling to it. I felt like I was there with you, basking in the joy of a wonderful childhood.

The only way those days will return is when you provide the same wondrous experiences for your children!

Blessed Be my friend,
Diane T. and furfamily

Only two suggestions on word use...perhaps you could title it "Whence Went Those Days?" as gonneth isn't a proper word and the word pallet is a wooden bed and many other things, but a palate is the word used to convey the sense of taste!

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
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Manohar Bhatia Diane,
Thanks for your feedback;of course I feel delighted you liked the poem,because,as I explained earlier,it is real.Yes,the word 'pallets' is not what I meant;its an oversight,the word should be 'palate' and 'Gonneth'does not sound as good as 'went'
Cheers Diane for being good in your help.

Manohar Manohar.

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Teresa Mahieu Ahhhh, so despriptive and such a vivid picture this painted. Well done!!

Happy Writing,
Teresa aka Tess

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Sep 10, 2009 2:49 am re: re: "Whence Gonneth Those Days?"::::::::::::::::::::: A PoemSaturday, September 5, 200 #

Manohar Bhatia Dear Theresa,

Thanks sweet madam for reading the poem and enjoying it;I am happy for it.
Manohar Bhatia

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Sarah Rahman You have expressed your story impressively in a poetic way.

Keep it up!

And yes, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

Take care and be blessed.

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Manohar Bhatia Dear Sarah,
Thanks for reading the poem and enjoining it;it makes me happy.

Manohar Bhatia

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A Short Poem On:::::::::::::: "What if.............?"

2009-11-24T09:03:00.000-08:00

Short Poem on:::::::::::"What if ?" Views: 37
Jul 02, 2009 5:40 am Short Poem on:::::::::::"What if ?" #

Manohar Bhatia

Oh waelthy Man!
Would it spoil your plan,
"What if" you share,
some of your wealth
with a poor man?

Oh,Mother Nature,the Provider!
Would it spoil your plan,
"What if" you feed every
hungry soul on this planet?

Oh,Rainfalls,the benefactor!
Would it spoil your plan,
"What if" you quench
every thirsty living
entity on our earth?

Oh,Time,the Healer!
Would it spoil your plan,
"What if" you stood still
for a minute,to allow mankind
to introspect for ending wars
and ushering in an era of
peace and happiness for all?

Oh,Nuclear Weapons countries,
Would it spoil your plan
"What if" you eliminate
all your nuclear arsenal
and make this planet Earth
your real Home,free from
fear,domination,false
prestige and power?

Oh,Cricketers of the world,
Would it spoil your plan
"What if" you stopped gambling
So that,Cricket can again
become a gentlemen's game?

Oh,Jesus Christ,my Savior,my Master
Would it spoil your plan
"What if" you were born again
to lead the lost tribes
of our wayward humanity
into the Kingdom of Heaven?

____ The End ____

Manohar Bhatia

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Glen Hamilton Manohar,

Good questions. However, some of the things you mentioned, (nature, rainfall, time) ARE accomplishing the tasks you mentioned. It's just that there are either so many looking for a way to profit from their labor the rest can't see the benefits they provide, are they are so busy identifying what they don't have they can't see what they have.

As for the questions you ask of men? It is no secret that they are being led by the Destroyer, who would like nothing better than for everything in existence to perish

As for your conclusion? He is, as we speak. The difficulty is, he may be saying things the Majority don't want to hear. As you'll recall, they laughed at and ridiculed Jeremiah in his time, and Noah as well - didn't change the outcome. The key to hearing what needs to be heard, is not the eloquence of the speaker, but the willingness of the ears to listen to the message, and evaluate it on it's own merit. But people rarely do this. Everything is judged by what we already know (the Zen Master pouring tea for the Disciple). Unfortunately, most of our lives are spent absorbing the half-baked convictions of people with significant influence, and only a portion (often a small one) of all the pertinent information.

I, myself, have been a student of spirituality, and of the Bible, for many years. I have received my education from exposure to many different ideologies, from supposed scholars and experts, and from personal research and study. I believe my understandings to be fairly accurate, as far as they are complete (which they are not. Yet).

To say that there are none who have independently reached the same conclusions I have would be incorrect. I have found an Organization that seems to have a good foundation in the mystical 'TRUTH' that everyone else claims to have. This assessment is based, not on the specific answers they gave to my questions, but on how they approached answering them - they showed me evidence, in black and white; and not just from one place, but from many, highlighting the consistency of the mind of God (which most men DON'T have), from ANY Bible I chose to provide them with. But everyone laughs at them. Is that a detractor? Or is it a badge?

Sadly, however, as with all Earthly Organizations, they are comprised of Men, with all of the weaknesses, foibles,and jealousies that flesh is heir to.

Overall, a nice and thoughtful piece.

But if this is a short poem, I'm not sure I'd have the stamina to read a 'Long' one.

Be Well!

POB

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dalip daswani
..on "hearing" and "listening" (are they the same?), and Zen...

...the following, adapted from a Zen story:

The client-patient left for his appointment carrying a flask full of his psychiatrist’s favorite beverage. He poured the doctor’s cup full, and then kept on pouring. The psychiatrist watched the overflow until he no longer could restrain himself, screaming: “It is overfull. No more will go in!”

“Like this cup”, the patient said, “you are over-flowing with your own opinions and speculations. How can you receive the truth of my life, unless you first empty your cup?”

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Glen Hamilton Dalip,

You asked:

”..on "hearing" and "listening" (are they the same?)”

I would have to say no. I have seen my ex pursue conversation where it was obvious she was hearing the other parties talk in that she waited until they were almost finished with their thought before she began expressing hers. However it was also obvious by what she said that she hadn’t been listening to what was said at all. A habit I have unfortunately picked up in the 12 years I lived with her.

” and Zen...”

This is much the story I had been referring to. Your new version adds a new twist.

”“Like this cup”, the patient said, “you are over-flowing with your own opinions and speculations. How can you receive the truth of my life, unless you first empty your cup?”

As in the previous version, it is difficult to learn if we already believe we know all there is to know. But in this version, having the patient pour for the Psychiatrist, he had a right to demand an open mind to pour out his views to – he was paying for the privilege.

Perhaps I do sometimes wax verbose. I have had 40 years to form my opinions, and used to associate with an organization that espoused public expression of opinions. I have cut way back, believe me.

But old habits die hard.

Be Well!

POB :-)

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Manohar Bhatia Hi Glen,
Thanks for your comments on my poem:::::"What if?"
I was priveliged to read your wise thoughts and I learnt quite a bit...."The key to hearing what needs to be heard,is not the eloquence of the speaker,but the willingness of the ears to listen to the message and evaluate it on its own merit."

With regards,
Manohar Bhatia

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"Beyond The Mountain" ::::::::::::::A Poem

2009-11-24T08:57:00.000-08:00

F.O.R.M.- Monchielle Views: 86
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Jack Huber The Monchielle poem consists of four five-line stanzas in which the first line is identical in each stanza. All lines are six syllables in length, in any meter, and lines three and five in each stanza rhyme. Lines one, two and four do not rhyme.

Example:

Behold the Hawk

The hawk surveys the grounds
with keen and focused eyes,
no movement will escape
attention; none will taunt
this feared and stoic shape.

The hawk surveys the grounds,
his kingdom, from the trees,
majestic wings await
a mouse or smaller bird
oblivious to fate.

The hawk surveys the grounds
as afternoon declines
the ravens' calls begin
a frantic chorus line,
his brothers closing in.

The hawk surveys the grounds,
his nest and mate nearby,
well past the harvest moon,
there is no time to waste
with winter coming soon.

Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber-
All rights reserved.

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Nov 17, 2009 8:56 pm re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Diane Stephenson Jack: Great descriptive poem. I've never heard of this form before but it is very interesting and effective.

Diane

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Nov 17, 2009 9:42 pm re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Jack Huber Thanks, Diane. I hope you'll try your hand...

Jack

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Maya Mahant hiya jack, i am not too sure i have it right

cats don't cry

oh why oh why oh why
he said he loved me not
words he spoke pierced my heart
words of tears,spoke through eyes,
arrow sharp, had hurt the heart

oh why oh why oh why
his heart was with a girl
sweet of heart, not a cat
who scratched,but girl smart
rode straight into his heart.

oh why oh why oh why
he answers not calls now
busy with his love new
from lands of far and wide
this cat, too proud to mew

oh why oh why oh why
alley cat shall walk streets
independent and alone
bereft lonely and sad
cats will not cry and moan

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Nov 18, 2009 8:23 am re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Jack Huber Maya, a very cute poem. The only thing keeping it from fully conforming to the Monchielle form is the wrong lines rhyme in the 2nd stanza (the third and fifth lines of each stanza should rhyme). Also, in the first stanza, using heart twice doesn't really count as rhyiming.

Jack

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Nov 18, 2009 8:56 am re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Maya Mahant jack tweaked it a little bit. did i get it right this time? and yes you are right sounds bit cutesy like the 'chickflick romances'!!

cats don't cry

oh why oh why oh why
he said he loved me not
words he spoke pierced my soul
arrow sharp, had hurt the heart
will alley cat be ever whole?

oh why oh why oh why
his heart was with a girl
sweet of heart, not a feline
who scratched,but girl smart
into his heart made a beeline

oh why oh why oh why
he answers not calls now
busy with his love new
from lands of far and wide
this cat, too proud to mew

oh why oh why oh why
alley cat shall walk streets
independent and alone
bereft lonely and sad
cat will not cry and moan

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Nov 18, 2009 1:07 pm re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Jack Huber The rhyming is now purrrfect, but the number of syllables is off in a few lines:

arrow sharp, had hurt the heart (7)
will alley cat be ever whole? (8)
sweet of heart, not a feline (7)
who scratched,but girl smart (5)
into his heart made a beeline (8)

Now, this is only to conform perfectly. You can choose not to, making it a variation on the Monchielle.

Jack

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Nov 18, 2009 3:16 pm re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Maya Mahant jack i hope i might have it right this time. i would really like to get it right. thank you so very much for taking the trouble and patience to guide me.

arrow sharp, hurt the heart
will cat be ever whole?
sweet of heart, not feline
who scratched,but girl so smart
to his heart made beeline

with warm regards
maya

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Nov 18, 2009 5:28 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Jack Huber The new syllable counts are corrct. Why don't you post your final version?

Jack

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Nov 19, 2009 5:37 am re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Maya Mahant hiya jack,

all the while i wrote was without any technique. i am truly grateful to you and this forum. in a short while i have learnt two new forms.

thank you

cats don't cry

oh why oh why oh why
he said he loved me not
words he spoke pierced my soul
arrow sharp, hurt the heart
will cat be ever whole?

oh why oh why oh why
his heart was with a girl
sweet of heart, not feline
who scratched,but girl so smart
to his heart made beeline

oh why oh why oh why
he answers not calls now
busy with his love new
from lands of far and wide
this cat, too proud to mew

oh why oh why oh why
alley cat shall walk streets
independent and alone
bereft lonely and sad
cat will not cry and moan

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Nov 19, 2009 10:18 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Ayub Bangroo Jack,your poem reminds me of a poem "hawk roosting"by Ted Huges.Beautiful description.
Maya,superb poem,feelings and emotions are so delicately woven with appropriate words.

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Nov 19, 2009 11:48 pm re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Manohar Bhatia Jacko,
Your poem is very intersting to read,especially in the F.O.R.M. you have written.This is something new for me to understand and learn.Jack,keep your fingers crossed,I am thinking to craft this type of a poem.

Manohar Bhatia

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Maya Mahant hiya ayub,

thank you, credit for form is all jacks, he helped me through it.

warm regards
maya

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Nov 20, 2009 1:24 am re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Manohar Bhatia Dear Maya,
Your instant brave attempt for Jacko's F.O.R.M. is praiseworthy;keep writing more poetry,you are doing fine.

Manohar Bhatia

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Manohar Bhatia Hi Jack,
After working hard,I have come up with this poem on your F.O.R.M.--Monchielle:::::::::

"Beyond The Mountain."

Beyond the Mountain nestles
at the end of the valley
a clean beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all identical like a ghetto!

Beyond the Mountain nestles
a breathtaking scene
the air,so crisp,clean,mild,
for beautiful flowers to bloom
and tiny animals running in the wild.

Beyond the Mountain nestles
a nature's paradise
with a gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles embedded
on either banks in the green!

Beyond the Mountain nestles
a beautiful gothic church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
and people with bible in hand singing!

---The End---

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 20, 2009 10:33 am re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Jack Huber A very good poem, Manohar. However, the true Monchielle will use exactly 6 syllables per line. For your convenience I've noted the number of syllables at the end of each line of your poem:

Beyond the Mountain nestles (7)
at the end of the valley (7)
a clean beautiful plateau (7)
with a cluster of huts (6)
all identical like a ghetto! (9)

Beyond the Mountain nestles (7)
a breathtaking scene (5)
the air,so crisp,clean,mild, (6)
for beautiful flowers to bloom (8)
and tiny animals running in the wild. (11)

Beyond the Mountain nestles (7)
a nature's paradise (6)
with a gentle flowing stream (7)
and small pebbles embedded (7)
on either banks in the green! (7)

Beyond the Mountain nestles (7)
a beautiful gothic church (7)
its tower bell ringing (6)
a soothing soft sound (5)
and people with bible in hand singing! (10)

Thought you would want to know.

Jack

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Nov 23, 2009 7:22 am re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: re: F.O.R.M.- Monchielle #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I have corrected the syllables in each line and now the poem reads as::::::::::

"Beyond The Mountain."

Beyond the mountain wall
at the end of valley
nestles clean,beautiful plateau
with a cluster of huts
all same like a ghetto!

Beyond the mountain wall
is a breathtaking scene
the air so crisp,clean,mild
for coloured flowers to bloom
and bees buzzing in wild!

Beyond the mountain wall
is nature's paradise
with gentle flowing stream
and small pebbles burried
on either banks in green!

Beyond the mountain wall
stands lovely Gothic Church
its tower bell ringing
a soothing soft sound
with people praying,singing!

--The End--
Manohar Bhatia

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"So Long As............." A Poem

2009-11-24T08:45:00.000-08:00

"So Long As......................" ******** APoem. Views: 42
Nov 09, 2009 8:51 am "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
I was reading an article in a newspaper,which started as:::::So Long As..... and then this poem came to me.

So long as the Sun,Moon,Stars shine,
So long as This,and This gives light to thine.

So long as,the heart beats everlastingly,
So long This,and This gives us retreat continiously.

So long as Love in the Universe permeates,
So long This,and This helps earthlings to procreate.

So long as Man & Woman love each other
So lond This,and This keeps Family to-gather.

So long as children play games without ashtrays,
So long This,and This keeps them away from cigarettes!

So long as Father & Son with each other are bonded,
So long This,and This will keep them grounded.

So long as the rivers are gently flowing,
So long This,and This helps crops slowly growing.

So long as M-Law & D-Law are united in understanding
So long This,and This will goad them to become M & D notwithstanding.

So long as there is thruthfulness in thought,word,deed,
So long as This, and This is the ideal life we need!

So long as your kite is flying in the air,
So long This,and This is your glider at the Fair!

So long as there are Poets in this world,
So long as This,and This is where Poetry will be created in this world.

So long as Death is at your door-step,
So long This,and This is your moment of truth for your last stop!

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 09, 2009 10:05 am re: "So Long As......................" ******** A Poem. #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
this poem has a song-like quality to it, the refrain keeps you interested in coming back again and again.

BTW, we have reached a milestone....we just signed on our 300th member!

Hip Hip Huzzah the Bards!

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Nov 09, 2009 10:23 am re: "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Teresa Mahieu So long as you remain at Ryze,
So long This and This will keep me returning for more.

Loved your poem, it contains many truths and has a nice flow.

Teresa aka Tess
http://www.associatedcontent.com/tess1960

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Nov 09, 2009 12:14 pm re: "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Jack Huber The couplets format and the repeated phrases really make a reader think. Well done.

Jack

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Nov 09, 2009 1:20 pm re: re: "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Maya Mahant hiya manohar, read your poem over and over again imbibing all the nuances. maya

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Nov 10, 2009 8:12 am re: "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Ayub Bangroo
So many realities depicted,an enchanting and didactic one.

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Nov 11, 2009 6:49 am re: "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Di:Your usual pat is always welcome!
Teresa:That's a nice one from you on ryze!
Jack:Couplet coping is interested to be commented upon!
Maya:Thanks a heap!
Ayub:Your encouraging words are a delight to read!

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 13, 2009 5:11 am re: "So Long As......................" ******** APoem. #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
I thank all of you who commented on the poem.However,on second thought,I propose to make a change in this couplet:::::::::::::::::::::::

"So long as children play games without ashtrays,
So long This,and This cigarettes them not to go astray!"

I have used 'cigarettes' as a form of verb;please correct me if I am wrong.Thanks.

Manohar Bahtia

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"Tango & Tonga"................A Poem

2009-11-24T08:41:00.000-08:00

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Oct 30, 2009 9:02 am "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,

This poem was inspired from an indian classic film shot in 1960 named: "Naya Daur"It had a living legendary star Dilip Kumar and a vivacious beautiful actress,Vijayantimala as the lead stars.One day,both of them go to a temple to pray in a Tonga(A single horse carriage),owned by the hero of the film.Then,whilst returning,a beautiful Hindi song is picturized on the two in this Tonga.At this point, the poem hit me and I immediately wrote it down.
When Dilip Kumar asks his lady love,what did she ask God,the actress breaks into this classic song......"Mang ke saat tumara,mene, mang liya sansar.........etc" i.e "If I have your support,I will have the world......etc"(Translated).Feedback wanted by Diane,Jack,others.

Tango And Tonga.........A Poem.

It takes two to Tango
Ultimately becoming one for bingo!
A beautiful dance taking poetic form
Where grace & style are the norm.

Tango was born in working city halls,
by passionate dancers,Carlos Gardel
in alive cities of Buenos Aires,Montivideo
in South American city of Argentina.

Tango can accelerate your well-being
Bringing elixir of life to a new high
of excitement,health,joy,happiness,
for you to experience again and again.

Dance steps are hectic,fast,furious
leaving the onlookers in a rush
of emotions,romantic passions,faster heart-beats
in an excitment movements of their bodies.

Tango is a single dance form
where two dancers move to horn,
Man and Woman,merging,fusing,melting
into a Tonga-driven single horse-carriage!

---- The End--------

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 02, 2009 8:14 am re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Diane Tegarden
Manohar,
your poem creates image of movement and spice, just like the dance you're writing about.
Thanks for sharing your inspirations with us,
Diane

Energetically Yours, Diane Tegarden
"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Nov 02, 2009 12:51 pm re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Jack Huber Thanks for the prologue, it helped interpret your poem. I ditto what Diane says, it faintly echos the movement of the dance your are describing.

Jack

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Nov 02, 2009 11:08 pm re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Di,Jack,
To be frank with you,I was pretty nervous,when I conceived this sort of poem.There was no reaction from either of you and I thought I had written something weird sort of a poem.My senses came back to me when I read your comments;thank God for small mercies and thanks to both of you too!
As an addentum,I can assure you that I always write from my heart,but sometimes................?

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 03, 2009 8:23 am re: "Tango And Tonga"........ a response about - responses! ;> #

Diane Tegarden Manohar,
being on a worldwide network means that people will respond as well as time allows, it is certainly no reflection of your art!

If that were so, I'd have to go around with my head hung low all the time, unfortunately (as a network leader) my posts are the ones most often ignored, and if I took it personally I'd be in a blue funk all the time!

Take heart, sometimes life throws a lot at the thread leaders and we can't always get back to you right away, it doesn't mean we think any less of your poetry, it simply means that life can be extremely busy at times.

I appreciate all you do for the network, have faith in yourself and know we are doing the best we can in the time we have,

Big Smiles and Hugs,
Diane T. and furfamily

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"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light Through
Shuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and The
Rips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com

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Nov 03, 2009 9:30 am re: re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Jack Huber I'll add to what Diane said...

Even if I didn't like it (which is not the case), I would have hoped that it would not affect you so negatively.

When I first started writing poetry in earnest a little over two years ago, I experimented with all kinds of meter and rhyming schemes, some of which was awful. I can hardly stand to look at some of my oldest work. But I posted them in poetry forums so that I could get better, sometimes getting some horrendous feedback in the process, and I did get better. I set about learning classic forms and meter and learned the "rules" so that I knew how to break them wisely. And I wrote a LOT, about 250 poems since then. I'm still experimenting and learning new forms, and still writing poems that aren't always the greatest pieces. They don't have to be.

I've said this before- you are the world's foremost authority on what you like. If you like something you wrote, you like it and that's that.

Hope this helps. Keep writing!

Jack

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Nov 03, 2009 11:04 am re: re: re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Ayub Bangroo
ManoharG,
Old hindi songs are evergreen.So many mixtures have come in between which had a timely attraction and then disappeared.Your effort to translate the one which struck you deep is genuine and indeed right from the heart.
of course some complimentary words from the ones around does help.This is just human.
Regards
Ayub

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Nov 03, 2009 10:58 pm re: re: "Tango And Tonga"........ a response about - responses! ;> #

Manohar Bhatia Hi Di,Jack,Ayoob,
Every human being is an emotional fool(pun!)and I am one of the many.Praise,if it is genuine,lifts a person to a new high;ridicule befalls him to a new low!
But,ladies & gentlemen,frankly,people are afraid,hesitant,for praise;whilst for critisism,they come with all their weapons.
What could be the reasons?...........I don't know.

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 11, 2009 7:13 am re: re: "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Jack,
I was impressed by your words::::::::"it faintly echoes the movement of the dance you are describing...."
Yes Jack,its true,because this poem..."Tango" and the single horse carraige.."Tonga" have a connection in my poem,althouggh this connection has come unconciously.Just as the horse in the song is making musical sound of its hooves....tuk,tuk,tuk,tuk..... and to me has a dance form,so also in the "Tango" dance,Man & Woman make love,music,movement and so definitely,this inspired poem has come from this prologue.Regards,

Manohar Bhatia

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A Poem:::::::::::::::"Tick, Tick, Tick........."

2009-11-24T08:36:00.000-08:00

A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." Views: 31
Nov 16, 2009 7:49 am A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
This fictional poem was written a long time back,when my late wife was alive,but I thought it was time to share it with my members.
For those of you,who might be interested in knowing my wife,Shoba Bhatia,please click on my friends'list on Shoba Bhatia and read her profile.She was a former member of ryze for some years.Thanks.

I see my clock on the wall
Saying tick,tick,tick,
You talk or don't talk,
My clock is ticking,
Tick, Tick, Tick.

Far, far, away,
In the deep oceans,
There are mighty tides,
Just as a small tide,
in my affairs.

My clock has no emotions,
but gives powerful message
of time we spent to-gather
in pursuit of love,friendships
courtships,events,happenings.

I know I have done wrong,
whence your anger knows no bounds,
only tell me the reason
of your hounding,bypassing,ignoring,
and not talking to me.

Oh! my beloved,
we can always sit calmly,
and talk things over,
to forgive,forget, and
turnover new life,of trust,love,care.

Life is far too short
to brood over,sulk,sink,
into mental turmoil,pain,depression,
'cause,my clock is ticking,
tick, tick, tick!

I kneel before you,cautioning,
You, me, everything
will be consumed
by the sound of
tick, tick, tick!

Only my clock,
will remain on the wall,
Deaf,dumb,muted,and balanced
but, still warning, sounding,
Tick! Tick! Tick!

---The End----

Manohar Bhatia

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Nov 16, 2009 10:35 am re: A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Jack Huber "Life is far too short
to brood over, sulk, sink,
into mental turmoil, pain, depression,
'cause,my clock is ticking,
tick, tick, tick!"

Words to live by.

Jack

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Nov 16, 2009 10:56 am re: A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Maya Mahant oh manohar,

what a lovely poem, i could feel the seconds ticking by.

warm regards
maya

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Nov 16, 2009 11:17 am re: re: A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Ayub Bangroo
Time is eternal,unstoppable,we feel it by hearing the tick,tick,tick.......

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Nov 17, 2009 8:15 am re: re: re: A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Diane Tegarden
Yes, Manohar, we all have that clock ticking our moments away, the key is to use that time the best we can because one never knows when the last moment will pass, and so shall we.

In honor of your late wife,
Diane

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Nov 17, 2009 9:57 pm re: A Poem:::::::::::::::::::::: "Tick, Tick, Tick..............." #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,
Jack:Thanks for liking a few words from the poem.
Maya:"I feel the seconds ticking by......" don't let go these moments of joy.
Ayub:"Time is eternal...." drown yourself in joy.
Diane:Many thanks to your tribute to my late wife,Shoba Bhatia.

Manohar Bhatia

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Tango & Tonga............... A Poem

2009-11-08T00:55:00.000-08:00

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Oct 30, 2009 9:02 am "Tango And Tonga"..................... A Poem #

Manohar Bhatia Hello,

This poem was inspired from an indian classic film shot in 1960 named: "Naya Daur"It had a living legendary star Dilip Kumar and a vivacious beautiful actress,Vijayantimala as the lead stars.One day,both of them go to a temple to pray in a Tonga(A single horse carriage),owned by the hero of the film.Then,whilst returning,a beautiful Hindi song is picturized on the two in this Tonga.At this point, the poem hit me and I immediately wrote it down.
When Dilip Kumar asks his lady love,what did she ask God,the actress breaks into this classic song......"Mang ke saat tumara,mene, mang liya sansar.........etc" i.e "If I have your support,I will have the world......etc"(Translated).Feedback wanted by Diane,Jack,others.

Tango And Tonga.........A Poem.

It takes two to Tango
Ultimately becoming one for bingo!
A beautiful dance taking poetic form
Where grace & style are the norm.

Tango was born in working city halls,
by passionate dancers,Carlos Gardel
in alive cities of Buenos Aires,Montivideo
in South American city of Argentina.

Tango can accelerate your well-being
Bringing elixir of life to a new high
of excitement,health,joy,happiness,
for you to experience again and again.

Dance steps are hectic,fast,furious
leaving the onlookers in a rush
of emotions,romantic passions,faster heart-beats
in an excitment movements of their bodies.

Tango is a single dance form
where two dancers move to horn,
Man and Woman,merging,fusing,melting
into a Tonga-driven single horse-carriage!

---- The End--------

Manohar Bhatia

Essaar's Virtual Voyage: Eid-ul-Fitr Greetings.

2009-09-23T06:58:00.000-07:00

Essaar's Virtual Voyage: Eid-ul-Fitr Greetings.

Quiz Quotation No.18::::::Interview With Sarah Rehman

2009-09-14T23:32:00.000-07:00

Hello Members,
This is the recorded interview with Sarah Rehman of Pakistan::::::::

me::::::::::: "Hello Sarah,online?"
ali.sarah7:::"Hello Manohar,how are you?"

me:::::::::::"I am good;congrats again on winning Quiz No.18.Your reaction?"
ali.sarah7:::"Thank you;I wasn't expecting a hat-trick;you have to make 3 Trophies now.

me:::::::::::"I am waiting for you to win 100 Trophies;are you ready?"
ali.sarah7:::"Yes, I am ready."

me::::::::::: "Good,then it is decided.Sarah,tell me,if I can call you an Amateur Psychologist?"
ali.sarah7:::"Am I? It might be because of having various experiences then."

me:::::::::::"Previous to this game,have you ever participated in any other game?"
ali.sarah7:::"I have participated in one more quiz on a celebrity forum....it is a general knowledge one."

me:::::::::::"Our congrats to you Sarah for this smashing success.We are preparing your certificates and Trophies too!Bye and take care;our regards for your parents."
ali.sarah7:::"Thank you so much Manohar.I will be looking forward to the certiifcates and I will be eagerly waiting for them."

me::::::::::: "Your are welcome."

Manohar Bhatia

Quiz Quotation No.17:::::Interview with Sarah Rehman

2009-09-07T01:57:00.000-07:00

Hello Members,

This is the recorded interview of the winner of Quiz Quotation No.17 on google chat:::

me::::::::::::::"What Sarah?Back to back winner of Trophies for Numbers 16 & 17?How many grey cells?"
ali.sarah7::::::"By Grey cells,as in?I want the question to be repeated."

me::::::::::::::"By grey cells it means your intelligence quotient....how many?"(in a lighter vein)
ali.sarah7::::::"That is for me to know and you to find out.I am not sure where I place myself as far as Intelligence Quotient is concerned.....call it average."

me::::::::::::::"We are humbled by your fantastic success...Tell us the secret of your approach."
ali.sarah7::::::"Secrets are never meant to be disclosed.All that I do is read the entire quotation over and over again and opt for the word that sounds appropriate and different.... at times,I trust my intuition as well."

me::::::::::::::"Mark my words....my insight says that you will be a wise and a great grandmother in your old age.Please comment."
ali.sarah7::::::"I love to be a wise granny with lots of grandchildren around."

me::::::::::::::"Have you informed your parents?Any reractions from them?"
ali.sarah7::::::"Yes,I did about the previous one and they were quite happy about it."

me::::::::::::::"How tough you find the compiler's planted words?Please give percentage ratings vis-a-vis: Compiler's/Author's words..e.g 60%/40 respectively?"
ali.sarah7:::::"I would go for 50%/50%."

me:::::::::::::"Do you know something Sarah?"
ali.sarah7:::::"No,what is it?"

me:::::::::::::"That you can be a great solver of any quiz,puzzle,game of chance etc.Your reply?"
ali.sarah7::::"Except by the games played by the destiny."

me::::::::::::"Now,that you have pleasantly shaken us with your successes,we are stocking a large number of Trophies for your future winnings.Any comment?"
ali.sarah7::::"I am speechless...that is certainly a good news for me;however,I would like my fellow members to come forward and participate as much as they can as I want them to accompany me on this path of success."

me::::::::::::"Thank you Sarah for your valuable time for this interview and here's wishing you lots of glory in future."
ali.sarah7::::"Thank you Manohar for the rewards and the encouraging words.Take care and stay blessed."

me::::::::::::"You are welccome!"

Manohar Bhatia

"Whence Gonneth Those Days?"............A Poem

2009-09-05T05:23:00.000-07:00

When we were young,energetic,full of life,
On Sunday mornings,we were at Colaba,
At our granny's house,with uncles,aunts,nieces,
Stretching ourselves at the secluded beaches,
Swimming in the backbay waters,
Eating mangoes,basking in the sun,
Playing with shells,pebbles,gun,
Sometimes burying ourselves in the sand,
Remaining there for a long time,
With only our heads popping out for fun!

Noontime,there were afternoon siestas,
Dead tired after watching on telly some fiestas,
Now, when clock strikes 5.00 p.m.
We have hot cups of tea,
With spicy cutlets,crispy nuggets,
To pamper our villianous pallets.

By evenings,we get ready
To trot to Eros Theatre steady,
Screening Marx Bros,Laurel&Hardy,
Or slapstick comedy of Dean Martin & Jerry Lewis,
A laugh riot of our lives,
Till tear fall off our eyes!

At nightfalls,we had wooden cots,
Laid out under pipal trees,flower pots,
With the cool evening breeze blowing,
Hearing fairy tales from Granny at bedtime,
And falling asleep like a log!

Oh! Those were the days,
Waking up one fine morning,
From a soft bed into luminious sunlight,
Feeling warm,well fed,well loved,
well cared for a longing
peace,silence,stillness, bliss!
Will those days ever commeth?

____ The End_____

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Different Type Of Poetry:::: F.O.R.M....Clerihew

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A Poem on::::::::::::: "What is this..............."

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A Poem*************** "On Smallest"

"Whence Gonneth Those Days?" ***********A Poem

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"Beyond The Mountain" ::::::::::::::A Poem

"So Long As............." A Poem

"Tango & Tonga"................A Poem

A Poem:::::::::::::::"Tick, Tick, Tick........."

Tango & Tonga............... A Poem

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